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Tue Feb 14, 2023 11:37 am
THE SHINIGAMI APPLICATION

I. Basic Information

» Name: Fuurinji Wakaba
» Alias: None
» Age: 354
» Gender: Female

» Association: Gotei 13, specifically 7th Squad Captain Saijin Komamura

» Appearance Written: Boasting soft, round facial features and long, blonde hair, Fuurinji’s outward features bely her true abilities. Her body, lithe as it is, is toned and well defined underneath her Shihakushō, allowing for great bursts of speed and strength that many are surprised by when first encountering her.

» Appearance Image:
Spoiler:

I. Personality

» Personality: Since she was a child, Fuurinji was always a kind and gentle soul. She disliked violence and, along with her love of all things sweet, she loved playing, eating Ramen, and especially Sake. As with most Shinigami, she has an undying hate for hollows of any kind but most particularly the Gillian-class Hollow. Overall, a very kind individual, she spends most of her days either training or running errands for those of a higher rank than herself. The only exception to this is when she’s on patrol, for which she tries her best to act as a leader when she can and very heavily takes after Komamura Taicho in how she treats others.

Due to her kind nature, she can tend to come off as aloof or naïve at times, even if it is untrue most of the time. She tries to treat her fellow Shinigami, even those she doesn’t like, with the same level of respect that she does with a Taicho. As a result, there is never a time where she is intentionally disrespectful towards her fellow Shinigami, though the same cannot be said for those who are not. Because of this, those who are not a Shinigami, Soul or Straight Human are despised with great prejudice. While Hollows are by far her most hated thing in existence, there is one other that comes close as well… A Quincy.

Since the time of the Quincy Massacre, which happened around when she was first entering the Shinigami Academy, her hatred for Quincy’s has never diminished. While it might seem obvious given that most all Shinigami feel this way, she holds a special place for them as she attributes the death of her mother to that of a Quincy. While she takes out Hollows and Mod Souls mostly because it is her duty to help cleanse their soul, A Quincy is the only type of being she would kill because she wanted too.

I. History

» History: EARLY DAYS
Life before the Academy:

Life At The Academy:

Life After The Academy:

I. Natural Abilities

» Natural Abilities:
Hakuda Savant: In spite of her small frame, Fuurinji has dedicated most of her training to her Hakuda skills, honing and refining them to a point beyond the average Shinigami of her strength and with a grace and finesse seen only in the speediest of Shinigami, though not the same speed as of yet. She still has awhile to go before she can truly claim to be among the greatest, but few could say she isn’t well on her way.

Instinctual Reactions: Due to her blindness, Fuurinji does not have the pleasure of seeing attacks and has instead honed and refined her reactions to be attuned to her hearing instead, allowing her to react to almost any attack that isn’t completely silent.

I. Racial Abilities

» Racial Abilities:
T’ai Chi - T'ai Chi is the art of the four elements and 'Yin Yang' combined together to create a spiritual, religious martial art. Focusing around balance in its entirety, a user of T'ai Chi is taught to follow what he thinks is right and to disallow any imbalance what-so-ever, and that includes to overexertion of yang or good, as too much yin can bring even more yin, or evil, to try to balance the problem. Instead, they are taught that a good equal in everything (including how much) is the way of life.

T'ai Chi's fighting style is all about fluidity of motion, rather than brute force. Acting around acute kicks and punches, the use of T'ai Chi is that of a self-defense martial art and holds no bounds in sports outside of bleeding over into movies. A mindset of a master T'ai Chi user is not to initiate fights, but if one was to require him or her, they would not try to smooth it over with monk ideals. Instead, T'ai Chi's main focal point is equality in everything, and that includes fighting, attitudes, everything.

Lastly, T'ai Chi's spiritual side allows for incredible feats from somebody with spiritual power, as the use of it was to allow all the elements to flow from the user. A user with spiritual energy could literally cause this but would require training to further achieve this.

Minor Yin - Minor Yin is the black circle within the major yang and is an evil that is born within a good action, emphasizing on the fact that every action has a consequence, good or bad. Minor Yin as an ability that coats the right hand with black energy, to which it enhances all touches, increasing the damage that hand causes. Minor Yin cannot be active whilst Minor Yang or Major Yang is, and vice-versa.

