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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Aiko [wip]   Thu Dec 13, 2012 10:04 am



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• Name: Aiko - Love
• Titles: Torturer.
• Gender: Female
• Appearance Age: 23
• Age: 463
• Affiliation/Rank: Rogue for a now.

• Appearance Description:
Aiko has a tall lean feminine body. She wears partially bright clothing which resembles her personality as well as adds certain mystery to the background. To the right side of her face she wears a mask which is attached by a thin rope which allows her to easily move it across her face in order to strike fear into the faces of her opponents. She has long bluish hair that reaches partially down her back; the part of her hair that extends to the front of her body is kept together by a small string designed item. Her over all attire is kept together by a large blue ribbon which stretches across her body and around the back and allows the outfit to remain in place. Regularly she wears the full outfit but prior to fighting she removes her right arm in order to have easy access to her Zanpakutō which is located on her back.

Aiko has crimson eyes that are similar to her spiritual pressure color and through that mask it magnifies her fear rating. She’s around five foot eight in height and rather thin for a girl of her age all though she can’t gain weight no matter how much she tries. At the tip of her fingers remains nail varnish which on regular bases is a purple color which stands out from the dark outfit she usually wears. Across her chest she wears tight wraps in order to prevent making any thing visible to any one throughout the duration of her fights.


• Appearance Picture:
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• Personality:
Carefree:
Aiko is extremely carefree, if someone challenges her to a fight she simply won’t reply, in return she will allow the challenger time to strike in order to test their strength. If she’s cut she doesn’t see it as anything other than a battle wound, but once she cuts someone else she embeds fear into their souls by the her unpredictable yet aggressive nature.

Determined:
Throughout her life Aiko has been very determined, determined to succeed and surpass all those before her simply because that was the way to get acknowledged by people and the fact that she had no one in her real life at least she would have someone by her side sometime in the future due to her never ending will power.


Aggressive:
Aiko is severely aggressive towards any one that may turn out to be a good fight. She has anger issues which make her even more potent; throughout her time on earth she had several fights throughout which she had shown her aggression. This aggression is mainly from her tough lifetime, being an orphan made it hard for her to fit in due to which she had to refer to violence to get heard by people.

Ruthless:
If someone gets in the way of her targets or objectives she will attempt her best in order to kill them. No matter the opponent, weak or strong she has a ruthless nature due to which she’s not bothered whether or not someone dies due to her actions as she’s more than willing to kill anyone and everyone.

Devious:
Aiko has an extremely devious personality, to any one she comes across as a young harmless girl that can’t possible do much but run from her opponents. She uses this to get close to her opponent’s in order to strike them unexpectedly. This devious nature was presented to Ikkaku as she approached him and asked him to fight at which point he declined with the remark that he would only fight strong people which lead to Aiko cutting Ikkakus chest in three different places prior to their fight.

Deadly:
Aiko overall has a very deadly personality, not one to be messed with. She became a rogue for a reason; she fought her own squad members to the point of death, but due to being unsatisfied by the strength of her fellow squad members she left gotei 13 to venture into the depths of earth in order to find worthy opponents; opponents worthy of dying by her blade.


• Likes:
For a girl, Aiko enjoys fighting with any opponents that show strength.

She enjoys relaxing in spas in order to take weight off her feet and fully calm her body.

She likes to scare people around her with the mask she bares to the side of her face that alone at times makes her day.

She enjoys having fun with her opponents in a way that truly shows of the strength bared by women.


• Dislikes:
She hates stereo typical people who judge by appearances.

She dislikes people who mock her but can’t back their words up by any action.

She despises demons as they show no sign of beauty once they release into their full forms.

She doesn’t like people who over shadow her moment of success by their achievements

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• History:

Birth:

Aiko, was born in the depths of Karakura, she doesn’t remember much about her family due her spending her life time within an orphanage. She had a tough life, watching people come and go day by day which made her rather rebellious throughout the duration of her life which lead to a lot of complications further along the years. At the age of ten she began to fight a lot with a veriaty of people which generated a lot of trouble even though she could handle it; due to her aggressive nature her orphanage placed her in a scheme where people fight and get paid where she remained for around five to ten years making a lot of money and improving her reputation, by the age of twenty she was rather well known for her fighting success; she would often beat male opponents who either threatened or challenged her. Finally, she brought a house and attempted to settle down but sadly failed due to a craving for action. She joined a competition held by some gangs that promoted fighting; she dressed rather provocatively and attracted a lot of attentions in her fight whilst taking care of the scum that roamed the streets of Karakura. By the time she reached twenty two she was rather a responsible person and had managed to progress in her fighting to a vast degree, to the point that she was able to beat even her trainers at the Dojo she trained at.

