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Tue Jan 14, 2014 1:17 pm





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Family: While Kiba is a member of the deadly clan known as the Son's of Carnage they don't carry a last name. Their trade mark is seen when the family members fight. They have strength that is that of legends, Hercules, Vampires, and creatures like that boast the similar strength this family produces. Each member is deadly strong capable of destroying several city blocks with the Art of Carnage Hakuda form they use. The strength is enough to pick up several cars and bench press them. The family has a low rate of success as ninety-Eight percent of the children die in the first year of life. Training begins as soon as they are capable of crawling. While the beginning is considered hardcore and deadly the clan has produced some deadly warriors whom stay in the background. Kiba unlike many of his clan has decided to see where the Gotei 13 will take him. In hopes of good fights, though he is coming simply for a tournament to see where his strength is at. The clan's location is unknown nobody has ever found the home of the reclusive clan that teaches the art of super human strength. Only members are aware of it's location and they will not part with the information. As it stands only two members counting Kiba are alive capable of using the Carnage Art to it's fullest extent. Kiba is one of the prodigy's of the form but is much like a cloud that roams and does as he pleases. Heading off to fight in the 11th Division barracks is proof of that, he simply does as he pleases. The journey each member must take is something of a duty, they carry the weight of their clan's preservation as fighters and must be willing to fight.

Name:Kiba
Alias: The Cloud
Race: Shinigami
Age: He is 500 years old exactly
Height: Five feet and eleven inches
Weight: One hundred and Ninety pounds
Arm Length: Well Proportioned
Leg Length: Well Proportioned
Appearance Kiba's body is intensely trained to a degree that he could break stone against his abs, his body has muscle everywhere. Though not thick and bulky like most would think. He trained to give himself a very hardened lean muscle which his clan prides themselves on. He wears a white coat that has red and blue trim along the buttoning area. He wears black pants and black tank top. His Zanpakutō is nestled softly inside his coat. The blade's appearance while sealed is rather interesting enough, the full extent of his body shows and average length of body and arms. This has allowed him to become a deadly duelist with a reputation for insane strength. Kiba is known by some to simply roam about looking for good fights. It's well within his demeanor to do so, even should his next journey prove fruitful. He will most likely continue to roam around trying to fight strong enemies. When we look at Kiba's knuckles you can see rough and rigged as though he had been punching something solid for a long time. The few things that can be told about the onyx haired male is that his training was fierce. His eyes matching his hair seem to hold a rather easy nature about them. Making him one of the few people that can walk with birds on his shoulders, it's a rather strange person. He seem's to walk with a certain degree of confidence that few others would have despite coming from a background like his. His family's reputation has been drilled into his subconscious and he works hard to keep the memory of the Clan alive within himself. Training still like a mad man as he develops his fierce strength.

Personality

A Beast Incarnate: While two sides exist to the man known as Kiba. He is an animal incarnate, thus why most birds and other creatures respond to him. One moment he can be calm and happy as can be, but when a strong enemy appears that disappears. His excitement replaces the factor of being frightened, he even gives off a pressure that is like an animal in a corner at times. Though more vicious in nature, as a Son of Carnage. This has left him with a personality that isn't likely to change. They all enjoy battle so much that it's like a drug to them, Kiba is no exception to this. While their is kindness and a good demeanor to him. Once the battle begins Kiba won't talk anymore he isn't the type to exchange words very often during a fight. He simply fights and aims to defeat his enemy, this confident and quiet nature has made him a fantastic duelist that is extremely hard to keep down.

A Son of Carnage: This is not just a thing someone can call a state of being. It's his very personality, the clan has such fantastic duelists in the ranks that most forget about them as people. Kiba embodies the heart of the Clan and he is extremely passionate about them and does show it when he makes his choices. Trying to decide the best course for keeping his families reputation in the open, Kiba even has gone so far as to invent two separate Hakuda moves. Not using his families unless the matter is important. The Carnage Style isn't something one can put into words. It's a confidence a factor that only some people make it through the hellish training his clan provides. Kiba is one of perhaps only ten to make it through within the last one thousand years. It's an insane factor that warriors gifted enough to use the style are few and lacking. His personality is very devoted to the things his family asks, he will keep to the code the family lives by.

