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Sun Jan 27, 2013 7:20 pm

Flight: Yet Firestar has the ability of flying to different places whenever she wants do so. A woman needs to fly or super jump and with his new power can travel anywhere she wants. Truthfully, Xathis taught some of her powers as one of them being flying the demon iramasha taught her how to fly and flying faster with her speed.

What the hell are you trying to say here this is so confusing, She should just been able to fly Re explain.

Elemental Powers[Energy/Electricity]: Through his wizard teachings, Xathis trained his seishin buki how to use elemental powers which was a painful process to learn magic but finally Firestar learned the elemental properties of both metal and electricity. She had some problems in beginning controlling both elemental powers leaving her a little burned at times but she managed to master it. After bribing some demons, Firestar was retrained to completely control her elemental powers depending on her own physical strength detemines the strength of her elemental powers. Through training she been able to create different styles of elemental attacks and defensive powers with her two elemental powers.

Okay... So uhm... This isn't bad... But why metal? of all things... Just make it electricty Done.
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• Powers: Immensely Great Spiritual Power: Like his brother, Xathis maybe not a mad demon but he's become a mad demon iramasha obtaining the spiritual power of a mad demon from his birthright. In the beginning, Xathis a high amount of spiritual power which he would put into his powers and transformations almost like a natural balance of power. After his revival, Xathis was given another chance and uses of spellbooks and demon incantations made his spiritual pressure power even stronger. Being of former clan member, Xathis Zarathos has an grand amount of spiritual pressure. From the trainings and torture, Xathis learned how control & restraints giving his opponents a fighting chance.

Again I don't mind the links to Eric Zantos, but try a bit of varsity in your characters, this is kind of redundant don't you think?

Augmented Demon Strength: The demon strength his greatly fucking above average mostly because of his training and killing regiment. Fighting against stronger enemies and testing his limits. He fought and won battles. He trained constantly to keep his deadly strength to an unbelievable level the only thing that he thinks about while training is getting revenge. The demon can break bones one three or four hard punches . He's capable of lifting a gigantic boulders in mere minutes. After his revival, Xathis would train along with his ziamichi partner into gaining new strength for himself and he believes "the weak die and the strong survive".

Erm who's the Ziamichi partner, and why does it take so long for him to lift boulders? -Blink blink.-

Augmented Endurance: Even through his strength is incredeibly his endurance levels are stronger as well yet he shown to have some battle scars and wounds so it isn't that invincible yet. Throughtout the battlefield, Xathis has shown to have high levels of resistant of damage when fighting due to the fact. He used both willpower and skill in a fight. The sonuvabitch can be killed by too many fucking attacks from an powerful enemy.

My god the English language. First off clean it up grammatically. Secondly.. just say he can take hits better.

Demonic Sensing: When he had something similiar to an arrancar's pesquisa which to detect people but it was kinda weaker when he was full fledge demon. Now this ability been enhanced so the demon can sense spiritual pressure like a normal captain shinigami or espada. To mainly detect people or see how powerful the bastard or people are.

This isn't needed. Take out.

True Hand to Hand Combatant: Though he was self trained. Xathis was trained to be a strong hand to hand fighter by his best friend & some witches. Xathis was taught the skills of a wrestler, boxer and kickboxer at very mid-demon age. He is deadly lethal using punches and kicks being highly unpredictable in a fight using speed and reflxes to take on or kill his opponents. The demon does using his full strength into his punches to let his enemies know who there dealing with. Xathis is skilled enough to even hold his own against stronger fighters for short amounts of time. (That is if he doesn't get killed)

Clean up the grammar and such. UHm.. this isn't too bad, and why demon age?

Fireball Nova Blast: A ball of fire energy blast. A medium weak attack if he wants to catch people off guard. It be charged into stronger fireball attack but it can dodged or blocked however. He can only use this attack once every 1 post, and it has the strength of a Cero.

Fine.

Super Jumping: The Mad Demon is supreme jumper with great skills almost to an humans acrobat. Xathis can leap or jump to close or far. To do so a dark energy plate is placed under his feet(he wears no socks by the way) and then the demon iramsha jump a far distance then before whenever it to attack or get out of the way.

... Where'd the Dark energy come from bro?

Crimson Lightning Claw: A claw slash attack. When his claws started glowing from his fingers they'll extend giving off an lightning energy slash attack which weak but fast like attack but it causing damage. It can be blocked by armor or strong like defense. Xathis can use this every 2 posts and has the similiar strength to bala but doubled.

