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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Albion   Albion EmptyThu Nov 14, 2019 9:07 am


The Dark Slayer




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» Titles: Dark Slayer, Yurizen,
Lea (Lee, Human name)
» Age: 23 (14 in human form)
» Gender: Female
» Affiliation/Rank: Shadow Fall



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I. Personality Traits


» Personality:
» Addict
What makes Albion an addict is that she will crave for more and wish to obtain it, which is to obtain an understanding of complex ideas that she finds hard to grasp. She's addicted to high detailed things, such concepts that cant be easy to understand. Ideas that can't be achieved by normal means. She wants to be the first person to understand what others cannot understand. at times they toss inhuman concepts that one would label as childish. She wants to understand certain concepts, such as power, love, or understand the history behind things and why it happened. Her addiction occurred when she stumbled upon a cube in the middle of Egypt. There was a party of archaeologists hailing from Australia, attempting to find a lost treasure hidden beneath one of the pharaoh's tombs.

This treasure was once owned by a secret organization many years ago (roughly 400 before she was born). The treasure was a necklace, and rumors about its powers originated in the heart of Australia. It was said that a wicked spirit who was once known to robbed graves of pharaohs. The prints sealed him away in a necklace for eternity. The only way for her to control her urges to get her hands on things is accompanying her with knowledge about something she doesn't have. It will prevent her from doing irrational things, that can cause her, her life. Pursuing ancient artifacts without knowing about them, and the possible danger that comes. At times she doesn't let her addiction to consuming her, when she's tinkering with items in her possession, like a craftsman. Having been occupied by other things, rather than going out of her way to pursue dangerous treasures.

» Fierce
She has a fierce sense of loyalty in for Kahalism, despite the conflict with her human form who takes the appearance of a nun, she isn't entirely faithful in the Christian belief. In order to fool humans and any other that causes them to suspect something wrong. She is required to maintain such a pure persona and act as though, she is a practitioner to the Christian belief. Allaying herself with the church, much towards her disdain. When she isn't forced to bind by the church's rules, when off duty.

She goes back to her original persona, and devotes herself to kahalism once more. She became a devoted member of, Kahalism when she studied their history back in the demon realm. As a kid, she was taught about the belief and was told that she would be punished if she ever turns her back on her belief. She can go as far as making necessary sacrifices, such as taking away the innocence of humans. Slaughtering their kind, and offering their blood and body to her god.

» Cooperative & Flirtatious: Despite being an introverted person who doesn't like being in groups, she'll go out of her way and lend a helping hand if someone needs it. She can assist her comrades in battle when need to but keeping her honor intact. Disallowing unhonorable favors that would stoop her too low. She isn't above assisting her enemies if they have a common goal. She allows herself to get a better understanding of the people around her. She doesn't mind sticking around longer. Albion also has a flirty side that she rarely shows off. Although they come off as a way to distract others from their main focus. When she's around someone for a long time, she starts to develop some positive energy around them. Enabling her to feel somewhat sensible.

Sardonic & Stubborn: Albion takes an interest in trash-talking her foes. She likes to taunt them in a way that would get their attention, and start wanting to attack her. She's someone who does the barking and occasionally backs up her claims. She isn't above to mock opponents stronger than she is. She likes a worthwhile challenge, but she dislikes losing. She seemingly enjoys getting on her opponent's bad side and encourages them to fight. Albion is stubborn to the fact that she'll refuse to do certain things in a certain way and doesn't accept how it's done. She likes to be traditional, who isn't a big fan of new things. Albion is tough to push to make a decision that she sees fit, and if she doesn't like that decision, she'll be quick enough to decline it.

» History

Albion was born as a prototype in order to be used to serve for Shadow Fall, along with the minions. Being created for combat purposes, whenever they needed to be used for reinforcements. Upon being created, Albion would go through tests and projects to see if she were to be a good asset for battle. She was being used as a weapon, to harness and control for each time she set foot on the battlefield. She had gone through many trials and several of those trails ended up in a failure. Albion didn't seem to be the right product for war at her current state. She needed to be thrown out in a vast environment. Challenging foes in order to accumulate her power. While she saw this as punishment for being a failed subject, they saw it as an opportunity to grow. During this time, she traveled through the demon realm.

