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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Fri Jan 11, 2013 11:51 pm






• Name: Zaiko Tricaesarn
• Chosen Nickname: Gouki
• True Age: 45,932 yrs old
• Appearance Age: 25 yrs old
• Gender: Male
• Orientation: The Former Arrancar of Las Noches; But now a freelancer searching for the next great challenge looking to push his abilities to the next level the strive to become a supreme lone arrancar



• Appearance: Zaiko has something of a muscular build from his training leaving something like a medium brute with some veins popping because of his strong strength. The former espada has a height of 6 foot 3; and the weight of 231lbs but he does some tattoos on his body that he created from his sharp Zanpakutō. Zaiko is a spectacled arrancar with messy black hair tied in a loose ponytail with two strands that frame his face. Zaiko's attire consist of white shirt, baggy tribal Ninja pants, some underwear yet he doesn't wear traditional arrancar clothing but the only thing that he wears are both arrancar socks and shoes. He wears cloth bands on his hands also open finger gloves like MMA fighters for hiding the fact that his hollow hole is one the palm of his left hand. The other items are a weapons belt to keep his items intact with three sheathes from his swords, the arrancar does have something like a bookbag from some other items or personal stuff.

Zaiko's weaponry is of four weapons his arrancar Zanpakutō which he trained constantly to gain higher powers, a katana which stolen from a legendary human fighter, a shinigami's Zanpakutō from a vizard he killed and a [bow n sharp arrows with he crafted in Hueco Mundo

• Bone Appearance: The hollow remains of his bone hollow jaw remains on the left side of his cheek it looks the white fangs of his former hollow mask are fused to his face. Their pieces of his hollow horns on the left side of his forehead.

• Hollow Hole: Zaiko's hollow hole on the palm of the left hand it the size of half dollar still the arrancar doesn't like it at all; however Zaiko keeps it covered with his cloth bands

• Reiatsu Colour: With his unarmed combat & sealed Zanpakutō, Zaiko's reiatsu color is in a pure white color whenever he's angry or fighting at his full strength in unarmed combat his reiatsu color is dark red with black lightning trails within the reiatsu color. Yet wheneven unsealing his Zanpakutō it color turns pitch black yet with sparks with crimson lightning when the arrancar uses the Resurrección form. However, Zaiko's reiatsu energy will start surging in his reiatsu color turning dark blue when using the full relentless power of his Resurrección form. In his Dues Ex state, Zaiko's reiatsu is dark black with little green sparking within the reiatsu however the color changes depending his arrancar mood.



Personality: Zaiko's personality is vengeful and relentless in some ways really showing no mercy against enemies or traitors. It's his arrancar nature that a arrancar should have neutral-evil heart at times truthfully he does what he told when a mission from his superiors needs to be done. If somebody wants him to ruthless then he'll be ruthless in that way because of his general attitude he's somewhat cocky. As a former arrancar, everything had changed he's almost completely thrown away his former human life almost something a rulebreaker with an deceptive mind. Although, Zaiko hasn't completely turned all arrancar little traces of his former human soul are still within. He instead tries to live a human's life but become a arrancar hellraiser as well. Zaiko does truly believe the weak Arrancar die and strong espadas survive his quest for power has made him and powerhungry warrior searching for stronger fighters and crush them. Searching and exploring for ways of increasing his powers and abilities to make him a deadly true arrancar brute. Zaiko became battle harden, rarely sadist-like and truly arrogant to people because of this. He even holds back in an effort to make any fight last longer. Zaiko also claims that injury and death are nothing but the price one pays for a good fight or a great battle against strong warriors. Being a leader, Zaiko shown to be a something like a commander with a deadly serious attitude around his teams and his fraccions. Zaiko is very rarely a softy around women because of the souls he devoured. During battle he'll rarely talk during his fight really the arrancar will have nothing to say to the enemy unless it has something to do with deception or greed(money).



