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• Name: Kor-tatha
• True Age: 476
• Appearance Age: 21
• Gender: Female
• Orientation: While Kor-tatha is extremely loyal to Ashlei Clixx and the espada, she will help out any antagonist organization as long as she feels it will not conflict with Ashlei's plans.

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• Appearance:
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• Bone Appearance: Her bone is in the exact shape of the sash she wears, and is directly below it, framing her hollow hole.

• Hollow Hole: Her hollow hole is directly underneath the sash that she wears, and is in the very center of her body.

• Reiatsu Colour: her reiatsu is a light green color.

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Personality:
  • Arrogant: In general, Kor-tatha believes she is superior unless proven otherwise. It is very rare that Kor-tatha respects a being when the first meeting, though this has been the case with almost all of the espada.
  • Loyal: Towards those who, in her eyes, have proven to be worthy of following she will show utmost loyalty and respect. While she may to too much of a free willed person and a loner, she will never do anything which puts said person in danger or would inhibit them from reaching their goals.
  • Free willed: Kor-tatha is unable to completely bind herself to one being or organization, and follow them with complete devotion. This has resulted in that even though she is highly loyal to Ashlei and the espada, she has no problem helping out other organizations if the objective is appealing to her and she believes it will not harm the espada and Ashlei or inhibit their goals.
  • Wanderer: Similar to free willed, Kor-tatha does not like to stay in one place for any long period of time. Though she will immediately appear if summoned by one of the espada, and do any mission they give her, she will otherwise wander about, whether in hueco mondo, the human world, or any other friendly territory.
  • Mentally Unstable: One would expect someone with hundreds of beings inside their head to be extremely unstable, but Kor-tatha is, most of the time, extremely stable. This is due to her assimilating all these psyches in to her consciousness, forcing the individual personalities in to a sort of sleep state. However, there is always a chance that a psyche can wake up, and if enough do at the same time she will have a mental breakdown. The degree of seriousness depends on the number of psyches that have awakened, though symptoms can range from uncontrollable movements, freezing up and being unable to do anything until it passes, among other things. At the worst she could end up randomly swapping between personalities for very short periods of time, causing her to look completely insane, and possibly become extremely dangerous, depending on the psyche that is currently in control.


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• History:
Kor-tatha was born as Sarah Heki to two normal parents in Karakura town. However, Sarah was born with the gift of telepathy. Her telepathy was an inborn talent, and extremely strong when compared with other power users. Unfortunately, she could not turn off this gift, and was forced to view the contents of other people's minds all day every day. People hated her for this even though it wasn't her fault, they feared the unknown and felt like she somehow violated them for looking at their minds. On her part Sarah felt like she had been given the worst curse anyone could give her, her life stressed out by the hatred even before she started school.

Things got worse when she entered school, kids teased and bullied her constantly, hurting her in ways unimaginable, and the teachers did nothing to stop them, everyone hated her due to her telepathy. All this hatred was too much for her though, and after two months in school she took her own life, stabbing a steak knife through her neck. Having become a plus, she wandered around, her pain and anger growing wherever she went. Despite the obvious fact the school had caused her to commit suicide, nothing had happened. In fact, many people around town were congratulating the school for having gotten rid of her. Two days after her death, she became a hollow.

As a hollow, she went to the world of the living, intent on eating those who had hurt her. As she devoured the children at the school one by one, she realized that she was not only eating their souls, but also their psyches. She became fairly greedy after she realized this, eating more and more people, devouring their souls and psyches. Eventually humans could not sustain her hunger and she started eating hollows in heuco mundo, causing her to develop in to a menos grande of the lowest level. However, due to the number of psyches she had control over she was able to keep in control and continue devouring, now eating other menos. Eventually she evolved to the next level of menos, an adjuchas.

Shortly after becoming an adjuchas she discovered the new espada, now led by Ashlei Clixx, and they asked her if she wanted power. As she did, they transformed her in to an arrancar, and though she pledged loyalty to Ashlei, she oftens stays apart from the other arrancar. She often goes out on her own, but she has never done anything that goes against Ashlei and the espada, she has total respect for all but one espada, and she feel indebted to them and is always willing to return and fight for them should she be asked to.

