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Naya Hirondelle [APPROVED 3-5- ] [Hazard Rating D] Empty Naya Hirondelle [APPROVED 3-5- ] [Hazard Rating D]

Sun Apr 01, 2018 9:45 am
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I. Basic Information


» Name:
Naya Hirondelle

» Age:
Visually looks 29, True Age: 874.

» Gender:
Female

» Association: New Dawn, (Akatsuki?)

» Appearance Written:
As far as her attire is concerned, her mask covers her entire face, and takes the shape of almost a dragon like creature, with four segments that look like horns, both of them overlapping each other but on a diagonal plain.. Although it is difficult to see her eyes through the mask, she does have slits to where her eyes should be. The mouth of the mask, has a top and bottom jaw, the bottom jaw is segmented, but when she talks nothing really moves, there is only a slight reverb on to her voice, though it has the capability to split when needed.. She wears a long white coat, with black feathers as a collar that completely cover up her neck. The white coat is opened revealing a very interesting design for a top. There are gaps that reveal the skin on her body, as well as for her hollow hole located on her stomach, there is also an opening where her ribs are, showing a teal trail that looks like it leads elsewhere on her body. This top is black and contrasts with he her white skin underneath. The sleeves of her coat have the same feather trim as her collar. The outlines on her coat are fairly plain. There’s a black strip to where the zipper of her coat many be, and she has a long strip of black comes from her shoulder blades and extends downward on each sleeve to the feather cuffs. As for her physique, Naya is a tall, slender, and pale woman. She stands at 5’10, and with her shoes, stands a bit shy of 6’ 3”. She does not have much of a full figure, as her breast size would be barely to a B-cup, and waist size being around 30 inches. She looks looks fit for her physique as there are indents for where her abs are, and definition on her ribcage. Her hair is usually tucked inside her collar, so from the outwards appearance it looks like she has a standard bowl cut for her hair. However, underneath all of that her hair is very long, reaching to about mid back, and being jet black.

» Appearance Image:


Naya Hirondelle [APPROVED 3-5- ] [Hazard Rating D] 5e44f8221cb4eab532d32ef5e960afcc


II. Personality


» Personality: [This is optional to add in some cases. Sometimes people will create mindless creatures, and if your Arrancar falls into one of those categorizes, leave a note about it. Otherwise, fill out personality as per normal.]

Analytical

With the nature of being fairly new to land based combat, Naya takes every piece of information into consideration. She over analyzes everything to the point of even over predicting moves at times. This comes as an advantage when reading opponents, but at a disadvantage by at times being to preemptive in her decisions.

Unnerving Calmness

Naya possesses a degree of calmness that she often comes off as being cold-hearted. There are instance where her allies have died in her face, yet she shows no remorse to their loss. In fact, often times she chalks it up to being the weak-will of relying on another to witness full strength. This remorse is amplified more when fighting a shinigami or anything that carries an additional spirit to wield, as often shown by being cocky and slow in her movements until they pose a threat against her.

Distanced

Naya hates partnerships. If the option to be without a partner is there she would rather complete her missions alone. She believes that being partnered automatically puts a person at a disadvantage because you are forced to split strength and resources between two entities. The one time she had a partner, she gave them two options. Walk away and never bother her again, or fight her to the death. This lead to the death of her first and only partner.

Focused

Similar to her analysis, she never strays far away from a task if one is given to her. Her mind gains a one track motive toward completing the goal, in anyway she sees fit.

III. History


» History: "There was once a pale man with long black hair who was very lonely. All people would soon meet this man, but they were never pleased to do so, thusly they shunned him. So, he took his axe and split himself in two. So he would always have a friend." --- Quote to inspire the direction of Naya. Kindred, League of Legends.


