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Natalia
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» Name: Nicholas Deathsbane
» Titles: The psycho!
» Age: 376
» Apperant age: 29
» Gender: Male
» Affiliation/Rank: Rogue

» Appearance Description:

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Weapon: Three blades that are embeded in his upper right and left arm. Able to be called out at anytime he desires.
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» Personality:
Loner: Nicholas Absolutely despises working with other's. He will work with other's if there is absolutely no other way in his mind to get the job done that is before him. His whole ideal though when working with someone is still for them to stay out of his way. They can do their own part of the job and he will go off and do his own thing and leave the group entirely.

Determination: When he starts something he see's it through to the end. When his mind is set on something he will not stop till he has done what he set out to do. His mind will not allow him to stop. He will even push onwards even if the chance that he may end up killing him.

Focused:His focus is only matched by his determination. His focus presses him onwards. when his focus and determination are in complete sink he will do just about anything to do what needs to be done.

Anamalistic: When he feels that the situation Calls for it he can slip into an anamalistic quiality that drives him by pure instinct. He goes with his gut and calls the shots as his military background had taught him He was trained to be a beast on the battlefield and a beast he becomes. His beast within allows him to unify all of his mental and physical abilitys to allow him to hunt as if his mind is part of a pack. the animal within goes based on the instincts he has gathered over the years of his life and derives the use of every available thought to gather what may be the upper hand within the challange that caused him to enter this state of mind part of his personality.

Addiction: Nicholas Is rarely ever seen without a cigar in his mouth or at the verry least in his hand. He is not a heavy smoker but it is not uncommon for him to have a cigar on him when he meets or runs into new people. He also loves to drink. In his mind if you do not have to worry about getting drunk why bother holding back on the drinks?

statigist He is not the best one in the world but he knows enough to make him dangerous. He takes in the situation that he is in and he does his best to work out a plan. He tries to take a situation and create a a stratigic situation where he can do everything that he needs to alone. HIs way of forming a strategy holds the basis of the fact that he likes to do things solo.
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» Likes: There is not much he really like's. But he does like those who speak their mind's. He also likes those who are not afraid to outwardly express themselves.

» Dislikes: He pretty much dislikes everything. He does like a few things but not much.

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» Background: Nicholas was born to a loving family His Father taught him how to hunt and survive out in the wilderness. His old man taught him everything he would ever need to know about hunting. The prime example of the life he had growing up was primarily a simple one. his family lived out in the middle of no where and him and his old man would go out and hunt for everything that his family would eat. One day everything just seemed to change rather dramatically. One day his old man took notice that his boy was not growing up like all the other children his age. They were growing up as they grew older but oddly enough his boy was not. As the time slowly began to pass it was taken into account that as the years slowly passed on Nicholas did not change all that much at all over the years. It had been 4 years sense the boy had turned 5 but he still did not look a day over 5 years old. It almost appeared that the boy was not able to age past 5 years of age. Not only that it also appeared that the boy was not even able to get sick at all as well. As the time passed Nicholas had not gotten sick even once in his life. It was as if the gods had blessed him with a gift that no one could even understand.  They were afraid to tell anyone for fear of what they may do to their boy.

As time passed Nicholas seemed to become more and more anamalistic in nature. One day something happened and Nicholas ended up getting in something over his head. A group of people found and ganged up on him and beat the ever loving hell out of him. Soon he was found by his father in the woods not far from their house with a broken tree branch stabbed through his arm. His old man was supprised to see that even though the stick was clearly through his son's arm there was no blood coming from the wound at all. In seeing this his father grabbed the stick and pulled it out of his son's arm. Though about 2minutes or so after the stick was removed the wound slowly began to heal its self. About 3 minutes after it had started it would appear that he had never been hurt to begin with at all. his father freaked out and ran back to the house. Not long after reaching their house nicholas soon arrived behind him. His old man had told his mother what had happened and both were scared of him. Some time had passed and his parents soon decided that nicholas was an unholy abomination and had to die. They planed out everything they were going to do carefully.

