D3m0n1cs Character Application. Demon

Bloods Application form.
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» Name: Blood Luster
» Titles: Unknown
» Age: Unknown
» Gender: Male
» Affiliation/Rank:Rouge, To bedetermined based on interaction of different Alignments.

» Shifter Appearance Written:The male would stand at a height of 6 ft 8. with a shadow wrapped cloak covering the basis of his body hung over his shoulders with a hood that comes over the top of the forehead.. shadowing out his face except for the crimson blood coloured eyes that can be seen piercing the darkness.

Even though the males clothes can not be seen or distinguished apart from specs of blood dripped black gloves that cover the males hands when he pulls them out of his cloak.. from the position of the way the cloak falls against the male you can tell that he has a extremely muscular build with his lats & traps pushing the cloak out to become a bulkier mass even in direct view.

The cloak allows the male to remain unseen by manipulating the shadows and light to disrupt the line of sight which will be explained later on in the origin power section of the application

» Shifter Appearance Picture: One is being momentarily designed and will be linked later on..

» True Appearance Written: The male would still have his blood dripping black coloured gloves, A simple black chain with a crimson blooded sword pressed against his chest no longer in height that 7 cm, width of 4 cm . the edges of this width being the swords blade guard above the hilt and below the blade, and a depth of 1.7 cm so its quite a bulky thickness against my chest.

Also he will be wearing a pair of black 3 quarter length shorts . that come down below past the knees and will have two normal regulation pockets on either side and a possible third one on the left side at the edge of outer thigh which will be zipped shut.

The males chest will be completely exposed. normal Human Caucasian skin tone. but the front and back of the males body as well as arms will be covered in multiple of skin damaging scars and muscle damage will be visible but yet old injuries and will be healed and non effective attained through rigorous training and shadow practice to strengthen the density of the males bones itself.

he will have short black hair possibly one ear-ing on the right side of the males ear at the bottom corner of his lobe and his facial expression will be somewhat soft yet with a hardened expression of no emotional display except for the odd weird looking grin that he will do when he is pleased with something in itself.

the eyes will be completely blacked out with a crimson blood pool in the center that has free 360 degree movement with red veins or lines that seem to be moving etched into the side of his face and the eyeball isn't sustained through being a physical force but yet a replacement of an eye from his past which he learned to control to maintain form and shape using his origins.

» True Appearance Picture: one is being designed as well.

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» Personality: The male will be at first a non emotional fighter . who doesn't have a lust for blood for the simple fact of him already being able to contain high amounts which quench his thirst except for when he starts to fight and he mentally breaks his control of his urges forcing him to release a second nature a persona of a derived man with no morality which will be explained further in depth later.. He will be somewhat shy towards the female gender due to a softening nature inside of him battling with himself from distant past and close memories and connections to the only female he would have as a companion . which forces him to change Alignment within himself from bad to good unknowingly.. he has a sense of justice but the methods that he uses do not Eliminate the blood thirsty and curdling methods used to dispose of some 1 who he believes to be against him or caused an act of harm on somebody he would otherwise count as a good man/ caring woman.

He will be distant at first but then will slowly allow others to come into his shield. but if he is ever betrayed he will go back to his primitive state and fight the corruption of his mind to care for them but yet to kill them for the betrayal he had suffered as a child and growing up through the eras itself feeling the emotional pulls of the thirst and quench for hatred in his heart. which was just an expressionless term. as the male had consisted his physical form of a core. not a heart.. which meant he was most likely cold blooded even with a flowing supply of blood in his body . but later explained in depth .

» Likes: Hurting people . but with a good sense of justice for the reason to commit them pain, Woman, classical music piano especially using the music to calm himself through meditation and control of himself at later stages and night. reading. Occasionally eats human food but is not required simply enjoys the taste and the different concoctions that can be experimented with.

» Dislikes: Dishonest and liars, woman beaters, people who accuse and frame other people to misguide and redirect the blame and punishment they deserve. At times the feelings of happiness and security within himself.. Hates his female companion but loves her at the same time . His constant struggle of morality and Alignment for what was good and what was bad . His bad sense of judgement and reasoning for his actions in haste and thought . fruit but will eat an apple to keep his companion happy.
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» History: Along time ago after the war demons, Angels, Humans, and Various other life form aspects drew to the battle field . the constant flow of blood that had began to build and the crying mental will power of those mentally and physically gifted shouted out for the thirst of blood from brave warriors searching for an honorable death to savage assassins and serial killers who just loved to feel the fresh blood against the blade or edges of the weopon or nails in hand and body.

