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|Subject Post 1Subject: Sora Mamoru [wip] Fri May 22, 2015 4:19 pm|| |
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Name: Sora Mamoru
Appearance Age: 20
Affiliation/Rank: Soul Society
Sora mamoru. He stands about 5.10 feet/ 178 centimeters with a sport muscle like built. sora doesn't really wear the standard hakama like scripted he altered it a bit to his personal liking because as top he wears a slim fit black tank top that is a bit tight around his upper body so it shows off a bit of his athletic muscle built. his hakama pants is shortened until half way his lower legs and is got a white stripe at the end. the pants is also more like a regular pants wide not like not a normal hakama pants. so sora's pants looks more like a 3/4 pants. sora didn't wear any footwear so he walks on his bare feet. his pitch black hair is a bit messy but that is because it's cut pretty messy . his hair stops right it gets in front of his jewel quartz gray eyes and half way his neck .
sora doesn't really think a lot about things he mostly just do them or say them without thinking. it one of the reason why his motto is "don't think, just do" it is a reason though sora does allot of crazy things and is kinda known as a crazy person by friends and family. he always tries to be better than himself and top himself over that until he makes it. his life goal is to find what he is capable of doing no matter what the cause. he likes to be around people although not too many just a couple of good friends and a few girls just is just enough for him although he would show off a bit because of the girls
girls around his age (which straight guy doesn't like that
chicken curry ( he just likes the taste of the so much
hand to hand combat (he a real man uses his body and not a weapon)
party's (party all night long and maybe pick up some girls
showing off ( attempting to impress other people)
spicy food (he just likes it
sleeping( after parting a good sleep is always good)
reading ( no pictures and to many letters. can’t concentrate on them)
sitting still ( he just wanne do something he doesn't care what)
learning ( it has book and sitting still)
zombies ( they just creep them out and they smell bad)
Sora Burton born in the Netherlands a small country between Germany and Belgium that is covered by wide grass plain on the east and shipping docks on the south a peaceful country that lives in harmony with the rest of Europe a nice simple place where Sora was raised calmly by his loving parents and his sister. .
When he got 4 years old he went his parents for the first time on winter sport in a small country called Austria that is hidden in the alps between Germany and Italy that is covered with snow it was the first time for Sora that he saw snow and he felt like he was a kid in Disneyland he wouldn't stop smiling and playing in it. while he was playing in the snow Sora got a choice to make a choice between 2 sticks and 2 planks (skis) or only one board that is attached to his feet (snowboard) Sora didn't hesitate a second and went straight for the one board since that one looked cooler although every winter he went on winter sport and got better and better he even went more on winter sport after a while then Sora became that good he got invited to do snowboard competitions all over Europe at the age of 8 through his hard work and effort he went through it.
But at an age of 5 snowboarding wasn't enough for him he wanted to do more get more adrenaline know what he all is capable off since so from his parents he got a skateboard which he practiced daily with trying to get as good as possible no matter what even training in the rain and in the heating sun until his dad found a solution for the heat so he wouldn't get crazy from the sun if he stayed in too long and could get something to cool off when he falls. So he his dad and mom bought a small summer house near a sea so Sora could learn the sport of wakeboarding so he could do almost every extreme board sport in every season of the year.
Sora lived happily as a daredevil and even got a collage ship in Japan for his sport attic t the age of 20 although when he got in Japan he died in a tragic traffic accident when he was sightseeing in japan killing him and a how bus of
sora ended up in north rukongai 40 together with friends he made their living peacefully. until most of his friends where killed by someone one by one. although sora saw it and ran towards the guy who was slaughtering his friends but he got knocked out fast with only a few punches. when he woke up he saw his friends dead laying on the ground. sora tried to live further but he got called weak after and after again until he made a promise to himself to be stronger than anyone ever thought he could be and he signed himself up for the shino academy.
