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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Gohan............(Done)   Thu Nov 06, 2014 12:19 pm




» Name: Gohan
» Titles: None
» Age: 16
» Gender: Male
» Affiliation/Rank: None
» Appearance Description: Gohan has black hair and black eyes. He has his father's facial features, and also has his mother's light peach complexion rather than his father's light tan. Gohan also is quite muscularly developed for his age, Gohan's face is often considered attractive; characterized by a generally oval disposition brought about by somewhat angular cheekbones and a sweetly thin jawline, accentuated by the bleak sharpness of the male-typical brow ridge with a straight nose, thin lips, and proportionately matching chin. Topped off with small ears and thin, slightly arched eyebrows atop rippled, deep-set eyes it is made a mysterious brand of sexy look, if only for the adequate adornment of a single wavy lock of hair.

jet-black and wavy, Gohan's hair is always swept back. He may cut it to neck-length sometimes but he prefers keeping it long, though when utilizing his powers his hair instantly spike outward unable to be contained.

Clearly a purebred fighter with traditional physical traits, Gohan's body naturally demonstrates incredibly healthy physical development, evidenced by his well-balanced height and weight in relation to his average frame. His muscle tone signifies the strength of the family blood whilst not being notably large. albeit of good size. The highlights of his body are definitely the excellent proportion that has been maintained, shaped by a nicely arched back, well-developed torso, and large-muscled masculine legs. Excellently built, his presence becomes immense.

Gohan's attire is constant; a training GI he has become accustom to wearing due to the numerous fighting he had to deal with since him and his sibling ventured of into the world on their own.

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» Personality: his mom once wrote of her son as being “competitive, stubborn and loud mouthed, but so passionate that it is impossible to fault him for anything.” His mother couldn't have been more right; even through the changes in his life his core feelings and reactions remained the same.

Gohan’s stubbornness is incredible, when he sets his mind on something he will do it, whether or not it’s tactfully possible or beneficial to his cause. Through growing up he’s slowly learned to not jump into issues, rather plan them out in a smarter way, but he can grow impatient. If there is someone out there that is evil, that is causing harm, he wants to get them now. This has made him quite the daredevil, showing no fear in feats that would otherwise kill others. He traverses buildings with ease, leaps great bounds, and has even approached the impossibly of flight with an open mind. As long as it gets him closer to his goal, he will do it; danger be damned.

As warrior's go Gohan hasn't quite learned that silence is a virtue. Growing up he was outgoing and charismatic, quickly able to make ferocious enemies and passionate lovers. Although no longer in his happy, ignorant life he once had, his talkative nature often comes out. When with others supporting his cause, he is not afraid to ask questions about the things he needs to do and why this will help. On the field of battle, he’ll often taunt his opponents to enrage them and move them into blunders. And above all, he is a ladies’ man. A pretty face and a sharp tongue can get him going for a long time, and he’s not one to take on a chauvinistic attitude; he believes that a woman is on par of strength and competence as a man.

Gohan’s passion is what drives him the most, what keeps him going as an being. After the death of his father and mother, the fire of anger that burns in him also pushes him forward to eliminate those who conspired in it. When he has something to believe in, he believes in it so greatly all other points and problems seem minuscule to what Gohan is working for now. And if you impede his ability to do what he wants, well, prepare for some hell coming your way.
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» Natural Attributes:
Relentless Sense: For Gohan who relentlessly seeks out combat, he was born with larger amounts of energy, not spiritual power, than others, which allows him to continuously fight without worry of being slowed by exhaustion. He can fight for a total of 40 posts when fighting a target he is on par with and 20 when fighting stronger beings in which during that time period he suffers from half the fatigue loss as others, before he begins to suffer from full fatigue loss. This also carries over to the boy being able to negate techniques which lower tiers equal to their rank being used on them.

Eye's Of Zero: The eyes of zero are drastically more advanced than other human beings, not in the case of distance rather the eyes are unable to miss the slightest changes that take place in their field of vision, granting them excellent dynamic vision. This does not make them capable of reacting to everything they see but they are capable of properly tracking the speed of someone moving one tier above them at adept mental strain each usage

Muscle Memory: Only available to Gohan once he has gained a minimum of 5 skills through Natural Adaptation. Through the process of repetition for a physical based technique, the user's muscles will memorize said technique allowing it to be performed without a conscious effort, physical based techniques that have been committed to “memory” are unable to be read by mind reading but they are more susceptible to body reading, the body reading allowed to be one-rank lower to read the physical based technique committed to “memory.” However because the user's body is accustomed to said technique, physical based tech committed to “memory” will always be used at their regular power regardless if under the effects of tier reducing or strength, speed, or defense/endurance reducing techniques. When this is combined with
Augmented Longevity and after a mass word training, the boy will continue to be at his physical prime regardless of how old he is. It requires a training topic equal to that of the tech rank to commit it to “memory.”