"Is the only reason you're holding onto me, is because you're scared to be lonely?"-- Quote of inspiration. Dua Lipa- Scared To Be Lonely


As a Hollow:
Alone in the seas of Hueco Mundo, Naya swam aimlessly in hopes to find others who were as mighty as she were, hoping to create the strong body she once had. Unfortunately, due to her size and immense power, most of the time she would end up crushing or accidentally swallowing creatures who were smaller than her whole. This over time began to annoy her as pretty soon she was the only creature left in the oceans, stretching for miles due to how many souls she had devoured. While devouring however, she seemed to regain her former strength back, almost to the point where she was restored to her former glory. As much as she enjoyed her immense power, being in the seas was lonely, and she knew she had to find a way out. Being bound to the sea, she tried to find outside sources that she could feed on. Her philosophy being that if she devoured a land creature she could evolve herself into being more suitable to the land above her, and continue to find more powerful beings.

For centuries, she guarded across the seas, eating anything that swarmed from above her, and absorbing her their powers to fuel their own, and one day felt as though she was ready to traverse the lands. She didn’t know what was out there, thus her reasoning for feeding on creatures for so long. When she broke free of the oceans she slammed downward, breaking her mask onto the ground beneath her, this knocked her dizzy for a moment as she slowly released her power in suit for a humanoid form. Once she gained her body she began to walk across the sands, but unknowingly to her, she was destroying many of the life that was miles ahead of her. Although her body was human, her spiritual pressure was still that of the Leviathan, and thus entities that were hundreds of miles away from her, who were of lesser strength than her simply were devoured by her strength.


As an Arrancar:
When she awakened from her unconscious state, she gazed out at the vast sands of the deserts in Hueco Mundo. She was excited to explore this new land, as it felt to her like a drier version of the emptiness of her ocean. Her body however was not adjusted to the shift from being a sea creature to a land creature, and thus spent decades dipping between her oceans and walking on land. Eventually she realized that by tapping into her reserved power from her feasting on the lesser creatures in her seas, she could manipulate the air such that it would be cloudy and moist around her as she walked. Which later turned into her being adept enough at this control to allow it to become rain.

Now that her body was readily available to walk the lands, she took some cloth that was caught in a tree next to her location, and used those to cover herself, her body still too feeble to travel against the harsh weathers of the desert. Not to mention how weak she was overall, with her frst experience of walking being on sands, that constantly shifted underneath her new feet. Every step she took seemed to make her more unstable for the next, and she would constantly fall flat on her face every 10 feet. As much as she hated to admit it, for once she felt like she needed help. If she were to have an encounter with anyone at this point, she would be dead, and her experience on the surface would have been completely meaningless.

Annoyed by needing to back track, she gazed backward in hopes to bring the oceans with her. Her comfort was all she needed to unveil her power. The sand were too unstable for her to channel, and rain water was reviving her strength, but no where near the overwhelming energy she possessed in the waters. This sprouted the idea to make the rain fall hard enough to feel like it could flood her temporarily, in hopes to regain her strength for a short burst of time. When she tried this the first time, the sand quickly absorbed the rainfall and took her nowhere. The anger she felt from this only made the rainfall harder, until she gained a puddle. No where near what she needed to exploited herself. She continued to walk until she found an area that caved in on itself. It was still made of sand, but her hopes would that she could force enough rain in this area to fill this crater with water, and then utilize what power she still had, and splitting it so that, this form could be her land legs, while she develops her own.

Surely enough, the plan did work, at the cost of the fact that she was a humanoid, and was not used to swimming as a human, only as her form as a leviathan. Thusly, she almost drown before creating her new form. The form jumped in after her, grabbing her by the wrist and carrying her up to ground level.. This form waited until Naya awakened from being unconscious, sitting on her feet, kneeling next to her. Naya coughed, as she did the rain began to fall on them again, and as she coughed she then looked to her left and saw the form she created.

'What would you like to be called?' Naya asked the entity, as she began to fix herself to a seated position. The girl was shorter than her yet sharing her same physique, but having dark red hair instead of Naya's jet black. Her hole was through her forehead, her mask seeming to be purposefully surrounded by it. The mask looked similar to an egyptian goddess's crown. Her pupils were slit, but her eyes themselves looked relaxed and hetero-chromatic, one being aqua, the other being hazel, more towards green, it grinned to Naya and spoke back, "Serin... You may call me Serin." she spoke as she stood up on her feet, and offered her hand to Naya to help her up. Serin then tossed the same robes over Naya, and salavged an additional piece to drape over herself as they traveled in Hueco.

