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I. Basic Information


» Name: Vrael Umaroth
» Name: The Frozen Soul
» Age: Unkown, suspected to be at least thirty years of age.
» Gender: Male
» Race: Hollow (Adjuchas)

» Association: n/a

» Appearance Written: Initially the main thing one notices about Vrael is the height of his skeletal form. Towering over the normal height of most beings Vrael stands at nine feet one inch tall, that is further enhanced by his choice of hat. Next one would likely notice that somehow, the skeleton that is Vrael appears to possess a full head of hair, specifically quite the afro. Generally Vrael can be seen wearing one of two different styles of clothing. The first being a gentlemanly style as he would say, while the second being Vrael's representation of a 'rock star'.

The more gentlemanly style of clothing Vrael possesses consists of mostly black, with only the coat showing a difference in color via its inner lining of orange coloration. Aside from the coat Vrael's attire also consists of a black pair of pants, a black top hat, and black dress shoes. Alas because of his years of isolation and neglect the outfit has become a bit tattered.

The 'rock star' style that Vrael has chosen consists of brighter, more colorful, high end clothing. Heart-shaped sunglasses, a yellow feather boa, a top hat with a giant crown on the brim, and orange red trousers with a floral design are what this particular outfits includes.

» Appearance Images: One, two, three, four, five, six, seven, and eight.


II. Personality


» Personality: As a Hollow the being known as Vrael tends to, at times, be driven by the same instinct of his fellow Hollows. Hunger. The need to devour other souls in order to maintain ones power & current form, less he were to regress to the hulking mass that is a Gillian. Beyond this primal drive Vrael is decently unique among his race. Capable of moments of surprising compassion, respect, honor, driven by his comrades. But like many others, he has his methods to hide the pain of existing as a Hollow. To push through the primal hunger, and the loneliness, Vrael wears a mask of a jester. Projecting laughter & joy when he can the hollow can be seen as quite the joker at times.. But again, this is but a mask to hide what is at the core of his being. Beyond this is one were to find themselves on his wrong side Vrael becomes as cold as the very abilities he uses. All sense of morals vanish, the joy is gone, enjoyment of the moment is gone.. Everything is just gone & all that remains is the cold Hollow that Vrael truly is.


III. History


» History:

Date: Saturday, July 9th 2416.
Location: Unknown body of water.


Gazing into the reflection of the waters before himself Vrael could only look back on his past.. Or at least as much of it as he could remember.. He could only sit in contemplation as memories rushed through his mind.. Memories of his life as he could remember it...

--- --- --- --- --- ---

Date: Unknown, 2386 - 2390.
Location: Somewhere in Hueco Mundo.


The first memory that Vrael could recall was darkness, and nothing else. Time was meaningless wherever he was.. If he was anywhere. All Vrael knew at this point was simply that he was. Nothing more. Nothing less. He didn't even know how long he had been for. For an unknown span of time, four years in the world outside of Vrael's current reality, Vrael's existence in the darkness continued even as he could feel others. Eventually one day, the patient soul that was Vrael, would finally feel an overwhelming sense of accomplishment, success, and power. Following these feelings Vrael would see the light of the world for the first time that he could recall.

The next memory Vrael could recall from the same time frame was seeing his appearance for the first time. And discovering, or realizing, he wasn't quite sure which yet, just what he was. To say that seeing his reflection in a glassed section of Hueco Mundo had surprised him would be an understatement. Upon seeing said reflection the form of Vrael stood motionlessly for a time, its gaze locked onto the glass before him. In the reflection Vrael saw for the first time just what he looked like. Looking back at him Vrael saw something he wasn't expecting.. A skeleton.. Tall as fuck. But still a skeleton. Something within him had almost expected himself to appear monstrous for some reason.

Gazing at his reflection Vrael could only wonder how. This was because the form he now bore was nothing but bones, and an afro. There was no flesh, no muscle, no nerve tissue to hold him together.. So how was his form held together.. He just didn't understand. But that wasn't all that confused him. The most confusing thing, at the moment, was his sight. As far as he could tell from his reflection he had NO EYES! So how was it that he could see? Just thinking about it hurt his head..

--- --- --- --- --- ---

Date: Unknown, 2400.
Location: Somewhere in Hueco Mundo.


