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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 3:25 pm











SHINIGAMI
死の神
BASIC INFORMATION
Upfront Details about this character

Name: Redd Tseuken
Gender: Male
Age: 338
Appearance: He appears to be about 16



Redd stands at about 5'6
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PERSONALITY
Who are they on the inside?

Personality:


Kind-Hearted: Despite Redd's seemingly rough exterior, there are times when he can be quite the sweetheart. He works to assist anyone in despair, whether this applies to physical danger or a mental fatigue. He often finds himself as a caretaker for those in distress, and this doesn't bother him the least bit. Redd only allows certain people who are close to him observe this side of his personality. So one shouldn't be surprised if after at first Redd is cold and UN-inviting,but after a bit of digging and getting to know Redd they find a heart of gold.

Quiet and Collected : Redd usually keeps his thought to himself, having taught himself long ago that it is much easier to observe what another says-- rather than from a coherent sentence. (Which he, at times, fails to do when he gets ahead of himself)
Redd is a fast thinking individual but sometimes his thoughts that are put into speech come out as abrasive in some ways. He spends a great deal thinking of what he might say be fore he say it, Needless to say, there are times when something moronic might slip.
Redd could be found bombarding those around him with questions, appearing to be a sponge for useless information. as said before he keeps quite a few of his thoughts locked inside of his mind, but this doesn't stop him from making constant inquiries to everything there is

Determined : Redd is a Mufti-minded individual, most of the time mulling over a large amount of tasks in his head. Though usually he has some type of end game that will ultimately benefit him. This is one of His defining traits as a person. Because of this Redd finds training at the very top of the agenda, and that's just the way he likes it.

Stern: Redd Likes to describe himself as serious most times. His body language, the way he talks little things that say he's not one to play with. During combat, training or any activity concerning the gotei, he takes in high regard. putting his best foot forward when it comes down to it. When it comes to training Redd is a thorn in the ass. He lives with the " If you aren't getting stronger, you're getting weaker" mentality. This doesn't mean that he never rests and is always training. Its just if you've got nothing going on, you're not doing anything at all, then you should be extra-enthusiastic advance in the ranks

Mischievous: Redd is an EXTREMELY jokey person. Snarky remarks, practical jokes, and whatever. He enjoys a good laugh now and then, In fact he relishes the though of one occurring. often during combat he might taunt his opponent, jeering at them to break their concentration. Being a naturally multitasking person, this isn't that hard for him to do while using the utmost precision while fighting, In fact, letting his words run free while in battle helps him in some cases. Redd loves to play mind games on those around him-- Now this trait may seem like a contradiction the the one above, and it is, but with good reason... well

Warped: As an explanation to the two traits above, Redd liked to play mind games with those around him. He often switched personality traits completely, in an attempt to catch anyone who knows him off guard. He may blurt out random insults If he has no idea who you are-- or rather if he doesn't care who you are ( and in most cases he doesn't). His questioning nature allows him to sometimes elicit information one might not have given in normal circumstances.
Redd has an odd moral set. He is capable of swinging his heart in the direction of his head, so for example If Redd was to convince himself that slaughtering a group of children was necessary, he would do it, and not feel much remorse. Of course Redd would probably never do this- as of now he has this pegged as completely wrong. Essentially Redd can pick and choose which morals stay concrete in his mind.


Likes:
---Candy--- Redd couldn't go on without his sweets. If one was to observe him closely just before the begging, and sometimes even throughout a battle they'd notice him indulging himself on some sugary goodness, Using pauses in the fray to refresh his sugar intake. Don't get me wrong, Redd love candy 24/7 but something about combat gives him a sweet tooth, making him go through it like lightening.
---Girls--- Though Redd is of old age mentally He still retains the bodily functions and some of the same though processes of a hormonal 16 year old. That being said if an attractive female is before him, he may be come slightly frazzled
---Animals--- Redd adores animals of all kinds, seeing them as not so complicated as humans They only want a few things, and aren't that smart when it comes to manipulating people. Redd Can and will immediately show his tender side in the presence of spiders or dogs.
---Being a ninja--- Redd loves to sneak about. Shadowing people who don't necessarily need to be shadowed. Listening in the high ranking officers conversations and meetings. Sneaking about the sereitei, alarming those who are on patrol during the night. are all activities he enjoys. Being stealthy in general is great fun for him

Dislikes:
---Noisy stuff--- Redd doesn't like noisy places things or people and avoids them proficiently. Noisy is the worst stealthy someone can be.
---Crybaby's-- Whiners whatever you want to cal it Redd hates complaining if you want to complain take it elsewhere
---Laziness--- Redd hates lazy people, being one who spends most of him time getting active and doing SOMETHING he believes Rest is a special treat only deserved after hours of tiring action
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BACKGROUND
What is there past like?

