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Name: Carter
Titles: Angel Shinigami
Gender: Male
Appearance Age: 15
Age: 221
Affiliation/Rank: Gotei 13 Captain of squad 7

Appearance Description:
  • Body Build: First off he is almost a mirror image of Toshiro Hitsugaya in height and weight. He stands at a meager height of 133 centimeters or 4 ‘4.5”. His weight is much different though, weighing twenty pounds more than the man coming in at 82 lbs. This is because his body is starting to progress into a puberty stage and his muscle mass is building. His boyish limbs are gaining in firmness and size as the muscles build from the testosterone out let in his being. His shoulders are broader as well and his chest wider, his abdomen is more defined. His back is cut as well, only having two scars located between his shoulder blades and spinal cord form where his wings becoming one with his body during his angelic release state.


  • Facial Features: His face is starting to change from the affects of puberty as well, his round boyish face narrowing out as his jaw line defines itself and his once round pudgy chin sharpens to a point as the baby fat is burned off. His nose is thin and slightly up turned; his nostrils small as well. His ears are rather small, hidden under his white hair most of the time as they become the topic of jokes more often than not. His eyes are a deep gold, almost amber like color with flecks of brown in them, they are rather large and appear to have an inner shine to them like a child up to mischief even when he is bored or pissed off, this making his emotions hard to figure out based off of his face. His eye brows are narrow and sharp, always amplifying whatever expression he has going at any given time to an almost comical level. His forehead is of no descript often covered by his snow white hair. His teeth are perfectly straight and blinding white when he smiles.


  • Hair Color and Style:His hair is snow white as stated above and in need of a good trim, the locks coming down into his face most days when he is in the office. His most noticeable hair style is the disheveled one as if he doesn’t care about his appearance. The long unkempt locks often getting into his eyes when he works. He has been known to spike his hair though from time to time when he’s in a good mood, thinking it makes him look cool but not knowing most of the time it makes him look like a tool. Perhaps when he grows up he will look back and be ashamed of his young dumb self? Finally when going to public events his white hair is parted in a neat comb over, the only flaw being his boyish cowlick that always makes a strand of it stick up slightly in the front and subtract from the adult demeanor he attempts to carry. It should be noted his eye brows are also white.


  • Attire:Much of the time he is wearing his issued white Captains robes to show his rank only because of his age, if he were older he would ditch them in choice of a much more simple outfit. Being that he appears to be a 15 year old boy it is easy for people to forget his rank so instead of constantly reminding them he wears his sleeveless white robes with his traditional black underneath. When in his gigia he often is seen wearing semi formal dress clothes, always wearing khaki dress pants with a button down shirt tucked into his black leather belt, the buckle holding a silver image of squad 7’s flower. His shirts range from a simple white button down collared long sleeve to a deep blue version. It can be assumed that he dresses this way to help make up for his lack in human age, wanting to bridge the gap as much as possibly even though he is well over 200 years old. His shoes are also semi formal as well; always the same dark auburn tanned leather dress shoes that are slightly pointed at their tips. He has exchanged the standard black laces that come with them for some white ones that match his hair. It should also be known no matter in what form he is wearing a necklace with a pure white crystal as the center piece and it appears to give off its own energy when noticed.


  • Scars:As stated above on his back twin scars appear, always looking puckered up and slightly pink as if they have just recently healed, this is due to his angelic state requiring the wings of his angel form to connect to his body. The right side of his face from his cheek up to his temple is scarred with acidic blood from a demon he had fought. The scar is thin but is quite noticeable, always looking red and slightly inflamed from the demonic taint that issued forth from it even though the taint was cured out of his being. On his chest a long scar cuts down from his right pectoral to his lower left side abdomen from a sparring event with his best friend in a do or dies attack. On his left shoulder a burn mark scar is shown in a star formation from a cero blast received at point blank range. The ankle of his right leg has many round scars one would associate with arrows but wider. The scars being from the six frozen objects that floats around his mentor and older sister Cirno. The four scars were gained in a training course as well. In time many more are sure to come with battles and training.





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Personality:
  • Caring: First and foremost Carter is incredibly caring. He has never been one to go looking for a fight or be one to put people who need a helping hand out. His caring side is almost comically in some ways, he can be over bearing at times because of just how much he cares about any and everything. If someone needs a shoulder to cry on or just needs a friend so they don’t feel alone he’s the first one in line to help out.
  • Unbiased: Despite his role as a shinigami and one of the seven angels who oppose demonic forces Carter isn’t an shoot first and ask questions later kind of person. He doesn’t have hate for Hollows like most of his kind. He understands the plight of the majority of them, understands most didn’t choose to become what they ended up being and just couldn’t find their peace so they could move on. He won’t take a side in a fight just because a friend is on one side or the other, he will weigh his options and then jump in. He’s so unbiased that he won’t judge even a demon on what it is; knowing most didn’t knowingly become what they are.
  • Protective: He keeps a close ring of people he considers friends and ironically they are all stronger than him but he won’t let them come to harm. Even though he is unbiased and would stay out of a war between his friend and another person he would still intervene to save their life without bringing up arms against whomever the opponent is. Even if he had to just stand in the way and be cut down, if it protects a friend he won’t hesitant. This also goes for any person or peoples oppressed of unable to defend themselves from a force acting against them. Power wasn’t made to oppress the weak in his mind but created to give those who couldn’t fight a sword for protection and he looks at himself as that sword, often going into battles he knows he shouldn’t if it means protecting those who would otherwise be doomed to dying defenseless.
  • Mature: Appearance wise he appears to be a fifteen year old boy who is just entering manhood but once someone gets to know him they find he isn’t just a boy. He can carry a conversation on with people much older than himself that a boy his age never could; he isn’t interested in teenage angst as well. His eyes are set to the future and whatever goals he has set for himself. He knows when to bite his tongue even when he is furious as well as to remain quiet when he shouldn’t speak, not adding his thoughts where they are not wanted nor needed. At the same time he will speak up if something is wrong or there is a better way to do whatever is brought up, but without coming off as a cocky prick.
  • Born Leader: Carter has always felt like one day he will be one of the greats, he can often be found reading books about legendary heroes in history. His ideals lead him into roles of leadership even when he isn’t attempting to find them, when a soul gets to know him they can see the inner confidence the boy has that is somewhat unsettling in a person so young. Even though he wants to lead he knows when someone else should and will hand over control to them in an instant so whatever task can be done at its best degree. His desire to lead coupled with his strong will power has finally begun to pay off with him becoming a Gotei Captain.
  • Powerful Will: When he has his mind set to something he gets results. No matter what stands in his way he gets the job done, when he first became a shinigami he was incredibly weak and not worth noticing but through countless hours of training he has grown to be a noticeable figure as well as gaining a power only six other people have gathered from Truth. If he is fighting to protect someone and is dealt a crippling blow he will find the power to get back to his feet and lift his sword, as long as his heart beats he won’t give up in whatever his eyes are set on.
  • Book Smart: In the shinigami academy he always tested high on book related work as well as quickly picking up Kido, this book smarts has helped him quite a bit in understanding the way of the world and how things work, it has even helped him to notice minor things in battle that have turned the tide. His book smarts has also allowed him to use kido in ways people don’t normally think to do.
  • Common Sense: Most who are book smart lack in this ability but somehow god graced him with both common sense and a decent brain. He knows when to hold his tongue or when he’s outclassed, given that he understands he’s outclassed he still usually ends up in a fight he shouldn’t be in but that common sense and the reality that is death could come at any second often sharpens his senses and focus, allowing him to react better under the high stress.
  • Tireless: He quiets, if he’s in a battle and he’s out of energy he keeps getting back up only if he is to get smacked down once again, if he has life in him he has the ability to stand back up, at least that’s what he thinks. If he sets his eyes on a daunting task he will get it done with his large reverses of mental energy when his body would have given out half way through. He pushes himself past his breaking points whenever he can, he’s a dedicated worker that never stops moving, taking on as many tasks as often as possible.

  • Positive Outlook: This goes hand in hand with his strong will, no matter how bleak the present looks Carter is always looking toward a bright tomorrow, knowing that keeping his chin up and the smile on his face will one day make the darkness waver as he rises. If he sees a person in dire need of help no matter how far gone they are he will believe they can be saved and throw his whole being into it knowing that with enough time the good will flourish.