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• Sealed Zanpakutô:
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• Racial Abilities:
  • Bala (虚弾 (バラ), Bara; Spanish for "Bullet," Japanese for "Hollow Bullet") a technique of firing his hardened spiritual pressure against his enemies. Less powerful than a Cero, but it can be successively fired at 20 times the rate.

  • Bala Fists: By charging her fist with a Bala and not releasing it as she punches, she increases the damage she does with her fists, as if she had hit her opponent with both a Bala and a punch.

  • Bala Shotgun: A modification of the bala technique where she fires up to 25 Balas at her opponent at the same time, though they spread out in 30 degree cone (15 degree spread on either side of the opponent).

  • Cero (虚閃 (セロ), Sero; Spanish for "Zero," Japanese for "Hollow Flash," "Doom Blast" in the Viz translation) a powerful spiritual light fired by Menos Grandes and Arrancar. While most average menos and Arrancar ceros have a red color, Kor-tatha's cero is a sickly green color (see the image of her Resereccion form).

  • False Gran Ray Cero: Though non espada should not be able to use the gran ray cero, Kor-tatha has managed to duplicate it by utilizing the many pyschic selves within her. While it is not a true gran ray cero, it acts the same and it's power is in the same realm.

  • Descorrer (解空(デスコレール), Desukorēru; Japanese for "Loosed Void", Spanish for "Drawing Back/Opening"): A technique used by Espada-level Arrancar and sometimes others, to open a Garganta between the living world and Hueco Mundo.

  • Hierro (鋼皮 (イエロ), Iero; Spanish for "Iron," Japanese for "Steel Skin") An Arrancar's outer skin with high spiritual hardness that serves as armor.

  • Pesquisa (探査回路 (ペスキサ), Pesukisa; Spanish for "Inquiry," Japanese for "Probe Circuit") An Arrancar ability to measure and locate spiritual pressure.

  • Sonído (響転 (ソニード), Sonīdo; Spanish for "Sound," Japanese for "Sound Ceremony") The Arrancar equivalent to a Shinigami's Shunpo.


• Unique Abilities:
Telepathic communication: Kor-tatha can communicate telepathically with any creature within 250 meters of her. Any creature can understand Kor-tatha, regardless of any language barriers or intelligence, when she is speaking telepathically.

Shielded Mind: Due to the fact she has devoured thousands of psyches in her lifetime, she is extremely resilient to mind affecting abilities. Mind affecting abilities affect her only 25% as well as they otherwise would.

Psionic Presence: Due to Kor-tatha's immense psychic energy reserves, she can flare her psychic energy, forgoing any chance of hiding herself from others in order to cause fairly negative effects to those around her. When she flares her psychic energy in such a manner it makes those around her have a difficult time focusing, and causing pressure upon their very psyche. This results in all those within the range of this ability having their focus reduced by one rank for so long as it is active, unless their focus is greater then Kor-tatha's focus. In addition, those within the range of this ability while active will feel as if a crushing force is surrounding their head, the amount of pain dependent on the tier difference between them and Kor-tatha. If their tier is more then 1 major tier higher then Kor-tatha, they will simply feel a minor headache. Those who are more then 1 major tier lower then Kor-tatha will feel as if their head has been placed in a vice grip and is slowly and painfully being crushed in to powder (though it isn't really happening). Finally, those who are within 1 major tier of her either way will recieve a migraine headache, one that while rather painful and might cause issues in combat, would be unlikely to stop them from functioning completely. She can use this for up to two posts in a row, and it then has a cooldown equal to eight times the number of posts she utilized it for. The cooldown is halved if this ability is used while in resereccion.

Subconscious Telekinesis: Kor-tatha has shown to have the capability to use telekinesis, the power to use psychic energy to move objects or as pure force. However, she has no training to consciously use it, and it will only happen as a subconscious self defense mechanism until such time as she trains herself to utilize it.