Nearly ten years would pass by as Vrael continued to struggle with his new appearance. It wasn't that the Hollow didn't like it, rather he just didn't understand his form, and it was that which bothered the Hollow. Discomfort with his form aside Vrael spent his days wondering Hueco Mundo, clashing with opposing hollow time and time again, such was life within the endless reaches of the white desert. And from this life Vrael was quickly learning one thing, to survive was to grow stronger, and growing stronger meant the hunger gnawed at his soul ever more. It was also from this lifestyle that Vrael would discover his ability to control ice and the temperature around himself. During those years he'd develop unique variations of his cero, mixing in his ability for different results. His final cultivation during this time would be his development of a unique form of Acidic Touch, once again using his abilities in combination with the hollow ability itself to create the new sub ability.

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Date: Unknown, 2405 - 2408.
Location: Somewhere in the Sahara Desert, Earth.


Eventually Vrael would find his way to Earth. Unfortunately the first trip there would be the least eventful, and one of the worst. After opening a Garganta the Hollow found himself somewhere he had never been before. Earth, specifically the Sahara Desert. While the vast sands weren't bothersome the heat of the landscape was. He could feel the heat on his bones & it was quite uncomfortable. Once in a while he'd come across a lost soul, feasting upon it instantly in an attempt to quell his growing hunger. Days later, on the brink of starvation Vrael would successfully open a Garganta once again & find his way home to the sands of Hueco Mundo.

--- --- --- --- --- ---

Date: Present
Location: Earth, Unnamed Island.

Presently Vrael, after several years of recovery & growth within his home of Hueco Mundo, left the place once again. Upon arriving on Earth a second time the Hollow spent time exploring the new world, learning of the different races & organizations. In this time he had decided on a life on the low, feeding when needed, remaining as unnoticed as possible. But now.. He heard whispers of changes planet-wide, saw the reports of events in another War, and finally heard tales of Nagato's actions in Hueco Mundo. It was time to return home and show what he was capable of.


IV. Equipment


» Tōketsu Sōru: Tōketsu Sōru, or Frozen Soul appears to be a simple purple cane at first glance, this is because the weapon is a prepared cane, or a shikomizue. The handle of the cane serves as the hilt and grip of the blade hidden within. Impeccably sharp on its own Tōketsu Sōru is capable of cutting through even the most durable of materials, including Sekkiseki. When enhanced by Vrael's reiatsu cutting through most things is as if taking a hot knife through butter. Unknown to Vrael it is not only the sharpness of the blade that allows it to cut through material like Sekkiseki, but also its durability. Durable enough to cut through said mineral the metals of the blade must be equally as, or more, durable than the material, while maintaining its sharpness. As such it could be said that Tōketsu Sōru is equally as durable.


V. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills


» Cero: Cero, a highly explosive energy based attack that serves as the staple ability of hollow-kind. While Vrael shows the ability to use the normal Cero that all Hollow are capable of the Adjuchas has also shown the capability of utilizing several variations of Cero by using Yomi no Reiki in combination with it. As of now the variations seen include the following;
  • Glacial Combine: This first variant is one that launches several cero's at once. Usually utilizing 5-10 cero's at once this variant focuses around creating cero infused needle-like shards of ice. Upon doing so Vrael will then launch these shards at the target. No matter the spread of the shards they will always home in upon each other, an inherit intent to 'combine' for an even more explosive result being built into each shard. Initial injuries from this variant can be akin to being pierced by nails, or broken branches at most, depending on the size of shards created. The follow up injury is where the damage truly comes in, especially if any shards end up in internal locations. Whether or not the shards manage to close in on each other enough to merge all shards will erupt soon after impacting the target, causing an explosion of icy shrapnel and deadly energy. The wound formed by the explosion, if not a complete combine, is equal to a diameter five times the size of the shard. If all shards manage to combine the explosion is multiplied in power by roughly ten times.
    • Two post cooldown at minimum size. Five at maximum. And three for any size in-between.


  • Frostbitten Spear: By channeling Yomi no Reiki into his cero as it forms Vrael can form this particular variation which works in a similar manner to Hyōga no Tatchi. When launched this cero has the appearance of an ice-like spear formed from pure energy, and as it travels it appears to freeze all it passes over/through within a range of five to twenty feet depending on how long Vrael charges it for.
    •Immediate cast has an area of effect of five feet from the traveling spear. One post charge, ten. Two post, twenty.