Reiatsu Color: pink
Zanpakutô Spirit Name: dokudokushii tenkou (poisonous queen of heaven)
Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: dokudokushii tenkou looks like a young lady about 24 years old wearing a red high class kimono that goes perfectly together with her long fire red hair. around her grey eyes there is a black bandage strapped that is only see through for her and her eyes can only be seen if you are a inch away from her
a giant mansion with a huge garden around it although it was dark and the flowers are all dead, there wasn’t any grass only earth with dead bushes shaped like a path, when he looks up he sees that the air is filled with clouds and that ones in a while a lightning strike get through it, after a few seconds of standing in front of the door he suddenly hears millions of voices screaming, he tried to hear it but the voices are too far away so he decided to walk towards it inside the mansion, the entrance of the mansion is a giant hall filled with painting on the wall and ceiling, the floor was made out of marble stone and the only light there was came out of the open door on the other side, Sora walks slowly through the hall while he looks at the painting, the paintings are all paintings of people that are getting tortured or killed in different ways, when Sora enters the door on the other side of the hall the screams became louder and hearable, when he pushes the door further open so he can walk through it he hears millions of people scream “fight” every time they say it they let a one second break between it and every time they say it there right fist gets pump into the air, the room on the other side of the room was filled with people of every size shape you can imagine, in the middle of the room was a giant cage made out of old rusty metal and above the cage was a video scream that showed the people that are fighting in it for the people in the back, in the middle of the video scream that was hanging in a square with lights that was lighting up the cage
Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance :
The sealed version of his zan a basic basic single edged whakizashi with a blade that is 1 meter long. The blade doesn’t have a tsuba is only has a hilt that is covered with purple and black bandages for decoration around it. at the end of the hilt there is a small cord with a plastic skeleton hanging on that light up in the dark like some girls have hanging on there phones
Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:
Release: “No weapons needed”
Shikai Description: the hand and ankle wraps he carries are covered with tiny needles that are so thin and small they only a bit further then the skin but not even by a millimeter so they aren't visible for the naked eye.yet they are strong enough to stop an incoming sword
the needles carry a special poison on the backhand and kuckles that gets injected into the enemy with every time the wraps connect with his opponent. the poison slowly make the muscle go numb in the body part he hits making it slowly harder and harder to make that person to move that body part until it becomes completely useless because the muscle cant move that body part anymore.
(works on every body part except the head. it take 10 strikes to make a body part completely useless. it also counts if his opponent touches the wraps for defense or offence)
the needles on the wraps carry the same poison as in sting ray ability only this move is towards the head. every time sora hits his opponent 8 times on the head the vision double seeing sora 2 times not sure which one is who. but when sora hits his opponent 16 times it becomes that his opponent see sora 4 times and with 24 times he sees sora 8 times and so on and so on
the needles on the hand palm and under his foot carry a different kind of poison a bit more painful then. the poison there is made out of acid that gets into the muscle and slowly burns the muscle away with every strike he makes. until it is completely gone although keep in mind that if the muscle get weaker the muscle can snap by using to much strength
((just like sting ray is makes 10 strikes to make the muscle completely burn away. doesn't have affect on the head only the rest of the body counts for defense and offence))
Bankai Description: Bankai Abilities:
Phantom Tech Abilities:
Phantom Tech Powers:
- Durability: Beginner
- General Speed: Beginner
- Strength: Beginner
- Weapon Skill:Beginner
Deep down forest there was a 20 year old looking Student named Sora mamoru that stands about 5.10 feet/ 178 centimeters with a sport muscle like built. sora doesn't really wear the standard hakama like scripted he altered it a bit to his personal liking because as top he wears a slim fit black tank top that is a bit tight around his upper body so it shows off a bit of his athletic muscle built. his hakama pants is shortened until half way his lower legs and is got a white stripe at the end. the pants is also more like a regular pants wide not like not a normal hakama pants. so sora's pants looks more like a 3/4 pants. sora didn't wear any footwear so he walks on his bare feet. his pitch black hair is a bit messy but that is because it's cut pretty messy . his hair stops right it gets in front of his jewel quartz gray eyes and half way his neck . his lower leg that is almost completely damaged. It is so damages you can see the bone in his shine on a couple of places . Sora was standing across a palm tree in .