Minor Yang – Minor Yang is the white circle within the major yin and is a good that is born within bad actions, emphasizing that even the worst of intensions can have positive outcomes. Unlike the Minor Yin, which seeks to destroy, the Minor Yang seeks to protect and coats the users left hand with white energy, enhancing defensive techniques used with that hand. Minor Yang cannot be active whilst Minor Yin or Major Yin is, and vice-versa.

Tesshō: Tesshō is completely reliant on the user's physical strength without any use of spiritual, and because of that is powered simply by a thrust of the arm. By thrusting forwards or downwards with the flat of their palm, the user of Tesshō has the ability to inflict devastating levels of damage to anything it hits. Though due to the nature of this attack, it is very physically demanding of its user.

I. Zanpakutō

» Zanpakutō Name: Muraki Kitakaze (Capricious North Wind)

» Zanpakutō Spirit: Muraki Kitakaze's personality is split into two halves, half of it is peaceful and kind the type who wouldn't wish harm upon anyone, while the other half is violent and vengeful who would seek to seek revenge for every slight made against her. As a result her reactions can vary widely even within the same interaction. However it isn't often that Muraki Kitakaze herself appears, instead her direct appearance is tied to the balance within Fuurinji's soul between the desire for peace and the desire to seek revenge. Only while these two aspects are in harmony and neither dominate does Muraki Kitakaze appear. For all other times, two different spirits appear, Soyokaze and Kamikaze. While each of these seem to exhibit their own personality, they are, in fact, merely the extremes of the two aspects of Muraki Kitakaze's personality.

Soyokaze represents the peaceful and kind nature, taken to the extreme this means that not only would she not wish harm upon anyone but she wouldn't even be able to bring herself to defend herself if attacked. Gentle and Sophisticated almost to a fault, she acts as a Mother-figure to Fuurinji and looks out for her own personal wellbeing, disliking any and all forms of violence and choosing instead to attempt diplomatic approaches to all situations.

Kamikaze, on the other hand, represents the violent and vengeful aspect of Muraki Kitakaze. Taken to the extreme this means that even the smallest slight is handled with violence. Highly prone to intense fits of violence and rage, Kamikaze's personality runs as a stark contrast to Soyokaze. While she too looks out for the wellbeing of Fuurinji, rather than take a diplomatic approach she seeks to force her whims upon others, seeking to protect her Shinigami Master through any and all means necessary regardless of how much blood must be shed.

» Inner World: A singular large floating island, the center of which is stands an enormous archway. On a good day, the archway is filled with a vibrant green hue, and the surrounding landscape is that of a large but vibrant meadow filled with flowers and shrubs of all kinds, this would be Soyokaze’s doing, tending to the land and ensuring all is prosperous and protected. However, when Kamikaze is throwing a tantrum, the archway is filled with a dark brown and the surrounding landscape is a barren wasteland, devoid of any signs of life or protection.

» Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance: Fuurinji's sealed Zanpakuto appears as a mesmerizing blade crafted with the fusion of high-carbon steel and Damascus steel, showcasing a rippling pattern reminiscent of swirling winds etched intricately along the blades surface, with the mirror-finished steel captures a striking play of light. Its hilt, a blend of blue silk and white leather, offers a balance between elegance and resilience. The guard, a unique convergence of a swirling gust of wind and stylized wings, stands as a testament to the blade's duality. Encased in a sheath of dark lacquered wood, adorned with intricate carvings that depict dynamic wind currents, the design dances in harmony with the blade's motifs. A silk cord, alternating between blue and white, completes this masterpiece, embodying the essence of wind's ever-changing nature.

» Sealed Zanpakutō Power:
Kazeyomi (Wind Reading): Whilst sealed, her Zanpakuto’s give her but a single minor power, the ability to read the wind. While simplistic in design, this ability allows Fuurinji to ‘see’ that which interacts with the air around her as if she had true sight.

I. Shikai

» Shikai Release Phrase: Whirl and Howl (渦巻く咆哮する Uzumaku Hōkō Suru)

» Shikai Release Action: Clutching the singular sword by its hilt, Fuurinji elevates it above her head, the blade pointing downwards. With a swift motion, she swings the sword outward while invoking the release phrase "Whirl and Howl, Muraki Kamikaze." As her voice resonates, the surrounding wind begins to stir, coalescing into a miniature tornado encircling her. Soon after, the tempest disperses, unveiling a pair of distinctive gauntlets.