    Upon reaching the target this cero erupts into an explosion of extremely cold temperatures that can flash freeze most things caught in the blast. In the case of foes caught in this cero they would not only suffer the usual high energy explosion of a cero, but would also suffer the chilling effects of Yomi no Reiki seeping into their form attempting to freeze them, slowing their movement and other functions. As with most abilities the true effectiveness of this cero depends upon the strengths of the foe Vrael faces.
    • Upon an immediate cast the explosion expands roughly ten feet from the epicenter. If charged; One post will result in an explosion that extends twenty feet from its epicenter, a diameter of forty feet. Two posts will result in an explosion extending forty feet from its center, a diameter of eighty feet.
    • Immediate cast has a one post cooldown. One post charge, two posts. And two post charge, three posts.


» Garganta: Garganta is how Hollows and Arrancar move to and from Hueco Mundo. Though, due to recent discoveries by Zin Yuudeshi, it has been advanced to where it can even be used for speed-like purposes. For example, some advanced Hollow are now able to use this trait to form Garganta's for combat uses such as trapping attack's in them, unleashing hidden attacks or modifying the path that leads to Hueco Mundo to different realms. Therefore, as you increase your Garganta skill, these skills will come to your Hollow. Along with that, for each higher skill level, you will eventually be able to summon them much more quickly to use them for combat or defense.

» Lack of Flesh: An obvious fact from his skeletal appearance is that Vrael lacks any sign of flesh, muscle tissue, and even nerves. Because of this skeletal form that he has taken Vrael has gained several traits, listed below;
  • Ageless: The first trait that Vrael gained by his lack of flesh is physical agelessness. As long as he maintains this form Vrael will never show signs of growing elderly, nor is it possible to discern his true age from his physical appearance.

  • Inherit Immunities: Second on the list of traits gained is an inherit immunity to a few things that would normally plague those with flesh and blood bodies. One of these is that Vrael is immune to any poison, etc, that would need to have contact with flesh in order to do its work. Whereas any that can effect the bone structure, or are inhaled, can still infect Vrael.

    The second is an immunity from things like frostbite, or burns. Without flesh to grow colder and freeze Vrael will never feel the effects of frostbite, though even if he had a flesh and blood body his control over ice/cold temperatures would allow him a degree of immunity to the cold. It should be noted that an opponent whom possesses stronger control over similar elements, and/or is stronger than Vrael, they could potentially successfully freeze his joints and limbs. Two stronger examples of such persons would be Toshiro Hitsugaya, and Rukia Kuchiki. And without any tissue to burn he would never feel the effects of the early burn stages, though a powerful enough flame could definitely char his bones and cause a high degree of pain similar to the effects of 3rd/4th degree burns on a normal body.

    The final immunity of sorts that Vrael's lack of flesh grants him is an immunity to flesh wounds. Essentially this is exactly how it sounds. Wounds that would normally cut flesh, muscle, etc, and cause a foe to bleed are useless against him. Though this is not to say he wouldn't feel the pain from an attempt to cut him. Nor is it to say a powerful enough slash couldn't cut into his skeletal form. All this means is that in combat Vrael is free of the limitations, and pains, that having flesh and blood can cause.

  • Lightweight: The final boon granted by Vrael's lack of flesh is any extremely lightweight form. Because of his skeletal form Vrael is capable of feats such as leaping vast distances with a graceful ease that not even the Hulk would posses, jumping incredible heights to land atop massive buildings, and even running across large bodies of water with just his natural speed. Furthermore in combat his skeletal structure grants Vrael startling agility and speed, shown by how he can effortlessly flow from motion to motion, dodge attacks with impeccable ease in compared to most, executing lightning fast strikes, etc.

» Regeneration: This is the ability that allows a Hollow to heal most injuries very quickly, with the exception of the destruction of the head or vital organs. With that said, the higher your level is with regeneration, the more quickly and efficiently your hollow will heal. Eventually, if you reach a high enough level, you will discover new ways to enhance this such as regeneration limbs, some fatal blows and things of this nature.


VI. Powers


» Yomi no Reiki: Vrael's primary ability, known as the Chills of the Underworld in the English language. As far as Vrael can tell at this point this ability grants him temperature manipulation to some degree, as well as the ability to manipulate and create ice through the use of his reiatsu.