• History: Zaiko Tricaesarn is actually an replacement arrancar still he doesn't know why he was chosen for this honor to serve under an powerful shinigami But he's glad that he was able to choose his own path without being controlled or following somebody rules ever again making him a lone former espada. Still, Zaiko only remembers bits and pieces for the human's past still the thoughts dwell within his mind but still the arrancar started to remember. Some memory about him being a yakuza assassin and then something very bad happen which led to the human's death. After that everything is just a blur of faded memories, Zaiko didn't know what it all meant maybe the human was killed after doing a lot of dirty deals for his organization and then finally got what was coming to him. Maybe in time, Zaiko will remember something about his human past but only time will tell if the full extend of his memory will finally come back within the arrancar's mind.

Zaiko started out a hollow named Zenitothos a ruthless strng hollow who always loved to fight the hollow loved to always get himself mid deep into trouble, Zaiko wanted to become a strong hollow always fighting the weak first. He's known to have a reputation of being the bully of Hueco Mundo always picking on the weak hollows then after reaching a higher level of strength through bullying and training the hollow started pushing himself to the next deadly level. In his mind, Zenith thought it was a mistake but he started taking on the stronger hllows which led to a some bigger problems after every fight the hollows was he would use his high speed regeneration to heal his wounds. The hollow's desire for become the best strong hollow always clouded his judgement not looking at the real big picture that strength doesn't always win battles their were other things to consider too. Zenith was too hard headed believing that strength and powers were the only means to survive within the hollow world, he wanted power and strength doing everything knowingly possible to obtain it. If it meant killing hollows the hollow would do just that as he started evolving still his strength has changed but not his power the arrancar was wondering what was going on. As he journey around the place the arrancar started trying to find stronger opponents and defeating them but then he started feeling weaker. Zenith didn't know why beat after every fight he fought the arrancar would be wounded yet his power was weaker once again thinking this isn't his true power. He thought maybe he was dying or something that a virus was inside of him, Zenith wanted to find ways to cure himself or enhance his powers yet none of the hollows he knew were able to train him or had the time for helping him. It was getting bad as the predator was turning into the prey getting beaten by the stronger hollows and his injuries were almost life threatening, Zenith needed to find ways to increase his powers yet the hollow didn't know where to start. Until years later, Zenith was protecting some hollows from a vasto lorde but the hollow was kinda beaten badly from the vasto lorde but the hollows he protected were safe. Finally, Zenith was approach by two shinigami and the hollow wanted to know what they wanted as they said wanted to help him to evolve into a stronger warrior but their was a catch to this they wanted to something in return. At first, Zenith didn't believe them but the hollow knew something was wrong with them but perhaps they could help him with his powers and then the hollow accepted their offer.

Zenith was taken to some place called Las Noches into their experimental labs as some scientist diagnosed what kind of virus the hollow had it was curable. Zenith felt his strength return to him as he lefted his tube chamber but the shinigami in charge of the place appeared his name was Aizen which had a present for the hollow, he had a black ball in his hand. The black ball started evolving the hollow into something more human as he started ripping out his hollow mask as the new arrancar was looking at his face in the mirror looking more human the new arrancar couldn't believe it. Aizen wanted to know who the new arrancar's name as Zenith was trying to think of a good name for himself then the arrancar started to come with a name as he said " M....My name is Zaiko Tricaesarn". Aizen was pleased with him but the new arrancar wanted to started training to make his body even better then it was training within Las Noches, to become stronger it was throught hard work that he started to obtain his Zanpakutō powers. Sometimes some other Arrancar started training him trying to make his abilities stronger. After a decade of training, Zaiko was convinced that he was stronger once again that he was able to return the favor and help this shinigami with whatever he wanted then a situation took place which called for his attention. But Zaiko refused...

After a few missions and some conversations later, Zaiko didn't really see himself being a slave to some shinigami fighting for some fool it started getting in his way. Many Arrancar started seeing Zaiko getting more darker in his actions which wasn't un-noticed until a conversation with two espadas they decided to kill Zaiko secretly as they took the strong arrancar on a mission. Zaiko was defeated and thought dead but the arrancar survived which took a long time for him to regenerate. Some decades later, Zaiko reappeared as a demon was preparing to leave Karakura town the former espada wanted him to train him just to make him stronger.