Fighting Spirit: Uses Determination Skill. If those around him are two tiers lower in their own Determination skill, they are forced unconscious unless they have another form of Will defense that is at least equal to Gohan's Determination. The longest they may be passed out is for three posts, and it may be lessened for a single post if they have high will skills or a defense against it. If the user completely nullifies the fatigue factor, they will still feel the energy press against them strongly.


» Racial Powers: Soul Dash: Gohan's is very skilled at this ability something he took only a year to perfect his soul dash is among one of the strongest he has ever seen, the young teen can keep his soul dash active in his overall body for extended periods of time unlike normal humans. (15 post before strain) He is a budding Master at this technique.

Willpower: This technique stems from the amount of willpower people put into their blows, Gohan having learned to harness this willpower and translate it into a sort of an invisible physical aura which allows him to extend the range of his hand to hand combat by 5 feet. Meaning if the blow seems like it didn't connect due to the opponent narrowly dodging it the blow will still hit them albeit at a 1-rank lower than the original tier damage simply due to the physical aura which envelops them in battle. This makes engaging in a physical battle with Gohan a very high risk for amateurs in close ranged combat. The technique takes up a heavy amount of stamina too maintain and can only be kept up for two post at a time before needing a one post cool down

Battle Impression: In combat the unknown is what ultimately brings upon defeat, a lesson which has never changed throughout the centuries. However for Gohan, who was born with highly advanced skills in combat, he is capable of gauging the base power levels of others, through physical encounters. In the exact second the physical encounter occurs, he is capable of learning the limits of the opponent’s base physical prowess, causing the opponent to put all their highest base tiers, without buffs, in spoilers on their next post.

Augmented Longevity: Rumors have it that the boy's cells have actually adapted themselves enabling them to continue their search for their battlefield, this adaption being caused by his Relentless Sense. To begin with Gohans family were already ones who lived longer than others, capable of living about 100 years. But when their Relentless Sense started to influence their cells directly, the life expectancy has drastically increased by about 20 to 50 years. This has also caused Gohan to age slower, his physical appearance, once he reach's 21, aging not every year but every 2 or 3 years, granting him a quite youthful appearance despite his actual age.

Anima Stone: Gohan's stone is internal being near the center of his chest is a small diamond shaped stone clear and see through as if glass, over the years he has gotten very familiar with his sorcery skills not wanting to disregard them he channeled most of his magic in pure energy offensive style attacks and counter offensive spells, Though unique to him and other humans in his pack his stone utilizing the energy inside him likewise uses every member of his pack being mixed within making his spells extremely deadly.


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Tue Nov 25, 2014 5:59 pm


«MOVING THIS INTO OLD WIP»

Alright, since this app is over two weeks old, and there hasn't been an announcement of further work on this character, I am going to go ahead and move him to Old Wips. You can keep up your work on him there.

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Thu Mar 19, 2015 12:26 pm

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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Sat Nov 21, 2015 5:40 pm

[mod]This character app's been moved out of the archives back into unchecked, good luck with the character![/mod]

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Sun Nov 22, 2015 2:54 am

[mod]Moving this to Unchecked APPs due to miscommunications.[/mod]

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Thu Nov 26, 2015 12:25 am

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» Soul State Evolution Stage 1 Appearance:
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» Soul State Evolution Stage 1 Abilities: This is a unique transformation which is based on the principle of reishi "burning" by rapidly burning through one's reserves they can magnify their tiers drastically without any drawbacks other than energy loss. This form results in a transformation effect in the user's body their muscles become more pronounced as an aura of ambient reishi begins to swirl around their body, and they look completely like their normal appearance other than their eye color which changes to blue while their hair spikes upward. Their tiers(Strength, Speed, Reaction, Durability) are increased too adept levels.
Form can be held for 30 post or 20 without passing out