This is okay surprisingly enough. Just need to know can this be a distanced type of move? If yes then give distance.

Dark Power: This is something of a nercomancy power up mode which gives him more power and makes him stronger. Xathis's power up appear to work by focusing the energy through the body so that it can swell in the demonic bones, doing so increases necro strength and speed. While in the powered up state, the energy aura's color becomes pure black. Four Skills will be boosted by one for 6 posts after his stamina will be completely drained making him look a little sluggish and a little weak. Xathis only this technique unless if he's in a deadly situation or fighting someone that the only good time to use such a power.

Okay as long if the skills are master they aren't boosted to GM and, while he's using this he can't use his lightning.

Final Punisher: The trump card attack where Xathis lights a spark of energy on his index finger. Once enough energy is gathered, this spark may grow to the size of a small moon and is thrown towards the target. Typically, this attack is used to destroy many buildings or a small city or as a last-ditch effort to severly wound an opponent. When it hits something it almost like an big and massive explosion but it can be destroyed if it blasted in right in the center depending enemy's attack power or by a much stronger energy attack. However this can be charged into a much stronger attack which is called 100% Final Punisher which takes 3 posts to charge and the user must completely still when gathering energy for the attack. If Xathis is attacked the attack is no more which he have to do it all over again. The 100% Final Punisher is made when he places his hands forward as he forms a sphere of deep black energy that has another gray sphere inside it that turns black in the center and has blue electricity flowing around it. If he charges the attack for a few seconds, it seems to take on a decagon shape, but most commonly looks like a circle. Once he fires it, it leaves a shot black trail of energy behind before it hits the target, very easily causing a medium nuke-sized explosion.]

AOE distance? Distance of Launch, can he be hurt by this attack? etc.

• Chaos Moves:
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Demonic Skull Release Appearance:
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Demonic Skull Release Abilities: Increased Strength: Because of his Demonic Skull Release form, Xathis's physical strength is increased. From all the demonic bones, demonic rib cages, animnal bones and demonic skull demons that were fused together with the demon iramasha forming this demonic skull creature. Xathis never knew he gain all of their strengths when the gore blood fill thing would happen to him.

Increased Durability: The sacrifical power and newfound serum injections have given him an increased level of durability. From his newfound abilities, Xathis was able to generate a thin second layer of skin almost like an invisible cloth almost unseen by the naked eye. The hybrid is able to withstand some higher attacks but he known this form is a lot weaker shikai and bankai attacks completely hurt even kill him. Other attacks may cause to 45-80% damage to his skull boy

How long and what's his skull boy?

Skull Blast: Similiar to an arrancar's cero. As a standard pitch black energy blast, it consists of firing a powerful blast of concentrated pitch black energy at the target. Xathis can fire the attack from his eyes or his hands. When using this he focuses all his anger into the blast making it a bit stronger then his previous attacks in his normal form.

AoE Distance?

Mecha Demon State Appearance:
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Mecha Demon State Abilities: Enhanced Strength: He had to go through extreme training and dark witchcraft incantations to gain this form which took many years the learn and master from his trainer. Xathis had accept the power of the mecha demon within him combining with the dark soul of his hybrid state. In this form, Xathis's phyiscal strength is enhanced making him almost strong then any demons or strong demons he fought in the demon world.

Enhanced Durability: His durability powers of the mecha armor is enhanced in this form because the metal plating on his armored body. The sacrifical power and newfound serum injections have given him an enhanced level of durability. From his newfound abilities, Xathis was able to generate a mecha armor for his form. The hybrid is able to withstand some higher attacks but strong attacks like stronger shikai and bankai can hurt him badly.

Enhanced Flying: He doesn't have to wings to fly anymore because of the energy boosters on his backside. He can activate them giving him the ability to fly around different places. The energy boosters are a whole lot better then his metal wings which the boosters give a bit more speed then the metal wings of his dark slayer form.

Voltekka Bolt: This is his signature attack. When his mecha demon eyes starting to flash just once. This activates the sholder cannons on his shoulders which they unlock revealing an energy cannon on each shoulder they start gathering both air and energy powering up the energy cannon. Xathis yells "Voltekka". The energy cannons are fired which dish out some major damage upon an enemy

How wide is the beams and such, AOE Damage possible, how far away does he need to be in order to not fry his ass.