    Character Flaws:
  • Hidden Rage Word, Trigger of Explosion!: If someone refers to him as a “kid” his cool demeanor goes right out the window, his face gets almost comically red with rage and his body stiffens up like a pissed off animal, this is when the small boy needs to be feared or restrained by his friends. His temper is hard to get boiling but calling him a Kid is a sure fire way to bring out his inner rage.
  • Romantically Detached: Carter has never really held a romantic relationship and do to such he is unnoticing when someone is showing him affection making him appear to be uncaring but in reality having never had a relationship he doesn’t know how to act and most times picks the wrong responses. He feels awkward in these situations because of such and most of the time ends up putting walls up without even meaning to, his eyes usually being set on training and work. This being said he has recently just had his first kiss and this trait might change depending on what the future holds.
  • Aloof: Sometimes he can appear to be not quiet all there in the sense that he’s day dreaming and hard to connect to or understand. His thoughts are his own and maintaining his quiet composure makes it hard for many people to understand and relate to, making him seem out of touch with reality.
  • Quiet Rage: When in person manages to finally ruffle him up either in or out of combat he doesn’t blow his top like most do, doesn’t succumb to the goading but instead he focuses on destroying the person who opposes him. If in combat he stops speaking, quits the pointless banter that is the norm of the fighting these days, his eyes becoming cold and sharp as he focuses on leveling his opponent with all of his might. Here if someone saw him they would find him cold and uncaring upon looking at him but in reality he is a seething pot of anger that has focused itself into a well honed weapon. Outside of combat if someone has managed to press his buttons in whatever they are competing over he will quietly exploit all of their weaknesses and short comings. So far as to bring up the ugly things they have done in their past in an attempt to make them lose their cool.



Likes: Peace, Sunlight, Training, Reading, developing lasting relationships, strong drink, and most animals.

Dislikes: Prejudice, Darkness, Fighting, Hatred, being unable to protect the weak or his friends, certain words…, and ducks. Ducks are fucking weird looking man…
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History:
Chapter 1: Birth of a Black Sheep
During his childhood years life was far from easy for Carter, his mother and father divorced early, he had three other siblings, and he never seemed to know his place. His mother always treated her children with love but from an early age Carter understood even she didn’t want him as she always found blame on things around the house to be on him, always gave him chores the others never got, not even the older siblings, His brother and two sisters always had large birthdays with many friends but when it came his turn each year he was greeted with a list of chores to do that morning before he would go to school and return to find only more chores waiting. But this is all jumping the gun.
When he was welcomed into the world his father filed for divorce from his mother, the man had worked long hours and spent most days of the week out of town and it came to light that he didn’t want another child with a woman he fell out of love with, also coming to light would be how he had already found a younger woman to replace Carter’s mother with. So skipping out of the picture his dad left his mom to raise four kids on her own with her rather unique job. It wasn’t unique in the sense that it provided a great income, quite the opposite. It was unique in the way that she was an awakened human who could see and commune with spirits. She often worked as a medium for grieving families and through her work she became much more cold an detached, having to hear pity and disgusting story’s from spirits and lies from families.
From about as long as he could remember Carter could see the spirits as well and once when he was four his mother caught him speaking to a girl by a pond who had drowned while chasing her ball. She had slipped and fallen into the murky water, only to be found days later. In a rage his mother began to smack him repeatedly in the face, screaming about how much she hated him for making her lose the man she loved, blaming his dad leaving on his being born, and yelling about he didn’t deserve to have her power that his siblings didn’t have, telling him how he wasn’t her son but an unwanted reminder of her lost love.
It was a young age to be given such a dark realization and after that day he ignored the spirits, not wanting to be yelled at by the only person he wanted to be accepted by again. From that day he accepted that he wasn’t wanted and did what he was told, quietly doing the chores he was given and staying out of his mother’s way while she coo’d over his siblings, loving them while she seemed to not be able to love him. In his mind it never made sense that she could love them and not him because they all had the same father but he never said a thing, electing to quietly bare his burden and when it became too much to cry at night and dream about his dad coming back to save him.
For the next three years he quietly did his slave labor, waking up and cleaning and doing his school work before ending the day with more cleaning and sleep only to wake up and do it again, not being allowed to play outside like his siblings were. He appeared to be a thin child, his hair being an impossible white color, having faded from the brown color his siblings had to the ivory white in the three years he stayed inside to work tirelessly.
After dealing with this treatment for the first seven years of his life be quickly came to hate his mom for what she did to him and on the night before his eighth birthday he snuck out of the house to go to the park near his home. He couldn’t remember the last time he had had so much fun, swinging in the star light and going down slides. Two hours into his dark play time he saw the same spirit from when he was a small kid, standing by the edge of the pond, her soul chain being incredibly short. Not knowing that at any moment she could become a Hollow and eat him he went over to her to talk to her because he didn’t want her to feel alone like he did. He wasn’t aware this was a trap, didn’t know she was a lure a Hollow was using like the KingFisher Hollow that had been slain decades ago.
It wasn’t until the Hollow had him in its grasp, about to devour his soul for his weak spirit energy that a white light came forth and he was washed in the blood of the beast as he feel to the ground, the severed arm still holding him in its grasp.


Chapter 2: Life with the Quincies

He woke to find himself in a chapel like building with strange looking stars and cross shapes everywhere, the building mostly being in whites, blues, and dull gray colors. He quickly became aware he wasn’t dead and they wasn’t heaven and with that settled he found out that he was in a Quincy Headquarter building. A young Archer having saved him from the Hollow that was going to kill him, the young Archer took him to a room with a few elderly people in white robes sitting; they asked him if he knew what had happened to him, his name, and finally where he was so they could take him home. When they told him that he froze up and the small child lied saying he didn’t remember where he had come from, he had managed to remember his name and the attack but couldn’t recall his own family and home somehow. They knew the boy was lying but it was clear he didn’t want to go home and they couldn’t take him if they didn’t know where he was going, plus they were aware he was spiritually awakened and thought maybe they could help him grow his power with their tutoring so without another question the young boy was taken in by Quincies.
As the years passed he found himself doing chores around the chapel everyday much like at home but here he also felt like he fit in even though he wasn’t a Quincy and couldn’t gain abilities like they had. His ability to talk to the dead progressed faster around their energies and soon he could touch the souls but he couldn’t ever progress far enough to gain noticeable abilities like other awakened humans, they never discarded him though. He lived with the Quincies and even though he couldn’t become a pure Quincy he could absorb their ‘pride’ and moral compass. By the age of ten he felt like he had found a new home and had become a part of the clan. Here even though he was vastly different he didn’t feel like an outcast like he had with his mother and siblings. Here he found peace and in the two years he lived with them he never once felt left out or a burden.

Chapter 3: Night of Death

As it always goes Hollows attacked, but they weren’t a mindless horde, their power was lead by a group of high level Arrancar who quickly dispatched the Quincy defense. The young and old alike fought the horde to their dying breaths while Carter found himself shivering in fear in a closet. He watched through a crack in horror until he saw the boy who had saved him those years ago come under attack. Something in him broke and he broke free of his fear and the small boy rushed the Hollows with all abandon, not caring that he would die. The boy who had saved him was risking it all to protect everyone on his Quincy Pride and Carter was taught the same these past two years.
He managed to buy the boy a second before the Arrancar who were watching the fight looked at him, the weakest shunpoing in front of him and destroying him in the blink of an eye with a cero. He felt no pain in his dying as it was so quick, his short human life coming to a sad close before he could ever grow into manhood.

Chapter 4: Soul Society, The Early Years

As most spirits do he woke in the poorest part of Soul Society where people murdered and stole for sport. He managed to find a group of kids like himself to form a group with, as the years went by they all had eachother’s backs in the rough section of Soul Society. All of them fighting off attacks in themselves or each others like savage wolves, the whole time Carter kept thinking there would have to be more than this. Years would pass like days and he would get more and more disheartened with the divided state of the Soul Society.
On a countless day in a countless year he decided to walk a water front at night before bed without the group so he could clear his head, the events of the day having gotten to him. They had lost one of their own from a thug who beat the kid until he succumbed to his wounds. As he walked and silently cried for his friend he saw the ruffle of black robes in an ally, thugs having the man closed in, a katana in his hand. His golden eyes went wide as he knew it was a shinigami, a Shinigami, and the young man was in trouble based off of how hard he was breathing and how the group was snickering at him and closing in.
He didn’t know what overcame him as once again he blindly rushed in like with the Hollow attack in his past life. In a blur he launched himself onto the biggest guy and bit into his collar bone while kicking him over and over, this distracted the other three enough for the young boy to quickly dispatch them before finishing the big one who had detached Carter and had thrown him into the wall, knocking him out.
When he finally came to he saw the face of the young Shinigami smiling down at him. The boy helped him up and offered to bring him home to the boy’s family and he accepted the offer thinking he’d get a hot meal before he made his way back to his friends. What would happen would blow him to pieces as they offered to make him the youngest son of the family, they weren’t one of the four noble families but they were wealthy and could give him a good life for protecting the newest Shinigami of the family. He was beyond speechless but after a moment he came around and like any young child he screamed yes. The family taking him and making him a Zenaki as was the family name
They prided themselves on good manners and quiet patience, which they beat into the young boy each day. Having come from a shitty existence before this he quickly became excitable at all the amazing new things in his life but he was made to learn the ways of his new family. They had taken him in and he wouldn’t let them down so quickly he adopted the ways. Wanting to make his older brother Yumchi Zenaki proud for having him as a younger brother, he was always at the front door when his brother came home from missions to learn about what he had done, which Hollows had fallen to his Zanpakutō this time. He had a fan boy feeling toward his older brother, idolizing him like some super hero.
After a couple decades the boy would finally be brought in front of the elders of the family to be told he was going to enter the Shino Academy like every other member of the family had and he quietly bowed, but on the inside he had never felt more excited and nervous.



