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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Sat Aug 16, 2014 10:30 pm









Danava Information
» Name:Kinu shūchaku =鬼怒執着
鬼怒 are derived from Kinugawa River
執着 is from fixated
» Titles:
» Age:
» Gender:
» Affiliation/Rank:

» Shifter Appearance Written:
»Heterochromia: One eye being red but the other being yellow

»Hair: Kinu hair collor is a long dark lustrous black that she keeps in twintails.

»Favorite outfit: A Gothic Lolita style dress with detached sleeves,it almost looks like royalty with its crimson and black color scheme with matching collar on her neck.

»Body type: Hourglass

»Skin complexion: Pale white

{Body Measurements}
Bust 36 80cm/Tot 85.Waist 24.Hip34.105Lbs.





» True Appearance Written:
a almost armor like skin purple in color but with red rune like marks all over it that flow down her extremities. the red marks on her hands make them almost claw like.there is also several parts of her body with blade like feature sticking out from them. tho they are Extremely hard to the touch that also seem to bend with her movements. most notably they are on her arms and all the way down her side.

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Personality
She in her own mind is sweet kind and loveing and see's her own affection as "true affection". An affection that is much stronger than any others. that wont stop and that she wont allow any one to belittle or get in the way of.

She can be moe at times acting cute and innocent.keeping a smiling face and a happy energy about her wile talking to people in a play-full way. but IF any one els pulls attentions of the item of her affection away from her, jealousy is soon to follow and she will attempt to retake that attentions at any cost.

She doesn't really care if the affection is one sided.It matters very little in fact as her love is enough for both of them and HER LOVE is absolutely to die for.

ITS ONLY NORMAL TO WANT TO BE NEAR THE ONE YOU LOVE RIGHT !?! She some times walks home with the one she loves with out them knowing... and watches them thru the window.. just until she installs cameras in there home. after that she stays nearby and watches thru a small hand held device, or her laptop. some may call this stalking but she sees it as the ultimate bond of love. She also likes to hide tracking and GPS things on her fixation.. by puting it on there clothing, in there cell or even implanting it in their body given the chance. JUST AS A precaution of cors

at times when she does not have a target Kinu tents to be unattached to the world. It is at times to the point that she can't seem to relate to other people or events going on around her. This comes off as a lack of interest and lack of caring, but is more on the side of emotional detachment. Without a target for her feelings Kinu has strong trouble accessing or experiencing them. she holds them in side and does not express them much out of fear that it could scare off her potential target before she latches on to them her self. This would mean waste efforts on her part. what she seeks most is to be attached to someone deeply. Failing to attach to some one that she directed her feelings IS the worst pain she can feel from her own point of view as it means she has let some one get a closer connection to her that was not some one who she targeted to spend all eternity as part of her.

» Likes: feeling love, being in love, attention of the one she loves. being near the one she loves. knowing all about the one she loves.THE ONE SHE LOVES DIEING BY HER.


» Dislikes:ANY one other than the one she loves. any thing getting in her way. Other talking to the one she loves. others being alone with the one she loves.

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History

Kinu remembers darkness. A unending darkness that she was in. she was all alone with thoughts dancing in her head of how one day she fall in love and be with that person tell the end. she could not realy move or maybe she did not have a body yet, the memory is a bit clouded but she remembers feeling trapped and all alone.

from time to time she hear voices in her head of other people." IF he was my boyfriend id never let him go." " I would do any thing to make her mine." the voices alone was one thing but thay allways come with images and feelings attached."HOW could he cheat on me WASN'T I enough for him!" "I Caught her with another man and i just snapped..I... I killed them both." lots of voices and feelings from untold number of people. her own consciousness feeding off their longing for others and mostly the negative thought on how to keep or get the one they wanted. soon other thoughts from people started entering her to. ones that were crazy by nature. The thoughts of lonely people who fantasize of having a partner that would do any thing for them, that would die for them, that would kill for them.

