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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Sun Jan 27, 2013 11:55 pm

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General Information
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Name: Raiza Goryu
Alias(s): Uzu Senku(閃光大渦, Eng: Maelstrom Flash) / The Walker / God of War/
Appearance Age: Eighteen
True Age: Two hundred and eighty-three.
Gender: Male

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Overall Apperance
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Appearance:
Height: Raiza stands at five foot eleven.
Weight: Weighing roughly 140lbs Raiza is of moderate weight.
Skin Color: Caucasian, with partial tan.
Reiatsu Color: Raiza's Reiatsu holds a base color of crimson with golden and silver flecks of random shape and size all throughout.
Eye Color: Blue-Grey
Hair Style & Color: Front; roughly shoulder length. Back; Mid-back length. Chrome blonde hair color.
Body Type: Athletic/Moderate build.
Body Markings: Few scars, large and small.
Overall Appearance: Standing at nearly five foot eleven, Raiza's body is that of one who's had a hard life. Although athletic in build Raiza is still quite slim, his body littered in scars from times of beatings and bandit attacks. His skin isn't quite tanned, yet isn't quite pasty white either. Raiza's hair, colored blonde/platinum-blonde, reaches his shoulders but reaches the mid-back in the back. His hair is always let lose, hanging straight though it does seem to gather in long spikes.

Generally Raiza prefers to wear T-shirts, jeans, and jean or leather jackets. Colors of said clothing can range from blacks to reds, blues, and greens for shirts. Black, blue, and grey-blue for jeans. And usually darker colors for his jackets. When not in his combat gear Raiza wears a simple pair of steel toed hiking boots.

When dressed for combat/missions Raiza's outfit doesn't change too much. The T-shirts have been replaced with armored shirts, which Raiza's then wears a black trench coat over. Said trench coat has been custom made and fitted with plated pieces throughout. Finally comes the jeans, with armored knees, and his black combat boots.

Sleep is a whole different matter. When sleeping Raiza wears next to nothing, but has his clothes, and weapons nearby. Anyways, without his clothes on one can see the firm toned muscles of Raiza's body. They actually stand out more due to his slight slimness. The majority of the scars on the body seem to be located on the back, shoulders, chest, and along several muscles in the arms and legs.


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Personality
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Personality:
*Note: Likes etc were used as summary points for personality, the overall section just adds what wasn't already said.*

Likes:

  • Solitude: Not too say its something preferred all the time, but Raiza does enjoy the time he gets alone. Whether it be a lonesome walk in the night, lazing about in a tree, watching clouds, or some other lazy/relaxing activity.
  • Marijuana: Once again, not something preferred all the time. Although Raiza does allow himself to indulge in this habit quite often, he rarely partakes while on duty, or during important missions. Really its just another of those things in life to allow himself to relax. One could say it even makes the ignorant fools of the world easier to deal with.
  • Women: Like all men, Raiza is a pervert at heart. The guy basically worships the feminine body. But this isn't to say he can't be romantic. Easily smitten, Raiza actually isn't one to let a woman in his heart easily. It is a spot to be earned. Of course he's willing to give all women a chance.
  • War, Fighting, Destruction: Once known as the 'God of War', Raiza used to, and still does revel in conflict. The spray of blood, screams of the wounded and dying. Too him theres nothing quite like it. He may be social, but at anytime the switch could flip, unleashing hell on all in his path.

Dislikes:

  • Rapists and Other Scum Alike: Murderers of the innocent, rapists, the excessively greedy. It's people like them, and any similar types of people, that Raiza absolutely hates with every fiber of his being. Sure he may be ruthless, sure he may kill thousands upon thousands of souls, but Raiza would never think of committing acts such as rape, killing children, etc.
  • Excessive Noises: Unless it happens to be music, the sounds of battle, or the voice of someone he acknowledges Raiza despises excessive noise. Now the problem there, is pretty much any noise Raiza isn't comfortable with is considered excessive. The one time Raiza hates all noise is during his sleep; wake him, and it is as if waking the sleeping dragon.
  • Solitude/Being Left Alone: Alone.. Lonesome. Words that Raiza hopes to never associate with himself. Too simply put it Raiza hates being left alone for lengthy periods. He rather enjoys company, whether it be friend or foe. But that's not the root of things. Raiza's fear/hate stems from when he first died alone, and now he eternally fears a similar death.
  • Cold Rain/Water: Be it rain, or any other form of water Raiza generally doesn't mind it. That is if said water isn't reaching cold temperatures. Raiza hates the cold, even more-so when wet. Additionally Raiza just finds the cold rain depressing and dull.

