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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 10:54 pm



Mary Sue Test


http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.html

This is just for laughs. I found this little test and I decided to do it for a few of my character. Feel free to discuss or post your own for shits and giggles

Khala: Khala is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She always knew she was special, destined for great things - and probably made sure everyone else knew it too. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Khala, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Khala is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 8
Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 14
Can't Complain 9
Momma HATES Her! 2
Total: 33

Shadin: Shadin Yuudeshi is nothing like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He always knew he was special, destined for great things - and probablyf made sure everyone else knew it too. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

You may have let yourself get a little too close to Shadin Yuudeshi. Maybe he's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like him and are trying to give him a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Shadin Yuudeshi is a good character. Give him room to be himself before you stifle him.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 5
Hey, Wanna See My Crown-Shaped Birthmark? 15
Angst R Us 19
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 11
Total: 50

Mana Asthavon: Mana Asthavon is nothing like you. She may be popular, or she may not, but no matter what she's impossible to ignore; she stands out... just the way you always wanted to. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Mana Asthavon, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Mana Asthavon is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
Yo! 14
I'm Destined For What? 11
Angst R Us 10
Momma HATES Her! 3
Total: 38

Ibiki Suika: Ibiki Suika is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Ibiki Suika, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Ibiki Suika is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.


Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 5
Healthy as a Horse 2
Momma HATES Her! 0
Total: 16

Cirno Iramasha: Cirno Iramasha is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Cirno Iramasha, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Cirno Iramasha is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 6
I'm Destined For What? 9
Can't Complain 3
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 5
Total: 23

Neoveta Asthavon: Neoveta is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Neoveta, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Neoveta is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 7
I'm Destined For What? 9
Can't Complain 7
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 7
Total: 30


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 10:58 pm



Mary Sue Test


Radioactive: Radioactive is nothing like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Radioactive, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Radioactive is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 5
Can't Complain 8
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 5
Total: 27

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:04 pm

Sou Yuuki: Sou Yuuki is nothing like you. He may be popular, or he may not, but no matter what he's impossible to ignore; he stands out... just the way you always wanted to. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Sou Yuuki, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Sou Yuuki is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
Yo! 14
I'm Destined For What? 5
Can't Complain 6
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 29

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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:13 pm

Mary Sue Test


Kin Iramasha: Kin Iramasha is nothing like you. He is not at all cool; in fact, he thinks cool is a temperature reading, and when he says "Oh, I just put on whatever old thing's lying around," he means "on the floor, where I threw it last night - but I turned the underwear inside out first." He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And he's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Kin Iramasha, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Kin Iramasha is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
He's The Anti-Cool 3
I'm Destined For What? 11
Can't Complain 8
Momma HATES Him! 3
Total: 25

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:20 pm

Nemain: Nemain is nothing like you. She may be popular, or she may not, but no matter what she's impossible to ignore; she stands out... just the way you always wanted to. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Nemain, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Nemain is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
Yo! 11
I'm Destined For What? 3
Healthy as a Horse 0
Momma HATES Her! 1
Total: 15


Kameko: Kameko is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Kameko, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Kameko is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 11
Can't Complain 5
Momma HATES Her! 0
Total: 25


Xaver: Xaver is nothing like you. He may be popular, or he may not, but no matter what he's impossible to ignore; he stands out... just the way you always wanted to. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And he's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Xaver, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Xaver is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
Yo! 10
I'm Destined For What? 7
Can't Complain 5
Momma HATES Him! 0
Total: 22

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:22 pm

Did it for Horus and Volund. Some of it I can agree with, some I don't.

Horus Sariel: Horus Sariel is nothing like you. He is so impossibly hip that he has difficulty seeing over his own pelvis; he'll probably die young, but damn, will it have been a good life. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And he's gotten no slack from you.

