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[Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Tue Aug 01, 2023 5:28 pm
THE SHINIGAMI APPLICATION
I. Basic Information
» Name: Ranma Gekiretsu (激烈 欄間, Gekiretsu Ranma)
» Alias: Retsu, Cat-Eyes
» Age: 90
» Gender: Male
» Association: Gotei United/Eighth Division
» Appearance Written: Ranma sports a heights of 5’9’’, with a pale but fit build brought forth by well-toned musculature. His hair is flat, crow-black, and reaches down to his neck with flat, rectangular bangs over his heterochromatic eyes – a gold-yellow right eye and a jade-green left eye. On top of his Shinigami uniform, he also wears white bandages that cover his entire mouth and lower jaw, with ends flapping in the wind akin to a thin scarf.
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I. Personality
» Personality: Ranma is a curious creature. Events and situations (happening outside of his home district) immediately pique his interest and explorer spirit, demanding him to see things happen with his own eyes. This makes him quite carefree, although it may be a coping mechanism or an excuse to escape the lower slums where he came from as much as possible.
He can also come off as… a bit of a hedonist. Despite coming off as a quiet and serious guy, he enjoys going about life in a pleasurable way, and he will not hesitate to take a nap right after lessons, enjoy a good drink right after getting scolded for dumb shit, or play thumb-o-war with others when things get rough and you just need to unwind. He sees it as a way to keep his mind intact, but he may also just possess a desire to make life easy in spite of his efforts – y’know, so that all the training he undergoes won’t stress him the hell out!
He prefers to feign opposition to the idea of enjoying a fight as a Shinigami or as a fistbrawler, but the truth is that the street life of the Rukongai’s 71st District roughed him up and made him into a ferocious warrior. It even reflects in the meaning of his name, which just goes to show what his parents and entire family line expected of him. At a constant, internal dilemma with that aspect of his life, he can still be convinced to let loose once in a while when faced by a wonderful challenger.
» Likes: Drinks (Sweet And/Or Alcoholic), Naps, Traveling, Romance
» Dislikes: Parents, His District, Fighting (Allegedly), Any blades approaching his face.
I. History
» History: Born in the 71st District of the Rukongai spelled trials and tribulations for young Ranma. Both of his parents were accustomed to using violence and fending for themselves in order to fare in these areas, but in return, Ranma missed many opportunities to obtain valuable lessons and healthy experience as a child… or at least, that would’ve been the case if not for
his aunt and uncle taking better care of him.
However, with their later death at the hands of troublemakers, Ranma's blood ran cold and turned him into a vengeful blood-drawer. He still remembers the sensation of his heart beating in his fists after bashing knuckles into their skulls after what had been done to his aunt and uncle. The scenery was even witnessed by others, who referred to the young boy as 'Vengeful Retsu' from that day on.
Ranma began to focus more and more on growing a backbone from that day on, so that he wouldn't die untimely in these districts - this meant becoming a better fighter, whether he wanted to or not. His real parents be damned, he'd already lost those who stepped up, thus making him feel like an orphan.
However, despite making it through the rough times with his bare hands to fend off any obstacles, an incident occurred one day when he returned back home to find a group of hoodlums and punks waiting to jump the Vengeful Retsu after what he had done to one of their friends. While Ranma had grown to be a shrewd street fighter, he couldn’t fare well against multiple opponents at the same time. He was pushed to a corner, got bruised and battered until half of his face was blistered, but then a punk had shouted to the others that they should flee the area immediately, leaving Ranma confused as to why they’d leave the fight before they’d finished him off or something.
He ran after them with whatever strength he had left, a feat that he’d come to regret until the end of time. He found the punks being apprehended by a Shinigami, and Ranma’s anger at the punks was suddenly aimed towards the newcomer, who saw the bruised boy attempt to attack. This had apparently been intimidating enough to illicit an attack from the Shinigami present - a swordsman’s Zanpakutō in a flash cut through the air, and as if by a stroke of luck, Ranma raised his hands up to each side of his face and grabbed a source of sharp, burning pain that traveled between his palms and… his cheeks. The sides of his lips. The damage was done.