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» Soul State Evolution Stage 2 Abilities: This is a improved transformation which expands on the original soul state. This form results in a transformation effect in the user's body their muscles become more pronounced as an aura of ambient reishi begins to swirl around their body becoming more focused and discharging like static from their body, and they look completely like their normal appearance other than their hair and eye color which changes to yellow and blue respectively while their hair spikes upward. Their tiers are magnified(Strength, Speed, Reaction, Durability) to advanced levels(Able to be maintained for 25 post before passing out 15 post and the user can keep fighting)

» Soul State Evolution Stage 3 Appearance:
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» Soul State Evolution Stage 3 Abilities: This is a improved transformation. This form results in a transformation effect in the user's body their muscles become much more pronounced as an aura of ambient reishi becomes much more focused than before occasionally discharging like lightning from their body, their hair lengthens being a golden hue stretching all the way down to their back at times but not always and their blue eyes hum with reishi. Their tiers are magnified along with the prior soul state boost(Strength, Speed, Reaction) to master levels(Able to be maintained for 20 post 15 and the user can keep fighting)
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» Chi Powers: Inner Monkey To put it into words Gohan's Chi powers affects his very core sense causing him to adapt to a more primal with the need to search for the perfect battle field, along with this ability he gained the innate ability to formulate his own family and pass on this goal known only to members as "The Pack" Once Gohan bites a target they are afflicted with his chi and in turn his ability and Pack.

Universal Tools: http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/277/9/e/___the_one_ring____by_vincentxyooj-d5grc61.png
Gohan's Father and mother each made tools that they would pass on too their sons before their passing. Gohan would get his fathers tool and his sibling would get their mother's. What his father passed down was a ring, at first it did nothing but when Gohan became 13 the ring began affecting his Chi causing him too gather more than natural from his surrounding giving him a considerably faster energy recovery rate.

Tekkai "Iron Mass":Through sheer training the boy has grown the utmost amount of muscle and power forming his body to become stronger than a diamond wall, his enemy's which are unlucky enough to attempt hand to hand combat on him only fail to the might of his Tekkai unless they posses strength near the level of a master.

Pack Hierarchy
Alpha~Male/Female: Gohan/
Beta:
Gamma(s)x3:
Delta(s)x5:
Omega(s):
Pack Mentality: Gohan is not part of a family, he is part of a Pack and can add members to that pack as he goes through life, likewise he can remove members from the pack with death or by leaving the pack to become an Omega (Rouge) or an Alpha (when an Adult/having found a Mate). In order to mark someone as a pack member the member must bite them to transmit their mark. Once Marked however all of the members of the pack are able to sense each other and communicate with one another on a purely instinctual level, likewise emotions can be transmitted through the channel to allow the Pack Members to know the mental state of their pack to promote harmony, Along with that each member gains a transformation similar too Gohan's Awakened appearance and when unlocked his Fully but diluted from the original.

More like me...More like you: This ability provides for the full synchronization of the pack members, fully integrating their energy unto one another. Their energy would now be shared, taking on the attributes of their significant other as well as keeping their own unique energy. Meaning if the pack held a member of each race then the pack members energy would be something unknown to anyone since it would be a natural mixture of each. This allows each member a plus energy boost depending on how large the pack is. For each member in the pack other than themselves each member gains a boost in energy equal too 5 tiers above there natural tier(2-5 Tier user would have 2-0 Energy supply with two pack members).

Spiritual Roar: Once pack members come together in combat they showcase what is deemed a roar, this phenomenon occurs when the pack as a whole intend to eliminate a target focusing their pent up killing intent onto one being, what this generally does is cause the target to buckle under the killing intent, depending on their rank and the members of the pack. 2 members 5-tier and below are affected, 4 members 4-tier and below are affected, 5 members 3-tier and below are affected 6 members 2-tier and below are affected, 7 members and 1-tier and below are affected 8 and anyone targeted becomes affected. Likewise the Alpha can force members of the pack to utilize this technique.

» Awakened Appearance&Powers:For the first stage a ribcage is produced about the size of an building, while providing Advanced defenses, can still be fractured or even completely destroyed upon receiving stronger attacks. Occasionally an arm can sometimes be connected to the ribcage which can be used to interact with the surroundings. To maintain this powerful defense it deals a constant Adept damage to the user each post of both parties.