The two of them taclked the deserts together. When Naya would stumble on her path, Serin would carry her upwards and fend off predators for her. Likewise, if the rain or sea was an issue for Serin, Naya would allow her ease of travel and ensure her safety. Over time, Naya began to get accustomed to the land, after watching Serin tackle all of her obstacles with ease and began to traverse on her own some days, even having enough strength to have the capability of fighting lesser hollows in their way. Serin was fine with this notion, until she realized that she wasn't feeding off the hollows like she used to with Naya taking charge now. Their system of protection now became a competiton of who can conquer whom the quickest. Naya rapidly learned that lesser hollow were not the way to go about this, and decided to fight anything in her path. Menos, Adjucha, and even a Vasto-Lorde she managed to take down. Naya came to the conclusion that Serin was now of no use to her, and since her bond with her was technically, only through spirit, she felt no remorse towards her despite being helpful. But to Serin, Naya meant everything to her. Naya essentially birthed her, and nurtured her to strength. Naya was all she knew, and anything that was not Naya was devoured in her name.

After the battle with the Vasto-Lorde, Naya turned to Serin seeing the power of her soul still stronger than her own after devouring a Vasto-Lorde's soul.
"You shall be my next target." She said in scorn as she held her weapon into Serin's chest.
"You are the only one strong enough to satisfy me now." Confused, Serin jolted backward and shook her head.
"I refuse to fight you. Why would you turn on me like this?"
"I am not, I would like to offer a deal. Whoever loses this duel is devoured by the strongest. Being their in spirit. But gaining their strength." Naya continued with her calming demeanor, not understanding the confusion of this situation.

Serin shook her head and fled from Naya, the life she had given her was too enjoyable, for her to be ended by her creator's hands. And even if Serin were to win the duel, she couldn't fathom a world without Naya at her side. Naya, however, resorted to her predatory instincts, and seeing Serin flash away from her, she raised her rifle to her direction, and quickly fired a shot, striking through Serin's heart.
"You will not leave me. And I can no longer leave you. Thank you for your teachings." She spoke as the shot spiraled as a teal whirlpool on her chest, disintegrating Serin into shards that then flew onto her rifle. The barrel of it now looking like a serpent, as a representation of Serin's form as a humanoid.

Naya looked to her weapon, a single tear dropped on the barrel, as it began to pour down raining.


IV. Equipment


» Equipment: [If your Arrancar has any equipment? Put it here. If they don't, skip this section.]

V. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills


» Racial Abilities:

Cero and its Variations:

Her control of spiritual energy is superb, as she is able to shape it at will and fire them with little to no indication of doing so. Her Bala is no exception to this rule, being the most simple of the types, she can fire this near automatically when needed. She will usually use her finger to fire these shots, usually in the formation of finger pistols. She is able to fire multiple at a time when in this position. When she is released, it is said that the spiritual energy used into one fin for her compressed Cero Asesinato is equal to a few hundred Bala at the same time. Also noted into this form, that if she where to use Bala's in her released state, the glow off of her fins would begin to dim, as the energy is spent. Her Ceros in general, other than her specialized shots are used to create space if an enemy were to jump on top of her, therefore using the bala as more of a spacer warning shot is far more effective than using a cero to achieve the same effect, despite having the strength to use something greater. If needed, she can fire a traditional Cero. This is fired similar to her Bala, with the finger pistol motion, but specifically this one is fired from the hips. This shot is also skinnier in nature in comparison to her bala and more other cero, it almost looking egg shaped rather than spherical. All of her Cero variations are a vibrant teal color, with her bala having a unique property of having a tail behind them. This tail aids in making her shots more aerodynamic in flight, as because these are weaker shots, she does want them to have the capability of hitting opponents when fired.