he stands with his left foot forwards and his turned 45 degrees to the outside . he lifts the heel of his left foot a bit up until the ball of his left foot barely touches the ground. He holds his right hand next to his chin with his elbows lifted chest height with his left elbow bend 45 degrees while the left hand was also at chin height only in front of his chin but pretty far away . his hands was a mix between a grabbing hand and a punching hand because his pinky and ring finger are making a fist while the rest of his fingers were ready to grab something that comes his way. Sora jumps up with his right for a bit while he places the ball of his left foot right on the ground so he can turn on it. He turns 135 degrees on the ball of his foot while he turns he places his lower right leg horizontal at waist height with a full bended knee while he leans with his upper body backwards. After the turn he extends his right knee quickly so he makes a round house kick against the palm tree although the places he hit was covered with blood and on his shin there wasn’t any trace of skin left you could even see pieces of bone through the flesh on several places. The moment his leg touches the tree Sora flinches a bit and hops a bit on his feet when he puts his foot on the ground.
Sora switches his stance so his right foot was forwards now and does the exact something again and switches leg again. he continuous to do this until the tree breaks. After Sora broke the tree he would smile a bit before he looks around him before he says “I thought there would be more” every palm tree was broken in a 100 yards around him “well that means I’m done” Sora struggle walks towards the barracks. With every step he takes his flinches because on his shin you could almost see the full bone and the bones are dented all over the place while some blood was flowing next to the bone. Sora looks towards his shin and says calmly “I guess someone should look at this” he smiled looking at his shins
Last edited by ♚Lιlιтн on Tue Jun 30, 2015 1:55 pm; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : It needs the WIP tag if it's work in progress, add the "finished" when done.)
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|Subject Post 2Subject: Re: Sora Mamoru [wip] Mon May 25, 2015 12:40 pm|| |
- Name [X]
- Appropriate Age [X]
- Gender [X]
- Appearance Present [X]
- Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
- Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[O]
- RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
- RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]
- Willpower/Determination: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Mental Deduction: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Pain Endurance: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Focus: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Comments/Notes: Hello, I'm Zero & I'll be checking you app today.
Everything looks fine to me but I would like to state two things.
First, I would like to state that your skill sheets shouldn't be filled out until you have been given a tier, although beginner is alright for any tier, I would advise not, to do this in future apps that you may make here.
Second, I need a few more details on the poison in skikai, Also I'll give you a chance to add something to your poison in shikai.
Does this poison last until the end of thread or does it have a limit to how long it lasts during the thread? Is there anyway to treat the posion in the thread, would a healer be able to treat it properly?
Will the poison dissipate as he ends his shikai?
Given that this poison disables, over a certain amount of strikes I could see this poison lower certain skills on the skill sheets by a rank.
X strikes = Speed drops 1 rank
X strikes +Y = Speed drops 2 ranks
In addition Double Double can effect ones Focus Skill
and finally scorpion sting would be focused on the strength Skill.
If you consider this addition, try to make a reasonable number for rank drops and if you don't decide to add it then so be it. I still require that extra bit about the poison though.
Very nice starting app, post here or pm when the needed change has been made
Have a Nice Day!
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|Subject Post 3Subject: Re: Sora Mamoru [wip] Thu Jun 11, 2015 1:31 pm|| |
✧ CHARACTER IS NOW BEING MOVED✦
Since the person in question has not responded to the moderator reviewing this thread, I'm going to go ahead and move this into WIP. Whenever you get around to fixing it, make a post in this thread letting us know and we'll review the character when you've made the corrections.
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|Subject Post 4Subject: Re: Sora Mamoru [wip] Tue Jul 28, 2015 2:50 pm|| |
Yo. What's up man? What's goin on with the app? Lemme know in a week please.
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|Subject Post 5Subject: Re: Sora Mamoru [wip] Wed Jul 29, 2015 1:46 pm|| |
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