High Confidence: He has a huge amount of confidence in himself for his training and fighting skills. He's extremely hard to make believe he's going to lose a fight. Even if the enemy is stronger he believes he'll win and search fro the chance to win. This has made him an extremely powerful warrior as he doesn't accept loss, if he is beaten it's rare. And he will take several of his enemies own moves and use them next time when he kills them. Kiba often fights to simply close his mind, but his confidence and skill when handling situations are accurate and powerful enough. Kiba has perhaps the greatest confidence in his power when he says something will be done it will be. No matter what he must do to accomplish the feat, his Zanpakutō and he are in sync for the most part. Able to come together to put down the ones whom dare fight the Son of Carnage, he's going into the tournament he's heard about under the belief he'll win. Kiba will die before he accepts a loss in this fight.

Passives

Daunting Strength: Their strength is beyond normal the power that Son's of Carnage wield, they are extremely powerful. They can bench press two to three semi trucks depending on the training they've had. Their power is beyond that of most people, while they are so few and far apart. Son's are capable of absolutely devastating power that few can match. Kiba is no exception to this, he is capable of producing insane levels of strength when fighting and using the style.. He could destroy an several city blocks with his full strength when fighting, though it's not much to show for those who can do this easily. Kiba uses pure Hakuda and does it bare handed for the most part. He can lift up buildings and throw them at people if desired. Though their is a far more devastating and specialized use of the brutal strength they have honed into deadly precision that almost nobody else can match even on good days.

Hand to Hand Master: He's a genius in the hand to hand game. As most of his clan are masters of this he himself is a practical genius in the art, able to design two very special uses of his in-human strength that nobody else can match almost. His hand to hand game is able to produce blows from a distance without even laying a finger on the person before him, this has allowed him to devote a portion of his long range game to punching holes without even getting close to an enemy. Kiba is a specialized fighter which is rare to come across, bringing speed and strength into a game that few others can. While his speed isn't spoke upon often his clan's belief of not using weapons is seen by his Zanpakutō and the style of fighting he uses. As the clan doesn't use weapons they are such capable fighters in this field that even some human martial artists will find their style extremely dangerous. As for the art of carnage it cannot be reproduced by anyone who's not undergone the special training.

Hakuda

Art of Carnage: The Style known only to ten people through out the last one thousand years. Leaving him as the latest of the long line of Sons whom inherit this art. Using this allows them to perform the most impossible forms of moves that most do not even believe is possible. Without using Kido or other methods, these beings show absolute power through the fist they have. While Kiba does have something extremely similar to the art of Shunko that many call on for the 2nd Division. The Art of Carnage is a dance of death using quick and strong moves that are extremely hard to block, they are moves that require intense training that kills those not ready. It's an extremely dangerous and very hard to exercise the form. The users are capable of using the power of the Carnage to blast through several buildings with a single punch. Generating insane amounts of power from a inch range. They are capable of absolutely shattering bones at one inch distance.

Fist of Carnage: The power to send shockwaves of his fist through a single punch, he's been able to destroy kido blasts and other such things with this. The sheer power he generates let's him send out shock waves of his fist when punching. The Fist of Carnage is used as a long range move, it's powerful enough to punch through several buildings when used correctly. Kiba is one of the few whom doesn't have to use it but is extremely skilled in the art of using it. this isn't the most powerful move, they prefer to fight in a far closer distance to keep the fight in their favor. The style of Carnage is fought primarily at One Inch radius and let's them exercise the most for their money. Kiba however unlike his clan wisely found a way to use his strength for a greater method of using this. He does honor the One inch radius that his clan practices to full effect. He simply was aware that changes were needed to be used effectively.

The Dance of Carnage: This is the fighting dance they use when beginning to fight. Taking a stance similar to basic Karate allowing them to exercise the power quite easily. However when they move in close, they are capable of using knee's and elbows fully effectively and producing concrete shattering blows from the one inch radius they use. However the fighters are capable of using a more dodging movements as well, the dance is ever changing and allows them to adapt to what comes at them. Normally the One Inch radius of their style would be highly ineffective but with Kiba enemies normally have to engage him in close range in order to do anything. Otherwise nothing happens, so allowing him to fight this way has made him extremely powerful. The dance does use some grappling as well, though not to such a large extent. They are more focused on producing short range monstrous blows with pin point accuracy. That defies the logic of some who have seen it. The Dance of Carnage lacks any real symbolical nature to a style that can be copied.