High- Speed Regeneration:

Because of her conditional Hierro, she began to train in this area, knowing that many parts of her body would be susceptible to taking lethal damage at any given point and time. Her regeneration rate allows for her to seal off critical injuries, and even fully ignore injuries to complete a task before needing to utilize energy to seal the wounds. When 3 posts in general pass, she is able to fully heal critical wounds (per wound). Depending on the amount of wounds left on her body, she could sacrifice 6 posts in general to heal all of her wounds, at the cost of loosing two of her shots.

Pesquisa:
Her ability to sense spirit energy is another forte of hers. Because of her sea creature background, she was already used to sensing motion in vast areas, and that transferred very swiftly to being on land. When in Sorrow, anything that touches water can be sensed by her, even the rain droplets assist in this notion. When she is released, this becomes elevated to a point that she can even see the outlines and auras through terrain, from miles away.

Sonido:

Her sonido, similar to her Hierro, is conditional. She does know how to move, but when she is released, she would rather use her speed of being underwater, rather than the speed granted from her sonido. She sacrificed her mobility to speed up the process when learning her regenerative abilities, and chose to lean towards a more defensive way of mitigating damage rather than trying to be elusive.



VI. Sealed Powers


» Zanpakutô Name:
Leviathan



» Zanpakutô Appearance:
Leviathan is a maximum length nodachi sword, usually it is too large for her to carry on her own, and usually forces her devoured hollows to carry the sword as she travels. If they don’t carry the sword, they at least hold the scabbard to her blade while she uses the sword in battle. The blade is about 50 inches in length, with the handle being 12 inches. The hilt of the sword is diamond shaped. On each corner of the diamond there’s a appendage that looks like a tentacle that loops into the adjacent side of the diamond. To complete this tentacle like design, the top of the hilt is all black, but the tentacles, the outline of the diamond, and small harpoon shapes that seem to line up with the tentacles are silver in color.



» Unique Power:

Dolor(Sorrow):
When she begins battle, the world around her begins raining constantly. When it’s raining, the range to sense other spiritual pressures is elevated. Anything that touches water, is automatically alerted to her and she can usually focus targets much easier through this way. Sorrow is a constant passive effect of her release, and with its activation, she gains the ability to manipulate the viscosity/ density of liquids that she, her abilities, or her weapon comes in contact with (To clarify, this ability allows her to change how thick a liquid is. Therefore, if it’s raining, she could have it feel like normal water. She could thin it to decrease the effort needed to move in this rainy condition and give her a speed advantage over her opponent. Or she could thicken it to be as if honey were raining from the sky, to overwhelm an enemy with a new obstacle to fight through.) .

Her spiritual pressure radiates outward, which also allows her to manipulate natural water, like rain or bodies of water, as well as spiritually released liquids to an extent. With this she can also manipulate the surface tension of liquids, as long as she is near, or in contact with them. (Using the same rain example, she could lighten the surface area of the rain to give her statistical speed advantages, or harden the surface area of the rain to have it feel like pebbles barraging against the skin. Regardless, through both examples this would still be considered water, it would just take on the density and characteristics of other substances.)


This is not an ability meant for damage, but rather to slow the enemy down for her to connect her damage more easily, or to be an obstacle that an opponent would have to fight through in addition to her. The increased sensory awareness extends to about 5000 feet in a diameter, however the manipulation of the rainwater is only within half of that diameter around from her centrally.


VII. Resurrección


» Resereccion Name:
Leviathan (She may sometimes say Levi, rather than Leviathan.)

» Resereccion Release Phrase:
Swallow the World (She may, at times, only say ‘Swallow’ to release, rather than the full release phrase.)

» Release Actions:
When she says ‘Swallow The World’, she never says the name Leviathan, as it’s pretty much assumed of the zanpakuto that with the release phrase, she wants to summon that form. If she does want to say ‘Leviathan’ after the longer phrase she may just say ‘Levi’ and begin the actions to her release. Whereas if she were to only say ‘Swallow’, she may say the full name ‘Leviathan’ as a follow-up. As the phrase is said she grabs the sword by the blade and aims the handle and hilt of her sword at her mouth. The bottom half of her jaw unhinges and opens wide. As her mouth opens, the world begins to rain from the spiritual pressure spike caused by forcefully opening her mask. When the bottom jaw is opened, the segmented section then splits off in a quick motion, allowing the handle and hilt to fit in her mouth with ease. Once the bottom is fully opened, she lowers the handle of her sword into her mouth, literally swallowing her sword. As the sword goes into her body, the handle then pokes through her hollow hole, which she then grabs the handle of the sword and continues to pull the sword out of her body. Once she grabs the handle of the sword, her sword begins transforming into her release form weapon. Likewise the handle of the blade is an indication to which part of her body is being transformed by her hollow nature. Once the weapon is fully pulled from her body, her form is complete.



