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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Sun Jul 09, 2017 4:33 am

Enter The Shinigami
非再生可能


I. Basic Information

» Unique Aspect: German Motif Shinigami
» Name: Abelard Anrufer
» Alias: [To be earned in role-play should one be named or earned of his

actions.]
» Age: 238
» Gender: Male

» Association: Forth Squad, The Healing Corps

» Appearance Written:

•Skin Color: A Soft Pale Yellow

•Eye Color: A Soft Icy Blue

•Height: "187CM 6Ft'1½In"

•Weight: "76.6kg 169Lbs"

•Body Build: Tall, Slender, Subtle Muscle build (hes strong looking but it

doesn't outwardly show if hes wearing a shinigami uniform or something of similar nature.)

•Apparel Appearance: Square-Rimmed glasses that he constantly pushes back up out of a want He has perfect eyesight and the glasses he wears is more for a fashion stance, as such he tends to forget them more often, dark scars across his chest, arms and back usually and most of the time hidden by his clothing, a scar across his Left eye not causing vision damage but it is a noticeable scar.



» Appearance Image: N/A

I. Personality

» Personality:


•Outgoing:He will often tend to explore the grounds, he likes to talk short and long walks around and can usually be found outside, when inside he can seem secluded but holds that cheery nature you would expect from someone who is outgoing.


•Calm:he is almost always laid-back and relaxed. he can avoid most provocation and easily divert it away of his own intent, if he were to be provoked into battle he most, if not all the time can avoid the bait. when talking with someone of a tense situation and or talking to anyone in general his dulcet tone can keep a conversation going or even help to aid in cooling down someone hot in the head.


•Contentious:Although he is very calm in nature, people who are overly arrogant or ignorant trigger him easily, as a member of the forth squad, the healing corps. he will heal anyone who is allied or friendly. but if the patient is overly ignorant or annoyingly arrogant he will drag out the healing and heal them in more irritating or painful ways that don't cause any lasting damages to the body.


•Commanding and Logical:in a battle situation he can easily lead a pack. he can guide squad medics around easily and aid in moving troops by guiding them every step of the way. with his commanding nature he can easily earn his respect on the field and off just by showing it and leading his friends out of a tricky situation. his way of thinking can also help in healing and guiding people off the battlefield leading people around, helping gather supplies and logically split it into rations for the injured and easily read a situation in battle in a way most normal people wouldn't expect.


•Respectful:Pretty self-explanatory. he will speak to anyone with the respect they deserve. however as he is also contentious he will not be so respectful to someone of power who flaunts it or uses it in a disrespectful way.


•Brave: Self-Explanatory. He will not run from most battles. more so if other people are involved. the reason he enters the battlefield is to keep his friends alive. he would take a heavy blow before letting his ailed man take the hit.



I. History


» History:

Growing up in Berlin, Germany with his father lone, he tended to get more of a fatherly attachment as such he clung to his fathers personality traits. his way of thinking and his imposing nature and tenacity. His father would usually work late at a nearby Hospital. on some days Abelard himself would follow his father working with him as a medical nurse and doctors aid to his father. his employers were none to happy about this at first but as he watched his father with such focus, he learned every little thing he did and applied it in his own nurse work. Eventually his father even took notice and saved up years of money sending Abelard to Specialized classes in medical study, At Abelard's choice however he chose a home tutor so as he could keep working with his father.

After years of study around the age of 26 was the day of his first surgery, it was a woman he had never met before named Alisia. she was a mother of four and married to a loving husband. Abelard's nerves were on point but a smile from his father and words of his encouragement aided in relaxing Abelard pre-sugery. before the operation he met with the husband who begged him with tears in his eyes to save his wife. her body had been torn apart by shrapnel due to a factory explosion and a few internal organs had been ruptured. this surgery was her only chance and it was up to him. with a calm smile and a warm hug he looked the man in the eyes and parented he would save her, his commanding tone. the calmness and sincerity of his voice relaxed the man as Abelard went in to begin the operation with his father leading the operations to watch and observe his son and help should he need it or any of the other surgeons in the room.
Hours had passed during the operation, it had ended 18 hours in with many times of touch and go. but in the end it came out to be a successful operation. walking out the doors he had immediately informed the husband who quickly collapsed into tears out of overwhelming joy. without needing any form of recognition Abelard left the man with a smile hidden on his face. this smile was not soon to last.