As the user gains more control, the full skeletal structure will be formed of a monkeyy excluding the legs, the monkey being the size of a two story house. When the mokey's growth is fully matured, or when the user is completely surrounded, then the monkey will gain a tail, the tail being capable of cutting through Advanced and lower defenses. In this form the uer gains defensive capabilities equal to Master and it deals a constant Adept damage to the user each post of both parties.
» Awakened Powers:

» Fully Awakened Appearance:
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» Fully Awakened Powers: Eventually the monkey will gain a coat of golden fur covering its entire body, giving it the true appearance of a Ape. At this stage, it can anchor the user to the ground preventing opponents from forcibly moving them unless they can get through the Monkey's various layers. In this form the tail is capable of cutting through Master and lower defenses. This form has its most powerful defense, granting defensive capabilities equal to Master however in order to maintain it, it deals a constant Advanced damage each post of both parties to the user. In this state the monkey can grow legs which will increase its height to that of a three story building likewise allowing it too move at speeds equal the user.


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General Skills
  • Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Pain Endurance: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Focus: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


Human Skill Sheet
  • Anima Stone Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Soul Sorcery: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Soul Dash: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Soul Detection: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


Chi Skills
  • Geppo: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
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  • Vindeca: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Tekkai: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Yang Surge: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Mon Dec 07, 2015 1:21 am

[mod]Moving this to unchecked since its done. I'm reserving a check on this app and i'll deal with it soon.[/mod]

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Mon Dec 07, 2015 3:51 am


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@Mujin wrote:
Relentless Sense: For Gohan who relentlessly seeks out combat, he was born with larger amounts of energy, not spiritual power, than others, which allows him to continuously fight without worry of being slowed by exhaustion. He can fight for a total of 60 posts in which during that time period he suffers from half the fatigue loss as others, before he begins to suffer from full fatigue loss. This also carries over to the boy being able to negate techniques which lower tiers equal to their rank being used on them.
60 posts is exaggerated. Lower it down somewhere like 20-40 posts, especially when he's fighting against beings that are far stronger than him. Otherwise, i don't see much of a problem with everyone else.

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Eye's Of Zero: The eyes of zero are drastically more advanced than other human beings, not in the case of distance rather the eyes are unable to miss the slightest changes that take place in their field of vision, granting them excellent dynamic vision. This does not make them capable of reacting to everything they see but they are capable of predicting anything as long as they can see it.
This one needs more details for me to understand how it works in the first place. As well as that i want to know if this ability works permanently or uses some sort of energy to utilize it. Considering how 'advanced' these eyes are compared to a normal human, just what limit can these eyes cannot predict or react to? You mentioned that he cannot react to everything, but he can predict 'anything' as long as he can see. I need to know the limits and weakness of what these eyes can do, instead of just 'I can predict since i can see you". This is important since its pretty powerful when your character starts growing stronger.

@Mujin wrote:
Muscle Memory: Only available to Gohan once he has gained a minimum of 5 skills through Natural Adaptation. Through the process of repetition for a physical based technique, the user's muscles will memorize said technique allowing it to be performed without a conscious effort, physical based techniques that have been committed to “memory” are unable to be read by mind reading but they are more susceptible to body reading, the body reading allowed to be one-rank lower to read the physical based technique committed to “memory.” However because the user's body is accustomed to said technique, physical based tech committed to “memory” will always be used at their regular power regardless if under the effects of tier reducing or strength, speed, or defense/endurance reducing techniques. When this is combined with Augmented Longevity and after a mass word training, the boy will continue to be at his physical prime regardless of how old he is. It requires a training topic equal to that of the tech rank to commit it to “memory.”
So, if he trains for a certain technique repeatedly, his muscles can memorize the technique he had learnt and use it without any conscious effort. But on what scale? Can he use the said technique perfectly and effortlessly, or will he be able to use it only on an amateur level, and what technique can he learn? Every single technique available, or just techniques that are limited to his own capability?

One more, even if he grows accustomed to the given technique, it doesn't mean that he can still use it regularly even with debuffs against his techniques or strength. Take a character, for example, he keeps using city-obliterating techniques repeatedly every single day, and now his muscles has 'memorized' the techniques and grew accustomed to it, you can't expect him to spam the technique and won't get affected at all even if people were to reduce his strength to a beginner level. That's the logic there. So, regulate and limit it to a certain point where there are some debuffs that are powerful enough to affect his techniques, despite growing accustomed to it.