• Sealed Zanpakutô:
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• Racial Abilities: Hierro (鋼皮 (イエロ), Iero; Spanish for "Iron," Japanese for "Steel Skin"); An Arrancar's outer skin with high spiritual hardness that serves as armor.

Sonído (響転 (ソニード), Sonīdo; Spanish for "Sound," Japanese for "Sound Ceremony"); The Arrancar equivalent to a Shinigami's Shunpo.

Bala (虚弾 (バラ), Bara; Spanish for "Bullet," Japanese for "Hollow Bullet"); a technique of firing his hardened spiritual pressure against his enemies. Less powerful than a Cero, but it can be successively fired at 20 times the rate.

Cero (虚閃 (セロ), Sero; Spanish for "Zero," Japanese for "Hollow Flash," "Doom Blast" in the Viz translation); a powerful spiritual light fired by Menos Grandes and Arrancar

Pesquisa (探査回路 (ペスキサ), Pesukisa; Spanish for "Inquiry," Japanese for "Probe Circuit"); An Arrancar ability to measure and locate spiritual pressure

Garganta (黒腔 (ガルガンタ), Garuganta; Spanish for "Throat", Japanese for "Black Cavity") is how Arrancar and Hollows are able to move in and out from Hueco Mundo.

Resurrección (帰刃 (レスレクシオン), Resurekushion; Spanish for "Resurrection", Japanese for "Returning Blade") returns the essence of an Arrancar's offensive Hollow abilities to their humanoid bodies.

• Unique Abilities: Gran Rey Cero: This is a Cero that only high ranked Arrancar are capable of using. It is performed by mixing an espada's own blood with the Cero. The result is a Cero with a much greater attack power and speed as well as a change of color unique to the espada. It is also many times more powerful than a normal Cero, capable of disturbing the fabric of space, it also seems to spin like a razor upon release as it compresses and decompresses due to the sheer speed and raw power. It is a drastically potent Cero, used only by the espada themselves.

Arrancarized Devil Eyes: The arrancarized version of Eric's Bloodeyes, Zaiko was trained constantly mind, body and soul to learn the technique from a mad demon and make it his own. Zaiko had to defeat his own kind even betray them to learn the first stage and then some months having his own eyes replaced with arrancarized devil ones. The spiritual power once the Devil eyes are activated will give the user increased strength & speed. The arrancarized power feeds on the arrancar's instincts the most basic pure one the will to survive. It activates when the user starts crying blood. The red aura will engulf the user giving him increased power and berserk like abilities like a mad demon would use. Zaiko gain this power from a demon named Eric Zarathos as he was leaving Karakura town teachings how to use the dark power for himself. Originally an arrancar would have a certain killer instinct mostly a dark desire for a techinque such this to exist within their eyes.
Berserker State
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Berserker Abilties
Wild Senses: The Senses of six animals (tiger, lion, dog, hawk, wolf, & bear) are embedded within the arrancar's mind. The combined senses five the arrancar an dark keen ability to sense and point an enemy movements. Utilizing the characteristics of the animals, the Arrancar has the senses of an enemy or enemies. Also detecting what kind of speed their using. A dark combination of both of sonido & pesquisa in an animal sort of way.

Exodus Fist: Exodus Fist: An elemental spiked fist punch attack with the destructve power of the combination of elemental magics. The combination containing (lightning & spiritual). The two elemental magics formed into small diamond crystal balls each ball talking on a dark color the crystal ball merge with his arm turning it into spiked armored fist. Electricity starts forming from the hand. When deliver a punch the attack small nuke like explosion which can damage the enemy pretty badly most of his enemy skin will be burned if it blocked. Attack Range of the Exodus Fist is about 15 feet. The blast radius of the Exodus fist is 50 meters. However, Zaiko can can only fire them twice, and say he can only use it once per post, every two posts. Zaiko can be hurt as well if he doesn't get out of the blast radius in time suffering about 60% of damage if he get caught.