At this point in time Vrael has only displayed a preference to utilize this ability in combination with Tōketsu Sōru first and foremost. Although he has also displayed the ability to quickly alter the temperature in an area around him, as well as alter his Acidic Touch to create something new that utilizes some similar properties.

Because of this the true capabilities of Yomi no Reiki are unknown, and will remain so until Vrael either experiments further with the ability, or is simply forced to use it in newer ways.
  • Hyōga no Tatchi: A sub ability of Yomi no Reiki, and Vrael's unique alteration of a Hollow's racial ability Acidic Touch Hyōga no Tatchi means Touch of the Glacier in the English language. While Acidic Touch will burn someone at a touch as if acid contacted them, Hyōga no Tatchi is capable of that and more. Through but a touch of his bony finger Vrael is capable of inducing the effects of frostbite upon a foes flesh. The more contact, and longer the contact is for, the worse and more prolonged the effects become.


VII. Skill Sheet


To Find Out about what these skills are for, please READ THIS THREAD before you try doing anything to it. After you have read it, do not feel your skills out until a staff member has graded your thread. We will also do your will sheet for you upon grading your application.

Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Beginner
  • Focus: Adept


General Skills
  • Durability: Beginner
  • General Speed: Beginner
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Adept


Racial Skills
  • Acid Skill: Beginner
  • Garganta : Beginner
  • Cero/Bala: Adept
  • Regeneration: Beginner

[Click the Spoiler for details on each skill section]
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VIII. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample: [Please show us how you role play by either posting a previous post from another site or creating a new one. We do this so we know your RP skill. If you already have an accepted, you need not do another RP sample]

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Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [O]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
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Personality needs to be expanded; I count 7 sentences... including the one that is literally just 'hunger'.

Toketsu Soru
How durable is the blade itself?

Glacial Combine
How big are the shards? What determines their size or the size of the explosion? How large is each of the explosions of the shards if they aren't able to recombine? Needs a cooldown.

Frostbitten Spear
How potent is the ice? What is the range on what it can freeze? 5 feet, 10? Similarly, how large is the explosion/what determines its size? It should not state that it freezes down to the molecular level.

Inherit Immunitites
Should probably mention that freezing his joints could potentially make it difficult to move.

Yomi no Reiki
How wide can the area reach from his body at this time? How much freezing ice can he create before he needs to rest/take time for a cool down?

Hyoga no Tatchi
"With enough exposure to the touch of Hyōga no Tatchi one could even find their limbs/body being frozen at the atomic level."

This entire line needs to be removed.

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Personality needs to be expanded; I count 7 sentences... including the one that is literally just 'hunger'.

My bad on the sentence count, had forgotten that 10 was what was required. And no offence.. but that last bit about my writing in 'hunger' as a single statement kinda feels like a jab at me & the app. That particular portion was meant as a statement in regards to exactly what hollows feel 'hunger', not a full on sentence.

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Toketsu Soru
How durable is the blade itself?

" Impeccably sharp on its own Tōketsu Sōru is capable of cutting through even the most durable of materials, including Sekkiseki."

^ I had figured such a description was apt enough to describe the blades durability. But if you wish for more detail I'll add it.

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Glacial Combine
How big are the shards? What determines their size or the size of the explosion? How large is each of the explosions of the shards if they aren't able to recombine? Needs a cooldown.

I felt "needle-like shards" and "Initial injuries from this variant can be akin to being pierce by nails, broken branches, etc, depending on the size of shards created." gave a decent description of their initial & potential sizes. As for what determines their size, the same thing that determines the size of all active abilities, energy, but I'll specify if need be.

If unable to combine at all they would remain their initial needle-like size which is akin to being pierced by said needles or by nails, the explosion of the initial needles given their size would be similar to a base-ball sized hole in a window, I'll specify that in the edits.

In regards to the cooldown, may I request why you are requesting one? The initial size of the technique is no larger than a normal cero, is one of the only variants from his only ability, thus one would assume he'd posses the skill with the technique for it not to be taxing enough to require one? Especially if a normal cero doesn't? If it is because of the combination potential then just say so, and I'll add one for that specific case.


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How potent is the ice? What is the range on what it can freeze? 5 feet, 10? Similarly, how large is the explosion/what determines its size? It should not state that it freezes down to the molecular level.

