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Subject Post 1PostSubject: Nana Armstrong   Nana Armstrong EmptySat Jan 18, 2020 2:18 am

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I. Basic Information


» Name: Natalie 'Nana' Armstrong
» Age: 18
» Gender: Female

» Appearance Image:

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» Appearance Written:

Nana is a petite woman who reaches to a height of 5’5 and 130 lbs. She is slim and curvaceous despite her average to short stature. Nana is primarily Afro-centric in race despite her lighter complexion. She has a grandmother that was Caucasian that she never got to meet. But what also throws people off is her blue eyes which makes people think she is often seen as biracial. This is a genetic defect, however, called Waardenberg Syndrome. Hers was on the milder end of the spectrum and made her look intriguing and beautiful whereas in some extreme cases makes you appear abnormal. She suffered from hearing issues that she no longer suffers from as a spirit to, which is common for those who suffer with the defect. Nana is unique and gorgeous looking with light rose gold and white hair. It is easily flowing in various directions.

Her clothes are more extravagant as a spirit than when she was alive. She wears red scantily clad frilly dresses. She is seen with crosses as accents. Her feet are placed in high boots and her equipment is usually wrapped around her readying herself for battle. She is often seen with a very primitive gun that somehow came to her aid in a split second and decision.


II. Personality


» Personality:

Positive
- Ambitious
- Loyal
- Street Smart
- Charismatic
- Honest

Negatives
- Cocky
- Impulsive
- Blunt
- Petty
- Vengeful

Likes
- Traveling, walking
- Money
- Having things, shopping
- Lawful, good characters
- Fish
Dislikes
- Violence towards HER specifically
- Badly cooked food
- People that make her think of her abusers
- Whining
- cleaning

Nana is a straightforward being. She is easy to follow, easy to predict verbally, unless emotionally unstable, and is petty. She is someone who was easily affected by her environment and it changed her personality. The one thing that kept her going was people. Whether it was to obtain money from ‘clients’ or see her sister again people motivate her. She is super vulnerable to others’ words and actions. Easy to fall for it. It’s what changed her desires to do something with her life and then it also caused her death. It makes her seem as if she needs to always depend on someone. She is always soul searching and is highly extroverted unlike how she was as a child. Her childish introverted past developed into something that was charismatic. Although, her history seldom mentions it her relations were men were shifty but she also drew them like flies. She also was street smart and she knew the right people.
Nana, despite her morbid past, has a smirk on her face most times. She’s witty and clever. She’s not a joke or comedian per say, but she tends to poke fun which will either provoke or make you love her. She’s charming and can be happy and upbeat, but also has sides where she’s not so much due to the abuse she’s suffered from.
She is only lax at the moment as a spirit because she consistently watches over her sister as a spirit. She wishes to make sure she is ok and no one is tramping on her well-being. However, she does have moments where she is slowly, slowly, slowly turning into a hollow due to restlessness.



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Alliance: Chaotic Neutral -> Chaotic Good


III. History


» History:
Warnings: Abuse is an element.

Nana, was two when she was place in foster care. Her sister a newborn. She has very faint memories of her mother, a teenage girl whose boyfriend abandoned her, no marriage, just a random relationship with no sensibility in it. This is natural of course because of Nana’s age. Nana never met her father or mother after being dropped off. She has no clue on their whereabouts although, to this day she still wonders of their location. Nana’s name is Japanese but is not intended to be. It was given to her by her younger sister who thought of her as a nanny. Cheesy, but it stuck and Nana kept the name from ‘Natalie’.

Being place in foster care in New Orleans, Louisiana is an absolute hell zone for disaster. New Orleans is filled with homeless people, crime, and most of all abandoned children. Although not abandoned completely, Nana found herself in the midst of joining thuggish children at a very early age. Around the age of 10 she’d be separated from her sister and wouldn’t see her towards the ripe age of adulthood, 18 again.

Nana was an absolute distressed mess naturally. She was alone. Her biological parents didn’t want her. Potential adopters were turned away from her cocky attitude and her sister was gone and taken away. She did well in school, but it wasn’t until later teen years til’ she figured out how to properly hold a conversation. Her foster families were 50/50. They either hit her or they’d be kind but she’d ruin the good families by her rough demeanor.

