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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Arrancar Character Application   Sat Feb 27, 2016 1:47 am

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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Sun Feb 28, 2016 3:53 pm

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [0]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [0]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [0]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination:
  • Mental Deduction:
  • Pain Endurance:
  • Focus:


Comments/Notes: Welcome to the site, first of all. I'll be the one handling your check today, so let's hope it all goes well! If there are any issues with it that you don't understand, you're free to either reply here, or PM me. With that out of the way, let's start the check!

The first issue that's immediately seen is that the history is not divided up into three paragraphs. Rulings on this site are that every character's histories must be 3-5 paragraphs long. The amount of sentences in each paragraph can vary, but having at least 5 is the best way to go per paragraph!

Secondly, in his history, it states that he managed to regain his memories. Since this is typically a thing that normally doesn't happen at all, I'm going to have to say that it won't exactly be possible for him to just regain his memories as it was stated. Because of this, I would like if that section of his history was omitted.

Third, the way his Zanpakutō works is a bit odd, and led to a few questions needing to be asked, but it is allowed. Zanpakutō for Arrancar are typically just a weapon for them to abuse, so having it be a soul split with it's own personality and everything is a bit abstract in terms of how things usually go. Because of this, I'm trusting that nothing really odd or weird will happen with it, so that part is good to go.

Now for his powers!

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1.Reiatsu shielding and manipulation (can focus Reiatsu into a outside shield made of said Reiatsu and manipulate the shields at will by altering density and form)

Just how strong can the shielding become, and how much can he actually shift it? Could he make this shield suddenly have spikes that shoot out at attackers, or can he only make it thicker to take blows up to 1.5x of what he could normally handle?

@flutterbatty wrote:
3.Plant Generation - The user can generate plants, including vines, moss, fungi, and parts of the plants, such as leaves, seeds, fruits and flowers, whether by drawing them from already existing plants, or by manifesting them anywhere they want. (effectiveness Based on rank and Reiatsu)

How much does it drain him f his energy, and is there a limit to how much he could create with this ability?

@flutterbatty wrote:
4.Plant Manipulation - can cause plants and parts of the plants, including petals, stems and pollen, to grow and bloom, move/attack, mutate flowers by rearranging DNA structure, and revive withered or dead flowers. (Weak to things like fire and intense cold. including his own.)

What are the limits to this ability?

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5.Healing Cero: can channel his cero into that of one that heals instead of harms by focusing it in a unique way

Could this unique way of healing be described? Along with that, just how much energy does he need to put into the Healing Cero in order for it to heal? How much can it heal as well?

These are the only problems with the application, but none of them are hard fixes and just require a little bit of editing! If you need any help at all, please, don't be afraid to ask for it!

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Sun Feb 28, 2016 5:32 pm

ill gladly discuss anything withya dragon. this is my first application on this site so feel free to pm or im me and ill gladly discuss changes and better detail my limits
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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Wed Mar 02, 2016 4:37 pm

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [0]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [0]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination:
  • Mental Deduction:
  • Pain Endurance:
  • Focus:


Comments/Notes: Heading right into it, sorry for the delay, there was a bit of an issue with my ability to even type properly as of late, but I can officially check it now!

For his Reiatsu shielding ability, having it be at the flat strength of a Zanpakutō is fairly strong, along with the fact that there isn't really a strain listed to it. I'm personally not okay with a shield of that strength all around his body considering that Zanpakutō already are naturally strong and is someone's main way of defense and offense. If someone could just make a shield around them of the same strength, there really would be no need for the weapon in the first place. I'd like for it to be weaker, perhaps something similar to having a second shielding of hierro with heavy strain whenever it's attacked by a strong force.

Quite plainly, how big of a plant can he make for his plant generation?

Finally, for his Healing Cero, could it be explained -how- this cero heals people? It can have more energy, but with an explanation like that, that's just a stronger cero. I would heavily prefer a description on how it heals and how that energy is applied to a person to heal rather than tear a hole through them with the typical uses of a cero.

Asides from that, there are no other qualms present!

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Fri Mar 25, 2016 4:58 am

[mod]I want to know the current updates about the member/character since i hardly heard from flutter considering that the last check was on 3rd of March. If not, i'll be moving it to W.I.P.[/mod]

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Thu Mar 31, 2016 2:38 am


«MOVING THIS CHARACTER NOW»

Moving this into WIP since it has been nearly a week and there has been no response to the update of this application.

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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Arrancar Character Application   Tue Jun 14, 2016 7:13 am

[mod]Beep Boop! Just checking in real quick to see if this is still being worked on! If it is, just drop a message right on here, if not, you can ask for this to be archived riiight here! http://www.platinumhearts.net/t9712-the-staff-request-thread-for-moves-archives-locking-or-whatever-else-you-need-staff-for

If you don't respond in three days, rules state that I will have to move it into archived, so if that does happen, just drop a message over to the staff request thread and we'll move it right on back to WIP![/mod]

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