Doing tasks that would compliment the little skills she has. She came across a man, while on the search for power. This can prove to be her guidance towards achieving what she sought. She was told that being powerful and acquiring strength, wasn't the only thing she needs. Albion needed an identity. She needed to learn what it meant to be alive. Her new but mysterious guide, detailed about the nature of the human world. A place where she can achieve what she's looking for. She was offered the chance to explore such a place, however, in exchange that she must do something for him.


Albion was required to get herself, accustomed to understanding humans, the language, and their way of living. She was first tasked with acquiring books in order to upgrade her knowledge in different subjects. At the time, she only knew how to fight. Fighting was the only thing she was born with. She thought that this "training" wasn't worth her time, and that power is the only thing that motivates her. Albion wanted to impress her creators, by becoming strong. She wanted to believe that the only thing that mattered to her, was strength and the will to keep pushing herself past those limits. After weeks of struggling to understand if harboring the fruit of knowledge, which is to get a good grasp of the concept of humans.

She began to evolve from a battle driven, boring demon, and into someone who is educated and smart. Albion grew an interest in her teacher, despite not knowing much about them. When the time came for her to rise up, and take her step in the human world. Someone intervened in her teachers completed the mission. That person, in particular, happened to be her "brother" who was created for the same purpose. Albion was unaware of the fact she had one. He was created shortly after Albion went through her pursuit of knowledge, with her teacher. Her brother known as Eve proved to be troublesome for the two of them.

Along with the low-class minions that were sent to capture Albion. They learned about Albion, teachers' plan. They wanted to put an end to it, in order to avoid casualties. The two fought long and hard, unfortunately, Albion was at the bring of destroying her body. Her teacher decided to sacrifice himself in order to get her to the other side. Opening a portal that connected the demon realm and the human realm, with his sword Albus. He would then give her the sword as a parting gift, and threw her in the world filled with possibilities.

Albion could feel her body giving up on her. She had been thrown into the human realm. Forced to exist through her harsh conditions in this weak form of hers. Albion couldn't maintain her body, as each step she took--felt like she was being smashed into a truck. The aching pain made it a drag to move around. When she made it in an alleyway, she lazily swung the palm of her hand on the rough texture of a brown colored wall. Her knees tumbled down to the cold, hard ground. Her sword fell, creating an echoing sound as the sword encompassed the sheath. Albion's now emptied right hand, accompanied her light cough as she covered it slightly.

The alleyway was swallowed up by darkness, light indeed existed at the beginning of the alley. One would spot a shadowy silhouette hiding amongst the dark. A demon in a helpless state of being. A figure who sought out the sound of her coughing, being spammed. The lone human was curious and called out whoever was hiding. A young high school girl foolishly approached Albion. Albion didn't hesitate to use her last bit of strength to steal this girl's body for her own. She used her demonic power to seize control of the girl's body.

Albion was quick about finding a new host. In order to restore her demon form. She was forced to use a bystander as a worthy vessel. The spirit of the girl in which, Albion took control had proved to be troublesome. Albion surprisingly seized full control of this body. Cutting off all attempts of her fighting for control. Albion's new identity and form as a human being would soon come to further use. Albion needed to gather power in order to restore her demon form. She didn't like the thought of having her powers reduced. She resumed her pursuit of knowledge and power.

A few days after she successfully took control of a human body. Albion had gone out of her way to get used to these changes and need to make herself feel more comfortable in this world. She took the liberty to find some odd jobs that would test her skills here. In the human's eyes, she was an ordinary, and helpless bystander. However, with the help of her demonic powers. She proved to be able to pass through her boundaries and pushing her limits further. She wanted to strength this hollow shell of a human body. Albion is still considered to be weak in this state, but fortunately for her. She took on a job as an assassin. She learned that there were other beings that inhabited in this realm, other than her. Albion would be hired to take out these extra spiritual entities that roamed across this vast land. Harnessing her power, and continue to keep herself healthy. Maintaining her growth as she did other things, outside of just killing people for money. She goes to the library from time to time. Picking up what her teacher had suggested her before she was thrown in the human realm.

» Equipment:

Final Hour:
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Final hour takes the appearance of a pair of Kamas. The skull heads on the kama can be seen around the bladed part of her weapon. She can attach both of her Kamas together to form a double bladed staff.