Chapter 5: Shino Academy


He passed the entrance exams with flying colors due to his higher spiritual pressure, having been a spiritually awoken human in his past life and was the youngest in appearance in his class. The rest all appearing to be in their late teens to early twenties while he was merely 12 years old based on how he looked. He excelled in the courses revolving around Kido and weapon play, it was always odd in a sparring match to see a fully grown man smacked around in his thick bulky armor by a pint sized version of himself, Carter always being made fun of for being so small but quieting them when he reminded them how they couldn’t beat him in a sparring match.

Zanjustu was a little more difficult for him, finding it odd to talk to a sword, it took months for him to get the kind of progress the other students got in days. It was frustrating but he wouldn’t give up, trusting his Zanpakutō no matter how strange it felt to him, trying to develop the bond. He would sit for hours each day after class mediating with his sword. It had called to him in the very beginning, when he took his Asauch the dull katana lit up with his energy and became an old English viceroy styled long sword and everyone was astonished, thinking that right away he had fully bonded with it but it quickly became clear that it was a fluke and meaningless as they slowly learned the abilities of their zanpakutos and the names while he couldn’t even figure out his own inner world.

One day in a frustrated display of anger he threw his Zanpakutō at the back wall of his families estate yard, the blade bouncing off the wall and hitting a small bell. In that instant he felt it vibrate in his soul, even though he wasn’t holding the weapon he could feel it. In a haste he fell off of his perch he was mediating on and rushed over to the Zanpakutō, feeling a weak power coming from it like a new born spirit. With nothing else left to do he pushed his own energy into the sword and it finally lit up with life, no one having told him that that simple step was the most crucial… He was pulled into his own inner world where he met his Zanpakutō spirit, a tall pale woman, naked under a black robe that covered her for the most part, exposing only her curved hips and slender shoulders. She had a large bust but what surprised him most was her red eyes and rabbit like ears. Her hair was ivory white like his own except for a strand of coal black that covered one of her scarlet red eyes.

He took in his inner world too and noticed it all appeared to be the inside of a never ending castle, the floors all dark brown polished wood, the walls smooth stone lit every few feet with torch scones. He almost wanted to get lost and explore but his mind came back to the spirit, the other part of his soul. She was quiet and reserved, appearing older than him. She told him her name and what she would do, her powers and with it she ushered him out, assuring him they would have a long time to get to know one another.

After this block in the road was cleared he proceeded to graduate from the academy in two and a half years rather than the standard six it took everyone else. This made him stand out and got him a seated position in the Gotei, in the command squad he gained the fifth seat where he worked on honing his learned skills for years.

Chapter 6: Active Duty


As a Shinigami he would perform the standard duties, going out on countless missions and many stations. His powers quickly grew and he unlocked his shikai within his first year as a Shinigami. Though in his squad he saw the rapid descent of the Gotei 13 and would voice his concerns only to be hushed and pushed to another station where he couldn’t speak out about the lack of numbers. Where they had once been numbered in the hundreds now the soul reapers were numbered in the double digits, most Shinigamis deciding to go rogue and do their duties on their own. The choice to do so was a bad one, showing a rather large gain in Hollow and Arrancar power as well as demonic beings as well. The end of the Gotei as the large opposing force came from this choice as the Shinigami numbered dwindled down leaving every surviving member to either rally around the dying Org as Carter had done or manage to branch out to the dark side. In this dire time a lot of the Shinigamis managed a soul evolution becoming more powerful than those in previous generations, some almost being gods in their respective power.

Carter was an exception to that, he hadn’t managed to gain the high power levels like the others had but he stood firm in his duties. He kept going out on missions and kept fighting the increasing amounts of hollows and Arrancar. He managed to gather a seated position in Squad One, it was the lowest seat but he was proud of it, in the past days he wouldn’t have gotten the seat but the fact was that the Gotei was starving for members.

His duties weren’t what he expected though; he was given the same shit duties of going out on postings and in his fifth posting since joining Squad One he found his world changed for the worse. It was a non-descript posting in Israel. He was stationed there for standard Hollow cleansing and soul reaping but quickly found himself befriending a small child that could manage to see him. The boy reminded himself a lot of him in his previous life, he was an abused boy that was forced to be a home slave, his father was a drunk that came piss faced every night and would destroy the house in his stupor. The boy’s mom had recently died and hadn’t moved on because her son could see her and she was attached to him, knowing he felt alone and scared because of his dad’s antics. She couldn’t move on but at the same time her chain was breaking from seeing the man she loved degrade so much when he lost her.

Carter attempted to send her on her way to Soul Society but she wanted him to help her make her husband stop drinking first since the man wouldn’t listen to his son. He agreed because he knew soon she would hollowify and it would be bad for everyone involved, mostly her son who had spiritual pressure.

So the next day he came home from school with the boy, now being in gigia, and he attempted to talk to the father, saying things only the dead mother would be able to say. He thought he got through to the dad….

That night he was on his normal hunt, having just sent three spirits onto their way before his pager started pinging, telling him a soul was hollowifying right near the boy’s house so he shunpo’d over in time to see what had driven her to go hollow rather than find herself at peace. In his failure and shame as a father and husband the man had committed suicide in the living room, leaving his son to find him and cry. The mother watched it all in horror and finally her chain shattered, the stress of it being too much for her to bear.

She became a hollow of immense power, her spiritual pressure alone was almost enough to crush Carter and in her violent rampage she devoured her own son. Losing himself because he viewed this as his own fault he attacked her knowing he would die but somehow he had managed to destroy her and send her and her son on their way but not before sustaining serious injury. He lay there in a pool of his own blood expecting to die from the battle and thinking it was a fitting end, maybe the boy would become a stronger version of Carter if he became a shinigami.

The last thing he remembered was blood welling out of his chest and finding it hard to breathe, having a lung collapsed and the other filling with his red life force, his vision started to fade before he succumbed to his wounds.



Chapter 7: Second Chances

Many weeks after the event with the hollowified mother Carter found himself recovering in the infirmary of division four, not even sure how he had managed to make it back to the Soul Society, his question was soon answered when a tan dark headed shinigami made himself known. He said how he had been dealing with an unrelated event in that town that night had felt the battle after he had finished up his own business. The man described getting Carter back over from the world of the living and how he had stopped by every day around the same time to check on him.

In a way Carter felt relieved he had survived but at the same time a deep depression over came him from failing the family, a depression that slowed his ability to heal and left him bed ridden for many months. The dark haired shinigami coming every day to talk to him, telling the boy his name, Landen, and how his own depression was killing him. As time went on the two developed a close friendship while Carter recovered in the infirmary and upon his release Landen convinced Carter to leave the Gotei for a bit so they could train together, Landen having wanted to make the boy stronger so his depression would leave sooner.

They packed up their belongs and set up a camp in the world of the living in the wastelands of the Outback before the Monsuta ever claimed it. Each day Landen would summon more and more Hollows forcing Carter to fight them until he couldn’t handle anymore and each night he would constantly release his own spirit pressure at full force so Carter would be able to stand stronger enemies without being crushed.

This training lasted for four months, each day Carter felt himself getting stronger and stronger as his depression drained out of him drip by drip. On their last night before they left Landen made his true race known, he wasn’t just a shinigami. He was a vizard, a shinigami that had an inner hollow that had fused with his being, he had part of his own enemy inside his soul. He told Carter how in a state of depression the hollow had managed to find itself a home inside Landen, depression over memories of failure. In that moment Carter realized this whole training period and forth coming with this information was because Landen was afraid Carter would go down the same road as him, even if it wasn’t on purpose.