The Shinigami quickly recollected themselves and regretted attacking out of the blue, to which Ranma’s injured form was taken away from the District. He remembered being taken to the Squad 4 Barracks and being treated of a slash that nearly carved into the root between his brain and spine, almost rendering him immobile… but if you were to ask him today, he’d tell that the way from his District to their Barracks felt like it took years. As if the injury had temporarily distorted his perception of reality.
Regardless, his Shinigami prowess proved undeniable when he made a nearly full recovery – strangely enough, the scar remained on his face and granted him an eerie ‘grin’. To avoid drawing too much attention to it, he borrowed bandages from Squad 4 to cover his mouth with, resulting in the recognizable look that he carries today. And despite the trauma it must’ve sown in him… meeting the Squad and the other Shinigami made him desire to join their ranks. After all, they did not just fend for themselves and injure others, and their lives… felt much more like they were in control. His injury might’ve just as well have been a direct product of his environment, given the circumstances.
Therefore, he wasted no time in convincing the same Shinigami who injured him to help him enroll in the Shino Academy. Because of his past, the Academy and the teachings about Shinigami and their duties was a whole new world to him, igniting a lust for seeing more of the Soul Society beyond his home in the 71st District. Without even informing his parents, he began learning about Zanpakutō, the sort of soul-purifying blade that also included the one that scarred his face. At one point, he was in the process of evolving his Asauchi into own Zanpakutō and unlock its Shikai, but that was when silly issues began tearing away at his wet gravel clump called 'patience' and 'concentration'...
His Zanpakutō Spirit was a very shy one. Upon obtaining his Zanpakutō, Ranma was unable to even get a sound out of his Spirit for 1 year. He spent plenty of time learning swordsmanship from his teachers, thinking that it would prompt its Spirit to poke its head out and say 'hello' or something, but for 1 whole year of swinging his Zanpakutō up and down, left and right, here and there with growth, Ranma simply heard nothing from it.
At the end of the first year, he heard a grunt - a sharp, displeased grunt coming from within his Zanpakutō. It was a late evening at the Academy, and that was the first reaction he ever got out of its Spirit. Despite it only being a grunt, Ranma knew that it came from whoever embodied the Zanpakutō. Upon leaving the Academy, Ranma quickly came to realize that people and objects were all frozen still, as if all of time had paused - he was no longer in the real Soul Society, but inside of his Zanpakutō Spirit's Inner World... and the craziest part of this story is that Ranma felt like he spent another year to find a person who was moving. One, whole year of wandering a replica of the Soul Society, lost beyond words and way, pushed to nigh insanity with how lonely he felt.
And there he was. A male clad in long, white robes, with long hair of the same lack of pigment. The entity was crouching, rocking his head from side to side - finally, a moving person! Interaction was possible once again! Ranma darted towards the person to say something, anything, to ask what the hell happened to himself and why he hadn't starved or thirsted to death yet. Yet, before Ranma could finish his first word, the white-clad dude teleported away from him... leaving Ranma to boil in anger.
This shit went on for another year. Ranma's patience and focus was completely malleable, constantly finding the teleporting asshole and trying to reach out to him, to ask if he was the Zanpakutō Spirit that Ranma had been looking for all along. And this bastard kept teleporting away as soon as Ranma got close enough to talk to him... but at the end of the third year of Ranma's ridiculous Zanpakutō discovery course, the Spirit finally caved in and decided to end Ranma's nightmare. And thus, a singular name was uttered to the Shinigami:
"Hōkamaru-"
And Ranma was back at the Academy, late evening, still wielding his Zanpakutō with shaking hands. What had occurred? What happened to those three years? Had it really been three years, or was he just making stuff up due to the trauma of such a dream-like state of madness? Either way, getting out of that Inner World meant that Ranma's mental burdens were far lesser than they should've been - moving around the fake Soul Society did allow him to see many things without interruption, giving him a great sense of detail, but he could not focus or endure long, tedious tasks as well as he could before. Still, even so, intended distractions - such as playing with dice or drinking something - kept him going in spite of all that.
