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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Tue Jul 02, 2013 12:32 am



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• Name: Nistelkov
• Titles: Captain of the 2th Division, Grandmaster of Seals
• Gender: Male
• Appearance Age: 19-20
• Age: 1520
• Affiliation/Rank: Gotei 13

• Appearance Description: Nis is not exactly a massive person, standing at only a mere six feet tall. Nis has onyx black hair, that is extremely messy and rather unkept, but his eyes are pure red in color, which in order to cover it he often wears black sunglasses to cover it. Nis's body is extremely wired, as he is not very buff but not all skin and bone. Nis often wears a very simple shirt, often in black but sometimes in white, along with a matching pair of pants. He often wears a jacket, though it is often destroyed in every fight.


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• Personality: Nis's motto in fighting is simple " If you fight me, you have already lost. " This shows most of what you need to know about Nistelkov if you try and fight him. Nis believes in using the least amount of effort to get the most results, something that got him a very good friend and a good job. Nis has been known to be very lazy though, at times, caring very little for matters that not affect him, often sleeping in late and never really changing out of his clothes. Nis is extremely talkative, talking to anyone about just about anything that they want to talk about, even if he knows nothing about it. Nis has rarely been known to be very silent, as he is always trying to talk someone into something, most often a women into his pants. Nis has been known for being very charming when he needs to be, along with talkative about issues the he deems important or needed to be said. Nis often prefers to capture his opponents and then take them back to the Gotei 13 for information gathering but when he is given an order to kill, which is not that often as that is usually given to another member of the second squad, he turns into what he needs to turn into to get the job done.

The issue happens when Nis goes completely silent, that signals either one of two things. One that you have pissed him off, or he is in extremely deep thought trying to figure something out, either one is not good.


• Likes: Women, A Successful Mission, Tsubasa, and Sleeping

• Dislikes: Disrespect to any of his likes, or anyone that gets in the way of the Gotei 13
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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Wed Jul 10, 2013 6:46 pm



• Reiatsu Color: None

• Natural Abilities:

Genius Level Intelligence: Despite his odd, lazy and unkempt appearance, Nis is a very insightful and cunning man. He possesses great intuition, quickly becoming aware of any incoming danger and reacting to it in time. Nis has an undeniable talent for thinking things through well in advance, making decisive and accurate decisions quickly in battle, and seemingly perceiving any situation at hand. He is a crafty tactician, easily deceiving both allies and enemies. In battle, he regularly uses cunning, deception, or speed to catch his opponents off-guard. He is a very analytical man, quickly seeing through an opponent's power and attack patterns to ultimately make them useless against him. This also allows Nis to look at an ability and attempt to copy it, though the more complex the ability the more often he has to watch it.

Hakuda Master: Nis, due to the fact that he does not have a sword, he was forced to learn hand to hand to survive. This makes him a prime candidate for 2nd Division Captain. Nis though is no longer allowed back into the Maggots Nest due to how much force he can generate with a single flick of his finger, it often risk death, when he was only a 5th seat. Nis is also extremely capable in most forms of quick and deadly styles of fighting, including Krava Maga, Karate and many others.

Unsurpassed Reiastu Control: Nis has trained most of his life as a Shinigami to be able to have this ability, one that allows him to not only be nearly undetectable by spiritual sensing expect by the greatest and best in that field, such as Urahara and other high level stealth force members, even those people would have a difficulty finding Nis due to the fact that his job requires him to be unseen and unheard at all times. Nis, in order to develop this to this point, has immense knowledge and understanding of the flow, application, and consistency of spiritual energy. The most important thing this level of mastery is the simple fact that Nis is able to use the least amount of effort to get the effect he wants, he knows exactly what it will take to get what he needs and that combined with his genius level intelligence can cause some serious issues for the enemy.

Supreme Speed: Nis due to his Reiastu control and the sheer mastery he has with his Zanpaktou, after over a thousand plus years with it, has allowed Nis to tap into the ability of the Zanpaktou itself which increases Nis's speed immeasurably. Using his very basic manipulation of Kinetic energy, Nis is able to increase his speed close to four times what it would normally be.

Grandmaster Sealer: Nis is one of the very few people left in the Gotei 13 that fully understand seals, and is a part of the group that can make custom seals to do as they pleased. Nistelkov has spend several hundred years of his time learning and studying every form and way to make a seal, from defensive seals to seals that capture people to tracking seals. Nis is also well known for his mastery of this craft, enough that he has created a very specific set of seals that only work on his body, and ones that are not really able to be copied or erased.