Nightfall:
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Nightfall takes the form of two chakrams, and her secondary weapon to use when fighting. The tip of her chakrams have a long pointed blade, circling around her chakrams. The bladed parts are 3 inches apart from each other. They're attached to round section of her chakrams. Nightfall has a black handle in the middle, where Albion holds them and has a habit for spinning them in motion when she isn't using them.

She uses her chakrams to throw, block and attack her opponents with. She can control the general directions where her chakram is thrown, allowing them to be used as projectiles. She can use her darkness to sharpen the edges more, and allowing her to cut her opponents more fluidly. She casts her chakrams with the use of her dark magic

Albus:
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Albion sword takes the shape of a winged bat, as the blade compliments its appearance of a bats wings. The blade shaped wings are dark blue in color, and red. An eye can be seen next to the blue handle of her sword. When transformed, her blade takes the form of a long nodachi sword. Increasing the length of her original blade by 10 inches.

Albus is a special sword that she was awarded during her years of training. Albus is unique, in which her sword is capable of creating portals to different places. Albus can create portals by slicing through space. Allowing the Albion to go wherever they were previously. She can go up to 3 seperate locations that she has been to. Giving her freedom to travel from place to place, without relying too much on normal transportation. However, though when she hadn’t visited a place before. She’s required to use normal transportation, since said location isn’t registered in Albus. She can use this technique once per thread, she can have up to 2 people with her. She casts her sword with the use of her dark magic. It takes a post to charge up her sword to create a portal.


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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Albion   Albion EmptyThu Nov 14, 2019 11:37 am


The Abilities




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» Natural Abilities:

Vocal Recognition: Albion is skilled with her ability to remember people's voices. It's her way of recognizing people based on sound, instead of looks. She has difficulty when it comes to remembering people by name. At a distance, she can tell whose voice it is. Albion can also tell the distance of a specific voice as well.


Hand to Hand Combatant: Albion uses a specific fighting style that utilizes heavy strikes, and brute strength above all the other styles of fighting. Her preferred way of fighting focuses on trying to deliver fatal blows that would render her opponents in a stunned like animation. Different from her sword-based fighting style, which uses quick attacks and swift strikes. When unarmed, she'll utilize a more focused and heavy approach. She would like to hope that her opponent's favorite hobby is blocking because she sure does like to dish out a few heavy hitters. When Albion focus too much on one attack, she can become vulnerable to counter attacks.

Sword proficiency: Albion likes to make use of her sword, she has a unique fighting stance where she will hold her weapon of herself at her following sidearm, being the right arm. Her leading arm, which is her left is pointed outward with Her open palm being shown. She generally uses thrust based moves, in order to close the gap with her opponents. She attacks with quick succession, giving little time for her opponents to think in order to formulate an attack of their own. She'll try to make use of her quick and aggressive attacks whenever the opponent goes on defense. She'll attempt to break the opponent's guard, in order to knock them back with brute force. Unfortunately, for her, she can be easily parried if she lunges in too quick. Throwing off her balance in the process, and making it difficult for her to reposition herself after an error has been made. She focuses more on slashing motions. She makes use of her Demon powers in order to amplify her attacks. With the influence of Demonic energy, she can generate black energy waves embedded with purple sparks of electricity. To tell when she's charging up for a powerful strike attack, her body will radiate a red blackish aura and projecting that aura into her sword.



Demonic Influence: It doesn’t take long to notice that Albion is in fact a demon, the smell of demon blood radiates from her body. No matter how much she tries to hide this fact. As a demon, she has the capability to influence objects that she touches and possess them. Allowing her soul to be stored inside that object, whether to hide from her targets or to conserve more energy. Using these objects as the means to rest, and continue once her body has fully recovered. She normally resides in weapons, such as a sword. Enabling the sword to be possessed with demonic energy. Any who holds this sword would feel a demonic force. She can safely store her body in objects for one thread, unless magic or an ability is used to bring out demon energy.

Demon Magic: Albion has some knowledge in demon magic, however she doesn’t use them a lot. The most she can do is perform curses on her targets. These curses can range from minor allergies such as a cold, to something problematic like a serious injury. She can also use curses to tamper with the relationship of others, ramping up the emotions of people she comes in contact with. She can do this for one post.