When it came to further practice over his last years in the Academy, Ranma realized that he fell behind in the arts of Shunpo. Even today, he groans at his slow Shunpo and how it always ended up slower than the rest of his class. What saved him from embarrassment was his excellence in Zanjutsu following the slow-burning relationship he nurtured with his Zanpakutō - he came to realize just what its ability was, and he found that he was good at fumbling around with it until certain techniques were born. On top of that, he had no problems with Kidō and considered joining the Second Division later due to this new school of Shinigami combat arts, but he changed his mind later.
After just managing to graduate from Shino Academy, he decided to seek further training in swordsmanship – Shunpo and other Hohō techniques were left in the back of his mind, but his Zanjutsu skills and swordsmanship were further sharpened under the same Shinigami who injured him long ago. His new mentor took him on missions to combat Hollows in the World of the Living, introducing Ranma to the direct line of work that many Shinigami in the front fields performed. His mentor was the one who suggested that he joined the Eighth Division due to the variant, vast potential of his Shikai, as well as his strong desire to move between places a lot and be available as aid wherever it was needed. Ranma wholeheartedly agreed - exploration and fun made him forget the headaches from his Zanpakutō training, but this often got him into trouble with Hollows and other enemies later on. He'd fought plenty of Hollows over the years in the Division, many getting a bit too close for comfort due to his careless nature, which slowly began honing his swordsmanship and Zanjutsu skills even further. Plenty of field experience made the difference, especially when playing with death-
About that... one of such events accidently gave birth to his Zanjutsu technique 'Fujikohozen no Gokui', which was a result of subconsciously releasing his Shikai when he thought he was about to get clawed in the face. It lasted so quickly, but he could wait for a shorter time to use it again, which prompted him to evade attacks from that Hollow and future ones over and over again until he got the hang of it. Moving objects, moving enemies, claws and maws, hammers and nails approaching his face...
He got injured in a lot of his missions during that 'training', despite minimizing the damage through certain Kidō spells that he had learned from the Shino Academy, so the Second Division have heard of him by now. However, this also doubled as a means of strengthening his endurance, since he couldn't always count on his speed to keep him safe - again, he was notably slower than the typical Shinigami, so might as well grow rock skin. After mastering his new Zanjutsu technique, he did tone it down with stalling time and all that, but...
Jumping into death's grip along with a pack of Hollows always sounded better than playing hide-and-seek with Hōkamaru for a year again. Thankfully, he completed his job regardless, but he did get a few scars as a result of his recklessness - including a nasty star-shaped scar on his chest as a result of slipping just once. The other wounds were recovered fully, thanks to the helpful members of the Second Division.
He'd been using his duty as Shinigami to journey around, sort of using the excuse of purifying Hollows to explore both the World of the Living and wherever else he could get his feet to land on. Shockingly enough, he never returned to his parents back in the 71st District... but that might change soon.
I. Natural Abilities
» Natural Abilities:
Above-Average Strength:
Brawling and fighting other kids and later adults in the further districts of the Rukongai over many years has honed Ranma's bruised and battered body, allowing it to recover from all that pain in exchange for strengthened muscles. Further battles against Hollows has furthered this development - especially when he decided to practice by dodging and getting himself injured multiple times against those Hollows. Now, the lad can take a lot of punishment and deliver strong moves himself, revealed by his well-toned muscles.
Excellent Swordsmanship:
As a byproduct of trying to awaken his Zanpakutō for 1 year, Ranma's skill with swinging his blade leapt up - this gave him an interest in honing it further throughout his studies in the Shino Academy. Afterwards, his skills began complementing his Zanjutsus, and his growing habits for going on the offense were meant to compensate for his lack of high speed.