As Abelard, and his father left the hospital a strange sound echoed to Abelard. his father had not heard any sounds but Abelard was able to hear them clearly. it was the bellow of a beast he did not recognize. unknowingly to him his first experience with a hollow. Halfway home a strange explosion of dust occurred in front of the road they were driving upon, the car grinded and screeched to a halt only to be attacked by the hollow. but the way this hollow attacked he was after something, he was after Abelard. Who's spiritual pressure was stronger then most any humans around. this hollow was able to feel it, to sense it and he knew looking at Abelard that it was him he had to hunt.
As the hollow attacked the car it spun out into a flip, off the road and into a building causing major damages to the quiet city of Berlin, This did not go unnoticed as officials were quickly alerted and making movement towards the scene of the accident. During the flip of the car and the damages to the road the hollow had made anyone right in human senses would consider it to be a pipeline bursting. and most did come to this conclusion as to the passerby's during this time. Abelard was not so lucky. waking up from the crash he very quickly noticed he felt no pain and his breath was incredibly heavy. looking down he had noticed a strange chain connecting to his chest. following it he found himself, his soul had been separated from his body. the hollow grabbing him, his plus roared a bellowing sound, but not before the attention of the shinigami was called. one such faction of the 10th squad. the earth Defense division. came trough but with a final attack on Abelard had sealed his fate, it broke his chain of fate leaving his soul to degrade into a hollow. or to be Konsoed by a shinigami and sent to the soul society.


A quick pincer tactic of the 10th squad had easily dispatched the minor hollow, one man had went to check on his father who had survived the crash and damages. while two others were around him talking to him and explaining his situation of which he had been dragged into. before he had allowed the Shinigami to proceed with the Konso. he had them wait a few days, this of which they confirmed with there captain and few returned with 3 escorts taking leave to meet Abelard's request. as he though would come he waited to see his father get well. and watched over his Funeral procession with Bertram, his brother and his father. he did not hold any resentment to anyone, he saw the hollow the shinigami had killed and that was all he felt was needed. he had his few days left on earth and with a smile he said goodbye to his father and brother then turned to the three escorts as they performed the Konso moments later.


Years spent in the Soul Society he had given the Academy plenty of thought. years in the Academy had thought him many interesting things. more so of which about hollows. he learned what that thing was and studied hard to make sure things like that don't roam free to kill as they see please. recognizing his medical prowess the captain of the forth squad who was at the graduation ceremony at the time approached him, he was formally invited as a unseated shinigami into the forth squad. hearing about the squad he quickly and proudly accepted the offer and joined directly following the captain into the Forth Division




I. Equipment


» Equipment: Forth Squad Field Medicines and Supply

I. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills




I. Sealed Powers


» Zanpakutô Name: Schallhoffnung (Sound Hope)

» Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: A 6"3 Tall humanoid wearing a forest green

Edo Period Samurai style Armor, he holds a voice of a feminine nature which carries a young dulcet tone. his eyes can be seen tough his face is hidden by a samurai style mask, his eyes glow like sapphires.

» Inner World: A Vast and Lush island style forest Surround not by an ocean but by a desert, as Abelard becomes worried. afraid or hesitant the Desert winds grow strong and blistering and the trees begin to welt while the sands of the desert become dense and vastly unclear.

» Sealed Zanpakutô Appearance: The sealed form takes on the appearance of a 16th century German officers marshal sword. a brass laden handle engraved with oak leaves and acorns. a 23 inch dual edged blade with a 3.5 width blade.

» Sealed Zanpakuto Abilities:
•Shinigami Abilities: (not abilities of the Zanpakuto)

•Soul scanning: the shinigami himself can focus reiatsu into his eyes to see the body of his target pinpointing physical ailments like bone fractures or inner damages to the body. as well as read the Reiatsu level and signature of his target

•Sonar Sensor. By releasing a sound wave he can sense the reiatsu. even faint and hidden. of other people or shinigami within the area at the given moment of use. (similar to the Pesquisa of the Arrancar.)


•Sonic reading: Shinigami has an ability to read at lighting fast speed and still retain all the info from a book or manuscript that he reads.