A few days had passed sense his parents made the plan to kill their boy. Though what they did not know was nicholas had heard everything they had planed. He began to prepare himself for when his parents came for him. Using what his old man had taught him he prepared during the days to come. At this point nicholas was 18 years od but he bearly looked as if he was around 6 to 7 years old. As the days passed the day had finally com when his parents would make their move. On that day his addrinaline shot up to a point that it would have possibly killed anyone else As his parents came at him his animal side just sort of took over. After throwing his parents around the room a few times his rage at how his parents could actually try to kill him when he had done nothing against them reached its breaking point. as he let out a loud echoing scream of rage and pain spike like bones emerged from inbetween the boys knuckles on both of his hands. his parents looked on in fear as their boy's primal rage was taken out upon them. The hate they displayed in attacking their boy would have seemed to drive the boy crazy. After he had charged his parents he tore them apart with his claws leaving pieces of them all over the room that they had attacked him in.

As he came to his senses he looked around and saw the act he had commited playing over and over in his head. To many they would have gone insane but he managed to consoul himself by repeating the phrase "I do not need anyone anymore." This phrase seemed to calm him down over time but he soon ran away from that house nevert o return to it again. From that  day on he lived in the woods hunting to make ends meet. Upon reaching the age to join the military he figured everything he would learn in the military would help him get a form of focus in his life. Make it where he could proubly do some good to make up for the bad that he had done. With that he decided to join the marine corp special forces. He went through boot camp as if it was mear childs play. Everything he had learned from his old man and was forced to learn in the time that it took to grow up to the point where he would even look old enough to actually be able to join the military had taught him more then any one person should learn within that time of their life. Nichlas was sent to multiple war's cause the higher ups figured his reckless aditude and lack of respect for his own life was something they needed to get the job done and get it done quickly. He went through hell in the war's that he was thrown into but he felt that if he was doing some good for the land he loved it was worth every second that he was in that hell. He soon was dubbed the Psycho cause of the jobs he would take always had the lowest chance of survival. Though somehow he would manage to emerge from each mission given to him what looked to be completely unscathed. People soon began to talk that he was not able to be human. That there was no way that he could be with all he has done.

Nicholas always heard everything that was said about him but he did not let it get to him.  As some time passed he ended up hearing about a show that was on TV. He soon decided that during his off time he would watch the show. The more he watched the show the more he felt like he was one of the people in it. The show seemed to speak to him in a way that it could speak to no other. Shaking his head he began to think of things that may draw him closer to what he felt he needed to do. He took in a deep breath as he watched the show but he had no idea who he could go to. He knew he needed to do something to push things along to make himself complete. He was already getting stronger, faster, and his senses had jumped upwards as well. but he had no idea how to do a request like this. Many would say the procedure from this X-men cartoon would kill him. Though for some reason he knew otherwise though he had no idea who he could talk to. Shakeing his head he decided to talk to one of the leaders from the marine special ops about it. Takeing in a deep breath he slowly closed his eyes and fell asleep. He woke up the very next day and took off to the base to talk to the special ops doctor that was on call. He had no idea how this would play out but he had to admit he was rather excited by the whole thought of how in his mind he would become complete.

Nicholas would arrive at the doctor's office that night to meet with him. The doctor took an intrest in him after the request that was given to him. Nicholas looked the doctor square in the eye's as he spoke. Doc this here is what you are going to do. you may find this request to be crazy but i don't give a damn what you think about it. First thing you are going to do is use something anything to make me sleep through what i am going to ask you. Then after that you are going to take the strongest metal you can find and melt it down. After words you will cut me open or use a needle whatever you have to do to coat my skeleton with that metal. But at least make sure i will still be able to move. Then this part you will need to cut me open for. Get a small mold or something and create blades around the three extra bone's i have in my arms.. I want you to make me like him you understand me? The doctor was shocked that someone would ask something so crazy of him. He looked to the picture that was given to him and he was just floored by the shock. This is that wolverine guy from that show i told you about you can not be serious you will die from this if we go through with it. Just shut the hell up and do it! i will prove you wrong. Me and that person are connected I am just like him now you will do it or i will try to find someone else who will.. Ohhh and if possible I want the blades to be Made of something strong and durable. I want them to be able to withstand as much as possible. Ohhh and give them a diamond coating to. Just in case to hopefully help with making it where they will not go dull as easy as most blades. I know it will be a pain to do but I want it to be something that will be talked about after they are seen. The doctor knew either way they would be talked about but he slowly nodded his head to let it be know. The request was taken and would be done.