At first there was just the odd thoughts of mainly males that were out of touch with reality. this group has ideas that were twisted my media such and games and visual novels. With out knowing it Kinu started to enjoy there fantasizing and even placing her self in them with the other person. But as time went on and demons be come known a new rush happen. People wished for a demon partner. one that was cute and crazy at the same time. one that would take care of them and there troubles even if that meant being violent. infact a lot of them really got in to detail with the violent things they have her do. butchering Ex's likelive stock. ripping bullys limb from limb and bathing in the blood than acting lovey dovey with them. Attacking anyone who tried to come between them tell they were nothing more than a lump of cut-up meat laying in a ditch on the side of the rode.

One day her eyes opened... she never knew they were shut.. maybe she did not have them before, but now she could see! she could move! she could FEEL! not from the thoughts of others but for her self, by her self. looking around all she could see was a dimly light room with little furnishings to speak of. where she was laying there was crude symbols marked on the floor and even more on the walls, and a sweet smell.. so lovely it made her mouth water.

looking around, scanning the room with her eyes to find the source of this smell she seen him. a boy bleeding out onto the floor. this young lad had tried to summon a demon... no that's not right he did not try as he was successful. but the spell had recoiled on him and ripped his abdomen wide open and was now dieing. her body was still very week from its formation and she could barely managed to crawl over to him. the boys eyes were fading in and out. as he spoke to her. "haha ... i did it. I finally was able to make you real..." Boy coughing up some blood that just lightly flowed down from his lips. "But I guess it does not matter much now.. I am going to die alone like i always thought I would.." She move in and lay on top of his body staring him in the eyes. "silly don't say that. I am here ant I?" she place her index finger over his lips. "you should not waste what little energy you have left ok? We should spend it enjoying each other's company right? yes you're going to die... but you are not alone.. and you will never be alone again."

once the boy's life faded from him and his body and soul were separated the now plus was standing by her crying."Why do you cry for? yes you're dead now but didn't i say we would be together forever?" the boy looking at her would smile. " you mean you are ok with me being a ghost? you will stay with me even like this?" with a giggling smile Kinu replayed. " MY love is without end or limits. when i say forever i mean it. you and i will never be apart." the plus begins to laugh as he hugged on to her. "Yes from now tell the end of time w-" Kinu intruded him. "We will always BE ONE." as she bit into him. her arms tho still not at full strength were more than capable of restraining the boy's soul as she devoured it. the screams of pain from his ghostly body getting eaten going unheard by the other normal humans in the apartment complex. After eating the soul she turns on the body. not leaving a scrap on the floor and licking up most the blood.





Natural Demon Traits

Za Koa Skill: Za Koa skill is how much skill your character possess to manipulate the energy from the core. Typically, this should be your strongest asset when it comes to the skill sheet. The higher your mastery of this ability, the more techniques you are able to create, use and share. However, this has many more uses then that.

Za Koa's Influence: For example, an advanced Za Koa Skill user at two tier is capable of spreading this technique across an average battlefield in order to taint the surrounding vicinity around them in order to gain the upper hand in combat. These advantages include that all of their stats are typically doubled if the influence is not sealed away or fought with magic. So, going back to our two tier demon, he would be able to obtain a doubled increased in his abilities, powers, speed, endurance, reaction time, mental thinking, knowledge and so on and so forth. Users whom are Master in this skill can usually get triple benefits, and Grand Masters quadruple.

Knowledge Of Environment: Another trait gained from spreading Za Koa's influence throughout any given area is that typically most demon's are given knowledge of their surrounding vicinity. For example, if our two tier demon had performed this within Karakura Central, it would be able to detect various hidden sources in the immediate fighting area such as hidden barriers, seals , spirit beings within the area and things of this nature. On a master level, this would allow some demon's to even detect various elements within in a being. This can be from a persons Zanpukto Spirit, to scanning JUST how much energy they have in total left in them, searching for any unusual traits about their body such as abnormal defense or offense and things of this nature that CAN be detected. This knowledge ability, however, only gives you the knowledge to beat something. Actually beating it, however, is another story.

Kage Chōkyō-shi: Kage Chōkyō-shi is the ability for most demons with adept Za Koa users to travel through different dimensions, travel throughout the battlefield or even use it for defense. By channeling Za Koa's energy in addition to the various seals throughout their body in addition to their Shadow Movement, they are able to create many different dimensional holes in the area's around them; each of them being able to range from a small vicinity such as a few inches, to the size of a city block depending on their Za Koa skill. These can lead to other realms; while there is also the possibility it can be used to shield against attacks if they are not more powerful than the demon and be used on the offensive by attempting to slash the opponents attack in half by creating one of those opening in the center of their assault.