Nana found herself growing angsty. The only way she was successfully communicating was through thugs she found on the street. As she grew older and became more attractive this also became more dangerous. At this point, being a single woman not affiliated with a gang was dangerous. Well, dangerous to be in a gang period! But Nana couldn’t afford pickpocketing strangers in certain territories as she was threatened. So, she’d find another gig- prostitution. That ended very shortly only a period of 2 years.

By law, one can stay in foster care til’ the age of 21. Nana planned to keep staying til’ that age, live with and watch over her newly reunited sister, and save money for community college. She would use the shitty benefits from the state and do something with herself. She was going to quit playing the thieving business and make a legitimate living with herself. She had decided.

As she had reunited with her 16 year old sister in a new home she felt all was well.

It was towards the gulf and very much country side of Louisiana. Federal agents didn’t visit the home that often because of it but they should have. One day, she’d find the foster ‘caretaker’ to be abusing her sister. She’d immediately raged quietly and called the police. The police would coincidentally show up as she had him tied up and was beating him down, he was shot in the leg, slowly dying but surely.

Nana was livid and her sister was alone crying in the room. Nana would be caught by police with the ‘caretaker’ and she’d be threatened to hold down her weapon. Still holding her weapon, in struck of what had happened, she couldn’t. And so, she was shot. As she was dying on the ground the pool of blood formed beneath her.

She’d be sprawling to get to her weapon and next thing you knew as the cops went over to take the gun she shot the ‘caretaker’ in the head while lying on her back.
She got what she wanted. And she regretted it. Now, she couldn’t look after her sister! But she’d be taken to prison anyways for harming the ‘caretaker’. Right?
So, who knew!

But she got what she wanted.

Her sister would be safe, for now.
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Nana isn’t a ‘bad’ person. ‘Bad’ as in straight out sadistic and cruel, but what she is though, can be very vengeful. Right now, as a soul wandering the planet looking for some sort of answer other than looking after her sister when need be it, she is turning into something. Something that could turn to be good or bad.








IV. Special Traits


» Natural Attributes:

Nana is one of the perfect examples of an adc(attack damage carry). That’s all she is. She currently lacks an extreme amount of durability from the standpoint that she’s a recent soul. In no demeaning way, she was a petite young woman who was human. Nothing more. Nothing less. All her powers relate to her death and surrounding as well as themes when it occurred so, it’s not random for her to have these capabilities. In it’s own way, it relates to the events that led to her death. Because she was tactical, fast, and quick with her kill so is she in her afterlife and her soul has bounded with the concept. Nana has 3 powers at the moment- Electricity Manipulation, Object Enhancements, and a complex concept called ‘Damage Engage'.


Powers- Electricity Manipulation(Possession), Enhancing Objects, Damage Engage

Electricity

As a pickpocketer in New Orleans, she was described by others as ‘lightning fast’. As a paranormal entity, Nana has the ability to use an electricity that can interfere with people’s bodies nervous systems on contact, electronics, and generate it. For primarily plot based purposes, she can start up and power down electronics, lighting in areas, and electrical fires.

Special Attack-Nervous System Stun-
If a person is of the same tier or lower and have a durability of Beginner or lower they are eligible to be affected by this stun. Human NPCs can be shocked to the point of immediate death where as non-humans cannot. If used on a non-human then her stun for 3 posts are slowed by 150 mph hour. They regain 50 mph per post.

This also impedes their reaction time as well.

She can also imbue her items with electricity so if it hits a person this effect can take place as well.

In order for this to work she or her projectile has to make contact with the person. Projectilles can travel up to 100 m before 'fizzing out with electricity' and 'being burnt to ashes'.

6 post cooldown.

Enhance Objects

How did Nana enhance objects before her death? Well. She didn’t, she was still human of course, but what she did do was that she had a very good fight-flight technique In the least. That is for one. This allows her to give quick boosts to items even if they aren’t held in her hands for moments at a time. Just like when she shot the man her human senses of the fight-flight kicked in. She is capable of making the best out of a situation so, it allows her to temporarily give boosts to objects to make the most out of any predicament. That doesn’t mean she can enhance objects in any way she wants at that moment, she has a few ways she can enhance.

Nana was also overly materialistic! So, she has an increased bonding with items more so than other souls and it’s obvious with this power. So, no, her enhancing objects isn’t completely random. It is more correlating to her personality and actions rather than her timeline of life. Specifically, her vessel/object she is connected to is the pistol she used to kill her abuser with. As that may sound morbid, for her it is a form of weaponry and twisted empowerment.

