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The Arrancar Template

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Genetics & Basic Information

• Name: Ceraza { Pronounced Ke-ra-zah }
• True Age: 410
• Appearance Age: 23
• Gender: Male
• Orientation: Shadow Fall

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Appearance

• Appearance:
Height: 6'5''
Weight: 195 Lbs
Clothing Style: Ceraza wears from the bottom up: Tipped toe dress shoes that go up then curve back like a christmas elf's shoes. Skin tight dress pants that are snow white with black stripes going down the sides. A sleeveless skin tight dress shirt that hides his hollow hole as well as has the neck piece of it stops half way up his neck. The only other piece of clothing left would be a scientists coat that is make-shifted into a overcoat, said overcoat is connected by a single chain to keep it from falling off.

Skin color: Ceraza's skin color is honestly one of the strangest of some arrancar's. His skin color is that of snow white.

Eye Color: His one human eyeball is obsidian in color while the iris itself is blood red. The blood red color applies to both his human eye and hollow eye.

Hair color: His hair shows a mix of colors that consist of: Red, Black, Grey, Purple, and Golden Yellow.

Hair style: His hair is very messy up front, but gets cleaner as it gets closer to the back of his head. The upfront portion of his hair is seen as three huge portions of hair, two of them on the side of his head curve in like fangs. The last of the three portions is one more grouping of hair that goes straight down to his eye brows in a V shape. The back portion is left to be all in one single ponytail, said ponytail happens to extend all the way down to his middle back.

Marking Shape: The markings on his body are actually all just lines that extend from his hollow hole to every other portion of his body. The closer to his hollow hole they are the thicker they are, but as they get farther away they get smaller. Meaning the markings on his face are tinier than the markings on his chest and so forth with each limb.

Marking Color: Pitch Black

• Bone Appearance: His hollow fragment appears on his face as some form of visor thats themed after some kind of serpentine creature. The left eye is human in appearance at least in its formation while the right eye is still like that of a hollow: Pitch black and only a iris.

• Hollow Hole: On the center of his left breast being roughly three inches wide in its normal circular diameter.

• Reiatsu Colour: Despite his usually cheerful and easy going personality, his reiatsu color shows his true and inner sinister mind set. Its color being pitch black with traces of red on the outer lining of it.

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Personality

Personality:

Ceraza is certainly the type to follow through with what he was portrayed as during his time as a base hollow. Ceraza comes out as a openly nice and carefree arrancar with little to no reason to not like. To all his hollow brothers and sisters, he plays fair with and treats them all with great respect while only complaining if given fair reason to. Yet when it comes to any other race that he encounters then his nice and carefree personality seems to be drowned in a sea of lies.

Showing his true self to be a lying, cheating, manipulating and overly analytic arrancar. A arrancar who is willing to use any means necessary to get what he wants and prove that like his brothers and sisters that he too can be overly cruel. Due to his he has earned a nickname of " Duo Masked Serpent " and such is good at what he does. The only thing about his duel personalities is that they can be swapped for none Arrancar and hollows the only requirement is for them to be interesting. However, he is no saint to his own brothers and sisters of the hollow race. He is still openly sarcastic, a open smart-ass and often likes to point out the faults of his brothers and sisters.

While most beings that he works with doesn't really see a certain dark side of him. Ceraza is extremely sadistic after continued seeing of how other Arrancar acted and slowly became more sadistic over time. To this point when it comes to interrogations or experimenting he is often seen laughing in joy as he " punishes " the interrogated. By punishing he would usually use a experiment of his to cause extreme pain to them while asking them questions fitting for them. When experimenting on kidnapped humans or shini's or volunteers he can be seen grinning in joy if the experiment is causing the subject pain. However, he does show the proper facial expression for confusion, deep thinking and other normal emotions.
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Background Information

• History:

Child hood:

The child life of the human Ceraza was a small boy named Matt. Matt lived with his parents, a mother who is a biological scientist and a father who is a CEO of a hospital. As such Matt lived a pretty well going child hood and such he was well pampered, but not spoiled. He lived his young childhood life playing games and wondering on how the real world worked. Even though he had all his games and parents he always wondered on how the world really worked and if he was truly as gifted as he thought.