The Fang's Answer: Kiba's personal style used when dealing with enemies that aren't worthy of the Carnage he holds within. Kiba uses a rather devious style with his strength. He's able to create massive amounts of damage by simply evading his enemies strikes. Unlike most of his clan, Kiba practice some dodging martial arts. Tai Chi is the closest thing that the humans have to his form. He is able to calmly dodge and defeat the enemies not worth his time without using any excitement. His fighting style in this form is average and known to be extremely dangerous yet, because he can put this into the forms he uses during the dance. Though Carnage has no face during the dance, he's a capable warrior. The dodging method and counter striking style he developed is highly effective in use with his Zanpakutō's power that gives him a strange gift.

Zanpakutō

Appearance: The appearance is a necklace that he wears all the time, his sword doesn't take the form of a blade as he doesn't believe in using swords. His Zanpakutō has taken notice of that, thus creating armor for him during his release stages. In it's shikai he wears gloves that allow him to fight using full power without holding back anything while also granting special powers that are out of this world in their own ways. The gloves are laced with a special field that the sword uses to create the power to manipulate the reishi molecules in the area. This allows him to simply smack energy attacks away as though nothing, he is extremely good at handling them due to his Zanpakutō's nature and power. The gloves are black with no designs on them really. Appearing as simple gloves one finds at the store. These however hold many different outlets that few others can truly accept even when they try to find a way too.

Sealed Passives/Powers: In this phase of non-release his Zanpakutō allows him the power to slightly manipulate the molecules of energy around his hands and body. To this end he can create huge explosive waves of energy or catch in his hands energy the enemy shoots out. However it's low level stuff only otherwise it will harm him. He's careful and thankfully able to gauge the amount of energy put into the attack that people use. He's one of the few warriors able to simply grab kido and wipe them away by rearrange the molecules of their spiritual make up. It makes him an effective fighter in this aspect that few can see. However as stated he can only do so much with his sealed form. The necklace on his neck holds the power for now till released. His power physically is increased greatly due to the molecules field around his hands, it expands further when he is able to release the weapon into it's next phase. Kiba's power and prowess as a warrior has yet to be called into question by anyone.

The explosive waves of energy are limited by his capacity to create and field the energy around his hands. Thus depending on his power level at the time the amount he can release is restricted. As for kido this depends as well on his level of energy, he can at his peak dismantle level 90 kido depending on the structure of it. Though to a degree he can only dismantle kido up to level 89 at his peak. Those 90s with chant are beyond his skill to tamper with. Making him ineffective against them The amount of energy is controlled and released in bursts, in short he could create a large blast as his reiatsu allows. Or a small one, it is all depending upon the amount of reiatsu he has within his being. Further more the amount of power the fields generate are also limited to the level he at, depending on his over all skill.

Shikai Powers:

This is more or less an upgrade of his sealed sat, it allows him to create the field he uses to rearrange the reishi molecules or spiritual energy. As it allows him to manipulate even death energy, but against highly depends on his level and power. For example if he is only able to produce energy equal to a 0-3 he won't be able to stop a 0-2's energy attacks without taking some damage himself. Those below him he can manipulate relatively easily and change. Like before he cannot mess with level 90 kidos that have been gifted the chant. This has caused them to go beyond the spectrum of his Zanpakutō's power. The blasts again depending on his tier will be large or small. He's capable of creating huge impacts with his energy attacks. The generated molecules are used to create large scale blasts. Though for example if he's a 1-1 and fires at a 0-5 with it. The blast will not be very effective. If anything he'll be less effective in the front of his shikai's powers.

Now he can heal his body using this power able to arrange the reishi molecules into a healing feature. Allowing him to continue fighting when he needs to do so, this allows him to recover from most injuries. He can regrow limbs and even heal vital organs, some injuries are however beyond his skill. Such as if a person loses their head or is killed instantly, he can't heal them. Also if they are fatally wounded he won't be able to save them. The healing of his sword is limited as the weapon is built more towards his offensive nature. Allowing him to use immense strength on top of the clan's already extreme strength that has been considered legendary.

Bankai Powers: Unable to control it and requires training.



History

Born into the Sons of Carnage, where training began as soon as crawling as able. The training began with breaking stones with your body if you failed you were left outside to die. Those who succeeded were







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Wed Jan 15, 2014 9:28 am

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  • Comments/Notes: Alright, I'm going to get started on this check to understand where things are at with this character.

    Godlike Strength: Their strength is beyond normal the power that Son's of Carnage wield, they are extremely powerful. They can bench press two to three semi trucks depending on the training they've had. Their power is beyond that of most people, while they are so few and far apart. Son's are capable of absolutely devastating power that few can match. Kiba is no exception to this, he is capable of producing insane levels of strength when fighting and using the style.. He could destroy an entire city with his full strength when fighting, though it's not much to show for those who can do this easily. Kiba uses pure Hakuda and does it bare handed for the most part. He can lift up buildings and throw them at people if desired. Though their is a far more devastating and specialized use of the brutal strength they have honed into deadly precision that almost nobody else can match even on good days.