» Shikai Appearance: These twinned gauntlets sport three talon-like blades which feature curving, razor-sharp edges that glimmers in the light. Each of the claws is adorned with intricate engravings that depict swirling winds and storm clouds, reflecting the two spirits housed within.

» Shikai Abilities:
Kaze-te mono (Wind-touched Things) - Kaze-te mono allows Fuurinji an enhanced version of her Wind reading, feeding her information directly about any and all things that disturb the wind within 60 meters of her, ensuring that very little can move around her without her knowing. This does not ensure she can react to that which moves, only that she is aware of it.

Kaze Rōgoku (風牢獄) - Wind Prison: Fuurinji slams her gauntlets together, Astral Winds, Winds infused with her Reiatsu, erupt from them causing everything that moves within 30 meters to begin losing themselves within the Winds. While one can escape from these winds, they will find it extremely hard as their sense of direction fails them. Fuurinji utilizes her Reiatsu to disrupt the targets spatial awareness and directional comprehension, causing them to be unable to process information about their surroundings to make it near impossible to understand directions. One can counteract these effects through various methods including, but not limited to, Spiritual Sensing abilities, such as something akin to Kaze-to Mono, as well as their other senses which remain unaffected. Additionally, Kido or other unique skills that act to nullify this kind of detriment would also work such as Bakudo #58, Kakushitsuijaku, which the users senses and awareness. To be clear, this does not prevent them from moving and being able to simply move out of the area of effect, but it without aid it is extremely difficult if not impossible to do so on sheer luck. This has a duration of 4 posts.

I. Bankai

» Bankai Name: [What is your zanpakutō's release phrase?]

» Bankai Release Action: [Does your shinigami do any physical action to release their bankai? Feel free to remove this if not.]

» Bankai Appearance: [What does your shinigami's bankai look like?]

» Bankai Abilities: [What abilities does your shinigami gain in bankai?]

I. Equipment

» Equipment:
Reiatsu Limiter – Due to her lack of control over her Reiatsu, she has a special limiter to suppress the fluctuations of her Reiatsu. While this ensures the fluctuations stay stable, it also means her overall power is halved. This limiter takes the shape of an armband tightly affixed to her wrist. She is unlikely to remove this without permission from her superiors.

I. Skill Sheet

(To Find Out about what these skills are for, please READ THIS THREAD before you try doing anything to it)

General Skills
» Durability: Beginner
» Speed: Beginner
» Strength: Adept
» Martial Skill: Adept

Will Skills
» Willpower: Beginner
» Deduction: Beginner
» Focus: Adept

Shinigami Skills
» Hoho: Beginner
» Kidō: Beginner
» Zanjutsu: Adept
» Hakuda: Adept

I. Role Play Sample

» Roleplay Sample: As much as she refused to admit it... There was a reason she was forced to go to the Yonbantai after Aizen's departure. The thoughts of everything that had happened still lingered heavily in her mind, and it'd be impossible to hide the evidence of her crying from the stains that littered her face. While she wouldn't argue with those who were placed in charge of her healing, she had made several requests to fill out her room during her stay.

Within her room she had several pictures of her Squad, Komamura, and herself with him. While she couldn't see the pictures themselves, simply having them near gave her a sense of comfort. She also had some of the things from her office brought over, to help keep her mind occupied. She had a small desk that leaned over her bed, and a piece of parchment placed on top of it. She might've been injured, but she still had a job to do and she wasn't going to let her injuries stop her from doing that if she could.

She had several reports already filled out, as well as most of the paperwork she had remaining in her office done already. While she hadn't been awake for long, she also had nothing else to do other than cry, so she had all the time in the world really to get these things done.

Her ears perked up as she heard soft footsteps come to rest in front of her door, though her senses told her not to look. As his hand raised to knock, her voice would chime up to interrupt his action "Come on in." She said, not even looking up from the paperwork she was currently writing on.

However whether out of respect or something else, she quickly turned the desk away from the bed. Both removing it as a distraction and hiding its contents next to the wall. As she finished her head turned towards Nanashi as he undoubtedly entered, a soft smile on her face belying the pain she was truly in both physically and emotionally. "If I recall correctly, you were there weren't you?" Her voice was a bit softer now than when she'd invited him in, almost like she didn't want anyone except him to hear them.