However one day she was rather unfortunate in a fight against her opponents, a gang possibly triad had surrounded her – around twenty men who had a simply intention to capture her and torture her for simple fun. But due to her bitchy sinister nature; she brought hell to earth in a sense by beating the twenty men single handily but it wasn’t long before more came, this time she was not so fortunate. Throughout the course of her last fight she was struck deep by a blade, of course the cowards had vanished at the point of her death but she simply stood looking at her body: days: weeks passed and yet no one out of the hundreds of people that had walked pass the body did a thing until a tall shady figure that had clearly seen her offered her another chance, he mentioned a place known as the soul society and with a tap from his Zanpakutō she arrived at the perfectly described location.

Soul Society:
Before long she was there in the depths of rukongai the district she was in was rather brutal, there was no way to survive apart from fighting. Dead in day out people fought for food, money, power it was rather a biased scene. Promptly after her arrival she began facing challenges which mostly lead to hunger, she was told that in this world she won’t face hunger yet her stomach was empty and she craved the foot that was ate by other people in the vicinity.
Her cravings lasted for a long time which lead to utter hunger; which lead to fighting throughout the area up until she managed to take a fraction of the food delivery and designate it between the hungry children in the area. It wasn’t like her to be kind but either way everyone had to eat and with that she began her adventure as she fought with in Rukongai in order to make some sort of reputation for herself.

Before long she joined the shinigami academy from which she graduated in a mere two years, it was rather intriguing to see someone like her as a shinigami but she craved strength and was eager to fight any one that showed strength due to which she was assigned to squad 11 the fighting squad of the gotei 13.

Ikkaku Madaram:

After being assigned to gotei 13 squad 11 Aiko began fighting people from all back grounds which increased her thirst for blood; something that was despised by name of the people she had gone up against but one fortunate day she decided to challenge the third seat even though the man wouldn’t fight without a good reason he would fight someone that resembled a rogue.

The time must have been well past midnight she wore a stealth outfit which made her look masculine which would encourage man to fight. The lunar light reflected off the head of the bold swordsman known as Ikkaku Madarame. Aiko considered him as cocky and too full of himself therefore she hoped to teach him a lesson in respecting women; simply by kicking his has back where it came from. As he approached she didn’t waste time, many nights prior to this she had been hearing voices in her sleep which proved the fact that her Zanpakutō was there and eager to fight. She raised her right arm up above her head and quickly drew the Zanpakutō in order to lash out at Ikkaku.

She began with a precise and powerful swing designate to strike his shoulder and chest which would without a doubt hurt him, but it seemed that his reflexes had paid off as he raised a large wooden sheath in order to block the attack. He spoke out some trash about not wanting to hurt her but in the end he would have no other choice but to fight her as her crimson red eyes pinned onto him resembling some vicious animal that wanted to destroy this man’s forsaken body. She swung once again, only to have Ikkaku dodge the attack; it wasn’t like him not to fight as he seemed to enjoy it to the fullest degree. As her blade cut through the air, he simply aimed to knock the Zanpakutō out of her hands in order to stop all the fighting and restrain the intruder but it wasn’t as easy as that.

As his sheath clashed with the tip of her Zanpakutō she quickly drew it back and struck the man’s body in a diagonal motion which finally made contact with the tall man’s body; it sliced through his shinigami outfit and partially pierced his skin. Which was when he had forgot all of the bullshit regarding stoppage of the fight which was when he began the full throttle offensive.

Firstly he interlocked the hilt of his Zanpakutō with his sheath and called out what sounded like a name after the word extend however Aiko didn’t have time to really listen to what the man had said. He took an offensive stance as he moved forward and instantly swung the blade at her face which pierced her clothing and sliced through her cheek; it was about time that she enjoyed a fight as she smiled under her clothing and swung at his right arm. Instantly he moved the long extended Zanpakutō in order to block with his wooden part whilst countering with the tip of the blade which lead to a cut on Aikos right arm. She was rather frustrated but began to enjoy it even more as the receptors in her hilt magnified the pleasure.