Kinetic Energy Training: This is a very interesting form of training that Nis has learned over the years, realizing that he can push his body much farther if he puts it under more and more stress and forces it to adapt every time. He does this by using the very kinetic energy that his body naturally stores and puts it into forcing his muscles, destroying them just close enough that he can't heal them and then using his regenerative abilities to heal them back stronger and then repeating the process. This passively increase his speed, strength and durability by the amount of force he has in his body.

Kinetic Energy grid: Over the years, Nis has gained the ability to sense the kinetic energy of beings around him. Nis uses this by creating a 30 meter circle around him in which he is able to sense the energy of someone or something that has entered this circle. The more force it has, or the more force it can generate comes but bigger on his radar then something not.

Master Barrier: Nis is also extremely adapt at creating barriers, often making them out of invisible kinetic energy as it is often very available for him to use. Nis has the ability to make barriers nearly sub-consciously, and without movement or sign that he has done so. This is one of Nis's famous abilities as he often uses it to stop attacks that are aimed at his back, as long as he knows that the attack is coming and he has time to react to it. Nis's power over barriers increase massively if he starts using his hands, such as waving his hand or snapping his fingers to create the barriers.

Enhanced Regenerative Ability: Nis has created several seals to create the effects of regeneration, one that allows him to regenerate his organs along with all of his muscles. This is done by speeding up the natural healing process of the body, but this is done by speeding up how much energy it takes to make it. He does this by speeding up the molecular in the wound, closing them shut. It takes the same amount of energy to heal a cut across his chest, but he takes that energy all at once which normally would have caused massive loss in muscle fibers along with fat, though he does this by using the kinetic energy.


Seals: Nis is one of the most proficient in the creation of seals in the Soul Societies history, having such a complete knowledge of the history and uses of Seals that he knows the weaknesses of all commonly and even uncommon and lost seals. This makes Nis able to create seals that even the best of the best might look at and wonder how it works, if they can see past the light based illusions that he puts over all of them to cause them to change and morph in random patterns, making it impossible to copy as it is every changing.

Public Seal: If you ask nicely, he would give you one of these

Light Seal: This seal is common in the Soul Society's 12th division, as it is often put on the extremely heavy pieces of equipment to make them lighter and easier to manage in some cases. This seal negates the effect of gravity on the target, which if it was put on a set of heavy armor it would make it so that the armor seemed to be as light as a feather, which would allow the person to last longer in the armor without getting tired. This seal has to be powered by either solar power or spiritual energy, and if it has neither of those sources of power it will simply go back to the normal weight and the seal will go dormant until it has more energy.

Explosive Seal: This is one of Nis's most infamous seals, as it can be used to cause a blast to knock out a lock to a full blown explosion that would rival a nuke. This seal works by feeding off of the reiastu energy that is placed in it with the seal, giving it a great amount of variation with someone who can control their reiastu. This seal has two normal settings for those who are not Nis, one being Kinetic and the other being fire based. The kinetic one works like a normal explosive, not alot of fire but alot of force thrown behind it, basically C4, while the fire one would cause the person or thing it is attached to, to go up in flames often causing damage if the person does not see it. This seal is clearly visible on the skin, making it very clear to the person who has it that they have something on them.


Barrier Seal: This seal is extremely common in the Soul Society, as it is placed around every single barracks of the Gotei 13, and the Royal houses and basically anything important. This seal's function is extremely simple, it creates a barrier in-front of it. This barrier is powered by solar energy, which the seal gathers passively throughout it's lifetime, this means that if you trigger the seal the seal will explode a single barrier in whatever direction the seal was made to go, and use up all the power it has collected to power the barrier. This means that if you break the barrier, it can not do it again until it recharges it's energy.



Private Seals: Tsubasa is not even getting these, and these have the most powerful illusions on them.


Energy Storage: This seal's sole purpose is to help Nis take in energy and store it in a safe place until he needs it. He is basically using a far more complex version of Kenpachi's eye patch, which absorbs all the energy from Nis naturally and though any seals he may have on at that time. This seal actives when Nis ever gains more than 100% of his power, draining him until it reached the point of 99% and then stopping. This seal also does it in reverse, so that if Nis ever goes lower than 98% of his energy level, then the seal fill his energy level up until he is at 99% again. This seal is so unique and custom made for Nis, that even if you were able to copy it, it would do you no good as it is only made for Nis and Nis's abilities.