-Speed: Ok, so yeah. She uses a gun. And yeah, practically everyone on site should be able to bypass a bullet but that isn’t true when it comes to guns or arrows or knives or anything she holds. So, this is why her projectiles have the ability to move even faster than normal. This way it's a bit more on par with the paranormal environment. That means they travel at her own speed naturally. So, if she's adept ranked in speed her projectiles will move at adept ranked. However, this has a 2 post cooldown. This speed boost includes projectiles but only for 10 seconds in the linear direction, they travel in. So this speed enhancement works on items she has and has recently touched. She can make the speed increase by an additional one rank for 1 post of projectiles, but only 5 post cooldown.

For a small period of time, speed skill mastery is the benchmark that mirrors her projectile speed. Say her projectile travels past 200 meters, then it’d slow down and slowly progress to a regular speed. 200 meters is the range for this capability. 2 post cooldown.

She can also have this technique increase FOR AN ADDITIONAL rank higher for 1 post as well. However, this has a 5 post cooldown.

-Damage-Her projectile has the capability to increase in damage for 1 post, 3 post cooldown. Her swords and knives turn into bullets- they can easily kill with one hit if landing on those who have non-regenerative capabilities. Her simple items such as a book can cause such trauma the person suffers from internal damage such as bleeding. Her bullets can cause inevitable and immediate death if hit in the head or heart.

-Durability- Much like with speed, she can make her items equate to her own durability. This can make them very hard to break and shatter. People with a higher strength of her own durability can make them shatter at any moment as they are generally, just, well normal items. She can increase an items strength and equate it to her own for 1 post, 2 post cooldown. Or she can go a step further and do it by an additional rank, 1 post, 5 post cooldown.

Damage Engage

Damage Engage may seem like a special attack/technique, but it isn’t as it has many application. All of them have to do with landing however and increased damage via using soul energy. This power is passive and is always active.

- Key body parts naturally become aware in close combat. This could be anywhere from her in a close combat dagger fight where she aims for pressure points, arteries, organs etc. Her soul feels for the signature of another soul which then allows her to read and scan the body for pressure points. This consumes energy naturally and those who are of a higher tier can intercept(as they feel it) and can make it stop. Hitting a pressure point allows for her to increase the damage of said so pressure point. Landing a hit on a point allows her to easily go through said so limb for amputation much like with "Critiical Hits". Whereas a knife may go so deep into flesh with one swipe hers can go through one swipe effortlessly. A bullet? A small bullet can blow off a forearm if aimed at the elbow. Attempting to scan for pressure points and then assault with better utility/strength is a 3 post cooldown.

- Perfect Aim- Although, this may sound overpowered it’s really not as long as your speed is fine. This is no different than say, Green Arrow or Hawkeye but is more supernatural. They have an Eagle Eye. They are innately good with launching specifically arrows at targets. If the target doesn’t move or move fast enough it will hit them. So essentially, the target needs to either retaliate by hitting the target or move out the way. Regardless. Though this isn’t specifically just with primitive guns- needles, daggers, arrows(as well), a shoe etc. This works only in one linear direction, no curved throws work with this application. This tends to mean she is naturally good with anything that can be used as a projectile. This is a passive technique.

- Critical Hits: Similar to enhancing objects damage, but not the same. Although this may sound like she’s enhancing her projectile(s) or the object(s) she is holding all this concentrating spiritual energy and putting it on the object. This is highly draining on her. 'Critical hits' if landed can blow off a limb of a regular human or shatter metal, steel, stones, bricks, and about any material unlike say- a regular knife or bullet. The projectiles keep moving up to 150 m making it very dangerous as it can pass through various items. The limit to this are being possessing 'strong souls' basically non-humans as it will puncture deeply into flesh due to stronger durability. 3 post cooldown.

- Special Attack: Can concentrate on an object so hard if she’s in mental distress or frustration via another’s power or capability it will still land. So, say she’s charmed or drowsy she can still land the hit and attack for defense. Works one post in duration, 4 post cooldown. If the person is using a mental interference skill and they are her tier or lower she can do this for 3 posts, 4 post cooldown.


I. Skill Sheet



General Skills
  • Durability:
  • General Speed:
  • Strength:
  • Weapon Skill:


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Mental Deduction: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Focus: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


VI. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample: 'Ok..... so I'm dealing with a killer apparently. Simple enough. Just got to track their next moves.' the teen girl would think to herself as she left the other Jounins who had given her the mission.