» Resereccion Appearance:

Her mask is completely removed from her face and scattered across her body instead. This reveals a fair faced woman behind the mask. Her eyes a deep aquamarine, but relaxed and unamused by anything. Very cold, yet somewhat calming face to observe. Her hair extends downward, jet black in color, fading into teal colored highlights at the ends of her hair. The corners of her eyes, top lip, and a sole line down the middle of her bottom lip are also painted in this deep teal. In addition to those markings, the trail looks like it wraps around her neck twice then splitting down her back,then splitting again down farther on her back and looping to the front, explaining the curved preview in her top.

The parts of her mask that remained on her head, turned into two small fin like structures that loop around where her ears would be. Her jacket is completely removed revealing a simple bikini top in design. Essential two pieces of white cloth connected by a ring in front of her and on her back. From that ring there is also a piece of white fabric that seems to be her bottoms connected to that ring. Despite this fabric, she wears, leggings that have stirrups around her feet. These leggings are all white , with the waist band being black and two black lines that are on her outer thighs, these black lines also tracing the edges of her stirrups.

In between the black lines are black chevrons that look similar to the design for gils, but they serve no function other than to achieve the overall aesthetic, On the waistband of the pants, four trains of fabric trail from her hips and end at 5 feet in length. These pieces will connect to one another underwater and act as a tail for when she swims. On her ribs, fragments of her mask remain, as the mask almost replicates the pattern of a ribcage.

The mask has opening that are hollowed out and look similar to gils on her ribs, which do serve function, as these provide the speed that she gains when underwater. Her hole in the center of her stomach seems to have gotten bigger, as now parts of her number are cut off due to it being in that location prior to her transformation.to the design on her hilt, harpoon like endings.

Her weapon resembles a sniper rifle, and when it is raised to her shoulder to scope in, she gains large fins that erect down her back. Each fin is a charge of a shot that she can fire through this weapon. Around the barrel of the gun is a snake like figure that wraps around the barrel twice before ciling downward and making its tail the lever of her rifle. The barrel itself is black, yet the snake is white. The handle and stock of the gun is a dark teal color, with the minor details being silver. She does not have a scope for her weapon, but usually when the weapon is raised, a small stream of water trails from the serpents mouth to the front of her eyes. This stream is then a visual representation of what the snake sees through it's eyes.

((The changes visually, are the canisters on the gun are fins that extend down her back, still 4 though just like the image. The front of the gun has the face of the mask described above. The colors, the blue on this image is actually black for her. The red is teal for her. The white stays, the gold edges are silver.))

Naya Hirondelle [APPROVED 3-5- ] [Hazard Rating D] 7


» Resereccion Abilities:

Cero Asesinato (Cero of Assassination):
When she is in this form, she is able to fire a specialized form of Cero from her weapon. She usually starts off with four of these behemoth shots. These shots compress the strength of four Cero compressed as one, into the size of a .50 Cal sniper bullet capable of ripping through almost anything in its path. These shots possess a great speed, that take very careful positioning to move away from, as even standing the area around the shot can be lethal. In fact, being in the area of the shot might be more of an issue, as this area usually carries debris and other objects with it during its flight. If a shot were to be fired, it would take (2 posts from myself) before another shot would be available.