Heavy Seal: This seal is Nis's favorite capture seal, as it increases the mass of a object or limb by a various amount. In the first and lowest setting Nis is able to increase the mass of the thing by 25kg and at the highest he can increase the mass by 100,000kgs. This seal makes anything put on it much heavier, though for some it will not matter if their strength is high enough to ignore the extra weight. You can beat this seal by putting more reiastu into the seal then it has, so the 25kg seal would take less energy than the 100,000 kg seal to get rid of.

Silence Seal: This is one of Nis's most unknown seals, as he has never told anyone about it for the sole reason of how effective it can be if used correctly. This seal completely cuts off that person's ability to make any sound what so ever, from clapping to talking no sound will come from the cause of that person. This goes up to the point that if the person with his seal steps on a twig or cuts down a building with their sword, no sound will be heard from them. This seal is activation based, so it can be turned on and off at will and depending on how much sound is being made the more reiastu it takes to suppress that sound. Nis has gotten this seal so well mastered that he can pick and choice what sounds he wants people to hear and leave others out, this is not only to distract the opponent but to allow him to save on reiastu.

Invisibility seal: This seal can NOT be used on a person, no matter how hard they might try, this can not be used on a living breathing person. This seal is made to hide objects from the sight of people, making it impossible to see them though normal sight but if they have spiritual energy you can sense them out even if you can't see them. This seal takes a set amount of energy for the size of the item, the bigger the item the more reiastu it will take. This seal can not be used on Zanpaktous as they are apart of a person's soul, making them a 'person'.




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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Wed Jul 10, 2013 11:35 pm

• Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Kami Sureiyā

• Zanpakutô Type: Kinetic Energy Manipulation and Parasitic

• Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance:
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• Inner World: Nis's inner world is something that he rarely sees anymore, due to the simple fact that his Zanpaktou is more or less a part of him


• Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance : Nis is odd in the way that he has no sealed form, as he does not use the normal Zanpaktou anymore, due to his sheer mastery of his Zanpaktou, and due to the fact that Nis's Zanpaktou is also a parasite type. This is also Nis's Shikai, as he can freely change between the two at a whim without saying anything, it is only after that he needs too.

• Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:
Kinetic Energy Manipulation, Control and Generation: This is the very center of Nis's ability set, and it is possibly one of the most powerful unique abilities in the Soul Society for that simple reason of what it is able to do. Due to Nis's complete and total control over his Zanpaktou, he is able to do thing at full power without so much more than a thought. Using this power, one would be able to transfer kinetic energy from one object to another, thus strengthening their attacks, or tearing holes in walls with a simple touch. Users can also could turn an object's potential energy into kinetic energy, making it explosive, and cause another being to be unable to move or unable to stop if in motion. This list of examples is one of the many things that Nis is capable of doing this ability.

Sound Manipulation: The user can create and modify sound waves to mimic, intensify, hush, and distort, as well warp, strengthen, echo, speed up, and slow down sound, using it as a powerful physical force and high-speed movement. They can affect music as well as produce it. At low frequencies, sound is potentially fatal to living beings by causing internal damage, while high frequencies cannot be heard by normal humans but can be used for sonar-like effects. Since sound vibrations can travel through the air, ground, water and any form of medium, defense by using physical barriers is difficult. The vibrations can also affect at a molecular level. In essence, sound is an invisible, deadly weapon and a versatile tool. This allows Nis to be immune to most forms of sound based effects that would normally effect another person of his level, as it would come into contact with his body and instantly become nullified or reduced to a level that would not affect him.

Temperature control: This is a subset of Nis's abilities, and one that he often uses to confuse and make his opponents wonder what his abilities are. While this will never be as strong as a pure fire or ice user of his own level and skill, it is often good enough to fight off those under him, and he can often do it on a much larger scale then most pure fire or ice users. Nis is often seen using one half of this ability to create heat to light his cigarettes, but that is not even close to the limit of what Nis is capable of doing as he could easily set the building he is in on fire with a mere thought by increasing the heat in one area while weakening the air around that fire to allow it to spread hundreds of times faster. This also goes the very same with the cold, as Nis is often seen chilling his beers by simply touching them and removing the kinetic energy of the atoms to freeze it, so in theory it is much easier for Nis to freeze something then it is for him to burn it.