She was a Jounin now! This should be easy right? She could handle this task. She had faith she could.... all alone. Actually, maybe not. Maybe she should have thought this through before stating she could do this alone...

'.....' blank thoughts appeared.

According to what Mika had been told, she was searching for a man who had been apparently murdering families and taking their belongings in the night.

As Mika stepped on the trail leading down to a distant colony of homes she recalled that this was the location the man primarily targeted. He was a strong ninja if he was capable of murdering an entire family quickly in the night. Or maybe just really q Now that she of it further, he was slaughtering kids in their sleep.

He was not a powerful man. Just a coward.

Those words reconvinced her to keep moving forward and to annihilate the missing ninja. She had killed people before, why so angsty about this one? The more she hesitated, the more she thought about it, the more she procrastinated was just another step he made to slaughtering another innocent person.

That would not do.

Mika would make her way to the colony of homes. The moon was out, rays on full blast, as the woman walked. Then she'd come to an abrupt stop. Finally here.

Mika would take out her weapon ready to be on guard. She'd see a small fountain in the center of the homes. The fountain was amongst them. It was quiet and dark outside. Mina would sit on the ledge of the fountain and look around to see if anyone was remotely close. Everyone was in their homes. The lights were out and it was pitch black. Mika couldn't make out any figures from peeping into the windows.

Now all she had to do was wait and be on the lookout for any suspicious movement.

Mika, as she waited, didn't mind to be alone. Although quite boring, you couldn't' do much in the dark all alone other than be in your thoughts. After several hours of waiting, she decided it was best to patrol the backs of the houses. If she couldn't detect anything, maybe the missing ninja had hit up a different spot after all and then she'd had failed her mission.

Then, as she walked past the 3rd home she'd see a figure fly over her head. She wondered if they had noticed her. Likely not since, they hadn't aimed for her. Adjusting her headband, Mika would need to act quickly. She needed to deter the malicious ninja away from the house. She didn't want to disturb the people in the home so, as tempted as she was to play 'police' and yell 'stop'. She didn't.

If he was going to do a sneak attack. The woman could too.

Mika would take a single kunai out of her pocket and with a quick flip of the wrist, it'd landed on the man.

The man, fully clothed, no way to detect identity looked back and pulled it out of his calf. All she could see was red eyes burning with desire to kill.

Despite her skepticism, the fight ended in a few minutes. A new one on one record for her to be exact. She'd end up victorious and no one was eligible to die in the missing ninja's hands ever again.
(Naruto Site)

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Subject Post 2PostSubject: Re: Nana Armstrong   Nana Armstrong EmptySat Jan 18, 2020 5:57 pm




« Application Checklist »

• Let's Get Down To Business •

  • Name [o]
  • Appropriate Age [o]
  • Gender [o]
  • Appearance Present [o]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [o]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [o]
  • 10 sentences for personality [o]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [o]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[o]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [o]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [-]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


  • Power:n/a
  • Influence:n/a
  • Resources:n/a
  • Overall Hazard Level: n/a

  • Comments/Fixes:
    So, overall I like your characters thematic and how you tie in your characters past life to the current one, but there are a few things that needs to be fixed.

    All your abilities have post cool downs, however the ones that deal with increasing your damage output by a mastery level should be fleshed out to give a descriptor of what this change looks like, and give us a descriptor of how much more damage it does.

    For the other abilities you have, they all have the same issue-- you need to give more of a description of what they do, how they do it, and what this looks like for the environment or the foes that face them. With what I have to go off of, it's hard for me to give a accurate grading due to their extreme brevity.

    If you have any questions please make sure to DM me, I will be more than happy to work with you on this to the best of my abilities!

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Subject Post 3PostSubject: Re: Nana Armstrong   Nana Armstrong EmptyTue Jan 21, 2020 10:07 pm




« Application Checklist »

• Let's Get Down To Business •

  • Name [o]
  • Appropriate Age [o]
  • Gender [o]
  • Appearance Present [o]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [o]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [o]
  • 10 sentences for personality [o]
  • History is of appropriate length [o]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [o]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[o]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [o]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [-]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


  • Power:n/a
  • Influence:n/a
  • Resources:n/a
  • Overall Hazard Level: n/a

  • Comments/Fixes:
    Nervous stun system: remove the 1 turn auto stun and explain how she hits someone with this attack, such as is she required to touch them, or can she do it at a distance. Other than these two things, the ability is fine.