• Resereccion Name: Relámpago Endriago-Hombre[Lightning Dragon Man]

• Resereccion Release Phrase: "Punish Relámpago Endriago-Hombre"

• Release Actions: Once Zaiko gets into his fighting sword stance his reiatsu shoots like a super volcano all around him lightning sparks shoot out from his body. He grabs onto the sword handle removing it from it sheathe getting ready to release his resereccion form. Then he puts the closes to his chest almost a sword pray and then his release it by saying the release phrase. Then his transformation begins...

• Resereccion Appearance:
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• Resereccion Abilities: Augmented Strength: In his Resereccion form, Zaiko's strength is immensely stronger because of the long decades he spent training improved his brute strength with his transformed state growing through deadly trainings. He can actually slam a person to the ground hard actually breaking an enemy shoulder's completely. He can actually attack enemies who are strong in this form. The arrancar can actually block bankai and perhaps strong attacks but the arrancar isn't invincible, ke can be killed.

Augmented Sonido: He started teaching himself how to use sonido within his resereccion form it proven to have better results within training and on the battlefield. His Sonido speeds are augmented. Zaiko is shown to used his sonido speeds along with his reflexes to gain the upperhand on a enemy or find ways to outmanever them. He have enough speed to match and espada's sonido for a brief amount of time.

Highly Trained Combatant: Even though hollows trained him when he was young. Zaiko started teaching himself of how to use the ways of combat. He started becoming proficent in his battles against both hollows and shinigami. Zaiko is almost lethal in using punches and kicks making him a fine combatant. He is skilled enough to even hold his own against stronger opponents yet it has his share problems as well. Zaiko maybe trained in combat but he isn't an expert...

Hierro (鋼皮 (イエロ), Iero; Spanish for "Iron," Japanese for "Steel Skin"); An Arrancar's outer skin with high spiritual hardness that serves as armor.

Bala (虚弾 (バラ), Bara; Spanish for "Bullet," Japanese for "Hollow Bullet"); a technique of firing his hardened spiritual pressure against his enemies. Less powerful than a Cero, but it can be successively fired at 20 times the rate.

Cero (虚閃 (セロ), Sero; Spanish for "Zero," Japanese for "Hollow Flash," "Doom Blast" in the Viz translation); a powerful spiritual light fired by Menos Grandes and Arrancar

Pesquisa (探査回路 (ペスキサ), Pesukisa; Spanish for "Inquiry," Japanese for "Probe Circuit"); An Arrancar ability to measure and locate spiritual pressure

Garganta (黒腔 (ガルガンタ), Garuganta; Spanish for "Throat", Japanese for "Black Cavity") is how Arrancar and Hollows are able to move in and out from Hueco Mundo.

Relámpago Pu o(Lightning Fist): "The Lightning Knuckle Fist" His basic attack which can bring medium sized damage which which can be block or dodged. Zaiko moves towards his opponent with his arm extended and with lightning energy surrounding his fist.

Extremo Relámpago Pu o(Extreme Lightning Fist): An intense ability where both his spirit pressure and lightning energy is fused within his fist. Zaiko can augment amount the damage that the fist attack inflicts. He when he was to hit an enemy with the attack the pressure from the fist would send a lightning shockwave blast through the opponent's body. Which will travel the nervous system breaking apart nerves even destroying organ if it hits the stomach. Zaiko needs to be at far distance when the attack hits an enemy because it can hurt greatly. Zaiko has to been a little far away[about 80 meters] for the opponent when the attack or it will a bad effect on him, It can be dodged though but still the opponent doesn't see it coming though. However, The attack sends little shockwaves within the user's body as well it kinda like a gamble to use the technique.