I. Shikai


» Shikai Release Phrase: Mitschwingen, SchallHoffnung (Resonate (Swords name)

» Shikai Appearance: The sword twists and turns like liquid metal during the transformation phase. as the metal moves around it beings to twist and spiral taking shape and forming a spiral bladed stabbing style sword with a 26 inch blade with a 4 inch wide base moving down to a half inch point at the tip. the hilt adorns itself with prongs to enhance waves of sound like tuning forks. the brass laden hilt turns into a rapier style hilt while still holding the style of a officers sword with guards on both sides.

» Shikai Abilities:


Ability 1)Sonic Kräftigung (sonic invigoration)The user can use sound waves to vibrate and stimulate physical attributes. Say your arm was stabbed through, Abelard would be able to use his energy and resonate with his Shikai creating vibrations and controlled high frequency waves of sound. These sound waves can physically stimulate muscles on a Cellular level. the stimulation and manipulation of this can move even the most injured of arms, however this would not come without its price, Extended use would call forth issues like long term damages that would require medical attention, and this ability would not prevent pain, moving a broken arm as such is still moving it by force, it requires its own level of pain tolerance and more so for say his legs, if his legs were run through he would endure so much more pain as he would be needing to move not only the leg, but the weight of his own body on top of that, Within bankai this ability Evolves in control, the sound waves become precise and far more serene or gentle. the controlled waves can now aid in more delicate actions such as stimulating a stopped heart, this however comes with a risk, running out of energy or over exerting his energy can seriously damage the heart or stopping the ability to soon would in such stop the heart from beating. this if used on the field would weaken combat prowess with the focus and energy use involves, this would more be used for example to aid and retreat with a fatally wounded ally.


Ability 2) Reinigungs Puls (cleansing pulse) by stabbing his shikai into

the target it can channel reiatsu trough the blade creating dense frequency pulses of Reiatsu and Sound to mend the bones and body on a cellular level. Depending on the wound this can be seriously exhausting or more so time consuming, the stabbing it self causes as much pain as say getting a shot from a syringe. For minor wounds like small cuts or mild bleeding wounds this does not take much energy to heal, it is more similar to a healing kido in its base form at this level. the major difference is the pulsing sound waves emitting from the blade aid in speeding up this recovery far faster and more efficiently then the kido it is derived from. For more severe wounds like deep cuts or gashes this ability takes its toll, the energy consumption grows and the time it takes to say stop a deep wound would take a hour or two depending on the wound itself. if its merely preventing bleeding on a certain level this can take a few minutes which is where it would be used in a battlefield. to stop bleeding on the field however takes far more focus, there's also the enemy to worry about. on a serious level this ability can reconstruct the targets bones and limbs, this is a very time consuming process and can take hours if not days depending on the complexity and severity.



Ability 3) Klingt Kraft (sounds force) :The user can release/use sound to attacks of various shapes and/or intensities, either projected, used as a part of melee attacks, etc from his Seelentoter. this ability can be simple or complex, as a given example for instance. a hollow charges towards Abelard, as he holds his Seelentoter up center from his chest at arms length, a humming can be heard breaking the air around the blade causing its distortion on a visible level if one was paying attention to it, the sound waves intensify the closer to the tip of the blade and as he lunges forward in a thrusting motion the pressure and vibrations compress and shoot forward from the blade creating a bullet of sound with enough force to pierce through the center of the hollows chest should it hit dead on. This form of using this ability is not so complex but it is not so easy either. to control the sound waves he needs control of the air around him in order to compress the sound and fire it freely as a physical mass. As a more complex example. The arrancar sonidos behind Abelard holding his blade to his neck and threatening him to drop his blade, Abelard looks down at the blade against him and his sword resonates with the air around it, as the vibrations grow the blade begins to emit a high pitched sound wave in the form of a sonic screech. controlling the sound waves Abelard sends them directly to the Arrancar behind him in order to disorient him by attacking ferociously at his hearing in order to induce a heavy state similar to vertigo should the arrancar stay within such a close range to the blade or not block out the sound in some way. this form of attack is more complex as it requires moving the sound after it has emitted, it takes a great toll on energy depending on the size and effect of said ability. the more complex, the greater in size, the more severe in damage, all of these increase reiatsu use and strain on Abelard's body depending on how its used.