Final Lancer: This is his weapon of choice the metal spearlike lance which is kinda long and very sharp. It can be used a various attacks and defenses and it can be broken by very strong attacks. It can greatly withstand shikai, Resurrección, quincy arrows, and perhaps some iramasha chaos attacks. It can't withstand bankai, segunda etapa etc.(well you know what i mean)

Uhm First of all... how many quincy Arrows? Uhm... This should drain on him when it withstands an energy attack.

Final Lancer Attacks

Energy Arrow: Which the lance will generate energy string when pulled it will generate an energy arrow which does minimum damage.

This is fine.

Energy FireWhip: A energy string is generated from the tip of the spear whip can be used like a bull whip. When this energy whip hits it had the force of being hit with strong metal chain. With does strong damage to an enemy

How far can this hit, and how strong is it in terms of Bleach.

True Mecha Demon Form Appearance
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True Demonic Form Abilities: Immense Strength: In his ultimate mech demon form, Xathis's strength is immensely stronger because of the small nanobtes into his body and bloodstream which are enhancing/increasing his muscle mass and adrealine. He can actually slam a person to the ground hard actually breaking an enemy shoulder's completely. He can actually attack enemies who are strong in this form. The demon can actually outmatched a person's bankai with one hand but too many times then it can get him killed.

Immense Durability: Thanks to the many souls that he absorbed and incantations used to recreate the mecha demon ultimate form. Xathis had unbelievable super resistant to damage all due from the body which was used to create the demonic metals used to create armor for the demon. Yet from too many attacks it can be break from focus and truly strong attacks the armor can break and the demon can be wide open for damage.

Augmented Flying: Xathis's flying powers have been augmented which his energy boosters have been replaced with energy rockets giving him faster flight speed then before. The rockets activate energy blast combined with the air giving the warrior a major burst of speed. Almost as fast as an shinigami's advanced shunpo.

Uhm this is fine as long as it does a bit of draining.

Enhanced Vol Sensing: An enhanced version of his Vol sensing which acts almost an radar telling him instantly sense or detect how powerful the person or people. The mecha antennas will start beeping quietly which only he can hear which is telling him that something is coming.

This is fine, but make sure that it can only do that, if I see if being used to predict attacks I'll revoke this app.

Super Final Lancer: This is his dark weapon of choice the metal cybernetic spearlike lance which is very long and extremely sharp. A mega version of the Final Lancer It can be used a various attacks and defenses and it can be broken by too many strong attacks. It can withstand bankai, segunda etapa etc.

Again.. how many attacks does it take to break if someone had an ability to break this.

Super Final Lancer Attacks
Super Arrow: Which the lance will generate energy string when pulled it will generate an energy arrow which is fired an enemy it does strong damage. HOw big and AoE if possible.

Super Energy FireWhip: A energy string is generated from the tip of the spear whip can be used like a bull whip. When this energy whip hits it had the force of being hit with strong metal chain. With does immense damage to an enemy.

How long is the whip and how strong is it, and can it pierce guards?

Triple Voltekka Bolt: An super version to voltekka bolt. Xathis started yelling and the energy cannons in his shoulders and arms are activated. They all starte drawing energy into them powering up the cannons formed four air black balls started to form one black air ball. Then suddenly super nova starts and energy starts forming within him then Xathis starts yelling. Xathis gets into a stance jumping into air unleashing a giant massive energy spear beam. Once this thing hits is leaves an giant tri-explosion which destroys anything in it path. An enmy must an very fast speed to dodge it if blocked the the attack will dish out immense damage.

Vol Nova Defense Barrier: An instant grid-shield barrier which covers his whole body whenever he holds one hand and saids "Vol Grid". Once the words are said quickly energy wires start coming from his hand starting to forming energy grid ball all around him. It can withstand attacks but it had one flaws a shorter sword like a fencing sword can actually make it way into the grid.


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• Class Title: The Demonic Bone Man

• Class Traits: Bone Weapons: From accepting his new powers, Xathis has been given unique ability from his necromancy class powers which he can enhance the growth of his skeletal structure. Initially this was uncontrollable, but after enhancement by some witches. Xathis can mostly control this bone power creating attacks and defenses from his bone powers, creating weapons, attack and defenses with his necro bone structure. When using dark bone power, Xathis's arms transforms taking on a different chracteristic when using bone weapons or bone attacks. The demon iramasha's body doesn't transform when using bone defenses they used his energy whe using defensive abilities. Also Xathis's bone attacks can be defeated or counter by a stronger defense or strong energy barrier depending on the strength and defensive power of that enemy. However, Xathis's defensive powers can be weaken if his bone weapons are damaged by metal attacks by his opponents depending on their attack strength.