Nis's ability have a very small range as the larger the area he tries to affect the more outside factors make it impossible to raise or lower the Temperature due to the 2nd Law of Thermodynamics, even with his high level of skill the maximum area that Nis is able to affect is 15 meters with this ability and the closer it is to him the easier it is for him to affect.

Kinetic Energy Absorption: This is one of Nis's most infamous, though not fully understood abilities, as from the point of view of everyone else it simply seems like that Nis is an unstoppable monster that seems to be able to take a insane number of hits without so much as a scratch on him. This is simply not the case, as how his abilities work that he absorbs a total of fifty percent of the total kinetic energy that he is hit with, which is upgraded massively to nearly seventy five when he is holding completely still. This energy is then stored within Nis's own body for later use, either though his Zanpaktous storage or his own seals store which he then uses to push forth the rest of his abilities.

Kinetic Energy Emission: This is Nis's most well known ability, but it is often confused with his skill in Hand to Hand Combat, which more often than not Nis does not have to use this ability in order to get the job done that is needed. Nis has the ability, by either using his own reiastu or stored kinetic energy, to create a large amount of effects. One of those effects is increasing the power of one of his punches or another object by hundreds if not thousands of times depending on how much energy he puts into it. Another one of the more common uses for it is creating a force field made fully out of kinetic energy, which is completely invisible and nearly undetectable to those who are not looking for it and the strength of it all depends on how much Kinetic Energy Nis puts into it.

The major issues that come with his is that all energy still follows the laws of physics, which means that if he throws a punch outside of his normal range he still has to figure out a way to stop the excess back force from a blow or attack he uses with this.

To mitigate some of this, Nis has on occasion blown an equal amount of energy in the opposite direction of the blow in order to keep him stationary but that can cause some damage to his body if used at too high of a force and too often.

Kinetic Energy Steal: This is one of Nis's capture abilities, as he simply robs his opponent of all his bodies- non vital kinetic energy leaving him unable to move and unable to do anything else. This makes it more effective then any Bakudo as there is no amount of strength or spiritual pressure that can break out of it, but this has a very serious down side as Nis has to be touching you the entire time for it to work. This is also subject to the strength of the person, as it would be easier for Nis to do this to a child then it would be for him to do it to a Captain, this means that he has to hold on to that person longer then normal for the effects to happen. This effect also stops if Nis ever lets go of the body, making this a nearly impossible move to do in anything but a one on one fight.

This takes AT a MINIMUM of a round of posts to take affect, and that is only if there is several tiers between Nis and his opponent, most opponents on the level of Nis will most likely never have to worry about this taking affect as it would take 3-5 rounds of posting to take effect.




• Bankai Description:
There is no real change in Nis's appearance besides his abilities getting upgraded significantly. This allows Nis to surprise his opponents and give them no real indication of what is going on with him.

• Bankai Abilities:

Kinetic Energy Absorption: In this form, Nis's ability to absorb and take in energy is increased majorly, as he is now able to take in nearly 80% of the energy and then store it within his body to release later. This makes him more able to control the force and generate it easier with less energy.


Greater Kinetic Energy Control: While in Bankai, Nis has a greater level of control over the amount of energy thrown out of his body, allowing him to be less wasteful with the energy. This doesn't negate the laws of physics but does allow for more creative bending of the rules of it. During this form, he can instead of shooting the back blast out in order keep his body where it needs to be, he can absorb most of the back blast energy and then redirect it to keep his arm and body were it was creating less stress on his body and allowing him to use more powerful blows and abilities due to less stress being placed on his body.





General Skills
  • Durability: Master
  • General Speed: Master
  • Strength: Master
  • Weapon Skill: None


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Master.
  • Pain Endurance: Master.
  • Focus: Advanced.


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Master
  • Kidō: Advanced
  • Zanjutsu: None
  • Hakuda: Master
  • Shikai: Grand Master
  • Bankai: Master


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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Sun Jul 21, 2013 10:12 pm

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  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
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Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Master.
  • Pain Endurance: Master.
  • Focus: Advanced.