Gran Rey Cero: This is a Cero that only high ranked Arrancar are capable of using. It is performed by mixing an espada's own blood with the Cero. The result is a Cero with a much greater attack power and speed as well as a change of color unique to the espada. It is also many times more powerful than a normal Cero, capable of disturbing the fabric of space, it also seems to spin like a razor upon release as it compresses and decompresses due to the sheer speed and raw power. It is a drastically potent Cero, used only by the espada themselves.

Ceros Relámpago: This is a Cero that only high ranked Arrancar are capable of using. It is performed by mixing an espada's own blood with the Gran Rey Cero. The result is a Lightning Cero with a much greater attack power and speed as well as a change of color unique to the espada. It is also many fucking times more powerful than a normal Gran Rey Cero, capable of disturbing the fabric of space, it also seems to spin like a razor upon release as it compresses and decompresses due to the sheer speed and raw power.



(Leave the skills alone until the application is approved. You can then go back and add them if you want to)

General Skills

  • Durability: Advanced
  • General Speed: Adept
  • Strength: Adept
  • Weapon Skill: Adept


Will Skills

  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Beginner
  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Adept


Racial Skills

  • Perquisa: Adept
  • Sonido: Advanced
  • Cero/Bala: Adept
  • Hierro: Adept



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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Sat Jan 12, 2013 12:43 pm

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Kade, first, you need permission from Chaozi to have had a past Espada, and especially at least notify him of having had one. Second, When the HELL did los nachoes get a Dojo? Also, against a Vasto Lorde... You would have died. Kade, you need to realize, vasto lorde take multiple CAPTAINS (with BANKAI) to take down.

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, Eric Zarathos lefted Shadowfall to bury an old ghost

What.

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The only way to obtain power and strength the fast something strong needed to be sacrificed and Zaiko's sacrifice his Resurrección form which the witch demon used her magic to combined both forms into one as the arrancar increased in power.

Again, you need permission for Chaozi. And second... What.

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Hierro: Which refers to the ultra tough skin of the arrancar, which is a result of their compressed spiritual power. While their skin is strong enough to block even released Zanpakutō bare-handed, it is by no means impenetrable. Yet if a strong and powerful attack or shikai attack was used then perhaps Zaiko's hierro might break.

Kade, how many times are you going to make this mistake of saying you need shikai level or blah blah blah to destroy defenses. Just take out the last line completely, PLEASE.

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Mano: An ability that Arrancar's use to deflect, stop or even pierce the enemy with their bare hands. When this technique is used with conjunction Hierro it power strengthens in terms of defence. Zaiko can combine this technique with Hierro which is called "Ma-Hierro" a strong which can block bankai but still feel the effects from it.

...If you are going to use this, remove everything from it except for the first sentence.

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Negación: are energy fields are used to rescue fellow Hollows. Only the Gillian-class Menos have shown the ability to use it. Negación fields surround a target in a square beam of light that isolates the target from the dimension they are currently in, making it impossible to harm them. The field then pulls the target towards the Menos that created the field.

Arrancar CANNOT USE NEGACIÓN.

Also, you cannot have augmented/master everything. Reduce it to two things that are at that level and describe the rest as normal.

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Enhanced Pesquisa: This is the Arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami ability to sense Spiritual Pressure. It functions very similarly to sonar. However, Zaiko's pesquisa his five senses are in effect and detect where the spiritual pressure and howe powerful that person or people are almost a super homing beacon.

No, you cannot just pesquia the five senses. Keep it normal.

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The blast radius of the Exodus fist is 3 miles. However, Zaiko can use the attack three times if the fourth time then his arm of which he used the Exodus fist will take some damage and become numb.

HELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL NOOOOOOOOOOOO. Change distance to 50 meters, say he can only fire them twice, and say he can only use it once per post, every two posts.

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True Deception: The mind trick technique which give the enemy some measure of hope but it ensures the user's victory.

I'm fine with the rest of the ability, but remove this first line. You can't just "Ensure your victory" with a single technique's description.

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Body suit lasts for 2 posts.

Please say it only lasts for 6 seconds.


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The problem of this attack is willpower must be higher for this to work. If will power isn't high then the original user can be sensed and attack.