I. Bankai


•Bankai Release Phrase: Final Release. Entfalten Sie Ihre Leistung. Gebunden durch Seele. Gebunden durch Blut. Leih mir deine Kraft und als solche Verwendung Mine, wie Sie für richtig halten.

English Translation: Unleash your power. bound by the soul and bound by blood. lend me your power and use mine as you see fit

» Bankai Appearance: The 23 inch blade shatters. the hilt breaks into pieces and shrapnel spins around the caster. as the blade reforms into a Flamberge style wave bladed sword. this smaller style of flamberge can be wielded with one hand. the hilt spirals with a metal frame. red iron guards protrude outside the sides of the hilt. these guards are special in the sense they enhance the use of sound like tuning forks. multiple coils of metal adorn the hilt around the grasp for a olden style decor.

» Bankai Abilities:


Ability 1)Blut Wiederaufbau (blood reconstruction)by holding the sword within the body, and adding his blood to the blade he can alter the blood cells of a body he is healing, multiplying them,cleansing and replacing old or diseased blood, and basically reconstructing blood lost in battle or any other scenario. this however has its own limits, using this on himself would provide no effect as he is adding his own blood to his own blood. it is a surdo oppedere, a useless action as this is taking his blood to add to his blood. this is more so exclusively used on other people as this is made to use his blood to aid in healing another. as a example. Abelard walks over to the man on the table and with his bankai in hand he pierces his sword unfataly to the mans chest which would cause surprise in the man but the look on Abelards face calms him down, running his hand across the blade he cuts into his hand making his blood run down the blade. the blood on the blade begins to glow green with reiatsu midway down the blade changing type based on the targets blood which is also within contact of the blade Via the tip of the sword, as it enters the targets body the vibrations of sound waves and his own reiatsu infused blood begins to target diseased blood if a target applies forcing it out along the blade which cleanses it and restores it to its original state by attacking the cells on a molecular level with his kido and sound waves, as the reiatsu infused blood enters his body it mixes with his own body increasing its ability to make new blood cells as such multiplying his blood cells far faster then what would normally be possible. this as such takes its toll on Abelard over time due to the fact he is steadily expelling reiatsu at a steady rate.



Ability 2) Bewusstes Bauen (Sound construction) Users can turn sound into tools, objects, weapons and other items, create semi-living constructs and/or create structures/buildings of varying permanence. This can create any item the user has seen and knows how it functions, including sound based walls, golems, weapons like swords or daggers and ect. platforms, buildings and restraints. This is a very complex ability depending on how it used. for Sonokinetic shackles and the such this takes soundwaves emitted from the blade this involves solidifying soundwaves into a physcal form for prolonged periods of time, this takes no energy after the process is done but during creating the shackles it takes heavily consentrated reiatsu wrapping around the targets arms or legs. while its forming the shackles or bindings can be broken with proper force easily during the casting of this form on this ability but afterwards the shackles are far harder to break off and require considerablly more effort. Far more streuous actions that fall under this ability is the creation of Sono-Kinetic golems such as Sound clones or Living sound creations. As example. Abelard holds his sword straight into the air as it emits a shrill sound and begins to glow red with reiatsu, during creating living sound this is the only time the blade ever glows red as his blood adds to the blade from the soundwave cut that was caused during the shrill emittion of sound from the blade. after the blood coats the blade he slashes at the air in certian motions for the creation he was making. in the case of making clones the air distorts heavily around him as copies of him rush out from the area of distortion, the clones are solid and physcally look no different from the original and have a base limit of 6 clones at once but this can be changed with proper training, the major difference is that they emit a subtle tone around them at all times that would not be hard to miss if they were closeby and they can be taken out with at most a simple attack. However single living sound constructs like a sound tiger can only be formed one at a time and is limited to only one of this form in ability at a time, the construst can take a few hits before being taken out However this ability in this form is extreme and not reccomended as it takes a masive amount of reiatsu to create such advanced creations, simple clones however is a far lesser form of this ability. This can even take sound by holding his blade flat across arms length from him creating a Sonokinetic barrier. The limit on this barrier is it can only emit from the blades side and expands only in front of Abelard in the form of either a flat barrier style or a rounded out shield variant used in deflecting attacks, The flat barrier version is used mainly for blocking and stopping an ability and requires a strong amount of focus and reiatsu drain. the bigger the shield the heavier the strain, Rounded shields for deflecting however are far more complex as it takes the soundwaves, turns them into physcall mass and bends them constantly expanding them and vibrating it enough to divert and deflect a target attack, the ability in all forms however has one ultimatum of a weakness, if Abelard is heavily wounded, cant control the air around him, or the enemy can easily out manuver him while he is controlling a golem of sound they can easily outmanuver him and overpower him as he can not use his shield while a sound golem aside from Sonokinetic clones exist.