Comments/Notes: Approved on the premises that this guy doesn't abuse the powers he has, and I'll be keeping an eye on this character, and if people note the abuse of power from this character then changes will be made. Happy Rping.
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Subject Post 5PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Sun Jul 21, 2013 10:58 pm

This is being moved to pending due to some arising problems, please be patient while staff deliberates on it and we will get back to you.

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Subject Post 6PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Mon Jul 22, 2013 12:16 am

Due to problems a number of the staff have with this application, including Lio and I, I'll be reviewing and assessing this application, and based on what I say, changes will need to be made.

First off, you cheated on your skill sheets. 0 tier characters are allowed 1 Master and 3 Advanced per sheet without special approval, and nowhere in this thread do I see special approval. This is a serious issue, however before you fix your sheets keep in mind the character's tier is also being reassessed, so I recommend waiting until he is approved again. As a member who has been here for at least half a year, you should have already read this thread: http://www.platinumhearts.net/t148-major-updates-skill-sheet-system-put-this-in-your-application-when-your-finished-and-accepted

Time to get into the nitty gritty of this application. As far as personality goes, while you did meet the bare minimum requirement of 10 sentences, I recommend expanding more as...well, it's the bare minimum.


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Hakuda Master: Nis, being the captain of the 2nd Division, also known as the Onmitsukidō, is required to be a master in Hakuda in order to enter the Maggots Nest. Nistelkov though is no longer allowed back into the Maggots Nest due to how much force he can generate with a single flick of his finger, it often risk death, when he was only a 5th seat. Nis is also extremely capable in most forms of quick and deadly styles of fighting, including Krava Maga, Karate and many others.

This entire paragraph needs to be rewritten. Not only is Nis not the captain of the second division, he isn't even in it. Also, since his tier is being reevaluated, change it from "Hakuda Master" to "Hakuda Expert" or something along those lines. Next, no Nis cannot be banned from the Maggots nest for essentially being too powerful. Erase that.

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Unsurpassed Reiastu Control: Nis has trained most of his life as a Shinigami to be able to have this ability, one that allows him to not only be nearly undetectable by spiritual sensing expect by the greatest and best in that field, such as Urahara and other high level stealth force members, even those people would have a difficulty finding Nis due to the fact that his job requires him to be unseen and unheard at all times. Nis, in order to develop this to this point, has immense knowledge and understanding of the flow, application, and consistency of spiritual energy. The most important thing this level of mastery is the simple fact that Nis is able to use the least amount of effort to get the effect he wants, he knows exactly what it will take to get what he needs and that combined with his genius level intelligence can cause some serious issues for the enemy.

Again, since he isn't even in the 2nd division, this paragraph doesn't make sense. Plus, being essentially undetectable by nearly everyone, including people like Kisuke Urahasa is a no no. Make it more reasonable.

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Supreme Speed: Nis due to his Reiastu control and the sheer mastery he has with his Zanpaktou, after over a thousand plus years with it, has allowed Nis to tap into the ability of the Zanpaktou itself which increases Nis's speed immeasurably. Using his very basic manipulation of Kinetic energy, Nis is able to increase his speed close to four times what it would normally be.

Try and make this paragraph sound less super duper ultra mega powerful. Oh, and nonono, 4x speed is way, way too much, especially at a "very basic" level.

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Grandmaster Sealer: Nis is one of the very few people left in the Gotei 13 that fully understand seals, and is a part of the group that can make custom seals to do as they pleased.

Take Grandmaster out of there. Also, him being "one of the very few" is unsubstantiated and doesn't make sense.

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Master Swordsmanship: While this is something that Nis is not always happy with, much rather preferring to use his fists if he can help it, on occasion his opponents force him to use his blade. Nis has spent close to four hundred years with the legendary clan leader, Tsubasa Unabara, the Pale Horseman and over that time, just as Tsubasa has learned from Nis, Nis has learned from him. Nis after watching Tsubasa's style for so long, as more or less copied his style to the T. While Unabara's style is very much based around killing with a massive amount of pain while Nis's preferred style is about the swift and painless kill, and one that also deals with distractions and ending someone's life before they even know what happened. Nis also realized that his friend Tsubasa copied a extremely weak version of his own sword style, but even with his skill Tsubasa is only able to tap into a mere percent of it's true power.

Take out master. Also, I'm confused as to why someone who prefers hand to hand combat and apparently only rarely uses a sword, is so skilled with it.