Suppressed Madness: During her encounter with Mana Asthavon, the demon queen tried to inject a portion of her essence within the arrancar in order to give her a more positive view of Shadow Fall. While its purpose worked to an extent, Kor-tatha's subconscious recognized the mental invasion and has been constantly suppressing any of Mana's essence within the psychic arrancar. While she could not fully suppress it, this suppression has led to a large build up of Madness and demonic energy within Kor-tatha. While being suppressed it will not effect her, but if she were ever placed under extremely stressful and/or life threatening situations, the suppression could be released, and the results quite spectacular.

Cero Portal: By mixing her psychic energy with the energy she would use for a cero, Kor-tatha can make one way spacial portals. These portals will collapse if she stops focusing on it, as her focus is required to stabilize the portal. On each end (the entrance is always next to Kor-tatha), a green disk of energy would appear, and beings stepping in to the entrance would coming out of the exit immediately. Due to the required focus, this technique is limited in combat. In combat, the distance traveled can not be greater then 150 meters, and she will have to wait 4 posts before using it again.

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• Resereccion Name: mente comedor

• Resereccion Release Phrase: devour, mente comedor!

• Release Actions: Upon saying her release phrase, Kor-tatha stabs her zanpaktou in to her forehead. An aura of sickly black/green light surrounds her for a moment, then fades to reveal her new appearance.

• Resereccion Appearance:
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• Resereccion Abilities:
Tentacles: Four tentacles hang from Kor-tatha's face, covering her mouth like opening. She mainly uses these for latching on to a being who she is eating their psyche. Due to the suction cup like construction on them, for the purpose of holding on to something with them she is considered to have a strength one higher tier then normal.

Mind blast: Kor-tatha creates a small ball of energy which she hurls towards an area. Upon reaching its destination, or coming in to contact with something, it explodes, sending out a wave of psychic energy. This wave covers a circle with a radius of 25 meters, and anyone within it whose willpower is weaker then her focus is stunned for one round, and they are disoriented, causing their control over their body to have half what it normally is, the next round. Anyone who isn't stunned by this ability (and is within the radius of course) has their willpower lowered by one for 2 posts. Those who have their willpower lowered are not considered to be under the effects of her mind blast (this is in relevance to her dominance ability).

Dominance: Kor-tatha can use this skill only on a being who is currently under the effects of her mind blast. She takes control of their body, causing it to do as she orders it to. She cannot use any of the spiritual abilities of a being she controls, as she is just controlling their body, not their mind or spirit. If she attempts to use her mind devour ability on a creature that she has commanded using dominance, the stunning of the mind blast will immediately break, giving them complete control over their own body, as she cannot dominate someone who is not stunned. One may attempt to forcefully release themselves from this ability by releasing their psychic, spiritual, or other energies in a burst to disrupt her connection. If their willpower plus focus is greater then her focus, her mind blast effect is dispelled, and therefore so is the dominance (willpower plus focus works so that every rank in focus above beginner adds to willpower. Thus, having adept in willpower and focus will result in an advanced for willpower+focus, as pushing adept by one is advanced). However, if they do succeed they still cannot use their physical bodies that round, as it is recovering from the control effect. Dominance is automatically ended when the effects of mind blast end. Kor-tatha can use her other abilities and act in combat while dominating someone, but if any of her attacks hit the dominated being, the dominance is broken and they become immune to her dominance ability for the rest of the thread.

psionic cero: While in her Resereccion form, Kor-tatha can mix her psychic energies in to any cero or bala attack she produces. Due to the differences between a cero and a bala she has to mix her psychic energy in to each one differently, causing the effects of her psychic energy to be different in a cero then in a bala. When used with a bala based attack, a being hit with the bala has their willpower reduced by half a rank (a previously adept being would be considered weaker then an adept but stronger then a beginner after being hit by one) in addition to the bala's normal effect. When used with a cero, anyone within 5 meters of the attack has their focus reduced by 1 rank if they have a weaker willpower then Kor-tatha's focus, and a being hit by it has their focus reduced by an additional half rank. These effects last for 2 posts.