So one day on a drive back from a private school, he saw some the public school kids walking home and asked. " Why are they walking? " To that his mother replied, " Some of them can't afford cars. " And he wondered even further. From that he wondered on why they were poor and he was not which troubled him all throughout his childhood. However as he grew in age, he grew more and more curious about why some things happened and other things didn't.

Teenager life:

Shockingly during his teenager years he had personally asked to go to a public school instead of a private school. Much to his parents questioning as to why, he simply said. " I want to experience what happened to the other kids that are poor that's all. " To that they figured he was trying some thought experiment so they let him. And of course as normal, his new kid appearance and not poor family was quickly famous.

The bullies tried to bully him into giving up his money, but he never gave it to people who tried to take it. So when the bullies tried to beat him up, the boy easily could get help and stop them. Much to the surprise of others, for those who didn't try to take his money and didn't even ask for it had received some of it. He never gave them enough to make them not poor or middle class, but enough to get buy for a short while. He wondered on many things while doing this experiment. " Why are people so cruel to others like themselves? Poor or middle class? Why does reality screw others while blessing others? " These questions haunted him and never faded from his mind.

Adult: After graduating high school and then swiftly through college Matt had decided to take after his father more and more. He felt good when helping people and the thought experiment from when he was younger was still going on. He took College to become a medical doctor as well as a biological scientist like his mother through several more years of college. However, when he finally was able to find a job at his fathers hospital something bad had occurred: His mothers death. From the way it was reported she was murdered from a thug who wanted her money, so when she said no he shot her in the chest.

This alone was enough to nearly drive poor Matt into solitude for he loved his mother very much. Such he was showing signs of depression, anxiety, sudden mood swings and always looking tired. Even his father was not feeling well and had some sudden and shocking changes to his personality from it. While his son was working, Matts father had ordered him to do something that would cause a patient to die. Something along the lines of the family wanting to disconnect the patient from life support. Matt said no and was fired from his job much to his own surprise. From there he searched for a job all over the place spiting his father for betraying him like that. After a short time he found a job in a town near by and moved so that he could work there.

Death:

However the story for poor Matt had ended long before he could even get to the job itself. After he moved into his new apartment at the town, he decided to go for a quick walk to help settle his mind. Yet half way through the walk a thug had approached him and told him to give him his money to which Matt had disagreed and refused to do it. The thug then whistled to some of his buddies who came on over, they had a short mocking talk before they started to beat the living crap out of Matt with pipes and metal baseball bats. Matt died at age 26 two hours into the beating and from the trauma his soul was stuck on earth with the ever lasting question.

" Why?"

Hollowfication:

After roughly fourty years of just being stuck on the world of the living and having to dodge Hollows left and right. he was finally cornered by a group of them before getting devoured by them. This devouring caused a major psyche corruption as well as spiritual corruption forcing him to take on the appearance of a three headed serpent hollow. As the new hollow he took on the title of " Tri Skull " from the shinigami's.

Evolution times:

Roughly one hundred and forty years spent hunting human souls, Tri-skull had heard the call of Hueco Mundo and left the World of the Living. Slithering through the sands of Hueco Mundo he hunted his fellow hollows in the Menos Forest and devoured them. Only when he was surrounded by several more hollows and doggy piled did he force his way into evolving to the next step.

After quickly dominating all the other minds, he became a cannibalistic Menos Grandes that wasted no time in starting to consume other Menos Grande's. Within sixty years of that stage he had consumed well over a countless amount of his fellow Menos Grande's and evolved into the next step: Adjuchas. Taking the form of a giant twenty stories tall hydra Adjuchas, he quickly learned how to properly hunt other hollows and properly waited. When a hollow or group of hollows passed, he wasted no time in ambushing them and killing them using ceros. He knew the best strategy was to kill first and eat later and so he did. Killing all the hollows near him then dragging their corpses into a near by cave for feasting on them.

Arrancarfication:

His life as a Adjuchas had taken up roughly another sixty years using his strategy. When he was going to hunt a hollow who had given up on even living the hollow decided to tear off its mask and die, but it didn't die. No, it was turned into something that was unrecognizable to him, something that was foreign and yet familiar to him. It turned into a Arrancar, a naked being with a weapon next to it. This had gotten his curiosity and he decided to try it himself.

With a quick and pouring rip, he tore off a part of his mask forcing himself to feel extreme and agonizing pain. The pain was nearly unbearable before it all faded into a blissful warm feeling as he became a Arrancar himself. He looked at himself before grinning madly with excitement and picking up his weapon that appeared as a trident. From there he attacked several hollows to make make-shift clothes in order to cover up.