In that moment he knew he had found his best friend, a man who discarded his entire life to save a youth from himself, Carter felt deeply indebted to the vizard and vowed to him he would do whatever it took to keep the same cruel fate from be falling him. At the time he didn’t know a higher power had put him on this path to test him, to see if he was worth a shot at something beautiful.



Chapter 8: Transcendence


The morning after the reveal when they opened the passage way between worlds to go back to Soul Society Carter felt oddly light hearted and stepped through the gate, after clearing the precipice world Carter realized he wasn’t where he needed to be, he was in the last place he wanted to be. He was back in the home of the family he failed. In the moment of realization fear over took him and he reached for his Zanpakutō, only for it to turn to rust in his hands and fall apart.

Weight crushed down on his shoulder from all sides, like an immense spirit pressure as an all encompassing mind spoke into him, telling him he was being tested, chosen for a higher calling, if only he could survive his test. With the words finished the weight lifted and he stood up, finding himself now in the street where he fought the mother, his eyes were fixed on a mass of blood and guts and a single child sized sneaker. A laughter echoed as the hollow mother crept out of the darkness, blood covered her bleached white bone like face as she taunted him for his failure. His hand went back to his Zanpakutō sheath out of reflex only to find how that a branch of thorns was where the rusted weapon had been, the thorns pricking his skin and causing him to bleed, with each drop of blood that hit the cement a hand would come up and wrap around him, blood continuing to gush out at an impossible rate as he was engulfed by hundreds of hands and pulled down into the ground, down into the darkness.

The countless hands tore at his body, ripping skin and muscle away, leaving him a bloody mess in multiple places as he screamed in pain and horror, he felt it all, to him this was real. When his eyes opened again he wasn’t under the ground, he was back in his childhood room, the face of the mother who treated him like a slave looking down at him and smiling, making his heart feel warm. She embraced him in a hug and he felt tears well in his eyes as he returned the hug. After a moment he felt that something was wrong, feeling his mother grow cold, he looked up to notice she was now a withered husk. Strands of the same white hair he had matted to her shrunken skin, her sightless eye sockets staring at him while her mouth hung open wordlessly.

In his horror he tried to pull away only to watch as her face ripped a part and the mother of the boy he failed to save emerged from the husk of his mother like some demonic butterfly being born, her hands wrapping around him and her mouth opening wide she swallowed him whole and he felt himself falling in a pit of pure blackness.

When he landed and his eyes finally adjusted he realized he could make out some things inside the hollow who haunted him so badly. He noticed a small figure curled up at the other end of the darkness and he felt compelled to walk crawl over to it, fearing that he already knew who it was.

His fears were met with truth as he looked upon the boy who he failed, the boy who reminded him so much of himself. The boy was crying, scared and alone, Carter would see how that the boy was slowly being consumed by the Hollow, the darkness clinging to his skin and merging him slowly with the walls of its stomach. His eyes caught the glint of steel as he saw his Zanpakutō over in the corner he had landed in. Something inside him told him that if he reached his Zanpakutō he could free himself but in doing so this boy would be gone, crying alone as his life was taken from him.

He had failed the boy once and he couldn’t face failing him again so forfeiting his own life he moved closer to the boy and embraced him in a hug, feeling the darkness grip him and pull him in as well. His mind was centered around atoning for the sin of failure, knowing that dying with this boy and comforting him in his final moments would help make up for failing him.

At the last second he could feel the handle of his Zanpakutō in his left hand, a light gleaming from inside the blade. A voice inside him told him to save himself now, to redeem himself, and save the boy. His eyes opened as the darkness began to pull the last bits of his being in, almost finished consuming him and the boy. His left arm was free and in an act of desperation he stabbed into the darkness and watched as light grew from the cut, expanding outward in all angles until finally it was just him and the boy floating in a wash of white light.

The boy broke down into particles of light and reformed in front of him, his face now looked ageless and full of warmth, his eyes giving off the same pure light as he reached for carter and patted his head. The boy spoke with a voice that wasn’t his own, a voice that reminded Carter of a chorus of men and women singing as it spoke, telling him he had transcended his block, had finally conquered the part of himself that was holding him back, his guilt in not saving the boy. His depression in thinking he was too weak and his fear that he wouldn’t give his own life to save another, all were confronted and surpassed and now a holy power was his.

When he next opened his eyes he was laying in his bed in the first division of the Gotei, his mind full of all that had happened, a knowledge that he had surpassed everyone here and become one of the seven angels of truth rooted deep in his core. The young shinigami smiled at his blessing and closed his eyes again, finally sleeping for the first time in months without a night terror.




Chapter 9: Current Day

Since the event of his transcendence Carter has accomplished more than he ever thought, he has taken the captain position of Division Seven, he has managed to begin training himself and any who wish for his aide. His powers are awakening in a heavenly way, progressing him past all limits he thought he had, The Iramasha Cirno offered to train him to bring his inner light out and in that training he realized his Bankai state and his true Angelic release, becoming the Angel of Radiance. He even managed to fight in the war for Iceland and survived it, stopping a demonic commander with a stranger fellow who was lit up in fire the entire time of the fight, his body did take a major ass beating in the fight but in the end he realized his devotion to his cause was greater than the demon’s and had conquered it. Many more accomplishments will come from this young ambitious captain so keep your eyes on him!

[ b]Relationships:[/b]


Landen: The vizard who trained him before he became an angel of truth, Carter considers the loud mouth his best friend and is often seen getting shit faced drunk with the arrogant hunter.


Cirno: During their time in training he began to realize this woman felt like a long lost sibling to him and even if she doesn’t want to be known as it he refers to her as his older sister and would defend her and those she holds dear with his life.

Sho: The new Vice Captain of his squad, Sho reminds carter in a lot of ways of his friend Landen but realizes this guy is going to be hard headed the entire time they work together, secretly though he wouldn’t have it any other way.

Animum: His previous Vice. A potential love interest until he was forced to make her step down from her position, he still has strong feelings for her and will be there for her when she calls on him because he will never leave any friend alone in the dark.

Squad 7: Tessa, Yoma, and Steven. All of these kids were punks, there’s no other way to put it, the girl was quick to anger, Yoma was a loud mouth, and Steven is a know it all. The best thing about them though? They’re HIS punks and he wouldn’t trade these shinigamis for anyone, he see’s great potential in them, if only he can get them to show up to a meeting on time.

























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Reiatsu Color: White

Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Nacuto

Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: Nacuto is a tall woman with curves in all the right places, she’s older than Carter, appearing to be in her late teens or early twenties. Her skin is ivory white as if she hides from the sun at all costs. She’s completely nude except for the black shroud that’s always covering her, leaving only her right hip open as well as a hint of her supple breasts. The shroud itself doesn’t appear to be a normal clothing garment as it has endless swirling patterns inside accompanied by countless twinkling specks of light. If one looked into it for prolonged periods of time they would begin to notice it appears to look like a moving snap shot of the universe in all its vastness. Her face is slender with a small nose like a rabbit’s, her eye brows as coal black as her long raven hair, her eyes a vivid amethyst like the aurora beams of the northern lights.


Inner World: Carter’s Inner World is a black abyss, when someone focuses they can see countless far off lights twinkling, the air is beyond freezing, quickly it becomes known that his Inner World is actually deep space but not space that has ever been explored or found, the ground is an asteroid but not a huge floating rock like the majority of the others. This own appears to be made from a diamond, floating through space for all of eternity. In the core of the asteroid a light can be seen that gives off all colors imaginable by the human eye from the refraction of the light on the million facets of the diamond. A single throne rests in the middle of the surface of the asteroid, appearing to be carved from marble but with a warm glow to it, the closer one steps to it the warmer they become.
Seven stars hover over the throne, each the same pulsating light and the size of a man’s palm, fragments of dust and countless particles float around them caught in the pull of their gravity. The spirit of Nacuto is often seen sitting on the throne if she isn’t standing on the edge of the asteroid and staring off into the darkness where a singular light glows.
The light upon further inspection can be made out to appear to be almost a carbon copy of the known universe, the asteroid hovering outside of the universe and slowly circling it for the rest of all time in its darkness, lit up by its own light, like a frozen star making a lonely journey through the eons of time.


Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance : Standard issue katana with a star shaped guard.

Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:

Fractured Light: The blade of Nacuto turns clear and crystalline before fracturing and breaking apart into 20,000 miniature pieces that hover in the air around the battlefield. They can only hover at a maximum range of 30 yards from Carter with him being the focal point; they have a 360 degree field of operation. The fragments collect light from the sun, stars, or Carter’s own angelic light and reflect it thousands of times over as more and more light is added in and the power begins to build. The power varies depending on the posts it has built energy. It should be noted a layer of these crystals coat Carter and reflect the light all around him so he isn’t harmed by his own attacks.

The range is stuck at a maximum of 30 meters in a 360 degree globe field around Carter, after the 30 meter range is hit the spiritual energy in the field is too weak to cause damage and fades into the background environment, if Carter were to release more energy to expand the field it would force the activation of his shikai and evolve his zanpakuto past the point of using his sealed ability.

Note: the time for damage is based off of exposed skin and or light clothing, heavy armor or defensive buffs double the time needed for damage to take effect. Any regeneration based ability used inside of this attack will be hampered by 40%, the speed of light based damage being faster than most cellular regeneration. If a regenerative attack is used in the field the user would take much lessened effects of this attack than the full blast. Also it should be known all energy Carter uses each round gets 5% extra added to it if having to fight against regeneration based users.

  • 1 Post: Irritated eye sight that causes the vision to temporarily blur and distort distances. This round Carter has used 2% of his energy pool
  • 2 Posts: Complete blindness in the sense that the eyes can only see white. Impossible to determine distance and depth, unable to see the battlefield as well as Carter, this blindness isn’t permanent, it lasts one round before degrading to the affects of a single charged post attack. This round Carter has used 7% of his energy pool.
  • 3 Posts: Heat can be felt and burns begin to appear on the body of the opponent caught inside the light field as the energy builds and continues to ricochet from facet to face t. On top of the burning the affects of two posts are still in play and the eyes don’t heal while still stuck inside the affected area. this round Carter has used 15% of his energy pool.
  • 4 Posts: Deep burns appear all over the body of the opponent. The smell of burning flesh and hair hangs in the air and now they begin to sense a weakening to their own energy, sweat beginning to coat the skin before instantly drying in the heat and breath becoming harder as the invasion light energy begins sapping it out of them to fuel the continuing assault. Blindness is still in play as well. This round Carter has used 20% of his energy pool
  • 5 Posts:The burns have advanced past the point of advanced healing, delving into the deep tissue and making bone closer to the surface now visible and blackening as it burns as well, the skin has bubbled and melted off in fatty areas and all hair is gone from the body. Also at this point eye sight will not be returned upon exiting the light field. Eye sight slowly begins to come back after 4 posts outside of the field and fully restored after 6. This round Carter has used 35% of his energy pool
  • 6Posts:The burning sensation has left the body because the nerves are burned past the point of feeling all over the body, major soul energy loss is had now. This round Carter has used 45% of his energy pool.

How Skills Help and Hinder this ability
The ability is stationed around Carter’s Kido and Zanjutsu levels and the opponents Durability is needed to counter this attack.
Those with untrained Durability are affected at an accelerated rate, fast forwarding each post by one so they would start off with total blindness in one post instead of two. Also the burning skips the minor stage and goes straight for deeper burns and minor energy absorption.
Adept level Durability finds the opponent blindness within two post but from there out takes everything at the normal rate, facing no burning at increased rates.

Advanced leveled Durability takes the attacks based off of the chart listed with no benefits or hindrances.

Master leveled Durability take the reverse of Beginners. It takes two posts between each attack for it to activate, so for this all to happen instead of six posts twelve posts are required as they can stave each affect off for an additional round.

Grand Master Durability takes no damage until Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido become Masters. Then the two skills reach Master level those with GM durability take damage at the same rate listed for Masters. When Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido reach GM those with GM durability take the damage at the normal rate.






Release: auferes malum occide lumine [Latin for Purge the Evil, Slay with Light]

Shikai Description: His Zanpakutō morphs from a single sided Katana to a double sided English long sword, the grip of the hilt grows five inches to accommodate two handed fighting which Carter only does when being vastly over powered, the pummel grows a chain with six inch long links in it that has a bell attached to the end, the bell appears to look like a church gong but on a very diminutive scale. The chime in the bell only makes noise upon Carter’s will. The blade itself extends from 33 inches to 43 and the metal widens from 4 and a half inches to a solid 5 making it appear to be an oversized blade for the small boy to use but in combat he shows expert control over it. The blade itself turns a crimson red coloring as if the metal was dyed and seven symbols of stars appear along both faces of the sword. The seven stars glow a white light at all times on both sides, like stars lit up, the light pulsing slightly.






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Shikai Abilities:
Shikai Power:
The element of Light: Carter’s Zan spirit is attuned to the forces of light and it will progress deeper on in his power set.
Light Manipulation: Using his advanced ability in Kido that gives him higher ability to control and do energy based attacks Carter can knowingly manipulate the element of light, shaping it into various things, he can even add his spiritual energy to light photons to lift the theoretical limiters that light can move at giving it more energy. For things to exist they need either mass or energy, without one or the other something cannot exist, since light has no mass it is pure energy and gains more energy the faster it moves, with Carter applying his spirit energy to light he can force the speed of light to increase so much that the energy output can make light appear solid, not in the sense of weight but in the ability to use light energy as barriers and means of attack. He has been seen to increase the amount of electromagnetic radiation output of light he has manipulated.
Light Body infusement: The power of light can be absorbed into his own body making him psychically stronger and faster, accelerating his thought process and his muscle reaction time. The ability to infuse his body with light amplifies his energy reserves as the particles are broken down and absorbed into his own being. Note that it isn’t limitless and any ability involving replenishing his energy reserves of modifying his body with light runs risks of destruction from the force added in being too much.
Light Combat: Just as he can infuse light based energy into his body he can infuse his attacks, giving energy to kido as well as his own Zanpakutō.

Shiaki Techniques:

Bright White Defense: Slamming the blade of his Zanpakutō into the ground a barrier forms around him; it takes the shape of a non descript cylinder around him that extends twenty feet above his being into the air, and eight feet all around him. The form of the young shinigami can be seen inside the bright light but his details cannot be made out. Being that it’s created with light based particles he can created small openings in it to release kido spells from inside the defense without breaking the technique due to his high willpower. The drawback is he can only cast kido up to number 73 and only five attacks can be made before the technique can’t be sustained.

Note: any time Carter creates an opening to fire kido out he is also creating a small opening in which he can be attacked himself.

  • 0 Tiers: one to two rounds are needed to destroy the defensive wall, 0-2 to 0-3 need only a round while those higher up and equal to Carter require two rounds
  • 1 Tier: three rounds are needed to break through
  • 2 Tier: five rounds needed of continued attack to break through.
  • 3 Tier: seven rounds required.
  • 4 Tier and above: 15 rounds required for the large gap in power levels.

Note that this is subject to change as his power level increases

Speeding Warrior: Given he can infuse the energy of light into his own body Carter can use this to amplify his speed one level from its current level but it caps off at Master for now, the same goes for his own strength. Also his mental deduction increases one level due to the accelerated thought coming from sped up connections in his young head. Each burst lasts for a maximum of three rounds.

Max usage per fight 3

Draw back: With any ability that enhances the body side effects will be had. After more than uses of this in a single go of Shikai he can feel his muscles tearing and he can taste blood in his mouth while it also drips from his nose. Upon using the sixth time brain damage occurs from over stimulation and muscles shear to the point of no return.

Bright Cannon: Pointing his sword at the enemy the seven stars light up on the blade of his Zanpakutō before lifting off the weapon and circling it while a central light forms into a ball at the blades tip. The light from the atmosphere filters down along with his own energy before releasing itself in a Bean that shoots off like a massive arrow at an enemy. The beam itself appears tipped like a sword and moves past the speed of mach one. The destructive force behind the beam is on par with his kido level. Durability of the higher level than his kido level negates the attack but any durability at or below his own takes full damage. The power behind it enough to level a two story building, but the hole left from contact with flesh is narrow, unlike the actual size of the beam, the hole left appears no wider than his actual Zanpakutō’s blade.

Blinding Light: The Zanpakutō glows and with each connection with an opponent’s weapon a blast of light is let out facing them and away from Carter to momentarily blind them.

Draw Back: The draw back is that a higher focus than Carter's zanjutsu beats this ability since it is illusion based they can see through the guise and the blinding white light vanishes just as soon as it appears bringing reality back.