The constant drive for a demand of blood and hated . but the confusing sense of morality began to stir within a omnipotency form of existence. which didnt exist in itself but began to form by building a conscience around its own drive and thirst for blood which slowly began to give form to a small pool of blood but it was covered in shadows that binded the natural law of hatred an evil to the aspect of craving for thirst of blood which caused the man entity itself to questiona nd derive its own sanity with the constant thirst as over the years and the war rages more blood began to add to the pile of thirst used to exist inside of the males conscience itself now having began to take form a male was given as the gender ue to the over populated slain and killed thoughts that came from such primitive beasts to begin with . after a few hundred years of this massacre and torment the shadowed pool of blood began to take on physical features of the male species that had made it hate and desire blood so much . being able to bend and mold his shape to the children of the past and the wariors of the future he started to build his own body and traits based on the actions of war children and veterans alike.

Through the beginning of the male form being created from the hatred thoughts and lust the mans morality was completely one sided just a male with primitive war and battle reactions, great strength learning that damaging the muscle tissue and blood thickening caused the males to become stronger each time he kept hurting itself and causing damage by ripping the shadows and restraining his physical form over and over again he would begin to double and triple in size . soon the aspect of his physical form would stand.

at around 6 ft 8 with a muscular weight of around 320 pounds but densified muscle exterior and thick shadowed and blooded structure internally using the blood to harden a physical mass while keeping a liquid substance trapped inside of it himself. the shadows and blood amassing in a circular motion inside which created his core of existence and allowed him to retain his physical form without being a solid mass himself.

as the male was the near perfect image of battle savage and blood thirsty warriors he began to drift through the plane of existence and void . where light and dark began to collide and battle . the mental power and battles of morality that began to confuse this primitive being started to stab at his conscience surrounding him until he felt a warming approach of a female that he had never known or seen but was not a physical mass bas as if felt she was the plane itself . as if he was a child within a womans stumach unborn to the cruel fates of the world the security of this sickening sense made him nervous and questioning.. Soon the thoughts and morality of those who began to after all the wars and cries of lost ones began the light .. the morality of justice and good the reasoning of the wars itself .. this caused the male to mentally breakdown crying out in this soundless void unheard screams of torment and cries started to become of this male himself while he clung to the new found warmth of this unknown being he was held to.

the light and the dark battled within him . as he had no physical change or development in his being but his mind was at war within itself a battle of conscience and morality took place that lasted the life span of a few decades unknown to the male who had yet to experience the existence of time itself yet unborn on a physical plane of existence and habitants feeling the light more and more he began to grow softer in his nature without doing anything the time allowed him to meditate and thought of the alignment within his own core.. feeling the desire of nurturing and protection from this unknown presence that had remained beside him and the continuing of the thirst for blood of foes and species alike drove into a dark corner overcoming his primitive nature he began to listen to the light and forged an alliance a will pact to hinder the dark . to use it for good . the darkness inside of him now laying dorment and laying at bay while able to control the shadows and blood that once forged his body at his will for the mental purpose of the light in itself..

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» Natural Demon Traits: Shadow step : the ability to manipulate and manifest his being in the shadows of those around him . from seen distances in the eyes he was not able to just traverse 1000 of miles at once but in seconds through the shadows that followed the ground as if an image flickering itself and after image would fade from where he would be

Shadow movement : a more advanced aspect to the males own natural usage of the shadows itself which is used to cover greater distances living in the shadows since his existence was formed this was his second primary accomplishent and full mastery of this skill was second only to the first origin power he had formed from . the blood lust.
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» Origin Name: Blood God.

» Origin Power: The first .. Blood:

The power of blood is a simple but yet non god modding method of controlling blood itself.. using the blood inside of my body to be able to manipulate weoponry . equipment . enhance certain areas of my physical form . or being able to manipulate that physical form and turning it into a liuqid substance within control of its form and flow . only the hardened blood is the exterior fo the physical form . and the ONE solid object at all times would be my core of existence.. wrapped in blood and shadows into a spiral sphere even within a liquid substance this will forever remain solid as to not god mod a being or entity itself. manipulation and expansion of blood can increase or decrease through combat . or a battle field being able to amass the blood spilt itself as if controlling a water liquid on an ocean . or with physical contact able to push my blood into the users body . and able to do internal damage to weaker particle life forms and structures . like a flow or causing the blood to solidify clotting inside the bodies itself or expanding in a solidified object rupturing the exterior of people.

Second ; Shadows.