After that he spent the next ninety years to the present time working for the current ruler of Las Noches when he eventually found his way to Las Noches.

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Sealed State

• Sealed Zanpakutô: The Zanpakutō appears to be that of a trident with four bladed prongs on the front and three bladed prongs on the other end. The trident itself is roughly nine feet long and seems to be serpentine in nature. The two sides of the upper set of blades appear to be a serpents mouth opening with the many blade prongs sticking out. The remaining three blade prongs are shaped similarly to a sea creatures fin.

• Racial Abilities:
Cero: Fitting with his liquid theme all of his ceros form in a black and red color scheme, however they all follow one strange abnormality fitting to water. His ceros can bend in a perfect one hundred eighty degrees and are actually smaller than normal. While most ceros are large and semi-fast his are medium size and extremely fast for a cero, but still slower than a bala. While the average cero may be somewhere around ten to twenty plus feet wide his are five to eight feet wide. The final oddity to his cero's are that they can be formed on any spot of his body.

Bala: While not used very often they are serving as some of his more precise natural spiritual weapons. Again fitting with his water theme his bala's are much skinnier than most as while most bala's are round orbs his are shaped like fangs of a serpent.

Sonido: While not in his ressurecion he could be compared to be a slippery serpent. While he doesn't really use Sonido to get up close to his targets, he always uses it to dodge any incoming attack as long as he can. Like other Arrancar he has the ability to use sonido to go farther distances with one step, but can stop mid-sonido and use it again to turn a different direction up to two times.

Prequisa: Prequisa is most likely one of his top three more signature racial skills compared to the rest of them. As a scientist he needs to scan any and all forms of possible data that he can and of course his prequisa doesn't let him down. While most use it as a form of sonar, when he uses it instead of it being like a sonar it acts to enhance his natural sense of smell. To those who can see, if any, his spiritual pressure as it happens they could see seven serpent heads forming out of his back and looking around with their tongues out.

Hierro: He doesnt have hierro that can rival a Espada's, but his does appearance on his body at all times. While most just have their humanoid appearance, or monstrous humanoid forms, his entire body of flesh looks and acts like serpent scales. When he doesn't force it to activate its unique feature it just looks like shiny snake skin. Yet when the unique feature is activated, it allows his skin to pop out like spikes and act as shockingly effective flesh armor.

Regeneration: Like many Arrancar who have regeneration he can regenerate his limbs at a normal rate. However, if he is in a pinch and needs to regenerate a major wound he can pump more reishi into it. This primarily accelerates his regenerate so that he can get back whole missing limbs and in extreme cases, major organs. Basic regeneration of minor wounds takes two posts, Major wounds take four, and severe wounds takes six posts. Reishi accelerated healing makes minor wounds take one, Major take three, and severe wounds take four.

Garganta: The basic skill all hollows and Arrancar have that allows them to tear through the fabric of realms. This skill is mostly used to get between Earth and Hueco Mundo with the few uses of other realms depending on the arrancar.

• Unique Abilities:

" All Seeing Eyes of the Hydra ": Allows him to scan his target of all things they are, except their powers. This being specifically their genetics, physical prowess, spiritual prowess, gender, and race. This scanned data is turned into memories that are placed into his brain. Yet like normal memories if the scanned being is not met daily the memories will be lost till the being is scanned again. This ability can be preformed once on a being per meeting/encounter and is telegraphed by his eyes changing from red to blue.

Water Manipulation: The ability to control a 40 liters of water near him to the fullest extent that he can. This water normally is drawn out of his zanpakutō and manipulated through reishi in order to keep it under control. The water has the potential to cut through durable material akin to an Arrancar's hierro when pressurized. Provided he infuses enough of his spiritual energy into the liquid, he can unleash a series of assaults that are meant to cut through tough material and potentially break them.

Additional uses for this ability are the following: Accelerate his regenerative powers to speeds by healing minor wounds in one post, major wounds in two posts, and severe wounds in three posts. Wrapping around his cero's and bala's in order to increase their overall range and width. Wrapping around his tridents bladed prongs in order to give the prongs more reach. Focus enough of it into a orb before launching it like a hydro cannon at his enemies. Create a highly pressurized barrier of water around him in order to block projectile attacks that can withhold against projectile attacks, both physical and spiritual, equal to his cero. The draw back to the barrier is that it takes his full concentration to keep it up. While not in his res form the barrier can only protect him from something coming from one cardinal direction at a time. In his res form he is protected from all cardinal directions and the barriers just need to be broken down by abilities stronger than his cero.