History/Background: Redd grew up in a pretty large network of towns. Normal life, he kind of breezed through it until he met his teenage years. Redd was a good kid... until he got into high-school...and discovered weed. Redd's normal life consisted of getting high. hanging out with his friends, and going to school. of course doing some illegal things leads to other illegal activites and it came to pass that one day he ended up in a dark alley with a gun-wielding coke fiend and that was it for him. Redd had always felt he was meant for something better in the human world, so he is reluctant to talk about his drug-binging teenage years before he joined the soul society. He was 16 when he died, he knew that much. Redd hadn't really cared for his mortal life. It seemed he spent all of his time wondering what would come afterwards and then it happened. He was here, living out his days among other souls. It was a peaceful life, for a while anyway. Hollow attacks were growing in number and ferocity His quiet life was turning into a battle field, and he LOVED it. All the serenity that came with his new life bored him, after all during human life he never was one of the cool kids who always went out and partied so this was entertainment for him. He knew it was his destiny to join the gotei 13 when a group of soul reapers appeared from nowhere to defend him and a few other who had been cornered by a group of low level hollows. He learned the trade. and applied for the 2nd division
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ZANPUKTO
What is this characters power?

Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Chizana Kumo

Appearance:



Inner World: She lives in 21st century modern city, that seemed to once be bustleing with life, In this zanpaktou spirit world the city has become over run with the undead, entering this realm is a constant fight for your life as you are forced to defend yourself against the never ending hordes every second you are there.
Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance :


Redd's zanpaktou is approximatley 45 inches, the blade covering roughly 38 inches of this with the hilt and guard making up the entirety of the other 7.

The hilt is of a woven red fabric with 14 diamond shaped gaps to accommodate the golden fabric beneath which adds a sparse of color to the otherwise ordinary handle. At the end of the hilt is a golden cap that fits over top of the square shaped hilts end. From this juts a tassel of the same red material. This length of string hands down only about two inchest-- with a single knot tied in it. The tassel isn't braided but rather twisted.

The guard is mostly black -- yet is outlined in gold. The guard of his zanpaktou resembles a poorly drawn flower. It has eight half- circle bumps that go all the way around the sword. On the flat sides of the blade instead of the guard itself there is open space in the shape of perfect half- circles.

The blade itself is silver-- with the blunt side being a black color. Its has an arched back though only the slightest bit-- unless under close examination one wouldn't notice. This blade transfers into a sharp point only at the last two inches -- slanting upwars only slightly on both sides, but more so on the side with the blade.

The sheath is red, with a braided fabric that Redd uses as a sash that spans from his right shoulder to his left side-- thought when he choses to carry his zanpaktou in his hands it stays in a neatly knotted bow after its been wrapped around the hilt a sufficient amount of times.

30 inches from the guard which is red is a band of black that is about 8 inches, and then a 10 inch stretch of more red.



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Mugen no ken (Infinity sword)

This isn't an ability rather a swordsman ship technique that Redd has created by Redd for the purpose of parrying most sword strikes. Redd uses this commonly in battle, being a great fan of the use of hand-to-hand combat, getting ones sword out of the way is a great place to start.

This technique consists of turning ones sword-- tracing the blade in an infinity symbol-- this can easily parry sword strikes. Though only a small amount of sword strikes coming from the side. Depending on which way the infinity symbols flow is going it can either parry strikes going downwards or ones going upwards.

This technique uses the the concept of tai chi. Diverting a opponents force rather than wasting energy completely stopping it. This technique makes most strikes easily counter-able. It pushes one sword outwards and around-- usually one would not expect this-- so this technique isn't used too many times in battle in the hopes that another wouldn't catch on to how it works.