You may have let yourself get a little too close to Horus Sariel. Maybe he's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like him and are trying to give him a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Horus Sariel is a good character. Give him room to be himself before you stifle him.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
James Dean, James Dean... 24
I'm Destined For What? 11
Can't Complain 8
Momma HATES Him! 2
Total: 45

Volund: Volund is nothing like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's had more than his fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than he ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Volund, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Volund is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 8
Angst R Us 12
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 33
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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:25 pm

Just in case anyone was wondering what happens when you check /every/ box.

Pockeh is nothing like you. He is so impossibly hip that he has difficulty seeing over his own pelvis; he'll probably die young, but damn, will it have been a good life. He'd have to be pretty dense to miss the signs that he is destined for great things; he can hardly take a walk without tripping over a sword in a stone or a mysterious old woman wanting to tell his fortune. He's had a rough life - to say the least! Angst? Histronics? His speciality. And you, his creator, have spoilt him rotten and given him everything he wanted.

You identify far too heavily with Pockeh, and defend him from all sides, never realizing that in your quest to make him perfect you are alienating your readers. Back off and take a break. Try writing the story from the viewpoint of a different character, one you have less sympathy with... or writing a different story and coming back to this one.



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Do I Know This Guy? 0
James Dean, James Dean... 48
Stars For His Eyes 45
Valium Poster Child 53
What A Brat! 54
Total: 200

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Fri Aug 22, 2014 11:47 pm

Chammy is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Chammy, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Chammy is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 3
Healthy as a Horse 2
Momma HATES Her! 0
Total: 14

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Nanaya is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And she's gotten no slack from you.

In general, you care deeply about Nanaya, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Nanaya is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

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Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 6
I'm Destined For What? 6
Angst R Us 14
Momma HATES Her! 0
Total: 26

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Sat Aug 23, 2014 8:29 am

Kururai is nothing like you. He may be popular, or he may not, but no matter what he's impossible to ignore; he stands out... just the way you always wanted to. He'd have to be pretty dense to miss the signs that he is destined for great things; he can hardly take a walk without tripping over a sword in a stone or a mysterious old woman wanting to tell his fortune. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

You may have let yourself get a little too close to Kururai. Maybe he's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like him and are trying to give him a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Kururai is a good character. Give him room to be himself before you stifle him.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
Yo! 12
Stars For His Eyes 28
Can't Complain 5
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 49

Pretty good, pretty good. Some of it is actually pretty accurate, as far as I can tell.

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Subject Post 10PostSubject: Re: Mary Sue Test?   Sat Aug 23, 2014 10:33 am

Mary Sue Test


Yukuri Iramasha: Yukuri Iramasha is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's come in for her share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Yukuri Iramasha, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Yukuri Iramasha is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 8
I'm Destined For What? 7
Can't Complain 3
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 5
Total: 23

Rose Mischevang: Rose Mischevang is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Rose Mischevang, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Rose Mischevang is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.



Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 8
I'm Destined For What? 6
Angst R Us 16
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 34

Zin Yuudeshi: Zin Yuudeshi is nothing like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. He may have sometimes thought that he was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. He's got no emotional scars to speak of. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Zin Yuudeshi, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Zin Yuudeshi is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 6
I'm Destined For What? 10
Healthy as a Horse 2
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 5
Total: 23

Shatari Yuudeshi: Shatari Yuudeshi is nothing like you. She isn't really very cool: she blends into crowds, she hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes her run into things. She may have sometimes thought that she was special, or destined for greater things, but probably dismissed the idea as a fantasy. She's got no emotional scars to speak of. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.

In general, you care deeply about Shatari Yuudeshi, but you're smart enough to let her stand on her own, without burdening her with your personal fantasies or propping her up with idealization and over-dramatization. Shatari Yuudeshi is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of her.

Score Breakdown
Do I Know This Guy? 0
You Mean Plaid Is Out? 9
I'm Destined For What? 8
Healthy as a Horse 0
Spare the Rod and Spoil the Child 4
Total: 21

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