Light Fuel: Taking in light energy he can replenish his own energy reserves feeling revitalized. He comes back up to 60% fighting power and can begin using all abilities again on top of kido based attacks as if he is well rested. Note that he does not get a do over on his Speeding Warrior technique as this ability doesn’t heal him, his wounds are still present and his body is still damaged from any attack taken but now he has energy to keep fighting.

Drawback: After using this attack once Carters speed decreases by half a level for three rounds from the influx of energy causing large muscle groupings to cramp. Usage more than once a thread would result in fatal cardiac arrest.

Shining Sword Dance:The Zanpakutō becomes encased in light again and he swings as if striking at an enemy from a distance. Upon activating the swing light manifests in a condensed manner close to the opponent moving in the manner the Zanpakutō is. The light strikes with the same realness of the weapon, slicing into enemies and also burning the wounds as they cleave through. This power can be stacked with Speeding Warrior to make it hard to see his movements until it’s too late. After each strike the light vanishes only to appear again where the Zanpakutō would be striking at if it were close enough.

Note: This light can cut through any and all things a zanpakuto can, when this attack is used in Carter's release state it can even be used to counter energy based attacks.




Bankai Description: A white robe forms over his being, much like the shroud of his Zanpakutō spirit but it’s the inverse of her own, black lights twinkle in the white fabric with a swirling black mass of countless black lights. Where his Zan Spirit has a shroud that appears to be a copy of the universe inside of it he holds the same but all of the stars are black and the darkness is now white, the white giving off a pulsating light.
Nacuto herself turns into an orb of floating light behind Carter’s head but can move at the speed of light to reform back into a weapon in Carter’s left hand so he isn’t left defenseless from incoming attacks.
In her sword form she is now a large buster styled sword, the blade itself standing at four feet in height and being two feet across. The thickness is two inches but the blade doesn’t appear to be made of metal, now it’s a black vortex with countless spinning lights appearing to show a depiction of the universe, showing a glimpse of her inner world. The handle is elongated so two hands can grasp it with ease but Carter can swing it and use it perfectly fine single handedly. The handle itself is made of the crystal asteroid floating in his inner world, a faint light glowing in the core. The blade is double sided so he can attack again on the pull back after any attack.

Bankai Abilities:
Immense Energy Output: Given that he is an energy based character and his Bankai is his full Zanpakutō release his energy abilities come to realization in their full form minus his angelic release but that will be brought up later on. His body becomes a conduit for energy and his immense willpower allows him to hold it all under control and give it out in fully formed attacks with the light elemental power behind it.

Supreme Light Control: Given his ability to manipulate light and create defenses from it in Shiaki the ability carries over to here with full mastery, he can bend the properties of light, giving it density, change the beams that emit from it so that certain cones of color don’t come through and potentially render opponents blinded, change the direction of the light beams and focus them into attacks, shifting the beams the light moves in he can create mirage like objects and give them energy by having the light that creates them move at such speed from his spiritual power that it adds excessive energy to them, this can also be used defensively to slow incoming attacks, using light and the energy he has added to it he can create a force that pushes back against whatever is coming is way in an attempt to slow an attack or to flat out stop it.

The energy drain needed to stop incoming attacks varies depending on the type of attack and the level the user has in it. For example given his rank in kido of Elite if he were to counter a kido based attack under his level the drain would be roughly 10% of his energy, kido level equal to would be 30% and kido level higher would take 40%. The defensive ability ability to slow incoming attacks only applies to energy based attacks, anyone attacking using their body is unhindered by his potential slowing factor.

Enhanced Shiaki Abilities: He retains his Shiaki abilities and they all get an over haul in power, all counters listed to them are halved Minus those who have GM in the counters listed, they still stand in place that they were so for example it states that a 0 tier can break through his bright white defense in a single post, now though due to his enhanced power out put and usage of Shiaki abilities it would take two posts and so on and so forth for the other tiers listed.

Energy Based Resistance: Given his own power and being one of the Angels of Truth Carter's light affinity supersedes any energies within a 25 foot radius around his being and lessening the effect of other elemental abilities targeting him. This will not negate the attacks but will instead protect Carter from 25% of attacks in this scope.

Bankai Techniques:

Seeking Light: A white light opens up above Carter and moves toward where he points his Zanpakutō, those who fall under the light become under fire from beams of pure light, the energy of the beams is so condensed they smash into the opponent with the force of a steel beam, they are assaulted by ten beams of light at once moving at speeds equal to Carter’s and carrying the power of kido at his current level. Each beam weighs 2,000 pounds, being twelve feet tall and five feet wide, the beam is created from hyper condensed light that has had carter's spritual pressure added in to give it weight and force. The point of this attack is to pin an enemy under the beams before the true assault begins from increased radiation that is given off, the amount of radiation from the light being equal to a human nuclear warhead but equally dispersed outside of the area of the beams as to not harm bystanders or allies.

Durabiltiy higher than the kido level of Carter takes 20% damage
Durability of the same level as his Kido level takes 45% of the damage with only major burns over 80% of their bodies and potential blindess.

Durability under Carter’s Kido level takes the full blast.

Sol Blade: The image of the universe is now replaced with a swirling flaming orb in the core of the blade, the image being a miniature version of the sun. The blade puts off a gravity push that makes it seem heavier when it hits an enemies weapon, each hit making the area around the person Carter is attacking crack and deepen as the gravity in the area becomes 15 times strong than earth’s, mimic’ing the suns. The blade itself gives off heat in the form of light that pours out of it with each hit at the same temperature of the Sun’s surface at 9,941 degrees Fahrenheit. The heat dispraises quickly aiming only to harm the enemy under attack of this weapon, the gravity doesn’t affect Carter because the handle of the weapon makes gravity 15 times lighter on whoever is wielding the weapon to balance it out.
Durability higher than Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido levels takes one fourth of the damage here, the affect of gravity only being 3.75 times higher than earth’s and the heat from the blade coming at 2,485 degrees Fahrenheit.
Durability at the same level as Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido takes one half the damage with gravity at 7.5 times higher and the heat output being 4,970 degrees Fahrenheit.
Any Durability lower takes full damage.

Given the power needed to wield this sword Carter can maintain it for a maximum of seven posts before needing to release it with a radius of 20 meters.

Light Beam Net: The countless beams of light magnify to the point of actually being observed close to Carter’s right palm and fuse themselves together like an over sized fishing net knitting itself into existence, it expands outward at all angles from his being for a max distance of 100 meters. The purpose of this net is twofold, to encase enemies and begin assaulting them with countless projectiles of light that all shoot off at Elite kido level power. Each projectile being in the shape of an arrow and each arrow manifesting from the streams of the net itself, the range of attack is all encompassing for anyone caught inside the net. The second purpose of this net is to disperse energy based attacks coming at Carter, the net works in the same fashion firing the countless light arrows at the attack speeding toward him in an attempt to lessen if not utterly destroy the attack, each arrow projects a minuscule light particle that dulls the incoming energy into light energy before releasing it from the openings in the net, as the energy is released the air around the holes in the net shimmers from the heat given off, much like air above black top on a hot summer day. If an enemy is hit with these arrows they do the same thing with dispersing energy they are currently out putting. The speed the light net is cast at is equal with Carter’s speed. So for now it’s advanced.
If the opponent has durability or speed ability at Gm level they can defend perfectly from this attack.
Durability and speed above Carter’s Kido level takes 25% of damage, meaning they are ridden with light based arrows that lower their power.
Durability and speed and his Kido level take 45% damage.
Any lower takes full damage.


End Game Light Blast: Given the manipulation of light Carter can increase the speed of the wave lengths of photons of lights to make areas of light go from the slower moving visible section of the electromagnetic spectrum to gamma rays, this is done by making the wave lengths of the photons shorter in a sense to speed them up. The blast comes out in a 360 degree field from Carter and has a max range of 35 meters. The Reiatsu from the blast affects cells by making them non functional and on the surface this appears to be alright since the body is full of countless cells, but given his mastery of light manipulation he places the real damage in the light explosion to cause this cellular decay, all those hit by this beam quickly begin to watch as their skin turns black, each of the countless cells dying and their bodies rotting away in front of their eyes. That is if their eyes don’t blink out first. The blindness can be fixed by outside forces, if the opponent has a way to repair the damage.

Given that the attack isn’t visible due to how fast the photon’s are traveling a warning in the form of Carter’s golden eyes turning pure white and his chest lighting up from the inside is given and his spirit pressure increases to its full power which is notable because before now his pressure has no feeling period due to his angelic abilities.

Range: This blast comes out from Carter's body itself, using him as the epicenter the blast goes out in all areas around Carter in a 35 meter globe, after the 35 meters the energy used in this attack rapidly dissipates making the light return back to normal much like his fracture light ability.