The power of shadows is a complicated concoction of mixture with the blood and physical form i can make the shadows take on a physical form of darkness o able to convey it over my body and can use it to remove sences from an opponent that would otherwise have an enviromental advantage by expanding my shadows to cover an area which would remove the senses of sight . . and possibly touch depending on the weakness to shadows and the weight of the thickness itself. so if they couldnt feel there own body . then obviously they wouldnt be able to determine if there is a weight on them if they was touching anything . but they would feel an increase if an impact or contact was made in itself.

it is also used as a transportation technique allowing to me to transcend long and short distances based on the ability of the user itself which will be determined through vaious usage and Shadow Alignment. some movements will be forced short due to a inner argument with alignment of the shadow and light . stopping me being able to manifest or strenghten the shadows while im still Aligned to the light . but once the second mental persona takes over the control of the shadows expand unknowingly..

The third Light. this one is more of a mental trained battle power able to use to sense a respect of morality and alignment to the good nature of the being in itself but it can also be used to disrupt the shadows around him. aswell as light abilities on familiar demons and shadow monsters the light allows me to once again manipulate its form suiting to my needs to projectile weoponry to convey my blood or to cause a momentarily blinding or prison of light . it wont be used alot as a combat based power as mentioned previously but it can still be designed to be used once again it all depends on the Inner Alignment to the capability of the males grasp of the light.

» Origin Abilities: .. think i also covered that above ^^^^

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Note: Eternal Partners are optional and can remove them if you don't need them. The same applies to Rilīja. However, the Conceptual World is generally needed. Additionally, remove this note when making your character.

» Conceptual World: The shadow plane a plane of non existence .. no floors to be seen but stills table footing and flat lands. but pillars and the curious running blood would flow through the floor itself .. think fo darkness with a tiny spherical lines and curves like a water trapped in ice being the blood beneath the floor visible with a white light trapped high in the sky showing light visibility. cracks in the walls that cant be seen but like shattered glass fragments of light occationally breaking through the interior and exterior with a single mass blood throne that sat in the centre where i had spent the beginning of my existence forming into who i was It would be covered in shadows with the seat and back of the chair a solid blood liquid substance that would look as if it was running like a waterfall .. but never dripping over the edge of the shadows contained inside with a disformed seat to show signs of eternal discomfort and in the centre infront of the throne would be a light and shadow sphere that would just float there a chain of blood wrapped round in an infinity symbol to symbolize the trinity existence within myself.

» Rilīja Attributes:This would just be the ability to form a masses dominant form of blood that covered the area by blood bubbling through the ground itself aswell as a dark shadow cloak forming overheard with the mental impact of hatred on those surrounding myself being affected if there mental power and alignment was weak causing them to burn with hatred in there thoughts. and blood dripping from the skies above..

» Eternal Partner Name: Unknown even to himself

» Eternal Partner Appearance: The female would be an adult female of slender looks with a non muscular feature but delicate and fragile . the female would have a glow around her covered in a white garment that covered her physical body her hands being made of the light itself would sooth the darkness in myself her eyes crystal white diamonds with the crimson blood hues that would stare back at me as if a reflection of my own eyes.

» Eternal Partner Personality: she would always hold a smile on her face faint and gentle . never angry .. but sometimes sad .. her features and mood would change . but always remain calm based on my characters actions and sense of alignment .. wether she would accept me in her arms .. or stay in the shadows while my mental alignment broke to the shadows itself.

» Eternal Partner Powers: Unknown as the only power she has given him is the alignment of light and the usage of it .. She is a mental obstruction to the hatred in his heart and lays dormant in waiting --can be further discussed if you want but EXCEPT for extreme circumstances and self meditation she wont be apart of my use much except for mental purposes . but i was thinking of possible self sacrifice to lock the shadows Like late rp sometimes . or her own life force is chained to the alignment which causes her existence to fade and glow brighter depending on the morality of the character.


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» Atma Vatou Name: Chi Kyoshuba -Bloods lust-

» Atma Vatou Appearance: A pair of gloves worn at all times which contain a single part of all 3 origins the blood that would constantly soak the gloves . allow the immediate use of the blood in itself. but only to form small objects or a sword in each hand the size limited and used based on the amount of blood on his gloves at any given time.. the actual gloves would be made of shadows that would look as if they were biting into his fore arm never being able to take them off itself. and the chains at the end of the gloves could act as a physical extension of a chain that could be used as a defence mechanicsm and defence but not god modding would require phsyical contact and it would consist of a physical form to block the attack meaning it can be broken . it would be thinner than the shadows but would wrap around my arms and as if implanted in the palm of my hands itself.


