Hi there! Current captain of squad four reporting! I see you have a lot of questions, and a lot of things to do!
Now first and foremost, let's answer some questions! Well okay I'm sorta lying; I'll answer you questions in a pm and what not, because that's not appropriate for a file! Sorry about that, but I promise I'll answer them!
Now, here's some profile info; according to your last tier, you are a 3-3 correct~? So, like as much as I am a fan of people getting better, this is what I would suggest/do in your case; I'd pick up your old app and go from there, but that's just me. If you want to go ahead with this one, then you can look below this comment.
First, please take out the stuff in parentheses (these things) from the app; once you've filled them in, you don't need them there. Second, looking at your shikai, I'd like to clarify/ask a few things.
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- The first being it's able to fire lighting based Kidō of level 40 or below without incantation.
How does this work? Like how does Arashi Shikon help her cast lighting based Kidō of lvl40 and lower?
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- he second makes her immune to lighting based Kidō below level 40 and resistant to other lighting based attacks at higher levels.
First, at your current tier, full immunity is impossible. A higher resistance, perhaps, but full immunity? No. And why is it resistant to lighting?
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- The third and final technique is Arashi Shikon in which a single dragon shaped blast of electrical energy ,much akin to Hitsugaya's ice dragon, will fly at an enemy intent on crashing into them and electrifying them with the force of a lighting bolt. If struck the attack could stun an opponent for several seconds as electricity courses through them.
Okay this one isn't too bad, but the problem is; how is this dragon formed? Considering how expensive Hitsugaya's zanpaktou is, does this mean yours also does weather control, like his does? This lacks a lot of explanation, considering you make reference to a canon for comparison. Also, for the stun, I'd like a post count amount of how long they are stunned if hit.
Overall, it is not a bad Zanpaktou, but the problem is, is that it has too many abilities packed together; we don't have an idea of the Zanpaktou's concept, what it does in principle, it's main element, although I can guess electricity, and other things like that. It's largely incomplete; so I suggest you try brushing it up a bit, relating all the abilities to each other, and basically help along the development of the blade (if you'd rather have minor abilities and discover more via plot, make sure to mention something to that extent too.)
Now, I'm looking at your phantom tech. I'm thinking you have the two sections mixed up; the abilities section, is relatively what the phantom tech is based in; and then the powers, is what it does for you. For example, a phantom tech base could be music; and in power, the user can then sing prettily to make shock waves. Relatively something like that; so if you want to look over and see what you can fix? If you have problems, just contact me straight away~!
On a last note, you don't fill in your skill sheets till your tier is given; if you are updating an app, this applies to them too. So you'll have to wait until you are stamped again, before filling out your skill sheets!
I'm sorry if I overwhelmed you, but I'm here to help! So feel free to pm me, or if you see me on xat (I have an infinity symbol in my name) just hit me up <3
This has been your mod, Aivee!