Akuma Kyodo: Thanks to the full body seal most demon's have on their bodies from birth, Akuma Kyodo gives most Demon's a layer of defensive skin that is similar to an Arrancar's Hierro. This will be general defense, though if have a high Za Koa Skill, you can temporarily double your defense. Masters can do it for ten post, Advanced for seven, adept for four and beginners for two. All come with a three post cooldown. But that's where the similarities end, and the differences begin. What makes a demon's Akuma Kyodo: so different? Well, for instance, this layer of skin is not just applied physically like Arrancar's are or any other races natural defense. What makes a demon's defense stands out is that it applies to magic, spiritual attacks, their environments, how resistant they are to poisons or toxins and even how much their mental state improves.

Shadow Movement: This is what some MIGHT call the Demon's Answer to flash step: Shadow Movement. It allows them to move at quick burst of speeds on most occasions to allow them to travel very far distances in short amount of times, that is for certain. Though, this is where some similarities come to an end. Unlike most other races, Demon's get many nifty benefits then just Super Speed. Take this for example: from the seals on a demon's legs and feet that generate insane amounts of energy from all of the sources of power they collect; it will be able to give yourself temporary boost of intense speed called "Shadow Burst". Shadow Burst is a period of time where your demon will double their speed on average if they are at least adept. It will transition into how fast their attacks are created or launched, the demon's reaction time to increase the odds of evading, countering or noticing a person, object or anything else within a vicinity that has a prense in order to do something about it, it increases their mental awareness to more alert levels and it even goes into their natural powers.

Affinity For Hell: If a Demon ever gets the chance to foot into hell or has the skill level and power to summon it's presence on the battlefield, they can potentially increase their power by five times just by having it around them. In some instances, in fact, Demon's can even rise one tier level if enough consumes them for the duration of the thread they are in. This is due to the fact that there is a large amount of hellish energy within that place for Demon's to thrive on and it's filled with many hidden elements that were designed to overcharge a Demon in times of crisis. But, in addition to that, the presence of hell augments not only their power abilities but the inherent and magical abilities of said demon; giving improved versions of their abilities or completely new ones altogether.

Sacrificing Incantation: Sacrifices are something that are very unique to demons as there are thousands upon thousands of them that have many different effects, methods and steps. For instance, a small scale Sacrifice would be something like a demon spilling human blood in order to get a slight increase in his power for a short time. While on the other hand, if a demon were able to slaughter a mass population center, they would be able to gain more power such as in KQM Mana's case. Though, Sacrifices are NOT just for power. They can be used to increase intelligence, increase will, unlock hidden talents, give untold riches to the demon and so on and so forth. (There will be a list of available sacrifices as a demon can do very soon to accommodate this new power.)

Body Manipulation: This is a natural ability that all demon's possess if they wish to activate it or perform it. Most Demon's have full control over every aspect of his physical make-up, able to stretch themselves to obtain insane heights such as being thirty foot tall, being able to change their skin color, having the ability to shape-shift into different people that they are able to remember and, on much more powerful levels, being able to even detach, generate or fuse body parts together in order to increase odds of surviving. Though, this does not occur until at least one tier, and even then it's weak compared to the 0 tier version.




Origin's

» Origin 1 Name: Obsession

» Origin Power: Eternal Bond

to keep all the people she had held deer to her, with her forever she binds there souls to her's along with the Nidhana. so even if the soul is kill or destroyed it will come back to her. the soul will not go to the ss or hell upon death as like the demon her self if killed it flows back to the Nidhana. This only happens to tho's she kills. so is limited to the people and NCP that died as a result of her own actions.