Escupe (Spit):
She mentally controls streams of the water below her into geysers that fire upward. She can fire multiple at a time, or have a surge of them in a singular radius when she uses the command ‘arrojar’ (puke). This ability does not intended to do damage, but assist with ‘Sorrow’. If these pillars contact a person when the density of water is too thick for them to travel through, they may become stuck in the liquid, allowing her to aim the perfect shot. Being stuck in the pillar does not 100% stop movement, therefore you can swim or move inside the waters, but using movement abilities will take (1 post in general) before becoming available for use. All of the water must take time to drop into the ocean beneath her to be used again, which takes (3 Posts from Me).


Incidencia (Impact):
She can eject one of her fins downward, exploding on contact with a surface. This is a looser form of her compressed shots, but still contains an power equal to two times the strength of a normal Cero. This ability acts similar to her Cero Asesinato with its need to recharge. It will take (2 Posts from me) before another can be used and will also count as a bullet being used.


Latigo del vibora (Serpent's Lash)
She infuses the train on her belt Sorrow, causing the cloth to have the striking power of a sword. She can control these mentally.

Other Passive abilities include:

Enhanced swimming:
When she is in her ocean or anybody of water, the trains of cloth on her body collapse on each other and make her travel at bullet speeds in water. Throughout this form, she cannot sonido, so she uses this advantage as her way of travel.


Water Coat:
She generates this passively when leaving her ocean. This buffers damage that is taken when coming out the water, in addition to allowing her keep her bullet speed from when she was swimming. She can only use this coat in those two ways. Meaning if she takes damage when the coat is up, she can no longer use her speed granted with the coat. Likewise if she uses her speed to escape damage, she can not keep the coat to keep the damage mitigation properties. Once this ability is used, she cannot generate the same effect for (4 posts from me).

I. Skill Sheet


[SKILL SHEETS ARE NOT TO BE FILLED OUT UNTIL AFTER A TIER IS GIVEN! WILL SKILLS WILL BE GIVEN BY THE STAFF MEMBER THAT GRADES YOUR APP! FOR MORE INFORMATION, LOOK AT THIS THREAD]

Additional Note: The skill sheets, as of Saturday, February 10, 2018, have had small additions. There are new skills, and Master has been renamed to "Elite". Furthermore, Master is now the bridge in-between Elite and Grand Master. For more information, and the rest of the skill sheets, READ THIS THREAD

Spoiler:

General Skills
  • Durability: Elite/Advanced/Experienced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • General Speed: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Trained/Beginner/Untrained
  • Strength: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Weapon Skill: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Racial Skills
  • Perquisa: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Sonido: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Trained/Beginner/Untrained
  • Cero/Bala: Elite/Advanced/Experienced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Hierro: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Mental Deduction: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Pain Endurance: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Focus: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


IX. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample:
Naya stares at her foe keeping her blank expression, her stern demeanor being able to pierce through from behind her mask. She looked back to her subordinates, that were holding the scabbard of her nodachi off in the distance. Without hesitation, they ascended to her direction, offering the scabbard to her. She looked at the scabbard, then back to her foe, then back to the scabbard, each turn seeming slow and methodical, as if she was debating whether or not she needed to release. As her glare returned to the scabbard she then took a deep breath in and sighed as she spoke ‘We are here now... Do not make this feel like a waste.’

She gripped the scabbard resting her arm to the side. Before she even started her release, her subordinates seemed to disappear from sight once the scabbard was grabbed. She pointed her Nodachi’s blade towards her foe, then tossed it into the air, just enough for the blade to point upward. She grabbed the blade from it’s back, holding it above her head as she took one last glance at her opponent.

‘Swallow…’ She muttered behind her mask as a teal aura bursted from behind the mask, almost making what looked like a black hole of energy on her mouth. She then tilted her head backward, so the handle of her sword was touching against this swirling hole. As the handle began to enter the hole, this swirling energy seemed to encompass the world around her. The skies turned dark, as if it were to begin to rain and surely enough, droplets began to fall harder. Behind her mask, her eyes closed as she spoke ‘...the World’.