Mind Devouring: Between the four tentacles on Kor-tatha's face is a mouth like opening. If she can place this opening on the head of a being, she will start to devour their psyche. Every post that this is in effect, one the target's will skills will drop to the next rank (master to advanced, advanced to adept, etc). Once these skills have all reached beginner, she will finish them off one by one, resulting in one of the will skills to null out, starting with focus, then mental deduction, followed by willpower, and finally pain endurance. If all become devoured the being will usually die, but some have survived, though Kor-tatha is not sure why. Even if they don't die, they are sent in to a coma, causing them to leave the thread. Once she stops devouring their psyche, whether because she has devoured as much as she wants or because she was forced away from them, her tier will be temporarily one higher for each rank of will skills devoured for four posts.

As discussed with Aivee (on skype), I cannot have Kor-tatha devour a beings psyche passed the point where their will skills are beginner without permission from the owner of the character I am devouring. For those who do decide to allow this, I will be listing all the effects below. So long as Kor-tatha does not completely devour your last will skill (pain endurance is always the last one), your character will recover after the thread is over. If Kor-tatha does manage to devour the character's psyche completely, it is up to them to decide whether the character dies or lives. If they live or they are a human (or any other race which would turn in to a soul), the owner of the character can choose to have the character's personality affected by this, which would happen if the new psyche within them develops differently then the old one.

In order to explain more about what happens when Kor-tatha uses her mind devour ability, I'm going to use an example with specific stats. Kor-tatha is assumed 3-5, opponent has all adept will skills.

Post 1: Kor-tatha latches on to her opponent and starts eating. One of their will skills drop by one, becoming beginner.

Post 2 through 4: Kor-tatha continues devouring, the remaining will skills dropping one by one to beginner.

Post 5: more eating, focus is "nulled out", refer to the null will skills section for effects of a null will skill.

Post 6: let's assume something stopped Kor-tatha from continuing. She has devoured 5 ranks of will skills (4 adept to beginner, 1 beginner to null). Thus, her tier is now temporarily boosted by 5, making her a 2-5 equivalent for the next four posts, including this one.

In relationship to her other abilities that lower will skills temporarily, these don't count towards what she is considered to be devouring. She devours at what the base skill is, and her devouring changes this base, while any other abilities would be applied to this base to obtain their current effective will skills. An example of this would be if she is fighting with someone who has all advanced will skills to start, and then gets hit with her psionic presence, lowering their focus to beginner. She then starts a mind devouring, and she can start with devouring their focus because the base focus is still advanced (the same as the other will skills), despite the fact that their current effective focus is beginner (she must devour the strongest will skill first, and she can choos if they are tied). Once she devoured one rank, their base focus would be adept, and their current effective focus would drop to null (psionic presence can create null will skills, can't drop below null though), causing them to experience the effects of having a null focus.

Null Will Skills: As some of her abilities allow her to reduce will skills to a level below beginner, to a point referred to as "null" in her abilities, I am going to describe what it is like for a character to have such a null will skill. Even in these states a person is fully conscious, and can do something about their situation. Each skill, if nulled, can be heightened to beginner by lowering two other will skills. Doing so they are effectively using the two will skills they lowered to achieve what the nulled one normally would. As such, so long as the two used to produce this effect are at least beginner the skill boosted cannot drop below beginner. However, if one of the skills lowered for this effect is dropped to be null, this effect is ended.