This can also be used for offense-- this technique allows to distract his opponent-- it also gives him the maneuverability to change the course of his sword at any second-- he uses this to dazzle some of his opponents seemingly doing nothing but taking just the right time to strike. He can even strike directly after parrying a blow each of these techniques would defect another persons zanpaktou which may leave them open to an onslaught from either Redd's sword or his fist.





Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities: In sealed form, Redd's zanpaktou allows him to Completely snuff out his own spiritual pressure, this ability has no immediate draw backs. Redd can activate and de-acitvate this ability at will. the effects of this ability last for 3 of his posts and the cool-down is one post. It basically completely shrouds his reiatsu from any ability and or spell --its still there just un-detectable. This means reiatsu, energy, all of that is gone -- even if one is able to see reiatsu on a visible scale it has now dis-appeared.




Release:
"Mature, Chīzana kumo"


Shikai Description:



Shikai Abilities:
(Redd's sealed sword abilities are transferred over)

Jizen ni (The advance)

Air is filtered through the holes in his sword which emit a high pitched Buzzing noise. This shikai ability disrupts ones ability to hear, keep balance, and see. It basically dilutes most of your senses.


Hearing is brought down 60%
Sight is brought down 30%
Smell is brought down 30%
Sense of direction is brought down 30%
Balance is brought down 30%
--- The hindrances to this ability depend on ones tier, and resistance
---One with adept Willpower and/or focus would feel the full effects
---Someone 2 sub-tier spaces below Redd would feel these full effects
---for every tier space above Redd someone is 5% is taken from these effects
As a clarification to this ability...
The way Jizen Ni disrupts ones hearing is quite simple the buzzing sound is heard over top of what is actually being heard. The ability not only dilutes your hearing capabilities but adds in and annoying buzz, This isnt necessary But I want people to be annoyed when they hear my shit hahaha

This move Both hinders and enhances ones ability to hear, the above effect still take place-- yes but when sound reaches ones ears at this point it has the tendency to come from everywhere, no longer are you so easily able to tell where an attack in coming from based on sound due to this.

Jizen Ni causes a vibration about someones body, It is partly a sound but essentially its more like a P-wave emitting ability. P-waves = primary, these can move through liquid and solid rock, Basically covering your ears might help but not by much.

Jizen Ni relies on wether or not one is in RANGE of hearing it.
The range of Jizen ni extends to 1/4 mile (1,320 feet) in each direction

Jizen Ni does not become diluted the farther away you get away from Redd, if you are within the range of it you get the same effects whether you are 1 foot away or 80 feet away.

Jizen Ni lasts for a total of 3 collective thread posts (including the post indicting that its been activated.
No cool down, but has a limit use of only 3 times a thread, which needless to say, causes Redd to ration it wisely.

This ability does not effect Redd

The way spiders communicate is through a series of sonic sounds and vibrations.
Ever seen the last mimzy? If you havent the alien powers that boy gains gives him the power to talk to spiders and some other insect through the use of sonic sounds through the vibration of his vocal cords. In fact he even does a science project in which he uses a recorded series of these sounds to cause the spider to spin a web with some pretty crazy patterns.
This is actually a play on that specific thing. The holes in Redd's zanpaktou aren't that special aside from his secondary shikai ability.
Jizen Ni is in no way shape or form a reiatsu based ability. All it does is filter the air through the holes causing a specific set of vibrations and sonic sounds, that when put together form a buzzing noise. His zanpaktou emits a sound wave when swung in a full circle. YES one might see this as only working on spiders but its a zanpaktou ability so naturally its been adapted for humans.

As a side note the only reason its intensified in its bankai stage is because the holes become larger.



Okotta Sureddo (Angry thread)

In addition to Jizen Ni each of the 6 holes that are in his zanpaktou hold a single stream of web that is coated in rieatsu, this web can reach up to a distant of 1/4 mile(1,320 feet)

Each of these threads are an exempt quality of durability due to the fact that they are coated in Redd's rieatsu

Redd can cut and re-generate each thread at will an unlimited amount of times
Each time one thread is cut it takes a 1 post cool down for him to use that holes thread again. This causes him no loss of energy.

Unfortunately the length in all of these holes is somewhat connected meaning Redd could have six threads extending from the holes but the collective length for each thread will always add up to about 1/4 of a mile exactly (1, 320 feet)

In appearance each of these threads are a VERY deep crimson but a dim one, as if they're the color of blood. These threads have a slight glow about them, which makes them visible to one who knows what they're looking for, this effect is souly so Redd can tell where his webs are. Of course this does hold a certain about of concentration.