The doctor was reluctant but sense nicholas was so determined to do this no matter what he was told he said okay. Later he strapped him down in a vat of liquid. The liquid was odd but is somehow managed to cool his body down as he lay submergerd in the water. He was given something to help him breath sense they did not want Nicholas to die due to drowning. The doctor was very carefull with this procedure even if it was against his will in a way. He injected the metal over the Bones and made it where if he did manage to live through the first part that Nicholas would be able to still move. He even went as far to keep track of the males vitals as a safty precaution. The procedure oddly enough seemed to be going good. Everything seemed to stay winin normal peramiters. After everything was done the doctor could not understand how that man had not died. Looking to Nicholas he could not help but think he was the wolverine. Shaking his head the doctor moved to the claw's After cutting open the males arm's he was astonished to see that nicholas actually did have three extra bones in his arms. Though to be honest that was one way to explain why he was always able to survive the suicide missions he was sent on. The doctor did as he was told and coated the bones over to look like blade's that would be stored easily within his arms.

Though after the procedure was done he could not help but think Nicholas was way to dangerous to be left alive. A few days after Nicholas woke up the Marines set Nicholas word word of a suicidal mission they wanted him to do. And of course being the type of guy he was he quickly accepted and went off to do the job. He was sent to an old half way destroyed complex where it was thought that Enemy's of the US where camped out at. It was in the US wich made it all the more confuseing to him, but he knew the enemy could be anywhere and strike when you least expected them to. So upon going there he took no chances on how he was going to take the job on. He searched the place even in the area where it was underground but he found no evidence of what they were talking about. Though as soon as he reached the deepest part of the area he could hear people running around up on the ground level he could even smell them. He could tell they were coming for him and it only made him mad. As the men came down to the basement level He sneak attacked the first his claws leaveing their sheath as he stabbed the man in the head. He used that man as a shield to go after the second. But the third managed to get the drop on him with a shotgun. The soldier shot him in the arm close range. But thankfully no vital organs were damaged due to nicholas bearly manageing to move into a possition where it was mostly his sholder. And thankfully the metal placed over the bone was strong enough to withstand the shot.

He was sent flying backwards and managed to roll into hideing He only bled for a few seconds but it took awhile longer for the wound the shotgun had given him to heal. He could not help but wounder why the U.S soldiers were trying to kill him now but he knew he had to get away no matter the cost. He managed to sneak behind the third person who had shot him by stabbing him in the head through the wall that he was hideing behind.  upon doing that he quickly ran up the stairs and took to a vantage point to where he could see the best way to get out of this. He could count that there were at least 8 people left for him to get away and not get spoted by the troops. He soon went on the move to try to figure out a stratagy. He had took the place in and built a stradagy in case he needed it. He went into hideing and watched in secret as the team searched the area. As soon as he had a plan of attack he sat in wait till the first target was close enough to attack. As soon as his eye's were on the first target he charged in blades swinging. As a loud scream began to echo through the area this was the sign that this little war had only just begun. He ran one through the heart and a second through the head. He was not expecting to not get hurt though. Soon he was shot by a two machine guns. Luckly his extremely vital organs were safe under his skeleton . one was wounded though but enough of it was still intact that it could regenerate luckly.

He took cover yet again as a dark look seemed to over take his face. His eye's would go yellow even though they were normally a dark blue. after he had completely healed nicholas began his charge again. He charged after one of the remaining 5 targets impailing him on his blades and once again used him as a shield throwing him at one of the soldiers he quickly slashed up the second of the five and was soon atop the thrid. This seemed to be going all to easy though his main objective was to get away. He soon took down the remaining two and took the quickest escape route he found and ran into the woods not far from where the incident had happened. He soon after decided that it would be best to lay low for the time being. After that he took part in fight clubs to earn the money he needed for his ever growing addiction of booze and cigar's He tried to stay away from getting to close to anyone because he knew that there  was a chance if he got to close to someone that it may get them killed. He took And he did not want something like that on his mind not yet anyway. He took cover in the woods and lived there for many years. He did what he had to survive but there was not  much he cared for after the incident that officially put him on the run.