@Mujin wrote:
Fighting Spirit: An uncommon occurrence, one only capable of being by those who possess an unquenchable thirst for battle that they constantly seek out various battlefields. This technique is performed by extruding the user’s pure fighting intent directly onto their victims, as a form of intimidation. Being such, this technique makes use of the Intimidation Limit, which is equivalent to the victim’s Fatigue Limit. With each of the user’s posts reducing the Intimidation limit, once fully exhausted the victims will be completely intimidated where they will faint for a total of 5 posts, howeve mind blocks equal to the user’s rank can make the victims immune to intimidation. Every time the Intimidation limit is reduced by 10 points, the user is allowed to lower one of the victim’s tiers by 1-rank. For Gohan, his method of using Fighting Spirit doesn’t change much, however he uses it to increase his presence to his victims, thus purposely attempting to make himself the primary target. If Gohan is not rendered the target of an attack, then the amount consumed from the Intimidation limit each post Gohan is not targeted is doubled.
Rank – Amount consumed from Intimidation limit
Beginner – 1
Adept – 2
Advanced – 3
Expert – 4
Master – 5
First off, how or what does tier/skill affect the ranks of intimidation?
Second, what about people with strong willpower? Say if their tier is lower than Gohan's, but has master willpower? Can they resist against the intimidation?
Third, Fatigue limit? Intimidation limit? Please elaborate more about how these 'limits' work in this 'intimidation' ability.
Fourth, why does intimidation cause his victims to faint? Are they so intimidated to that point that they suddenly faint? It doesn't make sense at all, so elaborate on why. Is it because it is because of their weak willpower? If so, how would victims weaker than he is would have a chance to resist against his intimidation? Any weaknesses?
Lastly, I can see that the Intimidation limit is ranked, but what does 'points' got to do with the ranked limit or the amount of post given for his victims would succumb to his intimidation and faint?


I'll stop my check here since there's a lot more for you to fix. If you have any questions, you can PM me or hit me up on skype. Really, i spent two hours looking at it over and over again, but i can't seem to find any weaknesses that these abilities have. So yeah, once you fix them all, i'll continue on checking.

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Gohan............(Done)   Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:28 pm

Muscle Memory: i thought i put in the technique it was only for physical techniques, meaning he cannot learn techniques which consume energy with this technique. It was intended too allow him too normally use his hand too hand or weapon based techniques which use no energy without conscious allowing things like muscle reading too predict tech too not work. The part about the debuffs not affecting him was on the premise that his physical body is so refined he can push past debuffs in order too naturally physically fight.

Fighting Spirit: Willpower affects this. i edited that in. and it causes them too faint because of the intimidations affect on the minds, why i made the weakness mental based " however mind blocks equal to the user’s rank can make the victims immune to intimidation" having a sort of mental defense is the only way too counter outside of willpower. The points are for Gohan's willpower and the level at which their limit is drained once affected. They faint only when completely drained for the same amount of post no matter what rank he is.

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Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination:
  • Mental Deduction:
  • Pain Endurance:
  • Focus:


Comments/Notes: Relentless Sense: For Gohan who relentlessly seeks out combat, he was born with larger amounts of energy, not spiritual power, than others, which allows him to continuously fight without worry of being slowed by exhaustion. He can fight for a total of 40 posts when fighting a target he is on par with and 20 when fighting stronger beings in which during that time period he suffers from half the fatigue loss as others, before he begins to suffer from full fatigue loss. This also carries over to the boy being able to negate techniques which lower tiers equal to their rank being used on them.

For Relentless Sense, it generally seems fine up until the very very end where it's listed that he can simply negate techniques. First major problem is that it's negating all techniques from lower tiers with no effect going through at all. Typically, not even Master level items from 0 tiers can fully negate the effects of something as a passive or active. Having reduced effects is acceptable, and a tier listing such as (adept attacks are reduced by x% while beginner attacks are reduced by x%) are acceptable.

Eye's Of Zero: The eyes of zero are drastically more advanced than other human beings, not in the case of distance rather the eyes are unable to miss the slightest changes that take place in their field of vision, granting them excellent dynamic vision. This does not make them capable of reacting to everything they see but they are capable of predicting anything as long as they can see it. The eyes have no cost being a natural adaption too the boys genetics instead like a switch he may utilize it when needed, while using it on everything if front of him the boy can track and react too equal rank speeds allowing his speed too surpass even if slightly users matching his speed due too the eye's. Likewise the eyes predict speeds one level above the users however when focusing on one target the eye's naturally can predict two levels above the user. The technique promotes a advanced mental strain upon each usage on a single person which may cause the eye's and nose too bleed, when using it on the entire vision causes a adept mental strain.