While the vast majority of Shinigami would never know the truth of Komamura's death... Nearly every Captain would know, and whether they blamed her or not, she would know. Her hands clenched each other in her lap as her head tilted towards her legs, both of which were covered with a blanket but sported no less than a full brace from the knee down. While she didn't break any of her bones, the sharp turns and sudden stops she had done had taken a considerable toll on her legs.

END OF CHARACTER APPLICATION


Last edited by Lillian on Fri Jan 05, 2024 6:27 pm; edited 15 times in total (Reason for editing : Zanpakuto Change)
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Thu Feb 23, 2023 10:31 am
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Personality

Since the time of the Quincy Massacre, which happened around when she was first entering the Shinigami Academy,

The Quincy Massacre that is likely being referenced happened in the 1800s, which would have been before Fuurinji joined the Academy based on the age you have given her.

The current year is 2123, and the event that inspired Fuurinji to join the Gotei happened when she was 43 - so in 1912.

History

"As the mystery person spun around, the white spiky hair seemed to flow with the wind as he pulled his Zanpakuto from its sheath just as the red mass of energy vanished."

Is this intended to be Toshiro Hitsugaya? If so, do note that, based on the age you have made her, when Fuurinji was 43, Toshiro would have likely been a young child - if he existed at all - and thus unlikely to have accomplished the following feat.

"That's when she got her Zanpakuto... Or rather, Zanpakuto's. When she finally managed to commune with her Zanpakuto, its form shifted almost immediately."

Immediately attuning with a Zanpakuto, and then unlocking Shikai, demonstrates a level of innate power greater than any prodigy ever displayed in canon or onsite. Whilst player characters on PH can certainly be more innately impressive than the average Shinigami, there is still a limit to the level of prodigy that can be approved on character creation.

"As she advanced through the Shinigami Academy, she could notice the fluctuations in her own Reiatsu and learned to control it to some extent though she knew she'd never have full control over it so she often wore a limiter for herself simply to reduce the risk of her destroying something accidentally."

This limiter is never mentioned again in the app, so what does it do? This would probably fall under the equipment category and should be defined as such.

Also, if her power was so uncontrollable that she could randomly destroy something against her will, why was she allowed to go on patrols as an academy student? There appears to be no mention of any extra supervision that she would surely have required. Furthermore, a Shinigami who presented such a great danger to Soul Society by their inability to control their powers would likely end up in jail for their own safety and that of the realm.

Trying to make your character this powerful puts us in a very difficult position as this should be earned on-site rather than granted at character creation, so please reduce the intended power of this character accordingly and this should alleviate some of these concerns.

History redux

Is there intended to be more to this character's history? Currently, it only encompasses the first fifty or so years of her life. That leaves over two hundred years entirely vacant in the run-up to the present day, during which time Fuurinji surely has been doing something.

Is she now with the Gotei United? Has she left the Gotei to do her own thing? Feel free to ask if you need more information on our setting, but we need something to go on to approve this character.

Natural Abilities

Instinctual Reactions:

Fuurinji is never referenced as blind throughout her history. This feels like it would have been a significant detail to address, especially prior to her gaining the ability to perceive through her Zanpakuto.

When did this blindness happen? Was she always blind? If so, how did she pick out many details in her history such as the white hair of that Shinigami who saved her, or anything else about that exchange?

Zanpakutō

» Sealed Zanpakutō:

If her Zanpakutō is in a permanent state of release and always has been, how does she know what the Sealed Appearance of the blades are?

Equally, how does she know that any of the powers it displays are usable in a sealed state? And why does it have a Shikai release call or action if it is intended to always be in this state?

Kaze Rōgoku (風牢獄) - Wind Prison:

What is an Astral Wind? How is this different to the normal wind?

Every direction will look the same and the concept of up, down, left, or right, simply doesn’t apply.

What does that mean in this context? Does it erase sight, gravity, and any internal comprehension of direction?

---

Look, I've read this ability several times and cannot really envision what it does. Please clearly define how this ability works and how others might both perceive and counteract it, as it cannot be approved in its current state.

Skill Sheet

Given the focus on Zanjutsu in this application, bumping Zanjutsu skill up to Adept would be suitable. Equally, no mention is given to her Hoho so why would it be higher than other skills for an Academy graduate?

Role Play Sample

While the vast majority of Shinigami would never know the truth of Komamura's death...

This is never referenced in your history, so is this intended to be a part of PH history that has not been mentioned or are you writing the character in a different or alternate universe?