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» Aliṅgana State Appearance: Dark Alignment :

The males body would be covered in shadows the only thing physical would be his eyes as if smoke was eminating from him . he would have small tubes of light that portrudes all over his body like veins of light running through the shadows and through those small tubes would be crimson blood that circulated his body pumping itself as if it was

Light Alignment :

The males physical form would be clasped in an almost blinding form of light armour that stripped him off the shadows except the reverse of dark alignment the veins would be black the shadows contained within the light like blood and skin and the blood would actually become wings ripping and materializing out the back of the males form which could lift him up with a constant form of manipulating light to lift his body in the air . he cant reah great heights.. more than likely just 20 ft in the air.

» Aliṅgana State Powers: With the Dark alignment :

The male would consist of an overpowering aura of hatred rage and resentment . you would mentally feel the pain of your past reliving inside your body . but the pain of your past would cause possible strain and injuries on your physical being by overoming the pain nerve system inside the central lobe and pain receptors bypassing the limitations and allowing them to express physical pain from there thoughts and just a boost to the expansion and use of his shadows in the first place

Light alignment: the male would be able to physically weaken the opponents and those surrounding him by releasing a soothing sense of aua . if possible it could have mental manipulation ability aswell .. but nothing over powering .. if there was somebody who was .. agrressive and wouldnt open up about a secret .. or otherwise was fighting by orders and not by choice or by there own will .. it would break control of the holdon that person or make them tell them a secret before it broke off . this grows in strength with further usage and alignment once again.

» Aliṅgana State Abilities: above.

» Unnata Release Appearance: above.

» Unnata Release Powers: none.
» Unnata Release Abilities:none.


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I dont want any other forms . or pinnacle of power . because i know my character is ALREADY complex by using a single thought and concept of alignment . and a natural uge of blood to became a trinity existence. so i dont want anything else to . balance out the fact of my character being able to do what i described above .. i believe this to be a fair exchange itself . and i havent one sided it to be either physical or mental . as you read with my released forms . It is a balanced out . party of physical and mental capabilities but the shadows would obviously be more physical as thats the hatred i was born from . and thelight was mental calming which caused a battle of alignment inside myself..
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Racial Skills
Za Koa Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Demon Magic: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Shadow Movement: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Akuma Kyōdo: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


General Skills
Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


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Please excuse me as i havent stopped typing . deleting retyping .. and ive done this application form 6 times .. Trying to 100% Master the trinity use and remove all aspects of godmod and complications and to make it fair as possible . while attaining a unique and in depth character basis .. that NO1 has ever seen before.. so my words are sloppy i admit . but if you will allow me to i can always come back and remaster my example of my roleplay later on .


The males physical form stood on top of the solid flat ground, the air becoming a cool dark sensation that rippled through his shadowed cloak that contained his solid form underneath but only the males crimson blood eyes shined out onto the night sky feeling the cold touch at his side as he extended his arm the blood dripping a crimson blood substance hitting the ground with a single patter sound as if rain dripping in a single location was heard over the roaring of the winds as they began to get higher and more furious the weather turning bad once more..

..the male moved a single digit on his hand to the side of his neck feeling the side of his neck begin to move inward and crack with the pressure of his finger he moved his eyes down to the hand as he places his thumb ontop of his index finger on the middle knuckle pressing down as a snap was hard the dried blood holding his form cracking as if a bone had just snapped releasing the built up tension inside of himself.

"Now my moonlight shine.. Have you ever danced with a devil in the wind" the male spoke his voice dark and hoarse a rich echo being the under tone to his accent as he chuckled the sound rumbling in his throat before escaping his hidden lips as his lips started to twitch the nerves forced the muscle to tighten at the edge of his mouth pulling the skin upwad feeling his mouth form into a sideways grin with only one side of the mouth moving up he felt his cheek puff up slightly by the adding pressure on the facial expression as he let the emotion go his face returned to its original composure as he started to walk forward he felt the weight of the ground beneath his feet the soil moving by inches as his foot came down forcing it to compact deep into the earth beneath him a dust of dirt trailing behind his foot as he took each step forward he closed his eyes imaginign a person infront of him as he crouched on the front leg which was his left leg..