    The other thing I need is for you to explain what the pressure points in your sensory capabilities for damage engage does. Being able to sense them is fine, but what happens if she hits these pressure points?

    Final grading reserved until these two things are fixed.

    check 3


    Issues with critical hits: this is highly draining on her. 'Critical hits' if landed can blow off a limb or shatter metal, steel, stones, bricks, and about any material unlike say-

    The only thing to fix about critical hits is to remove the part that states it can blow of a limb, and remove the portion stating it can break through just about any material.

    Issues with damage engage:
    Key body parts naturally become aware in close combat. This could be anywhere from her in a close combat dagger fight where she aims for pressure points, arteries, organs etc. Her soul feels for the signature of another soul which then allows her to read and scan the body for pressure points. This consumes energy naturally and those who are of a higher tier can intercept(as they feel it) and can make it stop. Hitting a pressure point allows for her to increase the damage of said so pressure point. Landing a hit on a point allows her to easily go through said limb for amputation much like with "Critical Hits". Whereas a knife may go so deep into flesh with one swipe hers can go through one swipe effortlessly. A bullet? A small bullet can blow off a forearm if aimed at the elbow. Attempting to scan for pressure points and then assault with better utility/strength is a 3 post cooldown.


    My only issue with how this works is that on sight we have levels of durability that may impede upon this if it’s solely reliant on being able to sense pressure points. To give an example of this, even if it makes her knife capable of cutting of a limb easier when it hits a pressure point, that knife might be unable to penetrate diamond, or other objects of similar hardness, which is a real problem on PH since there are individuals at the higher tiers of durability that would have comparable durability to a diamond and or even tougher skin entirely.

    I would strongly recommend rewording this particular ability to rather than say it increases the likelihood of severing, that it increases the likelihood of damaging her opponent, or just generally makes it easier to cut through their body, which is something that was feasibly not only be easier, but would probably be more benefitial to you character as a whole.

    The only other recommendation I could give would be to reword the ability so that instead of it being like “a small bullet can blow off a forearm if aimed at the elbow” its something more along the lines of “ Due to the fact she can pinpoint her targets pressure point, if she was to hit that pressure point with say a small bullet, the penetrative force would be far greater than it would normally, causing it to be much more likely to cause deep wounds or to breach durable skin.

    The other thing you could do, could give examples of what this would do to an opponent with vastly superior durability as well, so that one could get an idea of what it does to say someone with “skin as hard as diamonds” etc.

    Once these last bits on damage engage are fixed we will be good to go. If you have any questions on how to fix the pressure points, I'd be more than happy to give feedback if you DM the ability as you fix it, or to do a VC to help walk you through things.
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Subject Post 4PostSubject: Re: Nana Armstrong   Nana Armstrong EmptyThu Jan 23, 2020 9:53 am

I kept all the edits except for breaking through items on critical hit and the sensing of pressure points and increased damage. I find there are enough and plenty of limits on them already and we are nerfing her too much.

So I essentially reworded the bit on breaking limbs with (which can technically be done on lesser extent with regular bullets, removing huge chunks of flesh or even organs with high tech bullets) only putting them towards humans.

I am willing to edit and work with them with another staff member(if still need editing) but not you for the below reasons.

Why? We discussed this with an elder member in voice chat on discord. He gave the suggestion, you then elaborated on how I could use it, and then typed it up while you and him explained it. I will not give names but I'm 100% sure you gave an ok on what we discussed then what I put down. I know that's a you and me and him sort of thing and people can only go by my word but that's what happened. I'm not putting elder member's name to not cause drama out of respect. This is for the critical damage thing by the way.

I will also not edit the sensing key body parts. People can debunk it simply if they are of a higher tier and if they are of a higher tier which a lot of ocs are- then they can bypass that ability simple. Then if they are of her tier or lower then she deals with only having to land it solely. If someone is faster or durable then the assault, which I figure most ocs are it's nerfed to the point they can still dodge it. Because of the edits we installed.

You contradicted yourself in 2nd and 3rd edits about sensing. You want me to explain if when she hits someone what it does. So I did. And I explain it in and it's denied not partially, but completely. You want me to remove it off the site completely without working with me on something YOU REQUESTED to hear from me about.

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[adm]I noticed your last log in was back in January.

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Therefore, to conserve staff resources, I'm moving this to inactive. If you still want it reviewed, just log in and post in this thread and I'll see to it that it gets reviewed.
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