Okotta Sureddo attaches to anything that gets within 4 inches of the holes and can only actually pull the object if the full 1,320 feet is reached other wise these can only be used to possibly tangle up his opponents. These strings are not adhesive anywhere except the tip top of the string, to everything else its just normal string as far as stickiness goes. The adhesiveness is just as strong as the threads themselves.

Although these strings are almost invisible at night
They are visible, as previously stated they have a dim glow to them this is so Redd is able to see where his threads are, this is a strategical drawback seeing as his enemy can use it against him.
During the day these lines are crystal clear even under the effect of Jizen Ni, The sunlight effect only work under sunlight, this means fire, and electronic devices ( unless stated to create sunlight somehow) are useless in an attempt to replicate this without actual sunlight (i.e star light)

These threads can be elongated and retracted at will, like fishing threads. The way the Okotta Surredo holes work is kind of a portal like thing, these threads come out of and are retracted into seemingly nothing.
When Redd " cuts" these threads they are being cut from their point of origin, and they disppear shortly after, leaving no trace that they ever existed.

In addition Redd's speed and strength are both doubled.
Along with this He has great reiatsu control and his reiatsu increases which helps in the creation of his Okotta sureddo threads

The adhesive properties of these threads do not apply to Redd much like how a spider has special oils about its body to keep from sticking to its own web naturally.

A small appearance change is made, Redd gains 8 inches of height, he is now 6ft not including big bodacious hairdoo, and his voice becomes deeper
Essentially he ages physically but only by about 4 or 5 years




Chiwosuu (Blood Suck)

This ability applies to both Shikai and Bankai.
This symbolizes a spider sucking the blood from its prey rather than eating it whole. This ability works in conjunction with Okotta sureddo (angry thread)
When someone gets one of the threads connected to them it begins to siphon away their reiatsu/chi/energy and eventually thier life force.

Conditions: When one of these threads becomes stuck to someone it draws in thier reiatsu slowly pulling it away. It would take 12 consecutive posts of the thread being connected to you for it to completely drain someone of thier spiritual energy and 32 consecutive posts of it being connected to you for someone to die/become exausted from thier life force being taken away. This ability takes a small bit of reiatsu to activate but the amount thats been used is replenished in 3 collective posts of it being activated.


This ability would take someone's reiatsu and cause it to become Redd's own via the threads. any properties that apply to someones reiatsu would be dis-abled as it passes through said threads. so basically Redd can't steal someone unique reiatsu ability-- whatever that may be.

To clarify this ability does not suck ones actual blood.
This reiatsu could be used to make Redd's threads stronger/more durable.

Note- this ability does not become stronger with each thread Redd attaches to someone, I'm sure you all know that Okotta Surredo can be used 6 times one for each hole in his sword. But no matter how many threads are attached to you it still takes the same amount of time as one.
Also this ability doesn't just work on a person it can work on other abilities as long as said ability is touching the thread.
The adhesive point doesn't have to be touching the the person to drain them if any of the thread is touching them then it begins the draining process.

An abundance of reiatsu could possibly give Redd the energy needed to bust out of a few random techniques-- such as how one can increase thier reiatsu to break out of low level bakudo and what not. Nothing physical about him happens with this.

Ways you could possibly stop this technique.
Well this thing siphons oh energy sooooooo
- Break the thread. While these are quite durable that dosn't mean they're indestructible you'd probably need a master in strength to loltear them apart-- but it can be done that or remove the article of clothing the thread is stuck onto, though if its stuck to your skin you could cut if off.

-Reiatsu draining ability. Someone could use one of these to siphon from Red's siphoning. Note that only a certain amount of reiatsu can travel through these threads at one time. therefore you wouldn't be able to take away energy any faster than Redd. If you were to try and use the same thread as him to take away energy it would depend of willpower levels and weapon skill

-Dodge. you can definitely doge this ability, seeing as it shoots out at 50 mph tops




Kumo-me ( Spider eye)

This ability gives Redd three extra set of "eye modes" when using this ability Redd's eyes gloss over and become completely black-- resembleing those of a spiders

Netsu ( Heat)
Redd's eyes pick up heat signatures, he can't see normal colors, only the colors suck as red, orange, yellow, green, and blue. From hottest to coldest.