Null Focus: Some might compare a null focus to someone with extreme cases of add, but this is incorrect. People with add have trouble keeping their focus on one thing, switching to another, but at the same time they still have focus. comparatively, a person with null focus cannot focus at all. Their vision becomes extremely blurry, it is extremely difficult, if not impossible, to make out what people are saying because the sounds blur together. They find it difficult to move because they are having trouble sending the information from their brain to their limbs. By temporarily lowering their willpower and mental deduction by 1, or lowering pain endurance by 2 and willpower by 1, a being in this state can bring their focus to beginner so long as the other stats remain lowered.
Null Willpower: Have you ever had one of those days where you just don't want to do anything, or perhaps you were so tired that you couldn't lift your arms because you just wanted to sleep? Null willpower is like that to the extreme. With a null willpower you would just lay there, unable to do anything, not because you don't know what is happening, but because you just don't have the wish to do anything. You do nothing, not caring what happens and just letting it happen, as you have no wish to move or do anything. By temporarily lowering their focus and pain endurance by 1, or lowering their mental deduction by 2 and their focus by 1, a being in this state can bring their willpower to beginner so long as the other stats remain lowered.
Null Mental Deduction: Beings with null mental deduction could be given every math book on the planet, and still would be unable to deduce 1+1. They simply cannot comprehend information and link it to other areas of their life, not matter how extremely obvious it is. It is the equivalent of not being intelligent, they are less intelligent then any mammal in this state. This is the equivalent to not being able to reason at all. By temporarily lowering their focus and willpower by 1, or lowering their pain endurance by 2 and their focus by 1, a being in this state can bring their mental deduction to beginner so long as the other stats remain lowered.
Null Pain Endurance: A being with null pain endurance could never move, as even simply taking a step brings them extreme pain. Touching anything, moving around, they cannot deal with any force being applied to their bodies. Nothing could live like this for more then perhaps an hour, as the pain is just that great. By temporarily lowering their focus and willpower by 1, or lowering their mental deduction by 2 and their willpower by 1, a being in this state can bring their pain endurance to beginner so long as the other stats remain lowered.

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General Skills

  • Durability: Adept
  • General Speed: Advanced
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Adept


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance: Adept
  • Focus: Advanced


Racial Skills

  • Perquisa: Adept
  • Sonido: Adept
  • Cero/Bala: Advanced
  • Hierro: Beginner


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Psionic Presence: I'm a bit confused here. Willpower towards cero but reduces focus? This seems a bit odd, so here, let me help you out a bit; how about her focus vs their willpower and thus that reduces their own focus if it's lower? That should help around a bit~!

Cero Portal: Is this a purely battle application or a non-battle application? If it is both, then I suggest adding a range in battle, to help make it more functionable, and a duration of time that she can do it in a row in a thread or something like that. But this looks more like non-battle application to me, but if you meant that is could be used in a fight too, then we can work on it a bit <3

Mind blast: Same deal as Psionic Presence! I'll explain why after I'm done looking at everything <3 Also, lower the stun to one post, and try to reduce the range a bit as well.

Dominance: Okay! This is a little bit harder ability; please put a post duration on it, and other methods of breaking out of it, such as a focused spiritual energy burst or something. Try to adjust this a little more, because this might come out as really OP if it isn't limited a bit more.

psionic cero: Again, work off the system I presented above, and I'd suggest making the lowering of willpower not stackable, and have a duration as well, as people tend to shake off attacks of that scale eventually. I'd also suggest just reducing ONE will stat.

Mind Devouring: Hrmmm.. this seems something really hard to limit. Can you please give an example of how the tier bonuses work? I'm not quite sure I understand. In fact, can you elaborate an example situation of how this is used? Something like ''Post One: Effects in here'' and stuff like that. It'd help get a mind picture of how this is used. Once that's done, I'll be able to look at this in more detail.


Now, I have a suggestion for you that may help with this entire power set. You mention how she has many brains right? I could see this becoming a major weakness to this entire thing; now here's a suggestion.

Perhaps instead of a full immunity to mental powers, have a mostly immunity. But let's say someone can disrupt one of the minds, or basically throw off Kor-tatha's focus, which would mean the minds inside of her would be in revolt; that might constitute a big downside to her entire ability set, and help make it more credible. It would switch towards her focus vs their willpower, and if her focus is higher, she reduces their own focus. Does that sound plausible to you? I really had fun reading this app, and I noticed you tried really hard to make it not OP, so I applaud you~

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Alright, fixed up a bunch of stuff, going to explain some things here though:

Dominance: This is only active so long as the target is affected by the stun of mind blast, so it is therefore limited by the duration of the stun effect. This is also why I didn't lower the stun duration, if you still want it changed I will do so.