..the male pushed off his left leg swinging the weight of his body around to the right rotating as he pushed off now reversing his body to the imaginary person he let his right hand extend from the turn and felt the phsyical mass of blood began to expand as if swinging a bag of water the form expanded in his grasp and he closed his palm to feel the weight of the blood now densified inside the containment of shadows forming a blade to be 2.7 ft long the tip of the blade as he rotated the blade in his wrist completing the turn letting his arm tense as he brought it inwards caused a slash against the imaginary person feeling the weight of the blade cary his body onwards with a downward angle of the slash he felt his body forced to rotate which allowed him to now extend his lft hand grabbing the imaginay person by the nape of the neck forcing them as they would have been pushed off balance by thr impact of the blade now slicing into the solar plexus across from the right side of the ribs to the left would of forced them to offset the footing meanign the grab on the back of the neck letting his fingers curl around the imaginary flesh of the skin of the male he was shadow fighting grasped ont he solid form of his neck..

..with the neck in his grasp his fingers embedded into the skin forcing the male to continue down while the blade in his right hand now faced downwards in his palm and drove it behind him while the male was falling causing the blade to puncture the spot where he had cut into letting it penetrate and pierce him to the ground stuck in a blade as the blood began to expand out of the sword losing a solid form and wrapping around the males object constraining him in chains that solidified as he the male stood up he smirked once again his expression unseen but the chuckle once more head as he shaked his head walking off leaving the imaginary shadow victim brutally sliced and chained on the ground to die as he walked off into the night sky..

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Comments/Notes: Starting out the application, I just want to point out that you may want to edit spelling and grammatical issues, the app has a ton of misspelled words and misplaced periods, commas and punctuation of the like. That aside, there are a few things I want to address within this app, as I don't believe you understand the site from the history and some of your explanations.

and a depth of 1.7 cm so its quite a bulky thickness against my chest.

On PH, we don't allow first person RP which your "my" signifies in the quote above. Change this so it is in a third person format of your character and we should be fine, same goes with all of the other first person point of view in the app. Change the things such as my and I to his or himself, unless used in dialogue.

The power of blood is a simple but yet non god modding method of controlling blood itself.. using the blood inside of my body to be able to manipulate weoponry . equipment

and the ONE solid object at all times would be my core of existence..

or with physical contact able to push my blood into the users body .

And so on. More example of the first person you used which is all throughout the app, so please change this when you go into edit. Sorry if this is an inconvenience, but we don't allow first person unless in alternative RP section.

History

Along time ago after the war demons, Angels, Humans, and Various other life form aspects drew to the battle field . the constant flow of blood that had began to build and the crying mental will power of those mentally and physically gifted shouted out for the thirst of blood from brave warriors searching for an honorable death to savage assassins and serial killers who just loved to feel the fresh blood against the blade or edges of the weopon or nails in hand and body.

I don't think you read into our history/lore at all as a site. We have had similar battles like this, but this is rather... unspecific. We don't really have a canon explanation on whether "angels" exist outside of the very few accumulated by Truth (a god-like being) and the Angel Iramasha. If you're talking a large scale battle with all these people involved and it was such a huge event with "angels", you need to give more specification on the battle.

which didnt exist in itself but began to form by building a conscience around its own drive and thirst for blood which slowly began to give form to a small pool of blood but it was covered in shadows that binded the natural law of hatred an evil to the aspect of craving for thirst of blood which caused the man entity itself to questiona nd derive its own sanity with the constant thirst as over the years and the war rages more blood began to add to the pile of thirst used to exist inside of the males conscience itself now having began to take form a male was given as the gender ue to the over populated slain and killed thoughts that came from such primitive beasts to begin with

...huh? Other than this being an entire sentence on it's own, I really didn't understand this very much. At all. What I took from it is that a being was born from blood and shadows, a godly and omnipotent being - which is going to need to be explained so much more, as omnipotent beings aren't common and claiming that this being was born from it is a MASSIVE feat in the lore of Platinum Hearts. What I understand is that it was blinded with... hatred and evil? This just isn't explained well, I can't understand it at all.

Powers

The power of blood is a simple but yet non god modding method of controlling blood itself.. using the blood inside of my body to be able to manipulate weoponry . equipment . enhance certain areas of my physical form . or being able to manipulate that physical form and turning it into a liuqid substance within control of its form and flow . only the hardened blood is the exterior fo the physical form . and the ONE solid object at all times would be my core of existence.. wrapped in blood and shadows into a spiral sphere even within a liquid substance this will forever remain solid as to not god mod a being or entity itself. manipulation and expansion of blood can increase or decrease through combat . or a battle field being able to amass the blood spilt itself as if controlling a water liquid on an ocean . or with physical contact able to push my blood into the users body . and able to do internal damage to weaker particle life forms and structures . like a flow or causing the blood to solidify clotting inside the bodies itself or expanding in a solidified object rupturing the exterior of people.

