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I. Basic Information


» Name: Hiroi Kiga
» Titles: Forgotten Names: Jörmungandr, Eater of Worlds
» Age: Unknown; appears 18 to early 20’s
» Gender: Female supposedly
» Affiliation/Rank: None

» Shifter Appearance Written: Hiroi’s shifted appearance is rather unsuspecting considering her true identity as a creature with an endless abyss for a stomach that was mistaken for the World Serpent, Jörmungandr, at a time. Though, it is easily explained by her ability to adapt by devouring her surroundings. With such a gruesome hint to why her form is the way it is, Hiroi found her change rather intense as eating the young girl caused her horrific eldritch shape to implode into itself until merged with the young girl. It altered the demon’s DNA into that of a female as well and gave it the ability to transmute its form further to genetically alter itself to better mimic the human’s around the, now female, demon.

Hiroi is now a pale young woman that appears to be between 18 to her mid-20s. Standing at 4’7", Hiroi has black hair that is barely longer than her person that drags along the ground as she walks which is one of the main reasons she floats instead of walking normally. When coming in contact with Hiroi’s skin, one will notice its coldness. Her cheeks also covered in scales. This is due to the body actually being more akin to hardened scales than actual skin and requires herself to be heated by heat. She dislikes the cold. This is also why Hiroi’s face lacks any blemish or real coloring. Her strongest attribute when in this form is her eyes which are a dazzling bloody pool of red with black serpentine pupils. Her physique is nothing impressive either, having taken the form of a young petite human.

Onto her clothes, Hiroi wears the scales of her old form mixed with the regular fabrics. She usually wears a white dress reminiscent of the young girl she fused with a black coat around herself with pink/red details.

» Shifter Appearance Picture: (If you have an image, feel free to post it here. If not, remove this)

I. Personality


» Personality:

Emotional Dissonance: Hiroi harbours emotions as easily as any other individual, but due to her long life of not having any emotion besides that constant burden to eat, she finds difficulty expressing herself physically. This is also due to her not originally being a humanoid creature as well. Her only reason for existing was to sate her hunger that was cursed upon her at birth. There was no room for other emotions until after she had devoured enough beings in the past to gain a basic understanding of how to feel differently. Now, with a human body, she finds it simply hard to form smiles and such with a face she is not used to. Slowly, by watching others, she is beginning to learn, but it will take a while before her forced smiles become more than simply facades.

Understanding Compassion: Hiroi is a being desgined to eat anything and everything without discrimination. However, because she ate a human as her first meal when reawoken, Hiroi has a strange compassion for the current top organisms on the planet understanding their fears and hopes through the assimilated thoughts of her victim. This understanding causes her to desire meals other than humans or humanoid creatures that have not actively antagonized her. Despite this, however, she shows no true qualms with randomly killing other beings around her if she feels the want or need to.

Hungry: It goes without a doubt that Hiroi’s hunger is one of her key traits. It is what her existence is based around. She has an abnormal appetite that seems to never sate no matter what she devours, and thus, she is always hungry. Though, there are differing levels to her hunger, and each level has a ceiling that, once full, will keep her insatiable hunger at bay until emptied. This hunger can drive her to act strangely at times when left unoccupied causing her to attack wildly and devour whatever is in her vicinity living and nonliving. This is the main reason she continues eating whether it be something small like a rock or something large like gulping down large increments of the sea. Whatever it takes for her to not lose control of herself, she strives to do simply to keep from losing control and eating the world she’s come to enjoy. It’s also one of the main reasons she enjoys human food so much. It has an unnatural quality to keep her at bay. Sweets are her favorite.

Clingy: Hiroi can become a bit clingy. A being born alone and forced into captivity for years and years will develop a loneliness that none others will know. Hiroi, now being able to interact with others, quickly starts to want more and more interaction with things that make her happy. It is why she desires more candy and food. It is why the people who feed her see her hanging around the area so much. She not only starts to cling to people, but to objects and locations as well. If a forest finds itself suitable for her desires, she will stay within it and protect it ferociously from harm. Any person can expect the same who connects to such a level with Hiroi.