From the wording, this basically gives the character future sight and the ability to out speed people above him despite the fact that he's... Well, General Speed wise slower than them. I personally can not be fine with the wording allowing him to predict, but what I am willing to work with is the ability to still -see- someone who is a single tier higher in General Speed than him for each usage.

Fighting Spirit: An uncommon occurrence, one only capable of being by those who possess an unquenchable thirst for battle that they constantly seek out various battlefields. This technique is performed by extruding the user’s pure fighting intent directly onto their victims, as a form of intimidation. Being such, this technique makes use of the Intimidation Limit, which is equivalent to the victim’s Fatigue Limit. With each of the user’s posts reducing the Intimidation limit, once fully exhausted the victims will be completely intimidated where they will faint for a total of 5 posts, howeve mind blocks equal to the user’s rank can make the victims immune to intimidation. Every time the Intimidation limit is reduced by 10 points, the user is allowed to lower one of the victim’s tiers by 1-rank. For Gohan, his method of using Fighting Spirit doesn’t change much, however he uses it to increase his presence to his victims, thus purposely attempting to make himself the primary target. If Gohan is not rendered the target of an attack, then the amount consumed from the Intimidation limit each post Gohan is not targeted is doubled. each rank of will power gives one 15 points toward their intimidation limit.
(Will Power)Rank – Amount consumed from Intimidation limit
Beginner – 1
Adept – 2
Advanced – 3
Expert – 4
Master – 5

The major issue with this ability is that it over complicates things in terms of a battle thread. It's adding a point system that's very specialized and hard to manage for anyone in the same thread as him. I do understand the intent of this ability, so I'm going to ask that it is re-worked into how spiritual pressure works in Bleach canon. Let's say the ability uses his Willpower/Determination skill. If there is a character that is two tiers underneath him in terms of Determination, the release of his reiatsu will be enough to knock out the character for 1-3 posts depending on their other mental skills. Such as if they have a high enough focus, it could be 1 post or if it's on an equal level as his Determination, they would only feel pushed by the release of his aura.
So how it could be written is > Uses Determination Skill. If those around him are two tiers lower in their own Determination skill, they are forced unconscious unless they have another form of Will defense that is at least equal to Gohan's Determination. The longest they may be passed out is for three posts, and it may be lessened for a single post if they have high will skills or a defense against it. If the user completely nullifies the fatigue factor, they will still feel the energy press against them strongly.

Soul Dash: Gohan's is very skilled at this ability something he took only a year to perfect his soul dash is among one of the strongest he has ever seen, the young teen can keep his soul dash active in his overall body for extended periods of time unlike normal humans. (15 post before strain) He is a budding Master at this technique.

Just as a note, the tier at which skills are placed it is entirely dependent on what Power Tier the character is placed at, so he may be a 'budding Master', but the skill may be at Adept/Advanced for reference.

Willpower: This technique stems from the amount of willpower people put into their blows, Gohan having learned to harness this willpower and translate it into a sort of an invisible physical aura which allows him to extend the range of his hand to hand combat by 5 feet. Meaning if the blow seems like it didn't connect due to the opponent narrowly dodging it the blow will still hit them albeit at a 1-rank lower than the original damage simply due to the physical aura which envelops them in battle. This makes engaging in a physical battle with Gohan a very high risk for amateurs in close ranged combat.

I want an energy strain placed unto this ability, a heavy one. This is giving him a -constant- range boost for as long as it's active, allowing him to essentially out punch any physical fighter without putting himself in the way of a blade. This needs to have a heavy drain if it's going to be a passive such as this, taking a lot of his energy if it allows him to keep up a constant aura that can strike people at a range.

Battle Impression: In combat the unknown is what ultimately brings upon defeat, a lesson which has never changed throughout the centuries. However for Gohan, who wa born with highly advanced skills in combat, he is capable of gauging the power levels of others, through physical encounters. In the exact second the physical encounter occurs, he is capable of learning the limits of the opponent’s physical prowess, causing the opponent to put all their highest tiers, without buffs, in spoilers on their next post.

I just need to clarify due to the wording in this. When he strikes an opponent, does this mean he can figure out their -base form- physical skills such as Strength, Durability, etc? If so, that can be approved... But from striking someone and obtaining knowledge on their skills in -release- states, there needs to be a good explanation on how it can be done physically when their body isn't housing the increased strength to even be sensed, hence the term release. I can approve allowing him to figure out their base form physical skills, but I can not allow him figuring out the skills of released forms not yet used.