I'm not entirely sure what you're trying to say here, it doesn't seem to make sense or be thought out and made into coherent reading. From what I'm reading it means he can use his own blood to coat, and physically enhance, parts of his body? That's what I took away from it, but I got lost at the solid and liquid states. You say that the only the hardened blood is the exterior of the physical form? I don't know what that means. Then explaining with the liquid, does that mean the blood is always going to remain solid even when in contact with a liquid? Please make this coherent so I can understand it.

Atop of this, you've explained how he can manipulate his blood but not the effects of if he were to use too much - as losing blood is a vital point in any living beings life, if they lose too much, they will die unless there is some form of backup to avoid such things. You also don't explain the limitation on entering someone's body, as that's a very powerful thing to do. How is someone supposed to counter such a thing? Can he do it without their consent? Entering someone's body and causing blood clots and manipulating the blood whilst inside them is a massive thing that could kill people instantly. Please give a bigger insight into how this is done.

The power of shadows is a complicated concoction of mixture with the blood and physical form i can make the shadows take on a physical form of darkness o able to convey it over my body and can use it to remove sences from an opponent that would otherwise have an enviromental advantage by expanding my shadows to cover an area which would remove the senses of sight . . and possibly touch depending on the weakness to shadows and the weight of the thickness itself. so if they couldnt feel there own body . then obviously they wouldnt be able to determine if there is a weight on them if they was touching anything . but they would feel an increase if an impact or contact was made in itself.

So the power of his shadow can shut down his sight by throwing shadows all over the battlefield? Okay, well how can one counteract such pressure? Do they just lose their eyesight because he says so? Give some counter play here,because losing his eyesight as well as majority of the sense of touch, give some counter play here. I can't approve something that would seemingly give no counter play.

it is also used as a transportation technique allowing to me to transcend long and short distances based on the ability of the user itself which will be determined through vaious usage and Shadow Alignment. some movements will be forced short due to a inner argument with alignment of the shadow and light . stopping me being able to manifest or strenghten the shadows while im still Aligned to the light . but once the second mental persona takes over the control of the shadows expand unknowingly..

How far? How long is "long distances"? How short is "short distances?" I feel you are leaving out a lot of key information here that could easily be expanded upon to give people a bigger understanding of your character and their limits.

again manipulate its form suiting to my needs to projectile weoponry to convey my blood or to cause a momentarily blinding or prison of light .

...okay, but to what extent? Blinding or prison of light is all well and good, but I can't approve something with that little of information. What exactly is a prison of light?

Eternal Partner & Alingana

he would always hold a smile on her face faint and gentle . never angry .. but sometimes sad .. her features and mood would change . but always remain calm based on my characters actions and sense of alignment .. wether she would accept me in her arms .. or stay in the shadows while my mental alignment broke to the shadows itself.

Please expand on your Eternal Partner's personality. This doesn't really explain her personality well enough, or in enough detail.

The male would consist of an overpowering aura of hatred rage and resentment . you would mentally feel the pain of your past reliving inside your body . but the pain of your past would cause possible strain and injuries on your physical being by overoming the pain nerve system inside the central lobe and pain receptors bypassing the limitations and allowing them to express physical pain from there thoughts and just a boost to the expansion and use of his shadows in the first place

Much like the other powers, I don't feel this is very well explained, or well enough. I don't have a problem with the power in itself as we do allow a lot of mental instability powers that can warp someone's mind, but you haven't given any explanation on how someone can pull themselves through it. Are they just going to always be drowned in the pain of their past and pain with nothing they can do to stop it? If so, that's not acceptable. You need to give some form of counter play.

the male would be able to physically weaken the opponents and those surrounding him by releasing a soothing sense of aua . if possible it could have mental manipulation ability aswell .. but nothing over powering .. if there was somebody who was .. agrressive and wouldnt open up about a secret .. or otherwise was fighting by orders and not by choice or by there own will .. it would break control of the holdon that person or make them tell them a secret before it broke off . this grows in strength with further usage and alignment once again.

Again, I'm not entirely sure what you mean here. He gives off an aura that can weaken someone by mentally manipulating them? The way this is explained is like he can enter their minds and weaken their bodies and let others to tell him secrets or things he wants to know against their will. Please clarify or clean this up.

Tier: N/A, will be given upon fixes.