Childish: Being merged with a young girl, Hiroi has a high capacity for childish acts at times. It is mostly sporadic and sometimes off putting when she does show her true age around others. It is mostly shown in the form of jokes which may accompany brutal acts that she commits or whenever she finds herself incredibly bored. Hiroi also shows a weird interest in learning new things. New objects or people catch her eye in ways similar to a child, but she is quick to lose interest in things that turn out to not be important and can have an immensely short attention span.

» Likes: Sweets, Spicy, Pretty much all forms of food and edibles

» Dislikes: Jerks, Orphanages, Rocks, Wrappers

I. History


» History:

“Grrrrmmmmngh-”

Pain. That is the first to register within the mind of the beast. Abyssal black lids open to the site of decaying wood: trees all around slowly dying with sickly grass plaguing the green of the forest around. There exists no sound besides the birds up high that refuse to dive closer to the sudden noise that shook the forest floor.

‘I am dying.’

The realization registered without a second thought. That is simply the way the world works no matter where one may exist. Death is a truth that is unavoidable. Yet, the lack of understanding of why death knocks on its door causes the beast to wonder as any attempt at movement causes nigh unbearable pain and whitened visions to blotch its gaze. Death is unavoidable. It is coming. Time is near. With that knowledge ordained within its mind, the creature closes its eyes once more and awaits for the end.
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There is a sudden stirring nearby, those black lids open once more. How long has passed? Who cares? The pain has not left. The beast’s red serpentine eyes turn to the view of a young creature: a fawn in the area. The young doe is feeding on the remaining healthy vegetation. It seems ignorant to the creature that lies near it. Is this mammal brave or simply unaware? No matter. The very next second, it is gone and the creature feels no better despite the meal as its eyes close once more and allow death to slowly take it away once more.
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“Hello?”

Eyes open once more, fury in its gaze before the pain sets in once more. There is another too close for comfort, and its eyes fall upon a young girl, her hair black with sickly skin and vacant blue eyes. Without much energy to even growl, the creature prepares to replicate the same situation with the young doe. Human or animal makes no difference. Though, before death comes, the young girl holds out her hands and the creature sees the fruit and meat brought before it as if some form of offering.

“You’re injured. Dying. Like me?”

The desire to feed seemed to lessen suddenly, but the creature barely hesitated before the fruit and meat before it has been devoured. The girl, being as ridiculous as a young human could be, decided to lay herself against the beast unfearful of the consequences. Maybe it was the scent of death lingering in the air that steeled the young girl. Humorous at best, but the creature felt itself slipping once more into that darkness. However, this time, it fought against the lull in worry for the girl’s safety. What a foreign concept to the creature, but eventually, it could not win, and its eyes fell once more.
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Time went by, and the little girl continued to come by without relaying information onto why. She brought food for the creature every time, and had tried to bring medical supplies at one point, but the wound inflicted onto the creature proved incapable of being handled with by humane means. They both had come to accept that nothing could be done to save it. The creature took it better than the small girl. However, with its death assured, the young girl told a tale of another person dying. An incurable lung disease foretells of a young death, and the creature could tell from just a look that the young girl was as close to death as it was.
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This did not stop the girl’s charity. Day after day went by with the girl returning with food for the creature, and she would talk about her time in an orphanage. It was a way to pass the time, but as with all pleasant things, they soon end. One day, the girl stopped coming, and the creature had suspected the worst. Strangely, it had become attached to this young girl. Even though it could remember nothing of itself, it cherished the little memories the girl had given it, and for the first time after awakening in this forest, the beast did not wish to die alone and afraid. Yet, it never opened its eyes after the girl did not come as promised.
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“Hiroi Kiga…”

Once more, those monstrous eyes opened to the sight of that young girl with crutches. She had returned, but she looked as if death would take her away any moment. The creature huffed confused by the words spoken to it that had stirred it. The girl simply smiled and layed next to the creature.

“You’re always hungry, so I decided to name you something… spooky like your appearance. This… is our last time. They said I’d die today, so I left and came just once more for you to at least let you know. Sorry for leaving you alone for so long.”

The creature felt itself tinge with pain, not for itself, but for the young girl dying right next to it. They sat there, two dying beings in silence, letting the day go by. At some point, the girl had stilled. The creature had suspected she had died, but there was one last stir from her.