Wouldn't this be governed by focus?



Finally, you need Chaozi's permission to even HAVE berserker form. I have no idea who the hell "Togo" is, but if I were you I wouldn't even mention them. Finally, link the old application at the bottom of the new one, please.

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:32 pm

Ok I've changed a lot of things JJ
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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Thu Jan 17, 2013 2:25 pm

Whew here we go.

Arrancarized Devil Eyes: The arrancarized version of Eric's Bloodeyes, Zaiko was trained constantly mind, body and soul to learn the technique from a mad demon and make it his own. Zaiko had to defeat his own kind even betray them to learn the first stage and then some months having his own eyes replaced with arrancarized devil ones. The spiritual power once the Devil eyes are activated will give the user increased strength, stamina & speed. The arrancarized power feeds on the arrancar's instincts the most basic pure one the will to survive. It activates when the user starts crying blood. The red aura will engulf the user giving him increased power and berserk like abilities that only a true mad demon would use. Zaiko gain this power from his trainer a demon named Eric Zarathos as he was leaving Karakura town teachings how to use the dark power for himself. Originally a arrancar would have to be at near death to gain such a technique like this and it powers.

First off, did he nearly die as an arrancar if so link to that so you have a basis. Secondly... What's with the increasing three stats up at once? Pick two of them please. Third, I don't mind that you link to Eric, [Kade], but can you think of anoter reason for this, also is this the reason for his Berserk forn or is this just a techqniue. ALso if you don't have it written up I'd like to see it wrote up.

Berserker Abilties
Wild Senses: The Senses of six animals (tiger, lion, dog, hawk, wolf, & bear) are embedded within the arrancar's mind. The combined senses five the arrancar an dark keen ability to sense and point an enemy movements. Utilizing the characteristics of the animals, the Arrancar has the senses of an enemy or enemies. Also detecting what kind of speed their using. A dark combination of both of sonido & pesquisa in an animal sort of way.

Animals wouldn't be able to detect the kind of speed, but more or less how fast they are going and how they could adapt. Okay, this isn't too bad... but where does this Bersker form come from? The eyes or what? This
Seems cool, but where does this stem from is my question.

Exodus Fist: Exodus Fist: An elemental spiked fist punch attack with the destructve power of the combination of elemental magics. The combination containing (lightning & spiritual). The two elemental magics formed into small diamond crystal balls each ball talking on a dark demon color the crystal ball merge with the demon's arm turning it into spiked armored fist. Electricity starts forming from the hand. When deliver a punch the attack small nuke like explosion which can damage the enemy pretty badly most of his enemy skin will be burned if it blocked. The blast radius of the Exodus fist is 50 meters. However, Zaiko can can only fire them twice, and say he can only use it once per post, every two posts.

I want to ask this... Is he Arrancar or Demon, you need to stick to a consistent type. This isn't as bad as I thought but uhm.. How far can this fire from? and will he take damage if he's caught into this attacks AOE?

True Deception: The mind trick technique which give the enemy some measure of hope. This technique creates the illusion that Zaiko has been killed, stabbed, burned alive, chop up, or blown apart by an enemy's attack. The trick illusion power actually creates the illusion that the arrancar is actually somewhere else making Zaiko invisible. How complex is true deception? It makes a second Zaiko at the state of near death thinking the enemy has own. The Illusion Zaiko is bloody from the enemy's attack and about die. It turns the original Zaiko invisible covering his whole body in a invisible like body suit in mere seconds. Body suit lasts for 6 seconds. Giving him a chance to recover and dissapear or attack the enemy head on without them noticing it. The problem of this attack is willpower must be higher for this to work. If will power isn't high it won't work.

Uhm I'm sure stacking illusions is a no, even if you're at a near death state. So rework this ability Please. Now on to Ressurrection.