Kurai (Dark)
This allows Redd to see in the dark-- everything appears to be grey except for his own reiatsu-- other than that his sight is as clear as day. Even in pure darkness he is able to see

Ōra ( Aura)
This allows him to see another persons energy/reiatsu/chi-- every other aspect of his vision is the same besides him being able to see another's reiatsu-- whatever color it is is the color he see's. even if one is stifling their reiatsu he would be able to see a tiny bit of the smokey aura about them.

The longer he uses this ability the more it drains him -- as he's switching up his vision almost completely in every one of them. This ability will last for three posts, and has a one post cooldown

This ability will apply to shikai and bankai, though in bankai it can last for up to 6 posts with a 2 post cooldown




Josaidōki (Defibrillator)

This is a technique that Redd has developed through the continuous use and the training of his bankai.
Redd uses Jizen Ni with two of his metal appendages at the same time, spinning two of whichever he choses.

He can completely destroy energy/Kidō/chi attacks, and barriers that come at an Begginner level.
Someone with adept level in these areas would have thier attacks weakened by half -- and more susceptible to destruction, these attacks are slowed by half as well.
When Up against a advanced the attack/barrier is weakened/slowed by 20 %
Master/Grand-master Kidō practitioner this move has little to no effect 5% tops .

This has the same range as Jizen Ni while in bankai mode.

This ability does not take away the amount of times Redd can use Jizen Ni.

Redd can use this ability four times per thread (one for each appendage)

This move has none of the effects of Jizen Ni.

This move does not have any of the effects relates to Jizen Ni

This move will last for Redd's post and one post afterwards.

Any Attack/Barrier Casted within these two posts will not be completed. One can speak the spell or command something to come fourth, but it wont-- a small spark of energy MAY occur but that's about it .

If your zanpaktou makes energy attacks or barriers then you're getting the effect a master in Kidō would, or if you have a power. But custom Kidō falls under the actual parameters set above

For each appendage added-- aside from the two already in use this ability lasts for one more post Meaning It can last for four posts in total.

This move works much in the same way as Jizen Ni. Even so It effects Redd in the same way It would effect a master Kidō practitioner.





Bankai Description:


"Kumokuripingu"


When In bankai mode Redd's sword goes inside of him and sprouts 4 leg like appendages from his spine,His skeleton becomes hardened to a state where they are as durable steel This matierial is hard But remains as light and maneuverable as normal. These are each about 15 feet long. Each of these legs holds three holes much like in his shikai mode. Each hole is positioned 5 feet apart form one another Each one of these legs has 2 joints that allow the Fake sword-appendages to spin and bend
Each of these sword-appendages is double bladed. They inter his spine creating a pivot and bolt type thing allowing them to move in almost any direction about Redd's body.


Bankai Abilities:

Redd's shikai has essentially the same abilities as his bankai but intensified.


Jizen Ni ( The Advance)

Hearing is Brought down 90%
Sight is down 50%
Smell is 50%
Sense of direction/Balance is brought down 50%
--- Someone 3 sub-tier spaces and below would feel the Listed effects
---One with advanced Willpower and/or Focus would feel the full effects of this, though it may be hindered based on tier
--- For tiers equal to Redd's and above 5 % is taken off of these numbers as far as effectiveness

Redd obtains major speed boost with this, being able to move at 3x his original speed. a draw back of this is every 2 times he uses Jizen Ni his speed decreases by 1/6th, which means if he uses it the 12 times that he is able to, his speed will be normal.
His strength on the other hand is raised to 3x its origin and does not decrease.
Each of Redd's Legs now has the capability to use Jizen Ni 3 times per appendage, but each effect only lasts 3 posts
(Including the post indicating this ability is being activated).

Kay-SO Lets get the math of this clarified
There are 4 appendages
Three holes each hole can use the ability once.
coming to a total of 12 times Redd is able to use Jizen Ni per thread
each use lasts for three posts.
so if we work all that together Redd is able to uphold the Jizen Ni sharade for 36 posts in total per thread.

