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Tue Nov 07, 2017 4:07 pm
THE SHINIGAMI TEMPLATE

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Shinigami Dossier:


Official Name: Shinsui Unabara
Offical Age: 200
Clan Affiliation: Unabara/Kyoraku
Clan Rank Unabara: Current Clan Head
Clan Rank Kyoraku: Third in Line For Leadership
Blood Type: AB-Negative
Music Theme Dossier:
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Physical Appearance Dossier: The first of many things that stand out about Shinsui. Is his hair white, it is very clear and easy to see. This has been a trait he was born with and often times it shows clearly. Shinsui's hair parts naturally in the front and spikes in the back. Allowing access to his other remarkable feature. His crimson eyes, they are the color of blood. But something about them is deep and foreboding. Normally his appearance has all the features of an edge lord. As some would call it, his physical body is very fit. He's kept himself in fantastic shape. Being able to move and do things others sometimes at his age would have trouble with.In Terms of build, Shinsui has a very athletic and comfortable build. He's got one very similar to his father and mother. Built for good speed and movement over high power output. He could have been called lanky if not for his height being a regular size. His physical appearance seems to be that of a seventeen-year-old boy. Shinsui's physical traits also include a marking on his chest that is visible from the outfit he wears. The marking can be viewed in a picture of his most recent attire. He often goes against the normals and rebels against conforming to any set design or look. His parents both shoved Japanese culture down his throat as a boy and he took a general liking for picking his own and being free. Shinsui's body is exposed since that is often times the most natural thing. He has tribal tattoo markings on his face that are red. The meaning behind them is unknown to most.

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Personality:


Laid Back: Many people would call Shinsui a calm child who didn't seem noisy. But the fact of the matter was he was simply a relaxed child. He didn't get worked up over things even during the slaughter. He kept a cool head and demeanor though not savoring it. He had his normal nature on display of leading through relaxing those around him. But it wasn't enough to say he was a simple boy with little else to offer. Shinsui was noted to be exceptionally gifted in his ways of being calm and eccentric. But most people agreed upon his vanishing that he was just laid back. He never took the whole monster or demon image of Unabara warriors. He saw them not as warriors but as regular people who just happened to be educated in swordplay. He would often make strange comparisons trying to make sense of it to people.

Eccentric: He was a strange guy most would ay before vanishing. It was almost like he had a sixth sense about what was going to happen. Often commenting on a bad feeling or something like a strange wind. Shinsui didn't really read into stuff like that. But he just had a sense of wrong and right occasionally showing up. His whereabouts were unknown partly are due to how strange he is. Often getting small reports from people of a white-haired swordsman who just wandered through talking to himself. Perhaps the strangest habit Shinsui has is speaking to himself like a crazy person. Instead of thinking inside his head he often times speak's out loud. This is, of course, something that is notable and happens often. It's only during combat that he doesn't show this odd thing. Keeping his thoughts to himself though speaking to his enemy on occasion and throwing them off.

Intelligent: Perhaps the one thing Shinsui is known for most of all, is his intelligence. He is extremely smart and can smell a rat in something quick. He was able to avoid the slaughter in part because of his senses. Intelligence helped him disappear entirely from the world or perhaps it was a lack of it. Shinsui is very smart and often times hides this portion from him. Perception is a weapon in that of itself. It's something anyone can use and gain much from. He learned that the hard way when meeting his zanpakuto. Learning that not everything goes how you want. You may have desired a flame spitter or perhaps a lighting bringer. But sometimes you get the reflection on the water. How you react and take what was given too you. That is what changes and makes you different. Thinking about the outcome and understanding the truth within the truth. That is the thing that must be understood to truly glimpse intelligence. Not just inventing and being a good strategist make you such.