“You can eat me once I die. I know how you’re always so hungry, and I forgot to bring something with me, so when I die, you can eat me. Maybe… maybe I’ll be enough for you to get enough energy to move.”

Then, she stilled for the last time. The creature felt moved by the words spoken, a sadness in its chest greater than even the pain of death. The very next moment, the girl was gone. Yet, what happened next was something miraculous. The creature could feel itself shrinking; the young girl devoured had actually had little life within her which caused a strange reaction to occur just then and there. A merging of monster and human, and the very next moment, there sat a young female alone.



True History


Since the first organism, this creature had existed, born from the desire to consume and grow. It was small at first, but as the world grew, as life grew, as the need to feed grew, this beast began to expand and grow at an unexpected rate until it's hunger became too much for itself, and the need to feed overwhelmed any sensible thought. It devoured everything it could growing larger and larger until its very existence became something one could not simply understand. The humans that witnessed it gave it many names throughout history, and eventually, its existence caused a problem for reality itself. When this beast moved to devour the whole world, that was when it was dealt with by Nidhana and beings of equal power being struck down and nearly killed. Forced into a deep sleep from its wounds, this being was sliced apart until nothing more but a memory that slept till this very day when spectacular events caused it to stir once more into a world where it had lost everything: its power, its memories, and even its life.

I. Natural Abilities


» Natural Abilities:

Unnatural Fusion: Due to combining itself with a human, Hiroi has lost all her demonic abilities. Though, due to the intense nature of Danavas, this combination is not considered a mix of races for everything human about the young girl has been erased including her soul, corrupted by demonic energies. Only the young girl’s mind remains meddled with Hiroi’s broken mind. Though, Hiroi does possess the ability to relearn her lost demonic abilities.

Reptilian Features: Hiroi shares physical features with snakes: elliptical pupils, a forked tongue that is rather long, scales on her cheeks and along her skin, and an affinity for warm areas due to being warm blooded (is susceptible to cold areas). She also has two large fangs that she can extend from her mouth that can administer venom along with the ability to actual unhinge and extend her jaw.

Hyper senses: Much like snakes, Hiroi has senses beyond that of humans by combining multiple factors. She is capable of using her tongue to taste chemicals in the air and even discern different energy signatures this way as well. Her hearing is superior and able to sense the smallest differences in vibrations in the air or on a surface she places her head near. She can see easily in the dark and can feel subtle temperature changes in her environment capable of even detecting others by their body heat.

Second Stomach: Hiroi actually possesses a stomach entirely independent of her Origin Power that is actually just a normal stomach. Due to how Hiroi’s powers work, she requires this stomach to act as a medium that keeps her sane. As long as her normal stomach is full, she is able to keep her endless hunger at bay. However, her normal stomach processes food at an expedient rate than normal stomachs making it so she must eat much everyday to keep from wanting to use her Origin Power to attempt to sate herself. Her stomach also has the ability to break down anything eaten and change it into energy much like her Origin Power but at a much slower pace.

Venomous spit: Due to being a reptilian creature before the merge, Hiroi has kept a few aspects of her snakelike past life such as her ability to produce venom. She has modified salivary glands like most venomous snakes within her cheeks that allows her to combine the necessary components for this venom. Of course, it is highly potent and replicates the three different toxins that most snakes wield: neurotoxin, cytotoxin, and hemotoxin which are specified on use. Of course, with all things, not all things are affected by venom the same. This venom has no effect on people with durability twice as strong as Hiroi’s strength and applies slowly to people with one skill level above her. Those of equal or lower skill levels will find the venom moving through their body quickly before factoring in other defenses that individual may have to Hiroi’s toxins.

Hiroi is also able to spit acid at an individual in an attempt to melt through their skin. This ability falls under the same rules as her toxins. Also, it is able to breakdown non-organic items as well.

I. Origin Powers


» Origin Name: A Hunger Neversated

» Origin Power: As a beast ever hungry and never full, Hiroi’s Origin Power grants her the ability to consume life in all its forms: energy, souls, living beings, inanimate objects, and even reality itself.