Jizen Ni's effects are now selective, allowing Redd to exclude his allies from the effects of it



Okotta Sureddo (Angry Thread)

Seeing as each of Redd's appendages holds three holes, Okotta Sureddo now has 12 total outlets. Now has a collective range of 1/3 of a mile (1,760 feet).
Another fact concerning Okotta Sureddo Is that these threads are now projectile shooting out at about 50 miles per hour when Redd wishes it so.

As a revision to this Redd can projectile these threads up to a distance of 15 feet away from thier Origin without much effort.The Maximum distance they can he shot is 30 feet, though it takes alot more of Redd's own reiatsu to do this. Where as if it was in the 15 foot range it would only take 3 posts to replenish the spent reiatsu it would take 6 posts to replenish it if fired to its full length.

In addition to these enhancements on Okotta Sureddo there is one more, these threads are now as 3x as sharp as his zanpaktou. The tip (where they attach will not cut someone. But if one was to touch any other part of this thread they would be cut essentially its like this if the thread was puled taut it would have the cutting power of his zanpaktou though while limp they seem to be just normal threads.

Each of his bones is connected with Okotta sureddo. These bones can be dislocated and what not, but not so easily torn apart or broken. On top of this The bones are reiatsu re-inforced much like Okotta Sureddo itself--



Extra notes


Redd's skeleton becomes a harder than adamantium (The matierial wolverines bones are made of), this makes no hinderances on his speed its weight thusly remains the same as normal.
This increases Redd's strike effectiveness, a normal punch may feel like one accompanied by brass knuckles. Note: This is stacked with being reiatsu re-enforced

Each of these sword appendages(which resemble a spiders legs and not the arms and legs of a human) are reiatsu re-enforced as to make them harder to destroy-- basically everything about this state is reiatsu re-enforced except for Redds epidermal layer.

Now concerning the joints in each of Redd's extra appendages, it is essentilly three flat swords placed together connected with Okotta sureddothese threads are about two times as strong, requiring someone who is EXTREMELY powerful, strength wise to destroy it, otherwise it would require a reiatsu draining ability to neutralize.
The joints are at the two of the 5 foot marks within the sword length.
Each of these joint are capable of spinning at speeds ,upwards of 35 mph.

Finally Redd's reiatsu is increased by a significant amount, His own rivaling that of the most esteemed captains.

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Roleplay Sample: Redd flicked his sword at the ground as another, already lifeless, carcass thudded to the floor. He exhaled hard, He held his breath almost all of the time he was fighting.-- He snapped back into reality, no time to fantasize, gotta stay alive, gotta stay focused. Redd took the quietest and fastest steps he could twards the door. He darted out into the hallway, he bounded forward for what was only a few seconds- yet dragged on for an eternity. He stopped when a turn came sliding forward about six inches on the dripped blood that had been on the tiled floors. Redd heard a strangled cry fro mthe doorway behind him and was slammed into just moments later. He feel forward onto his stomach the one who had previously attacked him layed just a few feet above, already regaining his composure. Redd pushed up to his feet in less than half of a second, having already drawn his sword when his enemy was JUST getting to his feet. Not giving him the chance to attack, Redd raised his left foot to the mans chest and thrusting it out at him. The figures stumbled backward struggleing to pull air back into its lungs as Redd smiled, thinking of how awsome it would have been if he had yelled " Spartaaaaaa!" He planted his foot back onto the ground bounding forward, as he jabbed the creature in the neck. He swung his right arm back and then fourth- creating an ugly slash across the monsters already bloodied face and still, it kept on. The person grabbed at him, trying to pull him closer Redd held his breath as he yanked his elbow upwards breaking the grip it had on him .................
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General Skills
  • Durability:Advanced
  • General Speed: Master-Advanced
  • Strength: Advanced
  • Weapon Skill: Advanced


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Master-Advanced
  • Kidō: Advanced
  • Zanjutsu: Advanced
  • Hakuda: Advanced


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Advanced



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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:26 am

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [-]
  • History is of appropriate length [-]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Comments/Notes: Okay! I just have a few things to ask for your changes : first, you're gonna need to remove all notes of a shikai, since shinigami's can't start with it. You're going to have to get your shikai approved when you are of a right tier.

Second, your personality it short : it needs ten sentences!

Also, History needs around 2 paragraphs : try to describe his life and how he died.

If you need help, feel free to ask me! I'll do your will sheet when you're done x3
Tier: Will be given when fixes are made!