After several minutes the blades clashed and sent sparks all over the area, it was clear that it was going nowhere what’s so ever and with that Aiko began channeling spiritual pressure through her Zanpakutō which sharpened at the base which magnified the ruthlessness of her Zanpakutō. Then she swung it at the young Madaram who quickly raised the wooden part of his Zanpakutō only to see it split in half as her weapon passed through the wooden defensive part and sliced a deep cut into his skin.

Several seconds later he jumped back as the blade exited his flesh and the blood casually dripped onto the solid rock ground; momentarily after the blood was quickly absorbed into the Zanpakutō which strengthened the steel blade. He had been enjoying this fight but it seemed that he was about to direct his self to his last choice as both of the individuals were rather wounded; then and there Aiko heard the voice of her Zanpakutō as it said ”I am Gusha Senmetsu” the voice seemed extremely feminine and sensitive but it was now clear what she had to do as she jumped back out of the way. She raised the blade almost harmoniously as Ikkaku raised his: as he shouted out the words to activate his bankai: Aiko called out “Killing Spree, Gusha Senmetsu” which transformed her blade to a Zanpakutō like no other which bare four skulls two of which seemed to have already been light up.

Her eyes then watch Ikkaku as a huge Zanpakutō appeared around his back and hands, she didn’t care what it was called but a red gouge on it seemed to increase as Ikkaku spun the Zanpakutō. Meanwhile Aiko sliced through the tense air whilst moving forward and clashing her Zanpakutō with her opponents, before long four skulls had fully light up which presented a quick and easy decision. She raised her Zanpakutō that focused it sight on Ikkaku, his gouge was still filling but the moment her target was fixed the gouge reached the mouth of the dragon; he once again called something out as a red blast shot from the Zanpakutō which had intense density whilst Aikos technique took place which formed several clones at either side of her each of which let go of their Zanpakutō one by one all of which quickly fused to form the final version which resembled the grim reaper and clashed into the red intense beam. The two attack exploded over an extremely large surface area destroyed everything around five to ten meters both ways and ripping off the outfit that covered up Aikos appearance.

Lastly the two individuals laid around fifteen feet from one another; she had enjoyed the fight after all, even though it ended a draw. She closed her eyes and laid back as several people began to rush towards their direction.

Departure:
After the incident everyone was aware of who she was, it was one thing that she despised especially since every single unseated member of nearly every squad began to talk trash about the girl. She hated every second of it all and then decided as one foggy night she collected her stuff and ventured to the north gate of the seireitei. Not a soul in sight, not even any one to guard it; she simply walked through it and ventured into rukongai whilst still wearing an alternate outfit to her shinigami attire.



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• Reiatsu Color:
Crimson

• Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Gusha Senmetsu - Genocide of the fools

• Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance:
Aiko's Zanpakutō spirit is a tall lean girl who at all times wields a black worn down blade. Her crimson eyes stand out in the morning sky as she looks down at Aiko from a great height. Shes around 5 foot 8 and has a small body for a female; however she has excellent control of he blade she wields which at times is attached to her back which shows her desire to fight. Gusha Senmetsu wears a blue robe like outfit that contrasts with her crimson eyes, the robe has several battle cuts all over, mostly at the base of the robe; that alone makes her seem extremely sinister thus resembling Aiko.

• Inner World:
Aikos inner world is pretty plain but exclaims her aggressive nature. The whole area is a large wasteland, on one side lays a Pagoda which looks over the whole area; at the peak of which stands Gusha Senmetsu. Whilst on the other side lays a large white mountain that generates cold hearten and hate to her nature. The Pagoda represents triumph and dominates the waste land which is ruled by the Zanpakutō spirit. If Aiko’s personality and nature begins to change; the size of the Pagoda decreases, however if she is to become more sinister from her battle experience the size of the Pagoda increases. If the mount erupts she will learn her bankai throughout that duration, each location within the inner world represents something. Aiko begins within the waste land at the peak of which the mountain and Pagoda are visible; upon mastering her Shikai she will receive access to the Pagoda and would be able to reach it in no time, but she can’t reach the Pagoda until learning shikai. Then upon learning Shikai she will be able to communicate with Gusha Senmetsu and will be able to appear at the top of the Pagoda. Upon vast development up until the point she reaches Bankai, there will be a lot of seismic activity within her inner world, upon eruption Gusha Senmetsu will teach her the art of the Bankai and the ways of tearing the opponent to shreds. For each stage to be successful she will have to beat her Zanpakutō spirit in a fight to death within her inner world.
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• Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance :
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• Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:

Blood Lust:
Blood lust is an ability that's been released by her Zanpakutō, due to the sheer desire to dominate over her opponents. She has an incredible desire to witness their opponents blood dripping from their body as they suffer from her wrath. Due to this she may give very sinister vibes upon fighting a opponent which may at times intimidate them.