Bonus side effects onto him due to this: Ceraza, when he is near a large body of water, can stand on top of it and effectively boost his overall speed. Ceraza can, if forced to be underwater, effectively breath underwater and swim/ use sonido at the same effective speed as if he was above water. The speed ability is lost when he is in his ressurecion state and instead replaced with being able to create large tidal-like waves of water, a large and thick barrier of water to protect himself, and many very extremely large liquid serpentine heads.

Water Orb: Can be used to trap a person inside and slowly drown them while the size of the orb can change. If only used on a persons head to quickly drown them, its about a few sizes bigger than the targets head. If used to imprison someone it will be several times larger than the persons overall body. Through enough will power and general force one can free themselves from it. Abilities like shunpo and sonido normally cannot free oneself from it, however if they use more energy than usual for these abilities then it can free them. A normal person has two posts after they are affected for the drowning to start. Damage dealt by drowning starts at smallest possible, but as it goes on the damage increases till free/unconscious/dead.

Hydra's Flesh: By pumping reishi into his skin Ceraza can force spike like scales to pop out from the outer layer and increase his overall defense. This is telegraphed via several scales sticking out of his forearms, elbow, shoulders, base of neck, ankles, and side of cheeks.
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Resereccion

• Resereccion Name: Leviatan { Leviathan }

• Resereccion Release Phrase: " Command the Water "

• Release Actions: In the pre-released state, Ceraza takes a stance of spinning the trident around him while water slowly leaked out of it. After the command phrase is said, the water bursts out of the trident and covers him in a giant pillar of water. Within its changing time period not only can outside beings see his silhouette as it changes, but seven serpentine heads forming out of the pillar. When the transformation is complete the said seven heads clash into the pillar forcing it to explode and reveal the results.

• Resereccion Appearance:

When the pillar of water is exploded to release his new appearance It shows a strikingly more terrifying beast than before. Now standing at over twelve feet tall Ceraza gains a multitude of things. His body is now covered in pure white serpent scale like armor. The most easy to spot parts of resureccion are seven bulky tails that sprouted out of his lower back. From this the rest of his resureccion looks like a suit of armor of a European kind.

The gauntlets, Pauldrans, and knee caps all have the upper half of a serpents head on them. The visor from before now turned into a full on upper helm similar to that of a serpents head. From this change, both of his eyes are now pure hollow eyes with his hair being extremely wild and spread out. The last piece of the transformation shows four large fang's attached to his cheeks going in a upward direction. Last major thing about his ressurecion is that each and every serpent head's eye holes all have glowing red eyes.

• Resereccion Abilities: In this form he gets some gains and some losses that stem from the extreme change in body size and weight. One of the gains is that each of the upper serpentine jaws on his armor have glowing red eyes allowing him to have perfect 360 degrees of vision due to him seeing through all of them at once. Another gain is that he can wrap himself into a orb using his large tails in order to protect himself from harmful attacks. One of the major gains is that he can control a lake sized pool of water that gushes out of the serpent jaws on his shoulders. One of the losses however, is that he becomes a sentry being due to his very heavy weight from the tails. If the tails were removed and he chose not to regenerate them, he would return to being a speedy slippery snake.

Other abilities being:

Liquid Tridents: Ceraza can create liquid tridents using the water gushing from his shoulders. These tridents can be solidified using reishi or returned to their liquid state by removing reishi from them. Otherwise these act as normal weapons.

Hydra's Star: Forcing his tails to split into a star-like pattern he can charge several cero's from their tips and releases them at either one enemy or multiple enemies.