» Origin Abilities:

Consumption: In the simplest of terms, Hiroi possesses the ability to eat anything without harm to her person. This means she is near immune to any poison that she directly consumes and any form of matter is a source of nourishment to her. Her stomach does not react to substances the same way as any other race, including other demons due to her existence as the Danava of Hunger. Being unable to actually eat anything would contradict her very existence. Though, her ability to eat anything is not a natural process whatsoever. In fact, she does not actually have a stomach, but instead, her mouth is a gateway to her near infinite Conceptual World that anything that enters her mouth is transported to. All this consumed goes through a transmutation process where the Demon Energy within this pocket dimension begins to assimilate and transform anything eaten into Demon Energy for Hiroi to make use of herself.

As with all things, Hiroi’s ability to consume anything has its limits. Of course, this ability is limited by the fact that Hiroi does not have that big of a mouth, but Hiroi can only handle a certain amount of energy at a time which means beings that can release loads of energy at a time that she swallows will cause her Conceptual World to fall apart, and though it will mend itself after time, Hiroi will find it difficult to eat anything else and become extremely weakened by the pain coursing through her person. In fact, too much energy being eaten at once may even cause her to simply explode. If eating an attack, there is a check in the opponents respective energy control skill compared to Hiroi's durability.

Enter the Abyss: This is an extension to Hiroi’s Consumption ability. This ability is simple in that it allows for Hiroi to condense energy before her into more consumable forms comparable to Nel’s Cero Doble swallowing effect on Ceros. It then creates a vortex suction before her that forces the energy about to condense. Though, of course, said ability has its restrictions. Energy too powerful is incapable of being shrunk down into a form that’ll fit into her mouth.

Regurgitate: This is a simple ability that simple returns energy eaten back to the sender unaltered from its original state. Hiroi must actively keep the energy eaten from being transformed within her which proves difficult if she holds the energy for too long. However, Hiroi can buffer this ability for one post before having to unleash any absorbed energy.

I. Eternal Partner/Conceptual World


» Conceptual World: Hiroi’s Conceptual World is actually the near infinite pocket void that things she have eaten using her Origin Power are transported to. There is nothing to note here besides the infinite blackness all about as one’s body is ravaged by demonic energy.

» Rilīja Attributes: The only connection to the outside world is Hiroi’s mouth that acts as a gateway to her Conceptual World.

» Eternal Partner Name: Due to the nature of Hiroi’s Conceptual World and her Origin Power, her own partner had been long since merged and consumed before Hiroi had merged with the young girl making her Eternal Partner and her one being.

I. Skill Sheet


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General Skills
  • Durability: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Trained/Beginner/Untrained
  • General Speed: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Strength: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Weapon Skill: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Demon Skills
  • Za Koa Core: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Posessive Magic: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Possessive Augment: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Possessive Influence: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Mental Deduction: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Focus: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


I. Roleplay Sample


» Roleplay Sample: (Show us what you got by posting a sample of how you role play. Any previous thread or new material is accepted!)

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THROUGH THE POWER INVESTED IN ME...
« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Untrained
  • Focus: Beginner




« Final Verdict »

  • Comments/Notes: I'm going to list off the problems to you stated below:
  • Consumption- 1. Being able to consume any and all matter with no repricussions is too over powered. What happens if they eat a Cero, what happens in they eat a Kido? It makes combat against this character null and void since they can just eat all forms of attack. Add a drawback. Stating that her mouth is too small isn't enough here, at least I feel, because she can still eat the things I previously stated as long as they would fit in her mouth.

    2. A pocket dimension? Really? That ties back to the previous gripe, but stating that they can consume anything and transport it to a pocket dimension means that they have a near infinite amount of space. Or at least that's what I assumed. Explain or change this so that there is a cap on what they can do.




« Final Final Verdict, Hazard »

  • Overall: --
  • Power: --
  • Influence: --
  • Resources: --




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THROUGH THE POWER INVESTED IN ME...
« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Untrained
  • Focus: Beginner




« Final Verdict »

  • Comments/Notes: It's good enough for me.
  • Tier: 5-2






« Final Final Verdict, Hazard »

  • Overall: F
  • Power: F
  • Influence: F
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