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|Subject Post 11Subject: Re: Mujin Makiyoshi[Approved 2-4] Sun Aug 20, 2017 11:42 pm|| |
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- Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities: The Zanpakto focuses on augmenting the user's kidou ability through the power of the sun and moon.
This needs a LOT more definition if this is its own ability. However, it reads as if it's describing what the Zanpakutou does overall, in which case there is no need for that. The Sealed Zanpakutou Abilities section is for abilities your Zanpakutou has when it is not in Shikai or Bankai only.
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- Exusia has a simple first ability at shikai, the weapon begins too act as a magnet for solar energy replenishing the users systems with enough energy too supply low level kidou. The ratio is 2:1 every two post in sunlight. In partial darkness the ratio is 3:1 and in darkness the ratio is 2:1
There needs to be some clarification. Is the Zanpakutou replenishing the user's energy to power kidou at a 2:1 ratio as in 2 from the Zanpakutou for every 1 natural replenishment or is it 1 from the Zanpakutou for every 2 natural?
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- The second ability focuses more on applying the latent power being built up by the blade, allowing the user too direct solar waves in a offensive or even defensive fashion. How it works is the user uses the blade to direct solar waves and assualt and scorch (sun burn) the target within their radius 15 to start and adding five for 1k word trainings approved by a mod . The speed and power of this technique equals the users weapon skill.
There is no real description of what this does besides a single mention of "sunburn," which is not actually describing what happens. Is it burning them like what happens when you put something under a magnifying glass on a hot day? Or is it just raising the temperature? Either way, there needs to be an actual description of what is going on with the ability. Also, when it comes to the radius, there needs to be a unit of measurement—it be anything between 15 millimeters to 15 kilometers (or 15 miles for those that use Imperial).
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|Subject Post 12Subject: Re: Mujin Makiyoshi[Approved 2-4] Sun Sep 24, 2017 8:13 pm|| |
[adm]Moving this to WIP as there have been no updates.[/adm]
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|Subject Post 13Subject: Re: Mujin Makiyoshi[Approved 2-4] Mon Aug 19, 2019 5:26 pm|| |
[mod]Moving back to WIP so the owner can work on it[/mod]
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|Subject Post 14Subject: Re: Mujin Makiyoshi[Approved 2-4] Mon Aug 19, 2019 5:41 pm|| |
Finished edits too my Zanpaktou, and Zanjustu
Left Kidou ans hakuda didn't see any needed edits.