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Kinetic Energy Training: This is a very interesting form of training that Nis has learned over the years, realizing that he can push his body much farther if he puts it under more and more stress and forces it to adapt every time. He does this by using the very kinetic energy that his body naturally stores and puts it into forcing his muscles, destroying them just close enough that he can't heal them and then using his regenerative abilities to heal them back stronger and then repeating the process. This passively increase his speed, strength and durability by the amount of force he has in his body.

Dude, come on. He supposedly tears his muscles apart using kinetic manipulation to the point where he can't heal them, and then heals them despite it literally just having said the muscles can't be healed, and magically gets stronger because of it? That doesn't make any sense whatsoever. He's not a Saiyan.

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Grandmaster Barrier: Nis is also extremely adapt at creating barriers, often making them out of invisible kinetic energy as it is often very available for him to use. Nis has the ability to make barriers nearly sub-consciously, and without movement or sign that he has done so. This is one of Nis's famous abilities as he often uses it to stop attacks that are aimed at his back, as long as he knows that the attack is coming and he has time to react to it. Nis's power over barriers increase massively if he starts using his hands, such as waving his hand or snapping his fingers to create the barriers.

Again, take Grandmaster out of it. Sheesh. And as far as magically being able to create stronger barriers just by swishing his hands, change that to if he doesn't use his hands they are weaker than normal, and only by using his hands does he get normal power. Otherwise it's illogical.

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Enhanced Regenerative Ability: Nis has created several seals to create the effects of regeneration, one that allows him to regenerate his organs along with all of his muscles. This is done by speeding up the natural healing process of the body, but this is done by speeding up how much energy it takes to make it. It takes the same amount of energy to heal a cut across his chest, but he takes that energy all at once which normally would have caused massive loss in muscle fibers along with fat, though he does this by using the kinetic energy.

No, Nis doesn't get to regenerate organs and limbs on the fly like that. Especially since this is supposedly done by healing up the natural body processes, because the body cannot naturally regenerate limbs/organs. -_-

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Seals: Nis is one of the most proficient in the creation of seals in the Soul Societies history, having such a complete knowledge of the history and uses of Seals that he knows the weaknesses of all commonly and even uncommon and lost seals. This makes Nis able to create seals that even the best of the best might look at and wonder how it works, if they can see past the light based illusions that he puts over all of them to cause them to change and morph in random patterns, making it impossible to copy as it is every changing.

Sheesh, calm down with the "Nis is stronger than everyone else" terminology. Not only is Nis not "one of the most proficient in the creation of seals in the Soul Societies history", but he wouldn't be anywhere near that either, especially considering people like Tessai Tsukabishi, Hachigen Ushoda, and Kisuke Urahara.

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Explosive Seal: This is one of Nis's most infamous seals, as it can be used to cause a blast to knock out a lock to a full blown explosion that would rival a nuke

No, it would not rival a nuclear explosion.

While this is by no means all of the problems I have with this application, I won't be moving onto the rest until either A. I decide to go ahead and do so, or B. You fix everything I've talked about already. Also, Lio had some issues with the character's History, which I'll paste here:

[7/22/2013 12:47 AM] 1. he doesnt metion anything past his arrival in the gotei 13 and meeting some guy as a kid. IT may seem okay for some but when he is going for a captain and all of this hed need more than just some guy using some magic on his head and ending the history
2.his history referes to a vampir, the only vampires we have on site are sueki and im pretty sure its stated one cant be born a sueki they are made it as sueki cant breed offspring.
3.he makes mentions towards different gods and such that from the looks of are just made up out of the blue. I get that maybe somone could worship a random god but the fact that he links this to the orgional evil and somewhat supernatural powers he had orgionally idk.
4. it states that he was turned into a vampire later on within his history by some unknown who hes called the legendary boltron .... this really indicates to me that either hes a sueki or this is just him bullshitting
5. he states that this god he created visits him meaning that hes pre much altering the timeline of the site saying that there was more gods and beings greater than even some of our strongest peeps.
6. the process he says at the end of his history is bullcrap in terms of how he could reach the SS as it says his soul cracked and broke and his god took him there, how did this new guy just suddely start doing the shinigamis job and why on earth did his soul break. this isnt a process of being reborn in the SS at all
7.he states some other enemy now reached into the passage to the SS and gave him some gift to see some sort of energy comming of things im pressuming kinetic energy ... how? now this random who was stated to be just a human pulled of such a feat
8.it states a hollow randomly apperaed in the rukongai and that it was common THAT IS NOT COMMON.
9.it states a white arrow pireces through this hollow indicating a quincy .... now how da fark did he get in? quincies in SS would be detected and immediatly expelled.