Mind Blast: See above.

Mind Devouring: To explain this, I'm going to show what would happen using specific stats. Kor-tatha is assumed 3-5, opponent has all advanced will skills.

Post 1: Kor-tatha latches on to her opponent and starts eating. Their will skills (all of them) drop by one, becoming adepts.

Post 2: Kor-tatha continues devouring, the will skills drop to beginner.

Post 3: more eating, focus is "nulled out", causing the victim to lose consciousness.

Post 4: let's assume something stopped Kor-tatha from continuing. She has devoured 9 ranks of will skills (4 advanced to adept, 4 adept to beginner, 1 beginner to null). Total, this gives a 3 tier boost, bringing her to a 3-2 temporarily. If she had eaten one more she would be a 3-2+ temporarily, if she had ended one earlier she would have been a 3-3++ temporarily.


Hope that clears everything up, let me know if you have any problems now.
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Alright, I believe I made all the edits we talked about on skype, let me know if I missed any. Mind blast now only stuns for the first post, leaving them disoriented for the second post. Added that one could attempt to awaken the psyches, though that is really only for those with mind affecting abilities. Those without could attempt to push back when she uses psionic presence, though they would have to have a fairly high focus and willpower.

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''This can drop it below beginner, to a state of no focus, which means they have lost consciousness.'' I'm just curious since when focus = consciousness? People can have no focus but still be conscious through shill will power, or still have the mental processes to keep going. A lack of focus is like ADD, in case that helps a little. So I'd suggest looking at that sentence and fixing it a mite.

Dominance: For the sake of asking, can she use her own abilities whilst controlling someone? I just realized that now, sorry xD can you indicate if she can or cannot? That'd be really helpful.

Psionic Cero: I'll repeat this just in case : I'd suggest lowering just a single will stat, not two. Or you could indicate that someone will be effected by either one or the other.

Mind Devouring: And again, just the little focus conciousness issue. But that's easily solved~!

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Alright, edited for the issues you mentioned. I added a new section describing what it is like to have a null value in each of the will skills and removed the unconscious pieces from the places you mentioned. Also added the ability to replace the use of a nulled will skill with other will skills (see the null will skills section to see what I mean). With psionic cero I added a sentence about the differences between cero and bala resulting in different will skills being affected. As for dominance, I added that she can use her abilities and attack while controlling someone, but that if she hits the controlled being with an attack the dominance is broken and that being becomes immune to her dominance ability for the thread.


EDIT: making some edits to her mind devouring ability to clear something up.
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Alright, made some edits to mind devouring in order to resolve some problems I felt in relationship to the rest of her skill set.

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This applications is minesh, nya~! So's let's get down to the ameowzing checking nya!


Applicashion Checklist nya~
  • Namezies Nya~ [X]
  • Appropriateded Age Nya~ [X]
  • Gender Nya~ [X]
  • Appearancu Presented Nya~ [X]
  • Appearancu Described-nya in Appropriateded Lengthzies OR Picturies is Visible Nya~ [X]
  • Appearancu is Not Claimeded Nya~ [X]
  • 10 sentencus for personalites Nya~ [X]
  • Histomi is of appropriateded lengthzies Nya~ [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered Nya~! [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough Nya~! [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person Nya~ [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow) Nyaaaan~ [X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) Myan~? [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences Myan~! [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance: Beginner
  • Focus: Advanced


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[b][center][u]Will Skills[/u][/b][/center]
[list][*][b]Willpower/Determination:[/b] Advanced
[*][b]Mental Deduction:[/b] Adept
[*][b]Pain Endurance:[/b] Beginner
[*][b]Focus:[/b] Advanced
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