I. Shikokai




» Shikokai Appearance: N/A

» Shikokai Abilities: N/A

I. Skill Sheet


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Skill Sheet

General Skills

Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner



Racial Skills

Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Kidō: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner



Will Skills

Willpower: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Mental Deduction: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Pain Endurance: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Focus: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner



I. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample: Walking back from a relaxing stroll around the barracks he enters the Forth Squads barracks looking at the few shinigami that were waiting for him. with a soft gaze to his eyes and a relaxed smile he acknowledges there presence with eye contact and a smile to each member in the room "You men look like you have been waiting for me. am i needed in aid assistance? or do you need me to run off to do another supply run or some maintenance work again?" he asked with a purely respectful tone and a bright smile complementing the dulcet tone of his voice. As he looks down at his desk after greeting the men he picks up a few papers and a couple writing pens and sits down at his desk scribbling down some notes. The men still in the office however has not left his attention as he looks back up at them. Normally i don't seem to be as busy as look, while i normally seem to be working on something this is a minor task. If you guys need help be it menial work or physical aid i would be pleased to aid you in anyway that i can.


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Tue Jul 18, 2017 5:45 pm


«- PREPARE TO BE REVIEWED -»


« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [O]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •


  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Pain Endurance: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


  • Comments/Notes: The main problems that I have with your Zanpakuto powers is that all of them need much more explaining than just the one or two sentences. This tells me nothing about what this does, or what kind of limitations this has. You will need a lot of work on those if you want those approved. The other problem is your RP Sample. That is only about 4 sentences out of the 10 that you need. That's all you need to fix as far as I can see. If you have any questions, feel free to PM me on Discord with your concerns.
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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Tue Aug 01, 2017 2:12 am

Using this reply to show this topic is still in activity, currently waiting on replies from the reviewer VIA PM to me,
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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Fri Aug 11, 2017 4:37 am

[adm]Has there been an update on this app?[/adm]

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Sat Aug 12, 2017 11:54 pm

its being worked on i still haven't had any replies from the reviewer however. the only updating is to add more information about the abilities so that's what i am waiting on from him/her.
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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Sun Aug 13, 2017 4:06 pm

[adm]I'm...just going to paste something that Imakuran said when he was a staff member.

@Imakuran wrote:
As you already have come to understand, it needs to be in one, cohesive form in the first post. You'll then edit in any changes we may or may not need of you. Some things based on what you've written though.

Furthermore, none of the abilities are any different than they were before. They are still incredibly vague, and I can't give them a proper check until they actually have some kinda of semblance and substance behind them, rather than just one or two lines of basic information. And finally, I'm just going to say it now -- use the template that the Shinigami template comes from.

The code block literally tells you how to get the code.

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[b]Coding In Template By:[/b] [url=http://www.platinumhearts.net/t5944-thefrost-s-graphic-request][THEFROST][/url][/center]

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[center][size=29][color=black]Enter The Shinigami
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<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Basic Information</div>

[b]» Name:[/b] [Self-Explanatory]
[b]» Alias:[/b] [Any nicknames or titles?]
[b]» Age:[/b] [Self-Explanatory]
[b]» Gender:[/b] [Self-Explanatory]

[b]» Association:[/b] [What is this Shinigami associated with? A certain character? A selection of characters? A nation? An Organization? State their association and which characters they are tethered to]

[b]» Appearance Written:[/b] [What does your character look like? Write it up]

[b]» Appearance Image:[/b] [Put an image of your character here if you have one]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Personality</div>

[b]» Personality:[/b] [Please describe your Shinigami's personality. Please be sure to use at least 5 sentences.]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]History</div>

[b]» History:[/b] [Everything has a history. Please try to describe their human life (if they had one), life as a Shinigami and what they are doing now.]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Equipment</div>

[b]» Equipment:[/b] [If your Shinigami has any equipment? Put it here. If they don't, skip this section.]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills</div>

[b]» Racial Abilities:[/b] [You can put any customized racial skills/abilities/techniques in here. These can range from shunpo, kido, zanjutsu and anything else you want to add. Feel free to skip it if you don't want to fill it out.]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Sealed Powers </div>

[b]» Zanpakutô Name:[/b] [What is your Shinigami's Zanpakutô's name?]