Zanpakuto:


Zanpakuto Name: Hansha
Reiatsu Color:Gray
Zanpakuto Appearance:
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Inner World Appearance:
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Important Information: This must be read by anyone who is interested in combat. His zanpakuto is not used at all for combat without permission. No passive, no Shikai, nothing at all. He is unable to use them in the thread against another person on PH without you giving consent. Then once this is given the illusions aren't absolute. He will attempt to make you see or think you see things. Attempt to make you believe things are there that aren't. With Will skills regardless of the tier, you can combat these. It only requires intelligent and thought-provoking writing to do so. I repeat this again so you understand, his zanpakuto is not absolute with illusions. It's able to make your mind believe it saw something there that wasn't. But it does so strongly you'd believe it was there, will skill can easily combat this given rank and skill. I am more interested in story-based angles then winning fights or being a dick waver at this point in my PH writing. So this is a notice to those who look at this portion and go oh god illusions they are broken.


Weakness and Beating it: First and foremost there is a difference between Aizen's Kyoka Suigetsu and Hansha. Hansha can make suggestions which can be seen through. Think of them as being under hypnosis and you have a chance to see through it. Willpower and Mental Deduction will see you through this. The higher up the faster you can determine reality and illusion. Now what I mean by this, of course, is that if you're a master you will figure it out fairly quickly. But this is subjective to a character and does require them to have time to figure it out. Illusions aren't something you instantly realize you're in and a system is in place for it. Keep in mind Kyoka Suigetsu's effects don't seem to end. Whereas the longer you are under Hansha the more clear it becomes. It's like seeing behind a curtain and a Magician's tricks. The ways and methods of beating it will depend largely on a character. For example, Kisuke and Mana are gonna see through it differently. Now for seeing through it, the illusions won't feel or look as real when you start to break them down. The suggestions Hansha is making will begin to lose their coil on your senses. The more you unravel the illusions the less Hansha can affect you. More and more you will be able to unravel the secrets and pull away from the Curtain. The level of Mental Deduction and Willpower just determines how fast it will be. Let's say your a Master Mental Deduction, you will notice stuff being off. And will try to unravel her suggestive properties. The suggestion is the keyword of all of this, Kyoka Suigetsu is Absolute in its illusion. Hansha creates a suggestion to your brain and perception begins to make you think it's real. If you examine it for a long time it certainly will appear or disappear depending on it. Illusions are something that requires time and practice. He doesn't get an advantage because he has them. Shinsui's had to learn strength beyond relying on his fickle zanpakuto.

Sealed Power: His zanpakuto doesn't take a special form or give special capabilities. It allows him to make a suggestion to those with weak wills. To suggest certain things around them or going on near them. These mental and simple illusions allow for him to do things without being seen. Of course, this isn't perfect either as someone with the right will skills can see through them. Due to the nature of the natural suggestions being made some people buy them. For example that he was killed in an attack when he wasn't. Or his spiritual pressure is larger then it really is. These things require a brain and processes to truly plan out in a strategic fashion. These aren't absolute illusions but will be seen as real if your character can't see through them. But if you are able to make yourself realize they aren't there all illusion will vanish. Leaving you with a boy with no other real defense against you.

Shikai:His zanpakuto while lacking real combat capabilities acts with a single purpose. It is able to influence your mind and senses into seeing things that may be real. He's able to cognitively make you believe something happened or is in front of you. Now trying to do this without a case to do so is difficult. So he must make sure you witness his Shikai release firstly with your eyes open. That is one requirement the second being contact with you afterward. After that, the ball is in his court to a degree. Those with strong will skills can negate these effects if they are able to see through it. Power isn't what matters here, it's the willpower and mental deduction to get through it. To know what you see before you aren't real. To shatter the fake illusion and bring about your truth. Shinsui's reflections of the truth cannot be believed entirely. Now again this isn't absolute or fact, there are several ways out of illusions on this site. They are listed in several sections on the site and I will even help you out. As stated previously the goal for me isn't to win battles or anything. It's to make a fun and enjoyable roleplay character for this place. Thus why I am writing his Shikai and sealed form different from normal. I want this to be understood by all parties, Shinsui's weapon isn't perfect or absolute as that doesn't exist. It only works as well as he plans in advance. It only functions to the extent he is capable and you are gullible. That is the only things that empower his illusions.