Goals:

  • Disrupt Peace: Who needs peace? Sure some peace would be nice. But thats it. A world full of peace... now thats a place Raiza does not want to see. Raiza enjoys conflict too much to allow the world(s) to fall into a complete peace. He plans to cause never ending conflict, simply for his own enjoyment.
  • Family & Love: Who doesn't dream of one day having a family? Someone who loves them? Someone to love? Raiza may love battle and conflict, he may not want true peace. BUT this does not prevent him from dreaming of one day having a family of his own, or even just a relationship.. He just wants to experience the love lost in his life as a human.
  • Power: Absolute power, a dream that many wish for. And Raiza is no different. The man will do almost anything for power.
  • Acceptance: Too be accepted. Possibly Raiza's greatest dream/goal. He has felt no true acceptance in this life, and yearns for it.

Fears:

  • Dying Alone: It happened once, and he fears it occurring yet again. To die alone, leaving nothing behind, is something Raiza fears more than an world of eternal peace.
  • Nothingness: An emotion Raiza once felt. Back before he had a purpose, goals, and all the other things that keep one going. Raiza hopes to never return to this point, a point in which he had once begged for death to befall him.
  • True Peace: With true peace there is no conflict. And because of that Raiza fears peace. The need to fight is simply too strong, thoughts of eternal peace clench Raiza's heart and mind in fear... fear of never spilling ones blood again... the fear of never hearing the carnage of battle...

Overall Personality: Emotionally and physically Raiza has all but distanced himself from everything else. That being said Raiza does still have those he cares about, those he'd protect and fight for. But Raiza doesn't know emotions such as love, and rarely shows interest in women outside of admiring their body. Raiza shows plenty of negatives, deep sadness, regrets, things he doesn't share. The darker side of Raiza regrets much, is swallowed in sadness, anger, hatred, and the need for vengeance. The lighter side knows only light happiness, and calm.

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Zanpukto
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Zanpakutō Name: Mugen no Uzu(Eng: Infinite Vortex, 無限の渦)

Zanpakutō Spirit Appearance:
Mugen no Uzu:
 

Zanpakutō Spirit Personality: Mugen no Uzu is a calm, yet protective spirit. Though this doesn't mean he lacks anger, or a tougher side in general. Mugen no Uzu is like the angel sitting on Raiza's shoulder, always there to keep him inline. But Mugen no Uzu also offers companionship to Raiza, and they have become quite good friends. Mugen no Uzu willingly passes on all his knowledge to Raiza as a means to protect him.

Training with Mugen no Uzu is a whole different story. The spirit becomes a complete hardass. He won't except any slacking in training, nor a lack of motivation. The same could be said for battle, Mugen no Uzu's calm persona vanishes once a battle has begun. All that's left is the will and need to fight, although a bit of Mugen's calm is still there preventing Raiza from going berserk in a fight.


Inner World: The Inner World of Mugen no Uzu and Raiza is a chaotic yet peaceful one. A vast sea is all there is for one too see, on the horizon a massive island can be spotted. The sea's appear calm, so calm that the current doesn't even seem to flow. Yet as you near the island one can see that the sea's do become rough. Nearly 5km out from the island the calm waters end and a raging storm begins. The sea's roll with waves towering over ten stories in the sky. The skies roar with power, lightning igniting the sky. The heavens rain with ferocity never seen. On the outer edges of the island one can see the damage done by the storm. Trees either uprooted, struck by lightning, or blazing with brilliant flames. The ground looked as if one took a minigun and unload thousands upon thousands of rounds, this caused by rain. Debris flew through the air at speeds allowing them to pierce stone and concrete, propelled by the storms winds. Yet in the center of the island all was calm once again, and in the midst of the calm sat a lone throne. Said throne was made of gold and silver, wrought with varying gems, and apparently splattered in blood. This throne was where Mugen no Uzu spent his time when not wondering his world, or entertaining Raiza in some form or another; be it training, relaxing, etc.

Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance: Mugen no Uzu's sealed appearance is that of a simple katana. With a brilliant blade that is 28" long, Mugen no Uzu shine's with deadly intent. The guard of the sealed form is a golden swirl, which meets up with the silver wrapped handle(roughly 10" in length). Mugen no Uzu's dark-blue colored cherry-wood sheath is worn on Raiza's left hip in this state.

Release Phrase: Feel the winds roar, the thunder crash. Let raging currents flow, Mugen no Uzu!

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Shikai Information
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Shikai Appearance: Mugen no Uzu's Shikai is shaped roughly similar to a tri-pronged kunai. The blade itself is roughly 36" inches from tip to guard, and possesses a pure silver color. At the base of the blade, on each side can be seen an additional smaller blade at an angle, these are roughly ten inches in length. The guard of Mugen no Uzu appears to be several waves that swirl downward over the handle, guarding the hand almost perfectly. The handle is roughly twelve inches in length and decorated with golden/yellow silk wrapping, beneath which a crimson undertone can be seen. Mugen no Uzu's sheath is worn diagonally on Raiza's back, and appears to be made from durable leathers and metals, all of which are a dark blue color.

Shikai Abilities:

    Ability the First: Minor Dual-Elemental Manipulation

      Really this ability is always active, whether Mugen no Uzu is in Shikai or not. Mugen no Uzu amplifies the elemental affinity of itself and Raiza. Though in both Shikai and Sealed the amplification is only enough to do minor and moderate things with either Lightning or Water. Essentially Raiza is able to manipulate any available source of either element. Things Raiza can manipulate, and otherwise control would be stuff like; River/rain water, electricity running through buildings, powerlines, etc. Additionally Raiza is able to freely create either element if it is not available around him, although doing so is currently extremely taxing. Some examples of what Raiza can do with Minor Manipulation would be; forming walls, shields, weapons, and other constructs. Slowing the opponents motor funtions etc via electrical overload. Entrapping foes in a sphere of water. Etc.

    Second Ability: Maelstrom Step

      This ability is a variant of Flash Step/Shunpo that Raiza had firstly created by accident before reproducing it, at which point he begun to master it. Unlike the normal Flash Step, Raiza's has a sort of before & after effect kinda deal. Before use one could see water-drops hanging in the air around Raiza, while sparks of electricity jump from one drop to the next. When used a torrent of electrified water explodes from where he was standing, hitting anything within fifteen feet and electrocuting them. When he appears, it is in a flash of lightning, water swirling at his feet. Due to the use of two elements in combination this variant is much more taxing than the normal Flash Step, as such Raiza can only use this up too ten times per thread until fully mastered.

    Third Ability: Enhanced Speed

      Mugen no Uzu compresses a portion of it and Raiza's Spiritual Pressure/Reiatsu, using it to empower Raiza. Due to the spiritual pressure enhancing his body, Raiza's body is able to handle increased motor-function caused by a combination of the spiritual pressure, and electricty now being sent through his body. Said electricity enhances reaction times, and speed via travel through the nervous system and muscular system. This ability is passively active, and if Shikai is used for more than 5 posts, Raiza will suffer muscle tears ranging from minimal to severe when resealing Mugen no Uzu. This ability allows Raiza to match the speed of those a tier above him.

    Fourth Ability: Maelstrom Slash

      First spiritual pressure can be seen gathering around Mugen no Uzu. As this occurs the blade gains a blue/green glow to it. Electricity begins to spark from the blade. And if one looked close enough they would see water beginning to gather. Within moments of activation Mugen no Uzu is coated in a roaring vortex of reiatsu infused water and electricity. Too one looking at Raiza, it is as if he were holding onto a whirlpool, Mugen no Uzu's blade in the center of it. With a single mighty slash Raiza unleashes the technique. The whirling vortex of elements around the blade is unleashed, slashing forth. The unique part of this slash is that while it holds the shape of a vortex/whirlpool that looks to swallow the foe, the lightning creates a cutting edge of electrical energies around and inside the vortex, the waters serving to entrap, and further electrocute the foe. Upon hitting the foe, or something strong enough to stop the ability the combined elements explode into a powerful shower of energies. If the foe hadn't been wounded enough by the multiple(possibly hundreds) of lacerations, or electrocution, then the falling rain will do the job. This is because Raiza uses the Reiatsu within the attack to control its last stage, the explosion. Firstly the explosion rocks outwards causing the water within the attack to blast outward in needle-like droplets. This is then intensified by the electrical energy within the water. Moments after the explosion Raiza will cause the now electrified needle-like droplets to streak towards the foe, as if to create a pin cushion. This stage will cause numerous(possibly hundreds) of small piercing wounds, the electrical energy could possible disrupt the foes nervous system if hit enough. This ability has a five post cooldown, and is one of the more taxing ones of Mugen no Uzu's Shikai, thus Raiza is only at a stage where he can use it three times before becoming to tired/worn out.