    I'm iffy on the name here. I'd probably rename it something to "Intensive Strength" or "Daunting Strength" rather than Godlike personally. On top of that, I'd hold off on the city destroying yet as you aren't even at a tier level yet for that. Building/city-blocks I don't care much about, but hold off on the city destroying until I get a tier/skill in that Hakuda/Strength. Additionally, I'd like for you explain this more. If he's going around doing all this, usually a persons body at that time will have hardened up like Radioactive's/Ibiki's bodies have in my personal examples. Therefore, I want you to explain how his body is able to keep up with that from it's muscular structure, if he combines his spiritual energy to make these effects as potent as they are outside of the city-block destruction and go into detail about his stamina and how long he can keep this up if you are really keen on that city destruction part. It's gonna take more detail than that for me to accept it otherwise if you are aiming for a higher level. I'd also probably explain how he got that strength to begin with in it.

    Also, if you are aiming to be a Hakuda master right off the bat and a hand-to-hand expert, I'd probably expect more techniques since the app itself is pretty lacking in my opinion to warrant that. So my additional advice would also be to add a few more of those moves into his application. More than that, I noticed you mention some tidbits about speed being intermixed; so I'd recommend you bring that up in his general traits to explain what level of speed he is at and how he incorporates it into his fighting style. Don't go overboard with it, but provide enough context to get an idea of how it's utilized.

    Furthermore, for a Zanpakutō that is able to control molecules, it seems awfully lacking in detail.

    n this phase of non-release his Zanpakutō allows him the power to slightly manipulate the molecules of energy around his hands and body. To this end he can create huge explosive waves of energy or catch in his hands energy the enemy shoots out. However it's low level stuff only otherwise it will harm him. He's careful and thankfully able to gauge the amount of energy put into the attack that people use. He's one of the few warriors able to simply grab kido and wipe them away by rearrange the molecules of their spiritual make up. It makes him an effective fighter in this aspect that few can see. However as stated he can only do so much with his sealed form. The necklace on his neck holds the power for now till released. His power physically is increased greatly due to the molecules field around his hands, it expands further when he is able to release the weapon into it's next phase. Kiba's power and prowess as a warrior has yet to be called into question by anyone.

    What is the maximum wave of those blast he sends out? What is the limit of kido that he can rearrange or destroy? Is he able to obliterate everything that comes into contact with his hands? I don't understand what "low level stuff" is; as that's a vague term in my opinion. And the "he can only do so much in his sealed" form also isn't a good explanation into his limits and drawbacks. Therefore, you are going to have to go into more detail and explain the range of the attack, how many attacks he can rearrange at once, the limit of how far this can go and how far it expands.

    The same thing applies to his Shikai as well as it's more or less a more powerful version than that; and I'd expect some more information on it. I'd go into detail about the stamina boost when it comes to his Strength, Speed, Molecules and overall augmentation. I'd also most likely add in some Shikai-Level Hand-To-Hand moves that incorporate his Zanpakutō and Kido powers. That is simply too short to be an acceptable Shikai for me when I've seen others put alot more detail into it and not get approved.

    Furthermore, since it seems you are trying to get a decent level character off the bat, I'd probably expand that history some. It feels kind of hollow to me because it keeps going on about his strength. However, has he ever taken a lost in his history? What were his parents like? When was he born? How did this whole experience make him feel being forced to fight like that? What was it like for him to attain his Shikai? What did his training look like? (This and the Shikai are especially important if you are trying to get all this)

    You keep going on about all this legendary/overwhelming power, but where is the depth? Where is the character? Where is the struggle? Where is the story? What did it really take to make this harden warrior? That history doesn't speak much to me when in conjunction with his personality. For someone to go through that I'd bet they'd have one hella of a story to tell and one hell of a molded personality as a result. So I'd expand the history to roughly 5-10K characters at least.

    For now, that's about all the issues I have and we'll come back to the table once they are fixed.

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Tue Feb 25, 2014 10:43 am

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I'm going to be moving this into WIP because there hasn't been any real work on it yet. This should help out in the effort of clearing out pending board. I haven't seen any post saying he has updated this character, so I'm going to assume it can be put on the back burner.


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