» Origin Abilities:

This ability only react with stimulus out side of her self that involves the target of her affection. when something comes between her and her target or effect there relationship it can also effect her. normally like a buff. the effect of it vary depending on what the trigger was. As well the longer this skill is active the stronger the buff gets and the more unstable her mental state gets. it is thought that this taps not only in to the souls she has bond to her's energy but Za Koa's and her own as well. As well this is one ability she can not control her self at all or use at will.

one possibility is a slight annoyance. such as her target paying a little too much attention to someone else in a social setting . In this case something along the lines of a dark aura could manifest around her and suck the life out of plants and things around her and adding a disturbing feeling to the air. there us no real harm done and no real amp to her skills or Abilities at all. as well this is easy to get read of as all it takes is some attention from the target.


on a nother note what if one was to try to get too close to her target in a social setting? Such as horseplay. The level of closeness between her target and the other person could activate this ability and have a bit of a stronger starting effect. such as a light speed boost or strengths. her mental state would also change more to the aggressive side And try to put a stop to this as soon as possible.

{A WORST CASE SCENARIO} What if Someone else tried to make her target fall in love with them and cast her out of the picture completely and the target seem to be complying with them. This would most likely cause an extremely violent effect. dark clouds taking over the sky, dead silence that would only be broken by an almost manic laughter, an inability to maintain her shifter appearance or restrict her Inhuman Presence. A fully psychotic mental state,tire class increase along with skills. Soul focus On killing both of them so that she would have the target's soul bound to her.

But even in worst case it is always possible to calm her down if given the right incentives. with the example above. say she went berserk and tried to kill them both. the now terrified for there life target could out of fear say that they love her and did not really want the other person. That they was just playing around .. and talk her down. this pledge of love and loyalty and showing her that she is who he wants would make this deactivate. but could make her more reactive for any other events to come if not handled well as she would not have as much trust in him.



Personal Space invasion: IF Kinu at any time can get her bodily fluids like saliva into some ones body by kiss or other ways she makes a demon seal in side them that other demons can see marking them as hers. this also allows her to track where they are at any given time and there health. but does not let her know what is happening per-say. she can not see there surroundings OR here what is said. but this seal does allow one way communication to be sent from them to her mentally. and if the one with the seal is also her target she can some times hear there thought's (with other persons approval) but this is uncontrolled and happens randomly. thru this seal she can also open a gate way and travel to or near the them... so that she can aide them... or keep an eye on them (aka stalk them).


Desire's edge:this ability can come in lots of forms as it is her using her desire to fuel an offensive action this is allways in more of a physical manor. like forming a black knife in to her hand on the low-end. But can also be used for other things with her imagination being the limit. Such as spikes shooting up from the ground or even making a hand gun to hold. they are always black in color and fade away after use. there is a 30 meter casting radius area of use with her being the center. projectiles can go further if it's something reasonable like a sniper rifle.


Pleasant deception: This ability is so that she can stay near her target with out setting off alarms and is mixed with her Body Manipulation Trait and her Origin 1 of Obsession. It changes her body's out-ward flowing energy to that natural to another race along with her physical body appearance. This is used to deceive some one in to thinking she is of another race and less of a risk. mostly to appear human to others. this does not apply to the way any of her Abilities energy feels at all or allow her to use the other races energy's in any other manor. also limits the feel of her tire to 5-3


» Origin 2 Name:caring
» Origin Power:
emotional floodgate: By coming into contact with some one she can poor her own feelings in to them. not replacing their own but letting them know just how she is feeling at the time. her Intense feeling flowing over them like a ocean wave. it only last as long as they are touching and can only show them her true and FULL feelings. it is not uncommon for one to cry after her doing this due to empathy and/or sympathy. it does not force any effect or change to them or there mental state at all, but only lets them know her feelings. But knowing how someone else feels can have an effect and even make them change their actions of there own free will.
» Origin Abilities:

black rose shield: This is normally invisible field that surrounding her target's body will she is alive and in the same thread as them.the field absorbs 20% of all damage that would have been dealt to the her target and recoils it back at the offender in the form small black energy needles that shoot out words from all sides of the targets body. with added energy for her to amp the power. but as the needles are sent out from all sides the power is drastically spread out. the force that her own power adds is up to her at the cost of how much of her energy she allows it to use. the max needles sent from one side is 5, there for only 1% if the damage they sent at the target is in each needed + how much she put in them. but the force in each needles has the same down side she has to put equal force in them all. and that means that most of it will be wasted going off in a direction away from the aggressive, but ideal for group combat.... at-lest to her as she does not care if other friendly get hit by it as long as its not her target. the real power of this ability come from its power storage. when damage is taken the 20% is absorbed yes, but it does not need to be used instantly. its triggered by her or the target ( tho she can stop the target from doing this with her will alone). this allows it to build up force by taking it from more than one hit. so lets say the aggressor punched the target 20 times. that is 20% of each punch = 4 whole punchs worth of force absorbed. but than split up on each side means only one per side. than by 5 needles that shoot from that side means each needles is only 1/5 of one punch with out her own added energy. by this math it would take a lot of energy to make this do any real damage yes. but it is not truly a offensive skill but a shield. witch is where it pays off. of the 20 times target he was punched only be hurt like 16 hit him. needless to say this ability is limited to ONLY the target of her love. it can be seen when the needles shoot out by the eye. it looks to be black rose vines wrapped around the target.

Florence Nightingale: THE HEALING POWER OF LOVE. this is a medical ability. it is used to reattach flesh and bone and is extremely painful. its uses her demonic powers to amp cellular regeneration of any cells to the speed of rapid healing, but does not replenish energy lost. she must also be physically touching them as well. that being said it can take one to two post to fully heal depending on how bad there hurt. it is worth noted that she CAN take the pain on her self instead of the one getting healed but only normally does this for her target.

Lovers link: this is a link to another persons soul it self. when this link is made with some one thru out the thread they can call on her Traits and Abilities to use of there own will so long as she keeps the link active. This link can also allow her to let them use her energy and share their thoughts. by doing so she and the other can work together as one person in completely synchronized way without a word being said out loud. but this means that they are in her head and will here all her thoughts even the less sane ones and vice versa. Witch could back fire on them if they have the wrong thought and set her off on them.
the link is made by the joining of hands and interlocking fingers. Both people than open up their soul to each other to forge the link. in addition they can also share the pain or even damage for the other making it so both get 50% of it. but one can also take the full 100% for the other if they want to. such as strike one with a sword and does no hurt them but the other will get a cut as deep as the one you would have dealt appear in the same spot. by this the damage is calculated by the one hit not the one that gets hurt. there durability vs the attack strengths. this bypassing the one hurts durability and hurting them the same even if the one that was to get hurt had a stronger level.

» Conceptual World: A once dark lonely abyss that now holds the souls of those bound to her in it.



Atma Vatou
» Atma Vatou Name:

be mine forever within my Atma Vatou

» Atma Vatou Appearance:

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Note: To prevent people from being overloaded who make Multi-Origin Danava, we allow them to qualify for certain forms if they a Atma Vatou for each Origin Power.



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skills

Racial Skills
  • Za Koa Skill: Adept
  • Demon Magic: Adept/
  • Shadow Movement: Advanced
  • Akuma Kyōdo: Beginner


General Skills
  • Durability: Adept
  • General Speed: Advanced
  • Strength: Adept
  • Weapon Skill: Beginner










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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Sat Aug 16, 2014 10:31 pm

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Sun Aug 24, 2014 6:36 pm

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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Wed Oct 01, 2014 11:47 am


«MOVING THIS CHARACTER RIGHT NOW»
Due to an update on the board, I am going to go ahead and move this character into the Approved Danava Demon section to better classify other sub-races of Demons.

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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Mon Feb 20, 2017 9:19 pm

[mod]Hope you don't mind Zets, but, I am going to move this character to WIP for now since I would like for some corrections to be made before I reapprove the app. Those corrections will be inbound tomorrow. Sorry if this is an inconvenience.[/mod]

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Tue Feb 21, 2017 8:26 pm

@Zetsurin wrote:
This ability only react with stimulus out side of her self that involves the target of her affection. when something comes between her and her target or effect there relationship it can also effect her. normally like a buff. the effect of it vary depending on what the trigger was. As well the longer this skill is active the stronger the buff gets and the more unstable her mental state gets. it is thought that this taps not only in to the souls she has bond to her's energy but Za Koa's and her own as well. As well this is one ability she can not control her self at all or use at will.

one possibility is a slight annoyance. such as her target paying a little too much attention to someone else in a social setting . In this case something along the lines of a dark aura could manifest around her and suck the life out of plants and things around her and adding a disturbing feeling to the air. there us no real harm done and no real amp to her skills or Abilities at all. as well this is easy to get read of as all it takes is some attention from the target.


on a nother note what if one was to try to get too close to her target in a social setting? Such as horseplay. The level of closeness between her target and the other person could activate this ability and have a bit of a stronger starting effect. such as a light speed boost or strengths. her mental state would also change more to the aggressive side And try to put a stop to this as soon as possible.