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Subject Post 7PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Mon Jul 22, 2013 2:44 am

I request another Admin look this over to outweigh the vote of Gin and Lion, as I personally believe he has other reasons to say these things. In all reality, the way this site runs nothing I put in there is anything outside of the range of what is possible.... not even close... consider who we have on our roster.

The Healing Factor is simply using a form of energy I am accustomed too to regenerate my body, such as a NI using there element to heal themselves. That is not that far out of the range of anyone, and considering you approved a way more OP version just the other day ago (aka Tsubasa) I don't see why this is any different.

As for the Hand to Hand Master thing... not a huge deal, as that is a simple matter of redoing passives for better wording. As he was meant to be a 2nd DIvision Captain, someone that i learned later you had reserved but never bothered making for a long time. As for him being banned from the Maggots nest, with Nis he can be considering the simple fact that a poke from him could, at least in theory, kill a person.

Now as for the spiritual control thing.. I would love for you to read this " nearly undetectable "..... do you see the thing right before that... NEARLY... that means that they CAN detect him, and considering the sheer amount of different ways someone can get around that little thing I don't think it is that big of a deal. People who specialize in detecting that kind of stuff could still, in theory, detect Nis. This is 2nd Commander Nis, so changing that part is is not a big deal for me I just wanted to point that out.

Now... Supreme Speed... Considering that Nis has a Parasite based ZP (ask Crow for more info) he has a very good relationship with his Zanpaktou and due to the fact that he can control Kinetic energy, pushing himself faster using that energy should not be a problem now should it?

Now... the Grandmaster Sealer... Don't see how that is important at all... as he simply creates Custom seals, and is one of the few people capable of doing.. such as Urahara and others.

Now.. do you remember that little Tsubasa thing you approved... the one that allowed him to learn if he watched something enough.. Yea... Nis has that but to a much lower extent, as he has only been able to master swordsmanship from Tsubasa, though it is not something he uses often due to his abilities but it is something he will use once he finds the right weapons to use them.


Now as for the training... Read this " destroying them just close enough that he can't heal them" Just close enough.... that means that it gets close to that point... but never reaches that point... So this ability would work, as it is simply a much more powerful form of working out

Seals, again.. read the wording.. ONE OF THE... meaning that there are people better then him.... it is the same as saying one of the best.... that could be ANYTHING.. the top 5.. the top 10...... so I still dont' see an issue with this.

as for the Explosive Seal... if you put enough energy into it.. it can be... but again.. apparently you don't know me well enough to understand that I have been doing this for awhile and understand the general rules.

As for the history... apparently you didn't read the SIMPLE fact that this was IN fact.. in another world/ dimension which as far as I know is allowed due to several characters being allowed to make characters from other places... but, if you have any other problems.. you can bring them up with Kake in the morning, as he is the one who originally approved it.

As for the person who was in that history.. it was Nis's ZP.. if you could not gather that due to the simple fact that Ichigo and others I assume, in a time when they are in great need and they have a natural affinity with their ZP for the spirit to come out and give them some power. You apparently could not gather that, so I would just enlighten you on that...

Also Gin.. if you have any problems with ANY character I ever make ever again, please go to the Mod or Advisor or whoever approved it... or simply get someone else to tell me, such as JJ or someone I trust, and I will look into it and see if anyone else agrees with you. If they do, then I will change it. I think that is a very simple request and I hope you can follow it, and if you can not.. then I have a feeling we will continue to have these problems and to be honest I don't have the patience or time for that any longer.




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Subject Post 8PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Mon Jul 22, 2013 10:26 am

This application will stay in Pending until the requested changes have been made.

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Subject Post 9PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Fri Jul 26, 2013 9:44 pm

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Master.
  • Pain Endurance: Master.
  • Focus: Advanced.


Comments/Notes: Approved, again. Note abuse of powers = character getting neutered severely.
Tier: 0-3.

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Subject Post 10PostSubject: Re: Nistelkov [Approved, 0-3]   Sat Apr 05, 2014 2:06 am

This character is being placed into the archives due to failure to post in the activity check. If you wish to revive this character just post here.

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