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 8:53 pm

Hey, I've made all the changes you said to make EXEPT for the shikai. I don't know how the " gain your shikai" thing works here but I imagined that as soon as I got it I would have to edit whatever I deleted BACK into this post. If I can't leave it, could you grade it for me and as soon as I get back to it I'll delete everything?

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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 9:20 pm



I'm just gonna chime in and say that Aivee is a bit misinformed. You can keep the Shikai in there as long as it's locked and not used until your character actually learns it. As for unlocking a Shiaki? It's usually done a tier-by-tier bases. Meaning, whenever you reach 2-3 is when you can use your Shikai. SOMETIMES, it can even be 3-1+ in VARYING circumstances. The same applies to Bankai as most learn it at 1-3, but sometimes 2-1+ characters have learned it.

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 9:24 pm



And seeing as he fixed everything that was asked? I'll approve ya' with 4-3

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Sat May 19, 2012 4:59 am


Alright, good try, but you need some small fixes, as well as just better organization in general... not gonna lie, it's kinda sloppy. However, the theories seem alright. So, here's the stuff:

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The range of Redds shikai ability extends to one mile in each direction and despite distance, if one is in range of this ability it is not diluted, but once somone takes one step out of the 1 mile radius their senses return to normal.


That's a bit much for a shikai ability; remember, it's roughly 50% of your sword's total power.

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, at first this can be heard but eventually all hearing fades. This shikai ability disrupts ones ability to hear, keep balance, and see. It basically dilutes most of your senses.

So does the ability stop compounding on the opponent once they stop hearing it, or just at whatever level it is able to reduce the opponent's hearing?

Quote :
n addition to Redd's sensory disability each of the 6 holes that are in his zanpaktou hold a single stream of web that is coated in rieatsu, this web can reach up to a distant of one mile, the fact that this is coated in Redd's reiatsu and is almost impossible to break unless streatched to its full length of about half a mile.

Again, a mile is a bit much for 6 independant threads for a shikai. And while I can definitely see the threads being highly durable, "Almost Impossible" seems, again, a bit much for a shikai. So, just needs a small downgrade, for the most part

ONTO BANKAI~

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Redd's shikai has essentially the same abilities as his bankai but intensified. Hearing is completeley gone and sight is 30% at best [/qoute]

Need to take into account that not everyone is the same; some people may be able to use their energy, for example, to clear up negative effects like this; or simply readjusting their own sense of hearing. Either way, you should probably have a variable amount that differs based on the opponent, instead of a "Blanket prevent'

Quote :
n each of Redds extra appendages, it is essentially two flat swords placed together using the same thread like ability in his secondary shikai is how they are connected,

...Um... secondary... shikai...?

Quote :
oot mark (Being at the end i.e. the farthest away from him.
each of these joint ar capable of spinning at speeds of upwards of 35 mph, when this happens Redds shikai ability is activated, each of Redd's shikai legson ly has the draw back of one ( meaning each banaki leg spinning can be activated 4 times, but each effect only lasts one post) not includeing the post stateing that this ability has been activated. The sensory disability) effect is now selective allowing redd to exclude his allies from the effects of this move
Hearing is now un-avoidably utterly gone when sensory disability is activated.
sight is now reduced to 50% (depending on tier and resistance level )
and sense of balance is unaffected

Could you possibly put this into clearer terms...? And also, that means that it would last two posts if the post it lasts is afterits release. In addition; there is no such thing as "un-avoidable"; just saying, it is technically possible if the user is strong enough to guard their ears agaianst reiatsu; which you should most likely take note of for your other abilities as well. Lastly, GIVE THE SENSORY ABILITY A NAME, PLEASE XD it'll make things much easier on YOU AND me.



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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Sun May 20, 2012 3:55 pm

All is fixed

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Thu May 31, 2012 5:36 pm


Bumping to 2-3 because the guy has been working hard on progressing his character, he is active and seems like he'll be on PH for awhile. Therefore, this nigga deserves the upgrade + Shikai.

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Thu May 31, 2012 5:46 pm

OHELLYEA THANKS A BUNCH

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Subject Post 10PostSubject: Re: Redd Tseuken [1-2]   Sat Jun 02, 2012 7:32 pm



Willpowers have been updated for Redd

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