Drawback: This attack is a trump card ability for Carter and given it's potency it depletes 80% of his total energy levels and makes it impossible to continue using his Bankai state unless his energy can be recovered, it even cuts his max usage of shiaki down by half after usage.

Given that he becomes the focal point of this blast it weakens his own defenses and drops his durability by one level for 5 rounds before he can recover.

Durability higher than his Kido takes 25% damage

Durability on par with his Kido takes 45% damage in the shape of major organ damage, high levels of skin tissue ruined, and muscles deteriorated to a point where they are almost useless.

Durability under his kido level takes the full brunt of this attack, the damage of cell destruction being so high that there is a very high chance the opponent wouldn't be able to keep fighting after being struck by this attack.


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ANGELIC POWERS/SKILLS: Note that when in angel form the follower under the path of radiance retains all abilities they previously had but they gain a “holy” element to them making them more deadly to demonic forces. Angels also have abilities and traits listed under the racial sheet as well.
Angel of Radiance:
Angel Form:
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Powers: In this angelic form he gains no new powers save for the ones listed to all angels as well as his previous listed powers.


Angel of Radiance Release State

Form:
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Powers:

Hounding Light: In release state Carter manifests a ball of light on his right palm that produces up to 30 spears of light that shoot outward and intercept oncoming energy projectile attacks, using the speed the light moves at the attacks are torn down and assimilated so that the light can manage to learn the energy to track the source by finding the wave lengths the energy travels on and the spears of light hone in on the caster before detaching from Carter’s palm and rocketing off at the opponent, for up to a six mile radius. These thirty beams of light can be separated into two groups of fifteen and attack at two different angles based. They move at Carter’s speed when he utilizes Lux Gradus ability meaning the light projectiles travel at masters speed. This ability is much like Hadō 91 except for it can follow the opponent once it has been cast if they evade it. The power from this attack is the same as the power of this Hadō cast at Elite level. Once the spears of light enter the body they begin to burn from the inside. They need to be psychically removed for risk of holes burning through the body.

The most base way of evading these beams would be to travel outside of their range or to out muscle them.

Current usage of 5 per fight

  • Order of Burns
  • First round impaled: Major burning is felt throughout the body, skin is bubbling up and melting away around points of impact, already at 3rd degree burn level.
  • Second round: the burns have spread out from the point of impact and the skin is past the bubbling and melting, the muscle underneath is visible and rapidly burning away, nerve endings are already fired past the point of feeling.

  • Third round: Bones are exposed and burnt black already, major organs have suffered damage almost past the point of reversal.

  • Fourth round: The light spears vanish as the fuel of the body they had pierced has vanished at this point, the opponent has neutralized as a threat at this point from major organ damage.



Stellar Explosion: In the palms of Carter’s hands a ball of light forms gleaming like the light given off from his body and his hands rapidly spread apart until a miniature star has formed, the star being the size of an economy sized car. The orb is highly dense from the stellar energy and the orb floats above Carter’s head as four more orbs form out of Carter’s body, these four lights are the size of tennis balls and they float up to the miniature star before being caught in a gravity pull and swirling around it, each rotation speeding the four orbs up until they move at a blur, a flash of light each time they come around. If an opponent is within 100 meters of Carter the gravity from the main star lowers their speed by half a level, this also applies to Carter himself.

At will Carter can free an orb from the star and send it flying at an opponent, the ball of light moving Carter's Lux Gradus speed. When within 5 meters of the opponent it was cast at the light expands outward like a star going super nova, the light exploding at the size of a fifteen kiloton Little Boy Nuclear bomb like what was dropped in Hiroshima. The power doesn’t expand far outward, the concussive force only going out up to 100 feet and the actual energy explosion having a max range of 50 feet from where it detonated. Evasion of this attack is difficult.

This attack can only be used 3 times a thread at his current power.

Durability equal to Carter's kido takes 45% of the attacks damage, durability under this level takes the full force of the attack.

GM durability takes 15% damage and Masters takes 20% damage, the hit causing a large number of broken bones as well as radiation burns all over the body on top of loss of hair.


Note: when in the realm of heaven as he was training with cirno this ability had a much higher energy output with more projectiles created and each projectile exploded four times over instead of a singular explosion. Outside of the heaven realm this attack appears to be a much weaker version of its perfect state.






Star Wielder: This ability is much like a greatly improved version of his Sol Blade his Zanpakutō breaks down and becomes one with his being. In its place a diamond in the shape of a star with seven points appears in his fused to his skin over the top of his hand. Stellar energy comes forth from all seven points and condenses into a singular beam that extends four feet past Carter’s left hand. The energy blade is made up much like a star, giving off immense heat and being incredibly dense. The hit from the blade causes the ground to fracture and craters to form, the only reason Carter can wield it is form his heightened willpower that lets him manipulate the weight of the blade around his being so that it doesn’t crush him given his lower strength. Hits from this can break bones easily and heavily damage a zanpakuto or weapon equal to one.

damage to zanpakuto for tiers:
0 tier 0%
1 tier 5%
2 tier 15%
3 tier 25%
4 tier 40%
5 tier 60%
6 tier 85%
Max usage 5 rounds

Counters: This attack is taxing on Carter in the sense that he has to focus on maintaining the balance or has to release the blade, even with his Elite willpower he cannot use this heavy sword and attack with another ability at the same time or run the risk of shattering his arm.
Any durability under Advanced runs the risk of bones breaking from colliding with this weapon; durability over advanced isn’t affected by the staggering weight. The blade can pin an enemy under it and those with any strength under Advanced cannot lift it to free themselves. Those with strength high enough can lift it off and keep fighting, also not that the weapon does give off heat so it causes burns that move at the same rate that the durability does. Anything below advanced durability suffers major 3rd degree burns with whatever part of the body they defend with.

Elite durability takes 45% of the damage

Master durability and above only take 25% of this attack at Carter's current level

Stellar Being: Carter’s body turns into a living star and it heightens his durability to Elite level while in his release state, his kido level also rises to Elite as well, for now, from his energy based being. This ability is passive since it’s his actual body’s form while in his release state.








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General Skills
  • Durability: Advanced
  • General Speed: Advanced
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Elite


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Adept
  • Kidō: Elite
  • Zanjutsu: Advanced
  • Hakuda: Beginner



Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Focus: Advanced


Angel Racial Skills:
  • Aetherium: Elite
  • Divina purificatione: Adept
  • Pura: Advanced
  • Vastator Mali: Beginner

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» Item Name: Kowareta (lit. Broken.)
» Primary Information:

» Item Description:
This particular item was originally a blade, a Wakazishi. However, for its true purpose, this complete state simply would not do. Therefore, the blade was broken, before being modified. Now, it has the ability to have the wielder's spirit energy laced within it. As a result, the blade itself will be its normal size once activated by its wielder. More than that, by the wielder pouring in more and more energy inside of it, it can grow in length. More than this, however, it can also grow in size. With enough power, this tiny broken blade could become the size of a building, as strong as the wielder makes it. Granted, this is not instantaneous, as the blade can only rapidly grow about a foot at a time. Everything after that must be 'charged up'. Another interesting fact about this blade is that it can release a 'pulse' from its blade.

This 'pulse' releases a wave of pure force away from the blade, causing the user's body to most likely spin around as a result. This presents a new way for attack, and can throw off an opponent who is not expecting this kind of movement.
(A gift given to him from the holiday event)

: BH1 (Blind Harvester First Gen) with cyber brain enhancement x20
Tier: 4-1
Item Description: Most BH1's are shown to be like wild animals due to their low brain capacity, rapid instincts from all the power flowing through their veins and so they could can perform better in combat. However, they are programmed to serve either KJ or the owner of the robot. You could think of these as domestic animals waiting to be trained by their masters.

The robot can also be swapped out with a PhathomTech brain or Cyber Brain.

Reitsu Bullets: The BH1 can fire bullets of energy from the guns attached to their body. They feed from the reitsu and energy inside of the BH1 and fire up to several hundred rounds per minute.

Laser Blast: The BH1 can fire powerful orange beams of destruction from the orange glowing hole on each guns and the two tentacles attached to it's back. This blast may also cause some of the skin of it's opponents to burn or melt away due to the acid stored in it's body. It may even goes as far as to even melt their bones in some cases depending on how much power they use.

Scythes: The BH1 can use the four scythes attached to his body to fend off any close range opponent in battle. The scythes that have the orange glow to them can also be heated in order to burn the skin of it's opponent.