    Fifth Ability: Whirling Currents

      An ability meant to do one of two things. Either capture the foe, or crush them beneath a torrent of water. If meant to capture, Raiza creates a sphere of water, large enough to hold a person. Said sphere is infused with Reiatsu allowing perfect control over it. Raiza can keep an equally powerful foe trapped for up too three posts, while a stronger foe may only be trapped for one or two. Additionally a weaker foe could be trapped for five posts.

      Finally the second use. Crushing the foe. Instead of surrounding and capturing the foe, the waters of this ability will rush forth in a 'pillar' of water, striking the foe with several tons of force. Weaker foes could possibly be mangled by this, left with numerous broken or shattered bones. While equal and stronger foes would still have the capacity to break bones unless absolutely outmatched. This can be used as long as Raiza has the water, and Reiatsu to do so, though there is a three(if foe is not captured) to six(if a foe is captured for more than one post) post cooldown.

      One can escape this technique through a few methods. One could burst the technique with a large enough release of reiatsu. One who is strong enough could 'cut' the technique from the inside out. Ones with greater control could turn the waters against Raiza, though with some trouble. There are various methods, each similar to the stated three.




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Bankai Information
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Bankai Appearance: ---

Bankai Abilities:

    Ability the First: Major Dual-Elemental Manipulation

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    Second Ability: Maelstrom Step v2

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    Third Ability: Armory of the Tides and Thunder

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    Fourth Ability: Thunderous Under-toe

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Inner Hollow & Mask
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Inner Hollow Name: Kusari kake no Uzu(腐りかけの渦, Eng: Decaying Vortex)

Inner Hollow Description:
Kusari kake no Uzu's Main Appearance:
 

Kusari's Alter Appearance:
 

Inner Hollow Personality: There isn't much known about Kusari's personality at this point as Raiza has only encountered her once, and that was to gain his mask. From what was seen Kusari isn't one to take shit, or allow Raiza to sit around all day. A girl she may seem, but a bloodthirsty one she is. Raiza has learnt that Kusari's thirst for battle is even greater than Mugen no Uzu's.

Inner Hollow Powers:

    First Ability: Pressure Blade

      Pressure Blade is an ability of Kusari's in which she can use any object to emit a high-pressure blast of water. Said pressure blast's shape depends slightly on the object being used, but more on control. This ability is used by gathering water and reiatsu at the edge, or a specific point of any object. From there it is released at high pressure during a strike. Used with a blunt object it creates more of a wave or blast. Used with a bladed object creates an extremely sharp pressure blade capable of slicing through steel with ease. Used with a limb allows it to be used either way, blunt, or bladed; due to knife hands, knees, etc, etc. This could potentially de-limb an equal tier, while it could render the limb of someone a tier to two tiers higher. A lesser tier would definitely lose a limb, or suffer an extremely deep laceration cutting into internal organs and arteries. Every three uses more water must be gather on the object. Currently on Kusari can use it, but a slightly weaker and more versatile version shall be passed on to Raiza eventually.

    Second Ability: Maelstrom Lance

      *Note: Raiza Currently cannot use this ability. Once further interaction with Kusari occurs then he will obtain it.*

      This ability is essentially an unique cero. Kusari kake no Uzu creates a lance of crimson reiatsu. The lance itself seems to also be alive with golden electricity sparking around it, while an aura similar to wind or a river runs along/through the lance. The Maelstrom Lance on its own it quite deadly, having much more power than Kusari's normal cero. This could severely injure foes even two to three tiers higher than Kusari/Raiza.