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Thu Feb 23, 2023 2:14 pm
Personality: I have increased her age by 100 years to compensate for this gap.

History:
White Spiky Hair - I have replaced this, it was originally intended to be Toshiro however, from the discussions it is apparent here that wouldn't be possible and so it has been changed to "their movement seemed to flow with the wind" instead to be a more 'generic' Shinigami.

Her Zanpakuto - I have changed so it no longer implies or says that she achieved both the name and Shikai instantly and now describes the process she went through to hear the voices from her Zanpakuto. Her Shikai is described later in her history as well as having a time frame that it took for her to achieve it. I also removed references to a Constant Release, as that was primarily due to other circumstances on previous sites which are not present here.

Limiter - Added to her equipment and changed the wording of "reduce the risk of her destroying something accidentally" to "reduce the fluctuations in her Reiatsu"

History Redux - I have added sections to explain her blindness, how she achieved her shikai, as well as what she has been up too during her time after the academy. This has got to be by far the longest history I've ever written so I hope it is consistent with the sites plot!


Instinctual Reflexes & Sealed Zanpakuto - Hopefully the revised history covers the concerns raised here.

Kaze Rogoku - Updated the Astral Winds section to clarify how they're different from standard wind, as well as revised the remainder to clearly define exactly what it does and how it is countered.

Skill Sheet - Updated Zanjutsu to adept, and hopefully the prior revisions clarify the rest.

Roleplay Sample - This was taken from a previous site and Komamura's death was something that happened on the actual site not in her backstory. If desired I can write a new one that is more in line with this specific site.
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Thu Mar 02, 2023 11:30 am
[adm] Apologies for the delay.


Personality

Since the time of the Quincy Massacre, which happened around when she was first entering the Shinigami Academy, her hatred for Quincy’s has never diminished. While it might seem obvious given that most all Shinigami feel this way, she holds a special place for them as she attributes the death of her mother to that of a Quincy.

The death of Fuurinji's mother is never mentioned in her backstory. It would be good to expand on this as, frankly, I would like to know the details of this.

Kaze Rōgoku (風牢獄)

Firstly, thank you for the further clarifications. Now, does this ability have a duration? A number of posts, for example, that it can be sustained for?

Skill Sheet

There is still no mention given of her skill at Hoho, so bump it down to Beginner.

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Thu Mar 02, 2023 1:28 pm
History - I have extended the end of her Life before the Academy to include a section that details her Mother's death (and how her Father and Sister survived), as well as a paragraph at the beginning of her Life at the Academy to detail how she personally reacted to the situation

Kaze Rōgoku (風牢獄) - Added a section at the end detailing a post duration limit. If this needs to be altered at all, please let me know. I felt given that it is a Shikai technique, but is also relatively powerful, I set it to 4 posts.

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Thu Mar 02, 2023 1:39 pm
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It was some time before she was finally accepted into the Academy to begin her training as a Shinigami, tragedy would rear its ugly head once more, the Quincies invaded Soul Society.

As far as I understand it, the Quincy massacre did not involve an invasion of Soul Society. That would have been during the time of Yhwach about 800 years before the massacre.

Kaze Rōgoku

Four posts is a fine duration, but I don't see that section on the app so ya might have lost it somewhere

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Thu Mar 02, 2023 2:18 pm
Ah, my apologies. My memory told me that both happened at the same time, I have amended this mistake and also included the 4 post duration in the Shikai technique as well.
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Resources: E

Comments/Notes: Good luck out there!

Tier: 4-4
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Thu Jan 04, 2024 8:59 pm
[mod]The Zanpakuto

So is going to need some tweaking as how it's currently characterized doesn't match up with how Zanpakuto function, so i'm going to ask you to tweak a few details:

1) The true number of spirits. The way you communicate it is pretty unclear; at first it sounds like it's one spirit with multiple personalities depending on it's state - which is fine, but then it pivots into sounding like these are distinct, separate spirits. If you were intending for it to sound like the acceptable former, just cut out the usage of plurals and implying of multiple spirits.

2) Multiple sealed Zanpakuto. There is only one canon example of a character who exhibits this, and it is Shunsui, who's at a completely different level compared to Fuurinji. Two sealed swords just wouldn't be possible for someone at her level.

You're free to keep it at two blades in Shikai, but do change the sealed sword's description to be a singular weapon.[/mod]
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