The ice of the technique itself, or the ice that forms as it travels? I can specify on the area of effect as that would be dependent on both his cero skill, and whether or not he channeled further energy into the technique. The size of a cero's usual explosion, which I guess I can base off cero skill if you want?

In the case of this specific technique, I'm willing to go with that. But in the case of the main ability I will be challenging it.

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Inherit Immunitites
Should probably mention that freezing his joints could potentially make it difficult to move.

May I ask why, given his only ability & that it encompasses ice & cold temperatures. I'd assume that since he is capable of such that freezing his joints, unless against a superior opponent in said element, wouldn't happen. Especially given that with Yomi no Reiki he is emitting freezing temperatures.

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Yomi no Reiki
How wide can the area reach from his body at this time? How much freezing ice can he create before he needs to rest/take time for a cool down?

I'm willing to specify an area of effect, but I want to fight his primary ability having a cooldown. It is literally his primary ability. I can understand sub-abilities or further abilities needing one, but his primary ability?

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Hyoga no Tatchi
"With enough exposure to the touch of Hyōga no Tatchi one could even find their limbs/body being frozen at the atomic level."

This entire line needs to be removed.

I'd like to challenge that as that is an example of the absolute worst case scenario. Which I can specify if need be, but I do not want to remove it.





I apologize if I seem aggressive, or anything of the like in regards to my response. But I personally feel some of these requests are unreasonable, but I did work with all of them to what I felt was fair. If they are being made because they don't have backing in his history, say so & I'll fix that instead of making changes that would make them less effective, or completely hinder the use of his primary abilities.

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Horus wrote:
But if you wish for more detail I'll add it.

Yes that would be advisable.

Horus wrote:
gave a decent description of their initial & potential sizes.

You added an etc at the end implying that they can grow larger. Reword it to show the minimum size and maximum size as it stands.

Horus wrote:
may I request why you are requesting one?

Because this is not a normal Cero, it is a unique ability which requires some level of skill. The special effects it can produce can easily equate to more than the damage a normal cero may invoke, therefor to avoid the spamming of such an ability a cooldown has been asked of you.

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The ice of the technique itself, or the ice that forms as it travels? I can specify on the area of effect as that would be dependent on both his cero skill, and whether or not he channeled further energy into the technique. The size of a cero's usual explosion, which I guess I can base off cero skill if you want?

Because most powers on PH are unique to the user, even down to the most basic cero, we need some basic numbers at times to calculate damage or the surrounding impact. Because of that you need to provide an area of effect, how you decide to calculate that is entire up. I usually am a proponent of some vagueness but 'the size of a usual cero' is far to subjective to act as an actual answer. As for potency, I would assume the ice created while traveling and on the ability would be nearly the same. So just specify for the ability it's self.

In general, almost any named ability will require some cooldown or some area of effect numbers if it is not single target.

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I'd assume that since he is capable of such that freezing his joints, unless against a superior opponent in said element, wouldn't happen.

But when he does go against a superior opponent his movements would be slowed, so you should note it. Because that is a direct weakness which shouldn't be overlooked. The general rule of thumb is if it isn't in the application I can't assume that. Otherwise I'm just going to believe you're completely immune to all freezing effects regardless of their potency.

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but I want to fight his primary ability having a cooldown.

The wording JJ used was confusing, I believe he was asking how much ice he can create before he's just like 'I'm done.' I would prefer to keep that vague for your benefit, no cooldown required. Its basically ice manipulation, and I would not base basic manipulations have cooldowns- only active abilities derived from it.

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I'd like to challenge that as that is an example of the absolute worst case scenario. Which I can specify if need be, but I do not want to remove it.

Your challenge is noted, but I asked for this to be removed by freezing at the atomic level is currently not possible with this character. Atomic freezing a highly advanced skill which I do not agree with this character having.


JJ had to go to bed but I saw most of the grading done so I stepped in. All changes should be made in the application, or clarifications needed. Once you've done so tier, hazard, and skills will be assigned. I hope this cleared up any questions you had.[/adm]

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  • Influence: E
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Decided to go with 4-1 considering how he went out of his way to avoid combat of most kinds in his history, but he is an adjuchas with a decent amount of understanding of his racial skills and development to some extent of his own unique abilities.

I'd like to apologize again for the trouble and thank you for working with us on this. If you have any other questions, please let me know.

Have fun!

Tier: 4-1
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