[b]» Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance:[/b] [What does your characters Zanpukto Spirit look like in their inner world? Please write at least 1 paragraph for this.]

[b]» Inner World:[/b] [What is your Zanpukto's inner world like?]

[b]» Zanpakutô Appearance:[/b] [What does your Shinigami's Zanpakutô look like? A picture or written bio will do. You can also do both if you wish]

[b]»  Sealed Zanpakutô  Power:[/b] [Over the years, Shinigami have evolved to the point where they now have special powers even when sealed. As such, does your character have special ability or power when not released? Try not to go overboard. If you do not have one, just erase this section]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Shikai</div>

[b]» Shikai Release Phrase:[/b] [What is your shinigami's release pharse?]

[b]» Shikai Appearance:[/b] [What does your Shinigami look like when released?]

[b]» Shikai Abilities:[/b] [What abilities does your Shinigami gain when releasing?]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Bankai</div>

[b]» Bankai Appearance:[/b] [What does your Shinigami look like when released in their bankai?]

[b]» Bankai Abilities:[/b] [What abilities does your Shinigami attain in Bankai?]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Shikokai</div>

[center][b][NOTE: This form is restricted until 0-3, and is not usually granted upon approval. This is ONLY for pureblood Shinigami! Refer to the racial specs for more information][/b][/center]

[strike][b]» Shikokai Appearance:[/b] [What does your Shinigami look like when released in their Shikokai?]

[b]» Shikokai Abilities:[/b] [What abilities does your Shinigami attain in Shikokai?][/strike]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Skill Sheet</div>

To Find Out about what these skills are for, please [url=http://www.platinumhearts.net/t148-major-updates-skill-sheet-system-put-this-in-your-application-when-your-finished-and-accepted][b]READ THIS THREAD[/b][/url] before you try doing anything to it. After you have read it, do not feel your skills out until a staff member has graded your thread. We will also do your will sheet for you upon grading your application.

[size=18][b]Skill Sheet[/b][/size]

[b][u]General Skills[/u][/b]
[list][*][b]Durability:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]General Speed:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Strength:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Weapon Skill:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[/list]

[b][u]Racial Skills[/u][/b]
[list][*][b]Hoho:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Kidō:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Zanjutsu:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Hakuda:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[/list]

[b][u]Will Skills[/b][/u]
[list][*][b]Willpower:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Mental Deduction:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Pain Endurance:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Focus:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[/list]

<div style="letter-spacing: 1px; font-size: 14px; border-bottom: solid 1px black;;">[color=#6e6e72]I. [/color]Role Play Sample</div>

[b]»  Roleplay Sample:[/b] [Please show us how you role play by either posting a previous post from another site or creating a new one. We do this so we know your RP skill. If you already have an accepted, you need not do another RP sample]

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Put your character's info into the proper sections of this template, and put this all into the first post of the application. Do not post another form of the application again.[/adm]
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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Sun Aug 13, 2017 4:20 pm

i get what your saying about the abilities and i know now to just edit and update post 1, but what can i do to add the substance to the abilities, never been very good with this but i am trying to break that. some help with my application would be appreciated.
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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Sun Sep 24, 2017 8:12 pm

[adm]Moving this to WIP as there have been no updates.[/adm]

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:37 pm

there has been a update i modified the first post as i was told to but havent had any resposes
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Subject Post 10PostSubject: Re: Shinigami Application (Forth Division)   Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:53 pm

[adm]Ok. So, before I make any more requests for changes, I need you to fix the formatting of the app in the first post. There are so many line breaks, I legitimately can not read this. Before anything else, this must be fixed.[/adm]
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