Sharpen Reiatsu:
Sharpen Reaitsu works on a simple principle; Aiko diverts her spiritual pressure to her Zanpakutō then simply sharpening the parts that connect to one another in order to cut through the opponent’s skin with the utmost of effectiveness. Upon contact it will highly likely pierce through her opponent’s skin and bone structure. However, if her opponent is two tiers above her rank its half as effective but if the opponents two tiers below her rank the strikes twice as effective. This effect would usually work well on people of similar strength who are exposed to the cut and have no form of defense. However people who are weaker tend to be more effected by this.

Dense Iron:
Due to her nature, Aikos blade creates a rather unique advantage. The blade itself absorbs the iron from the blood of the opponent which either regenerates the broken blade or improves the durability of the blade making it a more potent weapon.

Vast Spiritual Pressure:
Aiko uses this ability to form a thin barrier of spiritual pressure around her body in short bursts, this alone could stop blades of wielders who are weaker then her from passing through, however any one stronger would strike through with ease. Furthermore the spiritual pressure has the ability to almost cripple opponents if they can’t match the spiritual pressure which makes her potent against weaker opponents.

Sense of the blade:
Aiko enjoys fighting with strong opponents above all else, therefore as she strikes the opponent with her Zanpakutō the enjoyment felt as the blade slashes through the skin is sent directly to her nervous senses simply to improve her battle experience.


• Release: Killing spree, Gusha Senmetsu

• Shikai Description:


• Shikai Abilities:

Crescent Arc:
This requires one skull to be fully light up on the Zanpakutō; Aiko begins by swinging her blade which creates a dense crimson ball in the arched bit of her Zanpakutō. She then angles it to shoot of in a designated direction but upon contact it has a destructive nature which explodes and incinerates everything over an area of 10feet. This requires no cool down but can easily be countered by a move that possesses similar strength or if the strength difference is huge for example kenpachi zaraki could simply cut through the crimson ball which would negate its explosive effects. This ability can be countered by people with similar strength to Aiko or stronger however weaker people would need to apply more strength in order to supress or overwhelm the technique

4th Circle of Death:
This is a passive Zanpakutō ability which increases as Aiko fights. The more she moves and clashes with other Zanpakutō: the more she cuts: the more blood that’s absorbed by the Zanpakutō the faster the eyes on the four skulls light up. Each light up skull can be used for a certain technique however once the techniques used the lights vanish once again in order to regenerate throughout further fighting. Usually one skull lights up per post.

Slaughter House Gusha Senmetsu:
Slaughter house works by releasing black yet crimson spiritual pressure into the surroundings however for this ability to take effect two skulls on the shikai release of her Zanpakutō must have crimson color eyes. As the spiritual pressure seeps out it covers a radius to ten – twenty meters after wards it shoots up into a black cascade barrier that prevents from anything going in or out. Within this black slaughter house form 1000 fine needle like blades that float in the surrounding area and are bound to Aikos control. She can then designate the needles to move and cut the opponent the pain of whom is sent straight back to Aikos nerves sense just so that she gets the full pleasure out of it. This last for around three posts before the walls begin to crack and vanish into thin air and after the expiration of the technique there is a three post cool down before this can be used again. However there is a way to escape; if the opponent is able to generate an attack that covers the whole radius for example senbonzakura that can attack in any direction desired by Byakuya, then the walls will shatter; but if an attack is confined to a certain location for example the back or the front walls then the shock is absorbed and radiated through the whole structure to suppress the pressure required to brake it. However if someone stronger applies pressure to one of the walls it can be shattered rather easily however someone of same strength requires more then usual amounts of strength in order to generate some effect.

Erupt Fools:
Erupt fools required three of the skulls to be active and light up so that this technique can be used. Firstly the Zanpakutō has to have blood on it that is specifically the opponents blood; then erupt has to be called out which gives the Zanpakutō a crimson outline. After that this ability coats the Zanpakutō for three posts. Once the opponent is cut by the blade the liquid spiritual pressure generated around the Zanpakutō seeps into the opponents nerve cells which magnifies the pain dealt to the opponent which can at times lead to insanity if the opponent’s not determined enough to suppress the pain. However this is built sheer for offensive an attack which stops it from having any effect on the nerve cells of its owner. There is a down side to this though, this stage is rather unique and new but if the users spiritual pressure was to fluctuate for even a second it would negate the effect and will lead to the cool down time of five posts however If the user naturally suppresses the technique in order to return the blade to shikai form, then the cool down time is only three posts.