» Possessive Powers:

Aspect of Darkness: Darkness is the opposing force of light. With this in mind, and with the help of her demonic heritage. Albion has the ability to shape, control, absorb dark energy. She can cause an influence on beings, and objects with her darkness. When she embeds objects and people with her darkness. She can cause an untrained to beginner level of someone's willpower, in order to dig through the darkest corners of their mind.

She can use this part of her darkness to summon the opponent's negativity, in the form of an animated shadow. The shadows that she manipulates are equal to her own strength, equal tier and lower. Her shadows can nullify certain effects that work against demons, such as light, holy magic. She can reduce damage taken, though against higher tiers. It would prove to be a difficult case scenario.

Her animated shadow is birthed by her targets negativity, and acts out on the opponents wish to do something that they wouldn't normally do. It would go against their nature. A good example of this, is Albion being unable to attack someone from behind because it goes against her code of honor. Her own darkness can be manifested, and destroy that weakness. Causing said darkness to act the opposite way.

Her darkness would slay her opponent using dirty tactics, and cheap tricks that she wouldn't allow herself to do. Targets who are adept to advance in mental deduction would prove to be a challenge for Albion. Advance and onward would be ineffective. Albion can absorb darkness around her, in order to amplify her own strength. She can also absorb darkness to regenerate minor wounds and keep herself sustained.


She generally absorbs darkness in order to access one of her possessive drive forms. When she absorbs dark energy, she can create a cacoon like structure made out of the darkness that she absorbed. Doing so can cause her to evolve and transcends into her possessive drive stage. It gives herself one post to charge up and absorb enough energy from her surroundings. She can choose to opt-out of using animated shadows in order to use regular shadows in combat. It can cause albion much more energy than intended, to heal larger wounds, such as a one of her body parts being separated or as big as a hole in her chest


When she moves around and dodge attacks, her body will create a shadow. Replacing her body with a shadow that briefly, giving it a transparent look. Her shadow appears the moment her opponent performs an attack. An example of this is if an opponent attacks in the form of an overhead strike, she can move backwards once the strike reaches close to her body. Dodging it in time, and with quick reaction. Causing her darkness to form a shadow, and substituting her original body from her shadow. Allowing the opponent to mistakenly assume that they had hit her, until the clone fades away. She can substitute out of her attacks with her clones, for 1 post.

Drawbacks: To ensure that she doesn’t damage herself, shes required to sustain her shadows for 3 posts before her link with them withers away if used past that cooldown. Her shadows work like puppets, and feeds off of negative emotion of someone. Her shadows wont have much effect on individuals who doesn’t have a hint of negative emotions present. Dealing with purehearted people, filled with hope and joy deems too problematic for her ability, as she struggles to find a hint of bad blood in their veins.

Shes more prominent with individuals who have dealt with loses, struggles have some sense of despair. However, too much negative emotions used in her shadows may result in an overload. Causing her shadows to prove difficult to control, and may turn against her due to the fact that their negative emotions are powerful. Giving albion a sense that they are negativity incarnate. To avoid this situation, she can only destroy her shadows with a holy object, that is her own weakness.



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» Possessive Drive Benefits:

Weapon Reconfiguration: Long sword Style - In her first stage, Albion's sword increases its length by 3 inches. Her sword takes the form of a nodachi in this stage. Her sword upgrades its toughness, as it's able to tank attacks that in its normal state wouldn't handle. This also increases Albions' strength while using her sword, by one-tier. Her strikes have suddenly increased along with the tier upgrade to compliment it. Her striking becomes much more deadly and sharpens the sword's attack, allowing for her attack power to dish out hits that she wouldn't be able to do at her normal tier. Albion's strikes becoming problematic, and whenever she delivers a powerful overhead strike. A strong force of energy follows with it. Allowing the result of her strikes to give birth to a shockwave. Her thrust attacks also comes out as compressed air attacks, when unsheathed. Whenever she thrust her sword near her opponent, she creates a strong force of air that reaches 10 inches. It has the potential to break her opponent's guard, who's tiers lower than her. Doing this to someone equal to her tier, can cause them to be pushed back. When using this style, her thrusts comes out as a dark energy like laser beam when sheathed.