      Upon detonation the lance explodes like a normal cero at first. This explosion has a 5m radius/10m diameter and can cause second or third degree burns. The explosion though distracts from the real action. The lances explosion does two things. 1) Saturates the area in Raiza's reiatsu, and 2) creates a storm controlled by Raiza/Kusari.

      The storm created lasts for three posts, and is able to unleash up too 18(6 per post) bolts of crimson/gold reiatsu-based lightning. Raiza is able to control these bolts to a degree, increasing/decreasing their speed, and having an initial accuracy of 100%, they're trajectory can only be altered by a few inches(meaning they can be dodged with some ease; being a linear attack). The bolts can pierce the flesh/hierro of a foe up to 3 tiers stronger, while causing 3rd degree(mix of 1st & 2nd degree for 3 tiers higher) burns in the immediate area.

      This is available to only Kusari for now.


    Third Ability: Cero

      Kusari kake no Uzu's Cero gathers at the tips of his fingers, tongue, palm, or even his forearms. Its size is the same as the norm, while its coloration is a sea-green with whirling darkblue within.



Hollow Mask Appearance: Raiza's hollow mask covers his whole face, and comes in two pieces. The first piece covers the upper face while the second covers the lower jaw. The pattern on the mask covers both pieces without differing at all. The eyes of the mask appear as if swallowed by a whirlpool due to lines swirling around each one. The swirls clash and ripple down the middle of the mask creating a sort of wake. Around the eyes is a darker blue which fades into a lighter shade before fading further into a sea green. By the time the colors finish to fade the edges of the mask are white. Both pieces have pointed white teeth in the same location as they would be in his normal jaw. Raiza's mask, when needed, appears in a vortex of his Reiatsu of his face.

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Vizard Powers
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**Will be added after IC development, as Raiza has yet to obtain any actual powers from being a Vizard. I.e he's only met his inner hollow once or twice.**

Vizard Powers:

    Ability the First

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    Second Ability: Maelstrom Lance

      This ability is essentially an unique cero. Kusari kake no Uzu creates a lance of crimson reiatsu. The lance itself seems to also be alive with golden electricity sparking around it, while an aura similar to wind or a river runs along/through the lance. The Maelstrom Lance on its own it quite deadly, having much more power than Kusari's normal cero. This could severely injure foes even three tiers higher than Kusari/Raiza.

      Upon detonation the lance explodes like a normal cero at first. This explosion has a 5m radius/10m diameter and can cause second or third degree burns. The explosion though distracts from the real action. The lances explosion does two things. 1) Saturates the area in Raiza's reiatsu, and 2) creates a storm controlled by Raiza/Kusari.

      The storm created lasts for three posts, and is able to unleash up too 18(6 per post) bolts of crimson/gold reiatsu-based lightning. Raiza is able to control these bolts to a degree, increasing/decreasing their speed, and having an initial accuracy of 100%, they're trajectory can only be altered by a few inches(meaning they can be dodged with some ease; being a linear attack). The bolts can pierce the flesh/hierro of a foe up to 3 tiers stronger, while causing 3rd degree(2nd degree for 3 tiers higher) burns in the immediate area. Available to Kusari as well.


    Third Ability

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Resurrección
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Resurrección Appearance: ---

Resurrección Abilities:

    Ability the First

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    Second Ability

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    Third Ability

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History
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Life of a Human

    Beginnings of Family

      Things began back in Twenty-One Thirty, not long after Heuco Mundo had come under new rule. It was early spring, the moon hung high in the sky illuminating all below. The odd thing about this night was though things seemed clear now, everywhere on the horizon, in a full 360 degree rotation, seemed to be a view of enormous storm clouds rolling in. It didn't take much time but soon the calm night had quickly turned for the worse. An immense storm had begun, the winds tearing at buildings, trees, and anything else that it could move. The rain could be see bouncing several feet into the air after hitting the pavement. Yet in this natural chaos a miracle was to occur. The miracle of birth.

      Midnight had passed three hours ago, the labor of the new mother had lasted three hours longer than expected. Not only that but the maelstrom-like storm raging outside was adding to her stress. None-the-less, Raiza Goryu was born at three in the morning to the sounds of a storm, his new family, and some doctors. Unfortunately from day one the child would know loss. The new mother would not survive his birth, the stress of the labor, birth, and storm had left her too weak, her heart shutting down as she gazed upon her son unable to even say she loved him. And although Raiza would grow without a mother, he would grow with a father who would later become his best friend.