{A WORST CASE SCENARIO} What if Someone else tried to make her target fall in love with them and cast her out of the picture completely and the target seem to be complying with them. This would most likely cause an extremely violent effect. dark clouds taking over the sky, dead silence that would only be broken by an almost manic laughter, an inability to maintain her shifter appearance or restrict her Inhuman Presence. A fully psychotic mental state,tire class increase along with skills. Soul focus On killing both of them so that she would have the target's soul bound to her.

But even in worst case it is always possible to calm her down if given the right incentives. with the example above. say she went berserk and tried to kill them both. the now terrified for there life target could out of fear say that they love her and did not really want the other person. That they was just playing around .. and talk her down. this pledge of love and loyalty and showing her that she is who he wants would make this deactivate. but could make her more reactive for any other events to come if not handled well as she would not have as much trust in him.

Could you please give these abilities a name of sort? I would also ask for balances on anything combat related; those balances would be post cooldowns and the like.

@Zetsurin wrote:
Personal Space invasion: IF Kinu at any time can get her bodily fluids like saliva into some ones body by kiss or other ways she makes a demon seal in side them that other demons can see marking them as hers. this also allows her to track where they are at any given time and there health. but does not let her know what is happening per-say. she can not see there surroundings OR here what is said. but this seal does allow one way communication to be sent from them to her mentally. and if the one with the seal is also her target she can some times hear there thought's (with other persons approval) but this is uncontrolled and happens randomly. thru this seal she can also open a gate way and travel to or near the them... so that she can aide them... or keep an eye on them (aka stalk them).

Could you change the line that states "Thru this seal she can open a gate way..." and change it to state that she uses the demon portal instead? Considering the Kage Chōkyō-shi can be used for travel and is demon related; as long as she has adept in the skill we're good; otherwise I would rather she simply knows their location and can get to them via large strings of shadow movement.

@Zetsurin wrote:
Desire's edge:this ability can come in lots of forms as it is her using her desire to fuel an offensive action this is allways in more of a physical manor. like forming a black knife in to her hand on the low-end. But can also be used for other things with her imagination being the limit. Such as spikes shooting up from the ground or even making a hand gun to hold. they are always black in color and fade away after use. there is a 30 meter casting radius area of use with her being the center. projectiles can go further if it's something reasonable like a sniper rifle.

Can you give her a capability limit and have this drain more of her energy the more complicated an item she creates? Also, can you put a post limit for how long she can hold up one item she is using. I would also like there to be a limit of how many items she can create at one time.

@Zetsurin wrote:

Pleasant deception: This ability is so that she can stay near her target with out setting off alarms and is mixed with her Body Manipulation Trait and her Origin 1 of Obsession. It changes her body's out-ward flowing energy to that natural to another race along with her physical body appearance. This is used to deceive some one in to thinking she is of another race and less of a risk. mostly to appear human to others. this does not apply to the way any of her Abilities energy feels at all or allow her to use the other races energy's in any other manor. also limits the feel of her tire to 5-3

Can you put a post limit on this please? I am unsure if that "5-3" at the very end is that or not, but, please add it in so the post limit is clear.