Natural Adaptation: One of the reasons for the boy's “limitless” potential comes from his ability to naturally adapt to any environment that he is exposed to. With this ability as time passes, Gohan will become accustom to fighting under the new environment with no problem, this accustoming allowing him to train for a skill in battle that allows them to survive the environment they are under (Beginner environment being adapted instantly, Adept in two posts, Advanced in 3 posts, etc by a 1 post count). (Ex. If fighting underwater he is able to train for a new skill allowing him to breathe underwater longer.) This passive does not include man-made poisons as an environment but does include increases in gravity, however natural poisons can be adapted to as long as they do not kill him within the time limit it takes him to adapt. The skills created from this adaption can only be physical based.

I can not approve this ability, I am actually going to deny it. This allows Gohan to learn any skill he wishes under an environment within a few posts. An ability like this can be abused heavily and rocket someone to an extremely broken state quickly with no limitations on it other than 'physical skills'. I am denying this ability. This is typically an ability only seen by those who are already at the very peak of their powers in the 0 tier listing.

Battle Sense: Coming from the family's sheer love of combat along with their fighting ability, the spiritual members have created a sixth sense for finding battles. Basically the members are capable of tracking and completely watching a fight as if they were there, but depending on how far the fight is away determines how vulnerable a member is doing this or not. If a battle is within their city then a member can watch the fight without doing anything, if a battle is within their state then a member must constantly have their eyes closed to watch the battle, if a battle is within another land then the member must remain perfectly still to watch the battle. While using this technique the member does suffer from a mental strain but depending on how far they are "seeing" varies the amount of strain. When watching battles within the same location Gohan receives Beginner-rank mental damage every 5 posts, but upon the 5th post the mental damage is increased by one rank. Once the damage hits Master-rank, he will be knocked unconscious for 1 full topic, minimum of 10 posts. If this Master-rank mental damage is done three times for the same battle or within the same topic, then Gohan will receive Grand Master mental damage which can only be healed by Grand Master healing arts that can heal mental damage. For watching battles within the same Land he receives mental damage every 3 posts, while for outside Lands he receives damage every post.

This ability needs to be nerfed. Allowing him to watch fights in a completely different land doesn't make much sense considering the energy of those fighting does not reach out that far to even be sensed. I can allow the weaker forms that allow him to sense within a city and a state ONLY if the people fighting within he state are people 1 tier and above due to the power they exude. I'd also prefer it if the mental damage every post is moved to fighters within the same state, and the damage very 3 posts moved to if they're in the same city. Obviously, a post much be made in the thread that he is watching that there is some being spectating the battle.

Battle Born: It is safe to say that Gohan and his pack were born for the battlefield, showing their true strength when engaged in combat against others. Through the countless battles, like others a member learns from those battles, but they also grow stronger from them. This reward for surviving countless battles, makes itself present in their tiers, increasing 1 tier for every 5 fights, does not include training. This allows the member to increase their tiers without the need for training, but only the need to fight. The increase does not exceed the Master cap unless the member is naturally capable of bypassing that limit.

Denied. All tier upgrades -must- be applied for in upgrade threads. They can not be automatically added due to how many fights he is in. He can apply for upgrades after every 5 fights to see if it's approved, but for it to -automatically- happen can not be approved.

Anima Stone: Gohan's stone is internal being near the center of his chest is a small diamond shaped stone clear and see through as if glass, over the years he has gotten very familiar with his sorcery skills not wanting to disregard them he channeled most of his magic in pure energy offensive style attacks and counter offensive spells, Though unique to him and other humans in his pack his stone utilizing the energy inside him likewise uses every member of his pack being mixed within making his spells extremely deadly.

What are his spells? There needs to be a listing of them, what they do, and their power.

Next up is the issue of his Soul State releases. He can not start out with his third and second already unlocked, regardless of his history stating so. The powers given with these releases are tremendous and typically need to be worked strongly for in order to just receive a small portion of those powers. I will allow him to start with his first release and say that is what was used within his history for every time it is mentioned. Also, when writing that it boosts his physical skills up to adept, what if he's at advanced in his base form? I'd like it if the wording was changed so a select few of his physical skills are increased by a single tier, excluding the ability to jump into GrandMaster for the first Soul State.

» Chi Powers: Inner Monkey To put it into words Gohan's Chi powers affects his very core sense causing him to adapt to a more primal with the need to search for the perfect battle field, along with this ability he gained the innate ability to formulate his own family and pass on this goal known only to members as "The Pack" Once Gohan bites a target they are afflicted with his chi and in turn his ability and Pack.

