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|Subject Post 11Subject: Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2] Sun Jul 17, 2016 2:14 pm|| |
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|Subject Post 12Subject: Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2] Tue Dec 27, 2016 3:50 pm|| |
Please bring him back for me to use when able
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|Subject Post 13Subject: Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2] Tue Dec 27, 2016 3:57 pm|| |
[mod]Unarchived by request.[/mod]
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|Subject Post 14Subject: Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2] Mon Feb 12, 2018 2:36 am|| |
- Quote :
- Extremely Durable: ...He's able to take Bankai's and remain unharmed for the most part...
I'd ask you just remove that part, if only because there's a fairly wide spread of what Bankai can do, flatly saying "Bankai" isn't a useful indicator.
- Quote :
- Cero/Bala Incinerar:
This entire ability needs to be rewritten or simply removed. As it stands, the idea of simply lighting someone on fire without them noticing would require a lot more explanation, and the current
explanation is fairly difficult to understand.
- Quote :
- Resurreccion and Segunda Etapa
While I believe these two are fine as they are in terms of functionality
, they will both need some clarification. As it stands, they seem to be fairly straightforward auras of heat/fire, which he is able to manipulate. If this is correct, then that should be fine, and like I said, they just need to be rewritten a bit so that's more clear. If that isn't
correct, let me know.[/mod]
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