Enhanced Shadow Control: In this stage, Albion can use her own shadow to help her in combat. By stabbing her sword into the ground, she will at first look as though she's struggling to take it out. By embedding her sword into the ground, she uses the sword to expel the darkness that resides beneath her. A pool of darkness engulfs her area like a flood of water, and once she brings out her sword. The darkness that was pouring out of her sword, begins to take shape and form a clone. She can maintain her clone for up to two posts. She can have up to two clones, and can be used once per two posts.

Shadow Link: During her first stage, she is capable of connecting her shadow with her targets, like plugging a cord to a wall. As she establishes a connection with the shadow of her opponent, she has the ability to lock them in place, as if they were stunned. During this time, she can control her enemies movements, like a puppet. An example of this is if, Albion raises her hand up, her opponent does so as well. If she claps her hand, they will too. She can inflict damage upon herself, using a sharp weapon, like one of her tools. The main question is, whether her opponent has one too. If they have a weapon on them, like a zanpakuto, then they will inflict damage upon themselves as well. Sharing the same amount of damage.

Drawback: To do this, she must be within 5 feet from her target. If she were to inflict damage on herself, as mentioned above. Her target must possess some form of weapon, that is capable of dealing piercing damage. An opponent with a willpower two times or one higher than her, can break free of its control. The ability is meant to be stationary, and shouldn’t in anyway, involve them moving. She can only hold onto her connection, for two posts, before exhaustion. She is vulnerable to an attack afterwards, until she regains her stamina.




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  • Durability: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Trained/Beginner/Untrained
  • General Speed: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Strength: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Weapon Skill: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Demon Skills
  • Za Koa Core: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Posessive Magic: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Possessive Augment: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Possessive Influence: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Mental Deduction: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Focus: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained



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« Application Checklist »

• Let's Get Down To Business •

  • Name [o]
  • Appropriate Age [o]
  • Gender [o]
  • Appearance Present [o]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [o]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [o]
  • 10 sentences for personality [o]
  • History is of appropriate length [o]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [o]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [o]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[o]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [o]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [-]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


  • Power:N/A
  • Influence:N/A
  • Resources:N/A
  • Overall Hazard Level: N/A

  • Comments/Fixes:
    Aspect of Darkness: I honestly really like this ability. It's creative, and has a fun mechanic to it. That being said, with an ability like this I need to see a few key areas covered so that it functions fairly for others, I will list those areas below.

    Effictiveness scale: you have this, as you've mentioned willpower levels to show what is required for her to be able to utilize this ability on others.

    Potency scale: this is the main area I'd need to see expanded upon for this particular ability. You don't go into mentioning how powerful these shadows actually are. If the power is slightly less than her own then that's fine, but if she's capable of mimicking the power of the affected individuals shadow if they are drastically more powerful than she herself is, then that is not fine. I'd recommend going further in depth on how these shadows interact with others, in terms of how powerful they are.

    Regeneration aspect: I've noticed you've put in a regeneration aspect to this ability. While that is fine, there needs to be some sort of energy drain accompanied with it, no one is capable of healing indefinitely.

    Drawbacks: while you've defined parameters of functionality for the ability, I need to see some weaknesses and drawbacks such as how much energy does this require, and how long it can be used before she would incur a post cool down. Overall, as I said, I really enjoy this ability and think it's a wonderful idea, it just needs some further fleshing out before I feel comfortable Approving it.


    Enhanced shadow control: much like aspect of darkness, this ability needs to be further fleshed out. The clone requires a maximum number of uses and an energy drain. As for the second part though, you need to indicate how she utilizes others shadows to heal herself, as well as give me parameters or some kind of rule of thumb to show how it works. An example of this would be her utilizing ambient energy in the shadow to regenerate herself, however after X number of uses the impure energy causes taint in her body which slows down the rate of regeneration for Y amount of posts. This is the kind of revision this particular ability needs.

    Over all: I like the app quite a bit and you've done a great job on it, only these two abilities require tweaking. If you have any questions on how to do this, or need help, feel free to reach out to me in DMs on discord or message me on site. I would be more than happy to do what I can to help!

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    Aspect of darkness: You can control only one shadow of equivalent tier to you at a time. other than this, I need for you to have a turn duration on this. as well as how many shadows can be summoned total.
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