@Zetsurin wrote:

black rose shield: This is normally invisible field that surrounding her target's body will she is alive and in the same thread as them.the field absorbs 20% of all damage that would have been dealt to the her target and recoils it back at the offender in the form small black energy needles that shoot out words from all sides of the targets body. with added energy for her to amp the power. but as the needles are sent out from all sides the power is drastically spread out. the force that her own power adds is up to her at the cost of how much of her energy she allows it to use. the max needles sent from one side is 5, there for only 1% if the damage they sent at the target is in each needed + how much she put in them. but the force in each needles has the same down side she has to put equal force in them all. and that means that most of it will be wasted going off in a direction away from the aggressive, but ideal for group combat.... at-lest to her as she does not care if other friendly get hit by it as long as its not her target. the real power of this ability come from its power storage. when damage is taken the 20% is absorbed yes, but it does not need to be used instantly. its triggered by her or the target ( tho she can stop the target from doing this with her will alone). this allows it to build up force by taking it from more than one hit. so lets say the aggressor punched the target 20 times. that is 20% of each punch = 4 whole punchs worth of force absorbed. but than split up on each side means only one per side. than by 5 needles that shoot from that side means each needles is only 1/5 of one punch with out her own added energy. by this math it would take a lot of energy to make this do any real damage yes. but it is not truly a offensive skill but a shield. witch is where it pays off. of the 20 times target he was punched only be hurt like 16 hit him. needless to say this ability is limited to ONLY the target of her love. it can be seen when the needles shoot out by the eye. it looks to be black rose vines wrapped around the target.

Thorn shield eh? Cool, I do like this. However, add a post limit as well as a maximum of how much energy it can consume before it would backfire and likely harm Kinu. Can you also state how long it would be until Kinu's Will would no longer hold the shield being triggered? It would make more sense if she could eventually be unable to keep the ability from going off.

@Zetsurin wrote:
Florence Nightingale: THE HEALING POWER OF LOVE. this is a medical ability. it is used to reattach flesh and bone and is extremely painful. its uses her demonic powers to amp cellular regeneration of any cells to the speed of rapid healing, but does not replenish energy lost. she must also be physically touching them as well. that being said it can take one to two post to fully heal depending on how bad there hurt. it is worth noted that she CAN take the pain on her self instead of the one getting healed but only normally does this for her target.

Could you include how much energy it would take to heal certain types of wounds; since it would prove useful to know this while in battle. And, also, put in how long Kinu can hold the pain on herself without passing out or breaking her contact. I would also like there to be a cooldown on the ability if it is ever used in combat.

@Zetsurin wrote:
Lovers link: this is a link to another persons soul it self. when this link is made with some one thru out the thread they can call on her Traits and Abilities to use of there own will so long as she keeps the link active. This link can also allow her to let them use her energy and share their thoughts. by doing so she and the other can work together as one person in completely synchronized way without a word being said out loud. but this means that they are in her head and will here all her thoughts even the less sane ones and vice versa. Witch could back fire on them if they have the wrong thought and set her off on them.
the link is made by the joining of hands and interlocking fingers. Both people than open up their soul to each other to forge the link. in addition they can also share the pain or even damage for the other making it so both get 50% of it. but one can also take the full 100% for the other if they want to. such as strike one with a sword and does no hurt them but the other will get a cut as deep as the one you would have dealt appear in the same spot. by this the damage is calculated by the one hit not the one that gets hurt. there durability vs the attack strengths. this bypassing the one hurts durability and hurting them the same even if the one that was to get hurt had a stronger level.

Okay... can you please make it so that the other person has access to Kinu's attacks but only at half the power; making it full power seems a little strange to me. Also, I would like there to be a limit to how long this link could be held. After that, I would like a cooldown.

@Zetsurin wrote:
» Atma Vatou Name:

be mine forever within my Atma Vatou

» Atma Vatou Appearance:

» Atma Vatou Abilities:

Note: To prevent people from being overloaded who make Multi-Origin Danava, we allow them to qualify for certain forms if they a Atma Vatou for each Origin Power.

Could you make this an Atma Vatou or just remove it, please?

@Zetsurin wrote:
Aliṅgana

» Aliṅgana State Appearance:

» Aliṅgana State Powers:

» Aliṅgana State Abilities:

» Unnata Release Appearance: (

» Unnata Release Powers:

» Unnata Release Abilities:

I would like for this to be removed from the app since Multi Origin Danava can not have Alingana State and Unnata Release; they must have Phyuja Rājya and Caṛhā Saṅgalita.

After these fixes are made I shall reapprove your app!

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Kinu shūchaku [WIP] [Previous Tier: 2-4]   Mon Jul 10, 2017 12:10 am

[mod]I am moving this to inactive! Please message a staff member if you would like this to be moved back.[/mod]
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