He managed to get to where he got to a city where some would say the strange and crazy happen all the time. Some people were not even sure why people remained in the city at all. Hearing word of this it gave him an idea. He decided to move out in that area of the worl. Maybe it would help him start new. Though h e was pretty sure it would not help him at all he knew he could at least check it out. upon hearing all the crazy things about the place he started off towards Karakura town. He did not stop till he reached the  towns woods. He decided it would be best to remain in the woods for the time being. He went through alot liveing in the woods and harmonizeing with all the animals. They taught him much includeing how to master his new senses. like the sense of smell he had was that of the wolf. streangth that rivled the bear's  they taught him so much and he soon became a part of their family. Even though he was trying to avoid close contact he figured if he was around them close to all the time it would be okay. Though one day he was forced to leave them behind fearing that the worst may happen. Though no one knew where he was he could not help but feel someone was still searching for him. And with that he entered the city to find himself a place to stay and this is where his new story begins.

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» Natural Attributes:
Regeneration: His regeneration does have limit. He can only regenerate a part of his body if there is a part of it left to regenerate. It has to be at least half of that organ left. This will be shown in the Background but it is also limited in time it takes to regenerate as well.  The only thing that will remain the same no matter what the bleeding will not last longer then one post. After that  it depends on how bad the wound he receives is. Obviously if the  wound is not all that bad like a decently big scratch it will be gone in that same post. the worst wound he gets that will not be able to kill him that is. This wound will take at least 5-7 posts but the bleeding will still last only the first post to show his power is real though it is rare that he ever gets wounded to the point where this is needed to be shown. As well it is the main way he is still alive as well. It makes it to where he ages slower then a normal human. It slows the cemichal balance within his body that revolves around the aging process. His healing takes up stamina after each time it heals a wound.

Enhanced sense's: He has an enhanced sense of smell brought on by his unique gift. Much like an animal if he gets someone's scent he will never  forget it. The range of the scent can very based on how fresh and strong the scent is. If it is fresh or if someone is trying to sneak up on him. He can smell thm from around half a mile away. It ends up slowlygoing down based on how long the scent warmongering and how strong it was. This will mean it can possibly take about two or more days for the scent to die down. And with bad weqthe like rain it can die down faster than normal. With this he can track said person to the ends of the earth if their scent is still fresh enough. he can even use the scents to help his ability to plan a strategy or to simply track down his prey he is on the hunt for. Either way this comes in handy and some would call it a mutation of his sense of smell and hearing as well which is to be mentioned now. Much like his sense of smell he can hear something from up to 3 blocks away. This hearing bonus is also something he can use to aid his stratagy's He makes in order to tell when a target would be close enough for him to strike. The closer the target is the louder it is. Plus these traits are not always on he has to focus upon them to actually get them to work for him.

Enhanced Strength: Due to his heavy bones he trained rigerously on training his strength. This cupled in with his way of life made it to where his strength progressed far byond what was thought possible for a human. This cupled with the fact that he is far from being a normal human only served to make this possible. His strength would be about 5-8 times stronger then the average human body builder. Or 2000-3200lbs. This is going from base at 5x/2000lbs and when he pushes his limits at 8x/3200lbs He was always a strong man considering even before the whole incident with the metal being added to his boned his bones were still heavier then a normal human. He can lift a car off of someone should the need arise. Though he can not hold it up forever just long enough for if someone was near by they could pull the trapped person out be for he drops it. So he had years of training to enhance this stat and his speed as well.