• Resereccion Abilities: Augmented Strength: In his Resereccion form, Zaiko's strength is immensely stronger because of the long decades he spent training improved his strength with his transformed state growing through deadly trainings. He can actually slam a person to the ground hard actually breaking an enemy shoulder's completely. He can actually attack enemies who are strong in this form. The arrancar can actually outmatched a person's bankai and other strong attacks with one hand but too many times then it can get him killed.

This explanation is almost unnecessary... Just say he's stronger, by a certain amount, and that he can block a bankai with both hands Too much filler.

Augmented Sonido: He started teaching himself how to use sonido within his resereccion form it proven to have better results within training and on the battlefield. His Sonido speeds are augmented. Zaiko is shown to used his sonido speeds along with his reflexes to gain the upperhand on a enemy or find ways to outmanever them. He have enough speed to match and espada's sonido for a brief amount of time.

Uhm... Okay this one isn't too bad FIne.

Highly Trained Combatant: Even though hollows trained him when he was young. Zaiko started teaching himself of how to use the ways of combat. He started becoming proficent in his battles against both hollows and shinigami. Zaiko is almost lethal in using punches and kicks making him a fine combatant. Zaiko likes using both speed and reflexes with this skill always looking for the right moment to beat up somebody. He is skilled enough to even hold his own against stronger opponents like other espadas, vizards and ziamichis for short or long amounts of time.

Again... Filler, but this is passable.

High Flight: He actually learned this tehcnique from histrainings, Zaiko started practicing on his own before mastery the technique himself. He actually learned the ability to flying to different places whenever he wants do so. An arrancar needs to fly or super jump and with his new power can travel anywhere he wants. Another reason why he has to fly is because in his transformed state, Zaiko doesn't have any legs in form meaning he'll need to fly because if doesn't he'll fall down.

O_o.. You know... that Spiritual beings naturally fly right He could just know how to fly... I'd suggest something like a super powerful Reiatsu attack, this technique is so unnecessary I'm tempted to throw it out.

Extremo Relámpago Pu o(Extreme Lightning Fist): An intense ability where both his spirit pressure and flame energy is fused within his fist. Zaiko can augment amount the damage that the fist attack inflicts. He when he was to hit an enemy with the attack the pressure from the fist would send a lightning shockwave blast through the opponent's body. Which will travel the nervous system breaking apart nerves even destroying organ if it hits the stomach. It can be dodged though but still the opponent doesn't see it coming though.

Okay Shockwave Distance, and uhm.. I guess I'll let this inference of flames pass through. Digressing this needs a Distance, and will the lightning shockwave affect him if he abuses it too?

Fix these please.

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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Thu Jan 17, 2013 11:20 pm

Well like for Eric, I couldn't just copy the sharingan because of Aivee and Gin I wasn't going to do oto this at first so I made something completely different to the sharingan. After I'm finished with Eric trainings and some other stuff....I do intend to create a second stage and a ultimate stage to the bloodeyes. But I havent really thought about that yet....

Well for Eric to give the mad technique the person's must something inside of them more of a killer instinct within the mind of that person. The will to survive the part of mind which gives a person something of a rage within him. The berserker effect so to speak once this is brought out completely for mere seconds the mad demon{Eric} can darkly influence that power allowing the person's eyes to change into a rage eyes....thus that person's devil eyes is born.

Wild Senses: Well it keen silent assassin type of an animal of how a hunt tracks the prey in the way that what I was going for

Anyway I fixed it up and took out True deception and High flight.....will gain the deception through training but yeah it needs to be redone completely.
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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Fri Jan 18, 2013 12:51 pm

What's the Range of Exodous fist when it's launched as a projectile you never answered that.

Secondly... Can you write up your berserk state because I feel awkward of him saying he has one, and well those abilities seem out of place without a power behind it, Make it simple.

And how far away does he have to be for his Extreme lightning fist to not be hurt.

I haven't gone through history yet, once the powers are done then history okay?

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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Fri Jan 18, 2013 3:02 pm

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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Zaiko Tricaesarn [APPROVED, 2-1]   Mon Jan 21, 2013 12:02 pm

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  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Adept


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