When saying those words, the bottom jaw of her mask unhinged, as the teal swirl became more vicious. It was to a point where the suction from this abyss started uprooting trees, slicing buildings into bits and anything that was lose on the ground began to swirl as though a tornado was acting upon it. The force was so large that through this, it looked like even her mask couldn’t hold on much longer. But on its final step, the bottom jaw split in half again as the sword began to sink into this abyss of teal and black. The aura now became so large that it engulfed her inside of it, and nothing else could be seen except her energy. While in this whirlwind of pressure, Naya stuck her arm outward, cutting some of the energy away from her body, allowing her foe to see the blade sink into her mouth completely. She then turned to face her opponent through the energy, her mask now seeming to break apart now that the sword was consumed.

‘Levi…’ was the only word she spoke, as she went to reach inside her hollow hole, and inside was the butt end of what looked like a old-fashioned sniper rifle. As she touched the gun, she pulled it down from inside her body and out to on her shoulder as the aura took everything it sucked in and pushed it miles away from her due to her immense pressure. As the aura cleared, there she stood. Her face being complete exposed other than two fin like appendages where her ears were. Her hair flowing freely as black and teal, and almost looked like the aura was just nothing but her hair swirling around with how similar the colors between the two were. It was as if she was only wearing a swimsuit to battle, rightfully her ribs which beared two large structures that made it look like she had gills.These openings pushed out even more of this teal aura outward, masking a long white train of fabric that seemed to have no end.

When the aura settled in, she swung the rifle onto her shoulder and began to take aim. She leaned backward, letting her back leg fold in while her front leg stayed straight as she crouched. The rain began to pour harder, almost filling Las Noches with water underneath them. ‘One…’ she said as the fins on her back moved upward, and one of the fins looked like it was absorbed into the chamber of the rifle. She slid the bolt action on the gun backward, slowly letting off of the lash as she pressed onto the trigger. When the trigger was pulled, twenty geysers of water erupted upward, surrounding her foe, as the shot was hurled into their direction.




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Wed Apr 04, 2018 6:56 pm
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Cero and its Variations:

Small issue with this. Gran Rey Cero is only available to Espada, of which are rather high-level characters.

Secondly -- and this is more of a writing tip/nitpick, and less of a thing that's detrimental to the check -- but the line of "...Cero Asesinato is equal to being able to fire 200 Bala at the same time." doesn't need to be worded the way it is. I wouldn't give a specific amount in this case, as it just feels...unnecessary. Overspecific. Making the amount worded as "able to fire hundreds of Bala" sounds a lot better, in my opinion.

Hierro/High-Speed Regeneration

You have to pick one or the other, Arrancar cannot have both. Sacrificing Sonido skill in place of it is not something that I can accept. Once this is done, I'll give a check to one of the two.

Dolor(Sorrow)

This needs a range limit for how far this passive reaches in terms of the rainfall, as well as how far away can she manipulate water from.

Escupe (Spit)

How long does this sticky rain last for, and how long can someone be trapped in it for? This also needs a cooldown.

Cero Asesinato (Cero of Assassination)

Change the Cero strength to something similar to Impact.

Incidencia (Impact)

This needs a post limit and a cooldown.[/adm]
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Thu Apr 05, 2018 7:16 am
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"These shots are compressed Gran Rey Ceros, firing at 5X the speed of a normal Gran Rey and being 20X more powerful, at the cost of being much thinner and compact in design."

Remove this line, it has no real relevance to the Ressureccion appearance, and I can't approve of the amounts that you've listed.

Dolor(Sorrow)

Lower this to a quarter, to half a mile at most.[/adm]
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Mon Apr 09, 2018 9:30 am
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High- Speed Regeneration

This needs a lot of work. Change all references to real-world time to posts, and give this more expansion, and toned down a lot in terms of the power of her Regeneration. She isn't going to be able to regenerate organs and things of the like at her level. Use the Arrancar Race Specs as a guide to where you could place hers.

https://www.platinumhearts.net/t15147-arrancar-race-specs-2016-update[/adm]
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«-PREPARE TO BE REVIEWED-»



« Application Checklist »

• Let's Get Down To Business •

  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance: Adept
  • Focus: Adept

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  • Tier: It looks like you fixed everything Henrex asked. So, with that said, I'm going to approve it with 3-5-


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