Burning: Any part of the BH1's body that is seen glowing can be heated up and used to burn any opponent due to the intense amount of acid stored in it's body.

Dagger: The BH1's tail can also be used as a dagger of sorts to stab it's enemy.

Blades: It can also use the blades under each of the guns for close range combat as well

Brute Force: Due to it's immense size, the BH1 also has a good amount of brute strength to it. It can also withheld a good number of attacks thanks to the powerful steel KJ created for it's body along with Hierro obtained from Arrancar.

Flight: Thanks to the bio samples from shinigami, the BH1 can also use the reishi in the air in order to

Flash Step/Shunpo: The BH1 also obtained the ability to use flash step due to the bio samples from the shinigami.

Cero/Bala: From it's mouth, the BH1 can also fire cero's/bala's. Though this takes much more energy

General Skills
  • Durability: Elite
  • General Speed: Adept
  • Strength: Advanced
  • Weapon Skill: N/A


T h e E c l i p s e ] x2

Item Description: This is a powerful machine that fires a super powered laser blast that can level an entire city. If there are more around, there is no telling how much destruction they could cause. It also has a touch-screen interface to select how much power you want put into the beam. And, you can go over the limit and destroy much more then a city, but at the cost of potentially either breaking the machine or having it explode.

And, if that wasn't enough, they can also be strengthened by whoever is behind it by them putting each of their hands inside two tubes on their left and right in the command center. From there, it will suck the reitsu out of your body to make it stronger, fuse it with the laser beam and cause more destruction.

NOTE: Only one may be used at a time with the max destructive power of leveling an island and after using that much power the weapon "breaks" and needs to be repaired before future usage.



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    Speeding Warrior: Given he can infuse the energy of light into his own body Carter can use this to amplify his speed one level form its current level but it caps off before GM the same goes for his own strength. Also his mental deduction increases one level due to the accelerated thought coming from sped up connections in his young head.
    Draw back: With any ability that enhances the body side effects will be had. After five uses of this in a single go of Shikai he can feel his muscles tearing and he can taste blood in his mouth while it also drips from his nose. Upon using the sixth time brain damage occurs from over stimulation and muscles shear to the point of no return.

    How long does this enhancement last? I'd say it should last three post before it gives out.

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    Blinding Light: The Zanpakutō glows and with each connection with an opponent’s weapon a blast of light is let out facing them and away from Carter to momentarily blind them.
    Draw Back: Mental deduction higher than Carter’s Zanjutsu negates this ability, those with the same level as his zanjutsu are blinded for a single round while all those under are blinded for two

    How exactly does having a higher mental deduction defend against a beam of light making you blind? That doesn't make sense. You should reword that and rework it as it confuses me.

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    Light Fuel: Taking in light energy he can replenish his own energy reserves feeling revitalized. He comes back up to 75% fighting power and can begin using all abilities again on top of kido based attacks as if he is well rested. Note that he does not get a do over on his Speeding Warrior technique as this ability doesn’t heal him, his wounds are still present and his body is still damaged from any attack taken but now he has energy to keep fighting. This can only be used once per thread and after using visible bruises appear on his body from blood appearing under the skin from the enhanced stress. Using more than once would cause all the blood vessels in his blood to explode and he would internally bleed out.

    I'd lower that to 60% instead of 75% when it comes to the heal.

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    Sol Blade: The image of the universe is now replaced with a swirling flaming orb in the core of the blade, the image being a miniature version of the sun. The blade puts off a gravity push that makes it seem heavier when it hits an enemies weapon, each hit making the area around the person carter is attacking crack and deepen as the gravity in the area becomes 28 times strong than earth’s, mimic’ing the suns. The blade itself gives off heat in the form of light that pours out of it with each hit at the same temperature of the Sun’s surface at 9,941 degrees Fahrenheit. The heat dispraises quickly aiming only to harm the enemy under attack of this weapon, the gravity doesn’t affect Carter because the handle of the weapon makes gravity 28 times lighter on whoever is wielding the weapon to balance it out.
    Durability higher than Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido levels takes one fourth of the damage here, the affect of gravity only being 7 times higher than earth’s and the heat from the blade coming at 2,485 degrees Fahrenheit.
    Durability at the same level as Carter’s Zanjutsu and Kido takes one half the damage with gravity at 14 times higher and the heat output being 4,970 degrees Fahrenheit.
    Any Durability lower takes full damage.

    I'd lower it to 15 times earth's gravity. I'm giving leeway here because supernatural beings are naturally more durable than humans. The reason being is because two to four times earth's gravity would be enough to severely injure them. So imagine what 28 could do.

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• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A

  • Comments/Fixes:

    Over-arching fixes: Any mention of master in any ability that is not specifically addressed in the fixes below needs to be dropped to elite or his current skill mastery due to the change in skill mastery tiering since carters last check.

    Over-Arching fixes: Any mention of energy assimilation that is outside of the hounding light technique, which is solely used for the sustained duration of hounding lights binding of the opponent needs to be removed.

    Fractured Light: in this skill the instant blindness is currently at beginner/adept, that needs to be shifted to untrained durability. There should be no detrimental effects to anyone over adept durability in relation to a reduced turn count for damage. Any mentions of energy-assimilation need to be removed. I also want to see a turn limitation for this technique due to how powerful it is.

    Bright White Defense: It's fine if the defense can defend against two attacks from someone of a similar tier range as carter (for example 0-5 vs 0-5+) however if there is a large tier gap (0-5 vs 0-3/0-2) it would only take one hit. This is because of the energy gap that is seen between a 0-5 and a 0-3/0-2. Which is as sizable as the gap you would see between a 2-1 fighting a 1-1, if not larger.

    End-Game Light-Blast Fixes: In your break-down of how this affects opponents you state that opponents whose durability level is a mastery level below your kido level will take full damage, and could potentially kill your opponent. I want this changed so that this will only occur if there is a sizable gap (for example elite kido versus adept durability) even then this can only be done with character permission or during death enabled threads. Like all abilities, there may be outside influences that change that outcome.

    Durability on par with carters kido should only take 45% of the damage of the attack, because 75% is too high a damage modifier. Durability of a higher skill-mastery that carters kido should only take 30% damage. Finally i would like some limitation on the number of times this can be used in a thread.

    Speeding Warrior: This technique needs to be altered as well. There will be a hard cap at master in terms of his capacity of augmentation. This is due to the fact that currently Master is the low end of what priorily was considered to be GM. it is a massive gap which should not be bridged by an augmentative technique. However, I will allow the technique to increase his mastery level by one, and at master allow it to increase his capacities by 40%. As well, I want a hard cap of 3 uses a thread for this technique, due to the degree of augmentation, as well as the strain that would feasibly have on the body.

    Seeking Light fixes: I would like to see the statements refferring to master level kido swapped with the term "Of his current skill mastery". Reason being that the connotation of master is different than it was previously and currently Carters kido mastery level would not be at master. 18 beams is too much, i want to see it reduced to 10.

    living star fixes: needs to be reduced to elite durability/kido. At master/elite skill-levels, this technique would only allow a percentage boost of 40% (at elite skill-level) and 20% (at master skill level), you can let it have a 20% percentage boost if your character reaches GM skill mastery in kido/durability as well. I will not be allowing passive skill-mastery jumps after elite due to the level of potency elite/master/gm are at.

    sol blade fixes: this is a very powerful ability so i want to see a 5-7 turn limit on it, and I want the scope of gravity to be contained in a 20 meter radius around him.

    Star Wielder fixes: Similar with Sol blade, i want a 5 turn limit on this technique. Willpower needs to be dropped to elite, and it can only heavily damage a zanpakuto which is in base state, there will be no zanpakuto destruction from this technique due to the durability and strength of most zanpakuto (especially when they are in their released states)





    Stellar Explosion Fixes: This is a highly draining technique. I need to see a limit for how many times a thread this can be used. 2-3 times a thread would be the limit for this technique, and that would be at the point that carter would be completely drained.

    Energy Resistance fixes: You state in energy resistance (see bankai section of the app) that your character can halve all elemental damage done to him based on him being capable of controlling a higher affinity. This needs to be changed to 25%, the reason being is that a 50% reduction on all elemental attacks is too broad a reduction for a passive. even 25% is extremely potent for a passive skill.

    Hounding Light Fixes: for hounding light, I want to see a cap of five uses a thread. This is the current limitation for the utilization of this skill. Reason being that such a high-energy skill, which is on par with a Hadō 91 technique, would not be able to be used indefinitely. Note this is the limit in which he would be drained of all energy from the utilization of this technique.

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