Is there any defense to this bite, and can this 'pack' mentality be challenged by someone with a strong enough will or simply a defense that gets rid of the chi being infused into them? I'd -heavily- prefer... And actually, am asking for this ability to only be used if the one being bitten has consented into becoming one of the Pack, allowing the chi to mix with their being and join his family. If they resist, their own energies will fight the chi attempting to fuse itself with their bodies and will be unable in converting them.

Universal Tools: http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/277/9/e/___the_one_ring____by_vincentxyooj-d5grc61.png
Gohan's Father and mother each made tools that they would pass on too their sons before their passing. Gohan would get his fathers tool and his sibling would get their mother's. What his father passed down was a ring, at first it did nothing but when Gohan became 13 the ring began affecting his Chi causing him too gather more than natural from his surrounding giving him a considerably faster energy recovery rate.

At what rate does he recover faster? 10%? 15%? 20%?

Tekkai "Iron Mass":Through sheer training the boy has grown the utmost amount of muscle and power forming his body to become stronger than a diamond wall, his enemy's which are unlucky enough to attempt hand to hand combat on him only fail to the might of his Tekkai unless they posses strength near the level of a master.

Having him get a Master level defense as a default ability can not be allowed. Gaining a defense equal to his Durability Skill however can be accepted, similar to how Hollows have Hierro, only this form would be more physical.

Pack Mentality: Gohan is not part of a family, he is part of a Pack and can add members to that pack as he goes through life, likewise he can remove members from the pack with death or by leaving the pack to become an Omega (Rouge) or an Alpha (when an Adult/having found a Mate). In order to mark someone as a pack member the member must bite them to transmit their mark. Once Marked however all of the members of the pack are able to sense each other and communicate with one another on a purely instinctual level, likewise emotions can be transmitted through the channel to allow the Pack Members to know the mental state of their pack to promote harmony, Along with that each member gains a transformation similar too Gohan's Awakened appearance and when unlocked his Fully but diluted from the original.

Granting a transformation as simply being part of the pack can not be allowed. An ability like this can perhaps be worked towards in the future, such as if Gohan reaches what is considered high tier and has enough Chi to actually infuse the transformation in the person. As it stands now, he can not have the ability to bestow this at his base level.

More like me...More like you: This ability provides for the full synchronization of the pack members, fully integrating their energy unto one another. Their energy would now be shared, taking on the attributes of their significant other as well as keeping their own unique energy. Meaning if the pack held a member of each race then the pack members energy would be something unknown to anyone since it would be a natural mixture of each. This allows each member a plus energy boost depending on how large the pack is. For each member in the pack other than themselves each member gains a boost in energy equal too 5 tiers above there natural tier(2-5 Tier user would have 2-0 Energy supply with two pack members).

This ability makes little sense as to why the energy can be shared between pack members. It isn't stated if it works off of distance or contact. I can allow a weakened version of this ability to be approved with only having stronger pack members in the highest levels being able to share some of their energy with weaker pack members through contact, such as granting up to three tier increases at the cost of them losing those three tiers for... About 5 posts maybe? So if a 2-1 gave his energy to a 3-5, it could end up leaving the strongest at 2-4 and the weakest at 3-2.

Spiritual Roar: Once pack members come together in combat they showcase what is deemed a roar, this phenomenon occurs when the pack as a whole intend to eliminate a target focusing their pent up killing intent onto one being, what this generally does is cause the target to buckle under the killing intent, depending on their rank and the members of the pack. 2 members 5-tier and below are affected, 4 members 4-tier and below are affected, 5 members 3-tier and below are affected 6 members 2-tier and below are affected, 7 members and 1-tier and below are affected 8 and anyone targeted becomes affected. Likewise the Alpha can force members of the pack to utilize this technique.

Could buckling under the killing intent be described more? As it stands, it simply reads that someone would get shaky knees from this... And if a person has a high enough Will skill such as Focus, they should be able to power through this ability.

Just for clarification, he does not have access to his awakened state, correct? It is lacking in the power section, so I would assume so. If so, great.

This is my check on Gohan as a character, there are many things that I'm asking to be checked/fixed since Cookie has not came back to this profile in a while. Some of these decisions did have a second opinion from other staff just so you know. I hope you can get to fixing this all up so he can get approved quickly!

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