Overwhelming Spiritual Pressure:
Her spiritual pressure increases to the next degree, this time it’s powerful enough to make people who are around two tiers weaker than her tremble every time she releases part of her spiritual pressure. The magnitude of her spiritual pressure is rather impressive as she has a lot of reserves even before reaching her full potential.

Final Reunion – Death:
This is used as a last circumstance; Aiko raises her Zanpakutō and aims at her opponent if the users don’t move out of the aim in the next five seconds they will be tagged with a death mark but this ability requires all four of the skulls to be active for it to work successfully. After the opponents tagged, she will call out Final Reunion which generates mirages of her body all aiming at the opponent, even though the body’s themselves aren’t real the blades they wield are and the moment she lets go of the Zanpakutō it changes to almost a grim reaper looking trail of black, crimson like spiritual pressure which engulfs the opponents and eats away at their flesh up until they are completely dead. The key to this is that the dead opponent’s spiritual pressure is taken in by the Zanpakutō and strengthens Aiko. However if the opponent was to have vast’s amounts of spiritual pressure or unmatchable speed they would easily be able to navigate out of the way prior to the target acquired stage. This move is extremely draining so it can only be used a maximum of two times per thread. This may only be used to kill a individual if the owner of the character has given permission. Also, the Zanpakutō aims specifically in order to tag the opponents body structure that places a G on the opponents body! The Mirages aren't real seen as the Zanpakutō tears through time fabric in order to generate Aiko after images but the Zanpakutō parts split which generate identical copies - upon release these shoot towards the opponent which is when the fibers fuse together, the simple reason that they form the grim reaper looking creature is that the Shikai of her Zanpakutō spiriti looks similar to a female grim reaper!


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General Skills
  • Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Kidō: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Wed Jan 02, 2013 9:45 am

> Full check after edits x3

- Can you double check with whomever owns Ikaku to post in here to make sure that they are okay with him being used in your history?

- Don't forget to Mention in 4th Circle that only one type of skull ability can be used per post, regardless of how many skulls are lit up!

Slaughter House :
- First, in and out? What about teleports or people that can become immaterial? And you said you need a AoE to blast it off ; but what if someone had sheer enough strength to blast through one wall? There's only so much that the structure can handle ; I doubt it could handle several Getsuga Tenshou chucked at it, or a full Cero. You should probably adjust that.

- Second : you need a longer cooldown imo. Three posts of no escape, free pain and still cutting through the skin? You need a bigger drawback then it being up for 3 posts and then off 2. Maybe up for 2, off 3? Either case, you need to adjust that. Also, do the needles count towards the zanpakto lighting up? If yes or no, please put that in.

Erupt Fools:
- Pretty much okay, just one question ; does it only magnify received pain on the afflicted? If so, then it's all good.

Final Reunion – Death:
- First ; you can't kill someone without consent, that's a given. You should probably adjust your ability to that.

- Second ; why does aiming, and five seconds, tag the opponent? Is there a visible mark, a visible effect. or is it just random zanpakto pointing? You'll need to elaborate that just a tad more.

- Third ; how is the mirages formed, for one, second, how are their blades real when the body isn't? And why does letting go of the zanpaktou changes it to look like a grim reaper? Kinda starting to sound like you're combining several abilities into one here.

- So here's what I'm thinking ; you should probably re-write it bro.

That's about it <3

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Mon Jan 07, 2013 11:27 am

Bleh I edited it however I simply added the information!
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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Sat Jan 26, 2013 8:42 am



Moving this to the following board : Pending
It was in the wrong space thee hee~! [Also you never finished editing, you goose!]

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Wed Feb 06, 2013 5:45 pm

Moved to WIP

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Mon Feb 25, 2013 4:06 am

Moved to Old WIP.

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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Sat Jun 22, 2013 8:44 am

Archived.

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Tue Dec 24, 2013 6:00 am

So what do I need to change for this character?
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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Sun Feb 16, 2014 3:23 pm

moving due to request
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Subject Post 10PostSubject: Re: Aiko [wip]   Wed Mar 12, 2014 8:27 pm

Moving to Old WIP, you can still work on it from here.

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