Liquid tentacles: Its tentacles made of water that be used for blocking or smashing peoples heads in. These tentacles are roughly the same width of his tails in while ten to twenty five feet long.
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Skill Sheet

General Skills

  • Durability: Beginner
  • General Speed: Adept
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Beginner


Will Skills

  • Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance:Beginner
  • Focus:Beginner


Racial Skills

  • Perquisa: Beginner
  • Sonido: Beginner
  • Cero/Bala: Beginner
  • Hierro: Adept


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Roleplay Sample

• RP Sample: He stood where he was watching over the demons and hollows of Shadow Fall. Sure this kind of thing has never happened before and such everyone was quite touchy. Only a chuckle formed from his lips as thoughts flowed through the mind of the arrancar scientist and sadist. Only looking on towards the new race of allies called '' Demons " and did the wondering happen. What made these beings as well as what makes them tick was the important thoughts. None the less he stood with a ever so eternal grin on his face.

" Im sure the queen knows what shes doing, she is our queen after all. "

With that slight chuckle and obviously evil grin on his face only getting wider and wider, he made his way back to the lab. The many projects going on through his and other Arrancar labs were astounding to say the least. While these demons were brand new to them they already brought in some amazing results. His idea? What would happen on if a Demon and Hollow were to merge, would their bodies and souls explode from a overload of power? Or would it be a success and make a new race.

Well, that's what he wants to find out.


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«TAKE NOTE OF THESE THINGS»


"Cero
Bala
Sonido
Prequisa
Hierro
Regeneration
Garganta"

Even if these are racial traits, you should try and give them a bit more flare then that. Tailor it to your character and try to make it unique. For example, if had an Arrancar with a fire theme, I would obviously try and have his cero be something devoured by flames and made slightly hotter than the average cero due to his affinity for heat n' what not.

For soindo, is he a fast runner or a distance runner? How much as he focused his skills? Does he have techniques made from it? With regen, is it slow or high-pseed? How much does it take from him? etc

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Water Manipulation: The ability to control a 20 liters of water near him to the fullest extent that he can. This water normally is drawn out of his Zanpakutō and manipulated through reishi in order to keep it under control. The water can be, if enough reishi is put into it, pressurized to the point of it being able to cut through most materials.

You can control a bit more water than that if you wish. However, I'd recommend adding some more abilities and techniques associated with his water manipulation if you want something more potent. Does he become empowered when near large bodies of water? Is he Jesus and can walk on water? ETC

Also, I'd reword that last bit. Instead of "being able to cut through materials", I'd rather it be: "The water has the potential to cut through durable material akin to an Arrancar's hierro when pressurized. Provided he infuses enough of his spiritual energy into the liquid, he can unleash a series of assaults that are meant to cut through tough material and potentially break them."

Something along those lines. You don't have to copy it word for word, but that's what I'm expecting.

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• Resereccion Abilities: This form grants him perfect 360 degrees of vision as well as a more advanced variation of his water manipulation. When before he could only control a pool size amount of water, now he could control sea sized pools of water and such water comes out of the serpent heads from his shoulders. However, he cannot control all of it at once and has to slowly master using it. This form also enchances hierro due to its unnaturally heavy weight of over seven hundred pounds and thus weakens his speed greatly.

The major downside of this ressureccion is the fact that after being released, he cannot move from the spot he used it on. Thus he becomes a sentry being that targets every kind of threat all around him.

He can control entire seas of water? Sounds a bit much given that he is probably going to be lower down the chain. I'd recommend scaling it back to something like a lake or river. Additionally, why does he have a perfect 360 vision? Explain that in more detail in a separate section. It just feels like this whole form could use more detail and love to it. It feels...barren to me.




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  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination:
  • Mental Deduction:
  • Pain Endurance:
  • Focus:


Comments/Notes: Alright, so it's a pretty good character, just wanna know some little things and to see some more powers explained properly, nothing big.

First off, for his regeneration, could a post timer be set just for simplicity? An example being that he can focus and regenerate limbs in 3 posts, or saying that minor wounds can be healed within a single post, things like that so there's some consistency for the regeneration. After this is only his defensive abilities and Water orb. For his Water Manipulation, it says he can create a pressurized barrier that can help defend against projectile attacks. Just how strong is it? An example such as 'can defend against bala's equal to his or weaker' or 'attacks from a person who's strength matches or surpasses his focus can break through' or something along those lines, the same goes for his stronger form. And finally, Water Orb. Is the orb able to move about with the person, so say if they try running, the orb will stick to their head and forcibly suffocate them? Or is a person able to run out of it with enough movement or teleportation abilities?
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Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance: Beginner
  • Focus: Beginner


Comments/Notes: Thanks for fixing everything up when we spoke about it. It all seems pretty good now.
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