      Years later we set sight upon Raiza once again. Now four years old the child had already taken his first steps, and learned to talk to a degree. He had few friends, due to moving around a lot. After-all his father did take job after job. For now though they found themselves on the border of North and South America, heading north. They were to cross the border, heading to the new city they'd live in, and where Raiza's new school would be. Raiza was too get through kindergarten and perhaps grade one while they lived here. For the next few years life would continue as normal for a child and single parent. Things wouldn't get to rough, not until we see Raiza in the future, and a grim one it be.

      It would be six years later when Raiza would experience familial death a second time. But enough of the human life.. Raiza's story would be much too long if we didn't jump forward to his days as a spirit...




A Merged Path

    The First Struggle; Friend and Foe

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    Training and Hardships

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    A New Understanding; Path to the Present

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RP Sample
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Alright so about the following sample: The source of it is a thread I participated in at BleachStory when I was more active there. The character used was Zahard, my account name Procas Sidgard. Here's a link to the thread itself for confirmation. If further proof is needed please PM me about it.

    Procas Sidgar wrote:


      Zahard didn't like his current predicament. Sure he got off his attacks against all three mod souls. But for what? A couple legs that were turned to water and fired at him in a storm of fifty arrows. His right leg had concrete slowly creeping up it after managing to puncture Uriel. Though the concrete was broken easily with a quick hit from the handle of Zahard's Reishi Blade. But still, this did not make things any easier for Zahard. Nope, cause in addition to the fifty watery arrows on course towards him there was also thirty strikes of flame coming at him at random angles. All the while Zahard could feel the masked one building up an attack, this of course occurred after the Demon had seen Zahard's kill. It actually caused the Demon to transform much like the Arrancar, though the Demon appeared much different, more draconic. Zahard knew he was in for it, hell he knew he was likely outmatched already.

      Zahard would have gone straight after the Demon, to interrupt his attack and all. But today just wasn't his lucky day. The Arrancar seemed to feel the need to hurl a ton of explosives at him. It sucked, ten explosions later and Zahard found himself unable to go anywhere but up. And guess what was up, that damn Arrancar, falling through the sky surrounding himself in reiatsu. The shitty part, Zahard hadn't spotted the reiatsu worms. So now Zahard had a shit ton to deal with. Well what the hell should he do now.. Zahard was going to push himself. He didn't care. It wasn't like he had a choice, did he? So in the end, faced with this multitude of attacks Zahard would do a few things in quick succession.

      The first, Zahard began to rapidly force the blood-flow in his body to increase. Rapidly increasing his blood pressure in mere moments. This would physically enhance his body and speed for a short period. The ability was known as [i]Blood Mimicry & Pressure Control
      and Zahard was using the Pressure Control aspect of it. Next Zahard would use the first stage of the previous ability. Allowing portions of his body to become pure blood for the brief moment of some water arrows passing through. Although the arrows passed through Zahard would still suffer injury. An exit wound would be created, spilling blood from roughly twenty wounds.

      Second, as the flaming strikes neared, Zahard would erect a barrier. Of course this was done by using his reishi Manipulation: Sanguine Barrier. Quickly, though not quick enough the barrier formed, blocking ten of the strikes before breaking and allowing Zahard to be struck by the last twenty. Each strike burning into Zahard's flesh, the smell of it reaching his nose. Oddly though only a grin would spread across Zahard's face as his blood was spilled. Luckily for Zahard the hits from the flames would knock him out of Cross's path. Allowing the reiatsu covered Arrancar to pass him by before impacting the ground, creating a crater and kicking up dust. Zahard snickered as he sailed through the air, into the smoke caused by the previous explosions that had surrounded him. Shrapnel from them still kicking through the air, and himself. Viciously lodging itself into his torso.

      Well that was nice, Zahard thought to himself. The smoke was covering his next moves for a few moments. Covered by the smoke Zahard let a drop of his blood hit the ground, activating his Sanguine Dolls technique. Following this any wounds Zahard currently had would heal over, the flesh being replaced with iron as the blood hardens and iron surfaces. This was due to his Blood Iron Manifestation ability. It took a few moments, but the twenty burns, and twenty arrow wounds were healed over with iron.