My Suggestion Bro.~ Change this to Lightning, and go off of your Forms more than the Bone man okay?

That's what needs to be fixed before we get to the whole... History.


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Tue Jan 29, 2013 10:50 am
Much better now history... I hope you can bear with my criticalness I'm just trying to make sure people understand ya better.

The witch Haggis made some deals with some witches and warlocks to create an ziamichi through their magic and blood samples. The remaining DNA of Alex Vargas, dead iramasha bodies and cut off hand of Eric Zarathos were perfect for their experiment as the witch started to create a body. Finally through experimentation, A demon iramasha was created all that was left to give the creation a mind of it own which the soul of Alex Vargas was re-spawned. Haggis had some trouble in re-spawning the soul since it was so long after Alex's death the demon should have been revived right after his death. Finally, Haggis gave her creation the soul and a new name for the being which was Xathis Zarathos but the creation started remembering things about Alex's past. Alexander Vargas the demon brother of Eric Zarathos aka Kade Hiroshima the demon had tried taking over the demon world by force, he still wanted power trying to everything possible to get it. The dark demon was killing demons and humans for sport which spiral out of control making almost like a true berserker like his brother really their mother wanted them to be last mad demons in existence. Haggis the witch that created them wanted Alex to become the true mad demon; Kade was just a young demon at the time their mother didn't really want the young demon to obtain his dark nature just yet. Alex's cravings for power were getting too intense the mad demon's greatest victory the the slaughtering of both quincys and shinigami groups that were trying to make a peace agreement. He was about to kill them all a killing machine beat him to the punch slaughtering them without any reason then she turned her attention to the demon attacking him. Alex was nearly beaten to a bloody pulp but due to his fighting skills the demon needed to destroy this cybernetic monster before it killed anybody else finally. After a hour within the battle, Alex managed to weaken the cyborg and then finally defeat it but this battle changed everything the demon wanted to get stronger.

Okay besides the English issues, which I just fixed. Who's Haggis, uhm why would she have a dead iramasha body, and why would she reincarnate this body. Secondly you mention Ziamichi in this a few times, and yet I don't see a Ziamichi here I see someone transplanting a soul into dead body causing it to have live. Sorta like what happened to Brook in One Piece. Aside that... why would you call him a Ziamichi in this case Just said they transplated the soul of I think it was Alex into this body then boom makes more sense ya dig?

Throughout his battles, Alex had the desire to become the best then after so many battles, wars and fights the demon had a dark plan. He wanted the Necronomicon for himself to make himself stronger and powerful the demon had the means which the demon tried obtain a few of the pages for himself. Alex nearly had the Necronomicon in his hands but he was killed by another demon named Selena Mino who took the book to her master. Alexander Vargas by all accounts was dead. Still he wasn't killed like the demons thought he was dead the demon was a creation of a powerful witch meaning their was a chance Alex was alive. Haggis wanted Alex to have the perfect body after taking some dead iramasha bodies from the graveyard then she started working on the experiment to bring her son back. After being the go ahead for the other witches, Haggis restructure and enhance her creation with the remainder of Alex's body finally the body was coming to alive. All that was left was restoring, Alex's soul which the witch journey to soulless pits knowing Alex's soul was inside the cauldron of souls after some searching she found it. The soul ball was hanging on by a thread by thanks to her magic the witch was able to restore it giving it life finally combining the soul was body giving it life and purpose. Alex was alive feeling different still his focus and mind were all coming back but the former demon wasn't pure as he thought he was something weird was happening. The former demon thought he wasn't a demon anymore but a demon iramasha his mother granted him a big ass gift but she wasn't done with him. The Witch's council wanted Alex to become stronger because they wanted him to ascend in mad demon power not Kade because he was the older brother. A lot of experiments were done into making his body stronger until the demon was told the final thing of what was to be done to him to make him into a stronger iramasha......an iramasha devil so to speak.

This isn't too bad just clean up some of the redundant clauses in this and sorta flesh out better why Selena or Haggis wanted to pretty much do this with him.

At that point, Haggis gave Alex his new name because Alexander Vargas was dead so giving him the new name of Xathis Zarathos as she explained some events of what happen after his death. Xathis just wanted to live his normal life and start a new then years later after destroying some drug lords hidden from Karakura town, he started living his life once again.

This.... Isn't bad.


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Tue Feb 05, 2013 10:00 pm
Re-reading, and will come back when my head is clear.


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