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Fri Nov 10, 2017 12:37 pm
History Chapter One; Birth by Sleep:


The union of Aiko and Tsubasa brought about the birth of a single child. Officially and recorded his name is Shinsui Unabara. He was born on a full moon night. Born on his aunt's birthday of the twenty-seventh of December on the Human Calander. As a baby, he was very quiet and often times strange. Tsubasa stated that Shinsui had been born with a tremendous amount of reiatsu for his age. Some speculations can be had that it came from the joining of the two powerful Reapers. But strange occurrences did begin to happen rather frequently after Shinsui's birth. Some things would look strange and sometimes small black orbs would be seen coming from him. Along with strange markings appearing on the infant's body. Shinsui was also known for not crying as an infant much. When the doctor smacked him it's reported the child smiled instead of cried. Things would go missing sometimes around the house. Strangely and appear in different locations aside from where they belonged.

Later down the line, it was determined by his father that they'd been where they belonged. People hadn't seen them or noticed the things disappearing in front of them. His son was projecting illusions and creating images the people around him couldn't see through fully. He was fooling them at a young age despite being but a baby. It showed a tremendous potential, but his mother and father both agreed. He'd not have the same upbringing as another child in the household. He'd get basic training if he wanted it but little else. Shinsui would be given the choice of his destination and the road he wished to travel. As he grew the child showed little interest in anything but did train. He studied balance and liked things involving being elusive. He gained a perception for believing that the sword was a reflection of someone. That is a user projected their reflection of themselves and reflected what they believed. They could be a foe if some difficult nature.


As the years slipped by he spent little involved in things. It wasn't long before he did accomplish some control of his zanpakuto. Nothing tremendous or outstanding as the boy showed little interest. Fighting and survival weren't his choices. If anything he'd avoided the road he was set upon. Deciding it best not to get involved with Unabara affairs. They were a clan of murderous heathens who decided to cross ever taboo and religion in their wake. But one day a choice would be taken from him, the day of the slaughter. He'd been given little choice and used his prowess with illusions to make his death appear. Vanishing from under his attacker's noses. Hiding and running became his goal instead of running to someone. He believed it best to keep his enemies guessing and missing. Making them believe they were on his trail one direction but going another. Part of the reason he didn't go to the Kyoraku Clan or others for protection. Was to keep them from getting dragged into his father's mess.

Shinsui wouldn't go to his father if he was lit on fire for anything. It's about pride or anything like that. He simply detests that man with a large amount of his being.
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Mon Dec 11, 2017 8:00 pm
General Skills
  • Durability:Adept
  • General Speed: Adept
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Adept


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance:Beginner
  • Focus: Advanced


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Adept
  • Kidō:Adept
  • Zanjutsu: Adept
  • Hakuda: Beginner


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Mon Dec 18, 2017 3:00 pm
[mod]While I appreciate the effort you've taken to make it clear that the zanpakuto abilities are not intended for powergaming, there's a few things about it anyway that leave it requiring a bit more work before I can properly grade this. You mention "those with strong will skills can negate these effects," and from the wording later on it seems you're referring to Willpower and Mental Deduction, but there's not really any explanation of what would be "strong" enough.

Beyond that, though, we simply can't allow an illusion zanpakuto of this nature, as staff has discussed it and we simply cannot discern what about this zanpakuto would differentiate it from Kyouka Suigetsu on a functional level. It needs some touching up in how it actually functions.[/mod]
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Age : 27
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Mon Dec 18, 2017 5:23 pm
Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Beginner
  • Focus: Advanced


Comments/Notes: Factoring in the weaknesses in Hansha, I see no problem allowing this, assuming it's used responsibly.
Tier: 3-1+
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