      Now was time for the action to begin. Looking to a try Zahard mentally questioned if it would do before speeding over to it. The smoke still covering his movements for the moment Zahard set up his bow. Positioned between two branches in the tree. From there Zahard's bow be fired free-hand for a period of time. So now when Zahard would come through the smoke, towards where he knew the demon to be. Zahard could still feel the recoil from his Demon Arrow as he activated his Sanguine Ransōtengai: Crimson Wraith for the second time today.

      With a snarl Zahard began his plan. His bow began firing three hundred arrows. Within those three hundred were one hundred from the technique Iron Needles: One Hundred Strikes. Thus, two hundred arrows, and one hundred iron needles were fired towards where Cross would be. This wasn't all, this volley was quickly followed up by another volley of three hundred arrows, also aimed for Cross. Within this volley were fifty arrows for the technique Imperial Storm: Sanguine Array, these fifty would miss Cross and land around him in a 400m area.

      As this occurred our partially injured Nosferatu was making way towards the Demon. His Sanguine Ransōtengai: Crimson Wraith flaring to life. Around him as he moved the buildings were cut. With a crimson flash Zahard was mere meters infront of the Demon, his right arm already moving through an arc as his left leg swept forward. The total amount of threads Zahard had created were 1230, roughly 300 on each limb. Thus when his arm arc'd forward, and leg was also swept forward the Demon would have a total of 600 threads lashing out towards him. This attack was seeking not only to disrupt the Demon, but cut through his knees, and cut from his shoulder to hip. Zahard was going as far as he could with these attacks.

      He continued to lash out at the Demon after this two strikes. A third, from the left arm, arcing through the air aimed to cut through his torso. After this strike Zahard would flip backwards, the threads on his right leg arcing through the air behind him, cutting upwards at the Demon. As he landed Zahard would take a deep breath. Readying himself to strike. By now his arrows would have hopefully surrounded Cross, activating the true technique hidden within. If that was successful than his only worry for this moment was the Demon. With that in mind Zahard kept his eye on the Demon, but kept his senses weary, ready for an attack from the Arrancar.



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Skill Sheet
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General Skills
  • Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner



Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Cero/Bala/Kidō: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


*from viz info thread*
Racial Skills
  • Power Augmentation Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Cero: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Mask Protection:: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  • Hollow Control: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Wed Feb 13, 2013 4:11 pm

If possible could one of the mods/admins take a preliminary look at Raiza? Considering that all that's left for me to do is overall appearances and personalities, and finishing history, I figured I could get any mistakes pointed out before I finish the aforementioned portions.

If so, thanks

If not, no problem, Raiza should be done in a few days or so.
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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Thu Feb 28, 2013 7:45 am


Here's a report that you asked for!
To be fair I skimmed a lot, but you seem to have a cool concept. Although, one of the first problems I see is the free-form manipulation; I'd suggest taking another look at the template. We do have a sealed Zanpakto ability section, where this could be placed. I would also suggest that you try to find a way to balance it a mite. I can suggest making a tier scale, or just putting in a drawback. Something like that. I hope this helps a bit! Also, protip? Your Zanpakto spirit looks like Nao from Mabinogi. I'd suggest running her name through the FC list with ctrl+F really quick <3 Also, you should probably lower the custom shunpo use down a tad, since it's supposed to be harder and actually does damage. XD But again, these are suggestions atm.

Otherwise, a water user hrm? Kinda sad it's not a pure water, but hey, can't win'em all. Neato concept, I'll give you that. Anyways I hope this made you happy and helps you a bit <3

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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Thu Feb 28, 2013 12:29 pm

Thanks for the suggestions I shall keep them in mind as I continue workin on Raiza. Given how busy I've been lately I'm hoping to be done within the next week at the latest.
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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Sat Mar 16, 2013 11:42 am

Old WIP.

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Raiza Goryu W.i.p   Thu Nov 07, 2013 1:45 pm


Aivee Clean-Up Time!
This member has left the site or is inactive! Therefore, I am placing this into archives! Don't worry, if you want it back, simply post Here!

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