Enhanced speed:Due to his heavy bones he trained rigerously on training his speed. This cupled in with his way of life made it to where his speed progressed far byond what was thought possible for a human. This cupled with the fact that he is far from being a normal human only served to make this possible. He was always a strong man considering even before the whole incident with the metal being added to his boned his bones were still heavier then a normal human. So he had years of training to enhance this stat and his speed as well. He would run and run for days on end considering he was always guessing that the military may be hot on his trail. Though not many would know of him. He was a guarded secret known only to a few of them after they learned of his special talents. With this he is 5-8 times faster then the average marathon runner. Or 30mph - 50mph 5/30mph times being it's base and 8/50mph times when he is in an all out Sprint.

enhanced sight: Nicholas's sight also ended up getting enhanced due to his constant servailance. He can at times see things that others may have missed. This also comes in handy when he is tracking his prey and or simply trying to stay in hiding. Cause he can use his sight to even see the simplest of things that some may over look. He can be considered to be an over acheiver in this aspect cause he uses his sight to make sure that he leave's no traces that he was ever at where the search party may be storming in order to find him.

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General Skills


  • Durability: Adept
  • General Speed: Beginner
  • Strength: Adept
  • Weapon Skill: Adept



Will Skills


  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Beginner
  • Pain Endurance: Adept
  • Focus: Adept



Human Skill Sheet


  • Anima Stone Strength: Adept
  • Soul Sorcery: Beginner
  • Soul Dash: Adept
  • Soul Detection: Adept



Chi Skills


  • Geppo: Beginner
  • Vindeca: Adept
  • Tekkai: Adept
  • Yang Surge: Beginner


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Wed Nov 20, 2013 8:57 am
im not going to bother working on it again. cause even if i change it you all will whine about one part of it or another. even when its diffrent its not diffrent enough. so even if i make it more diffrent it will still be a whole cryin issue on how its more then likely still to simular so im not going to bother.
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Rechecking this as there are problems that need to be taken care of before I can reapprove this. Also, to note, the tier you were previously approved with is being stripped of you as a result of you having been banned before. More than that, I believe the quality of your application is not high enough to justify what you received then. I'm not sure exactly what it will be if and when I approve this, but expect it to be lower.

Enhanced senses
Need to nerf that whole "to the ends of the earth part" as it is a wee bit overboard. No animal I know has that kind of capability. So give me a more realistic range to the enhanced sense of smell.

Enhanced Strength/Enhanced Speed
Cue the Ludalfa Mary Sue speech, but no seriously; These generic abilities need a more apt description. Tell me just how much stronger and how much faster you become as a result of this. List at least one example of said strength or speed for good measure.

enhanced sight
Is this an enhanced sense of sight or knack for hiding oneself. It seems as though you are describing two different abilities that are fairly unrelated, making this very confusing. Please elaborate further.


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Tue May 26, 2015 2:33 pm
On the ends of the earth part. That's not to say how from Him it goes. It is to say how far he would go in tracking the person.just thought I would let you know. I did add some to the beginning in hopes it helped to show it. If no let me know please.

On the enhanced skills I was tol I did not need to cause of them being basic skills. He only has the basics on them sense he is still technically just human with some special gifts.

On the sight I did make a mistake. Did not notice I used conceal instead of see. Must have been going to fast to have noticed it.
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Fri May 29, 2015 11:11 pm
Things are going to be different as a different moderator checks your things. I personally require that abilities are sufficiently described so that there is no confusion to what it can do, as in your Enhanced Senses ability, and that you at least define the bare limits and capabilities, as in your enhanced strength and speed. I hope that clears it up and why I'm asking you to change it.

Your enhances senses descriptions is acceptable now, but for the strength and speed, you should still do as I said. I want to know how potent both skills are.


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Sat May 30, 2015 4:38 pm
That's okay I added a comparison scale on both that I hope will help. If you think it's over the top let me know please.
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Thu Jun 11, 2015 2:42 pm
I for one believe that the work you placed into the character gives it its original tier. Now, as a heads up I want you to know sometimes numbers aren't always the best to describe something. I think that what you wrote is sufficient but in the future I just want you to have some advice to go off of. Remember, don't cause any problems and if staff ask for something please do so, other than that I'll be reapproved the character at 3-5 for now, with some threads under your belt I give them their tier back Nat. o/



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