I. Racial Abilities
» Racial Abilities:
Below-Average Hohō Skills:
Ranma's skill with Shunpo is rarely relied on in combat due to being visibly slower than those of many other Shinigami. The only times he can rely on it to grant him an edge is by using it within a range of 3 meters, but anything beyond that would render his Shunpo too slow to prove useful in combat, and any Shinigami would be able to see his momentum. Despite that, there are still rare times where it can be used in spite of its limitations.
Zanjutsu Specialist:
To accommodate for his lacking Shunpo skills, Ranma spent many years in the Academy as well as afterwards to grow closer (as ridiculously hard as it may have been) to his Zanpakutō, figure out what its ability entailed, and develop a handful Zanjutsus to make more and smarter use of its potential. Because of the clear limitations that his Zanpakutō holds in its Shikai form, Ranma's dedicated a lot of time to inventing a handful Zanjutsus with the purpose of 'bypassing' his Shikai's limitations in exchange for range of effect:
These are the current Zanjutsus that Ranma has created - modeling the space that Hōkamaru can slow down time within is the basis for all of Ranma's Zanjutsus, which he's focused on honing and mastering more than anything else.
Kido Practitioner:
As a way to compensate a little more for his lack of speed, Ranma has practiced a handful defensive Kido techniques to amplify his own defenses. If speed lets him down, he can still summon constructs of high durability or similar Kido abilities that allow him to tank attacks from enemies.
I. Zanpakutō
» Zanpakutō Name: 放歌丸, Hōkamaru (Loud Singer)
» Zanpakutō Spirit:
This Zanpakutō Spirit is not very fond of noise. This makes him difficult to talk to, appearing uninviting and unfriendly. He's uttered the fewest words in his entire existence, one of which being the first word he ever said to his wielder - his name. Hōkamaru.
But what comes off as a very dismissive attitude is actually a desire to be closer to his wielder, but in a special, silent way. To be able to know each other to the point of reading each other's thoughts and intentions - that should be the ideal bond between a Zanpakutō Spirit and its wielder. After all, Hōkamaru acknowledges that he came to be because of Ranma, and Ranma desires close bonds and the company of people who know him well. Words are not needed, as much as it grinds the Shinigami's gears.
» Inner World:
Hōkamaru's inner world is a replica of the entire Soul Society, along with Shinigami and residents present... but every person in the Inner World is completely still, frozen in time. Not a sound is emitting from them, not a tone can be heard. Hōkamaru's ideal world where everybody's quiet.
» Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance:
» Sealed Zanpakutō Power: When not released, the Zanpakutō is capable of slowing down time around Ranma himself, delaying his movements only for a short moment. However, his awareness and thought process is unaffected by this, and while quite useless in combat, Ranma has found entertaining uses in this ability.
I. Shikai
» Shikai Release Phrase: Slow Down, Hōkamaru!
» Shikai Release Action: Ranma unsheathes his Zanpakutō and holds the blade over his shoulder, preparing an overhead strike. That's when his Zanpakutō morphs into its Shikai.
» Shikai Appearance:
The blade, free of doubt, now bends once as its length extends from a short handle, the blade itself bending to take the shape of a large khopesh. One side of the blade has purple, glowing words engraved:
कसानाकल्प
These words are fully lit when the Shikai's ability is fully available. Once used, the light is drained like a tank from the phrase, only slowly filling up during the cooldown of the Shikai's ability.
» Shikai Abilities: Ranma gains the ability to emit a visible, bluish sphere out from and around his Zanpakutō. The sphere can reach a radius of max 50 meters. Its Reiryoku is more than detectable by other Shinigami, Hollows and other enemies with the ability to sense such things.
Time moves much slower within the sphere, causing any objects, people and/or other creatures inside of it to move in slow-motion if inside the sphere too. Only Ranma himself moves normally within his Shikai's effect, resulting in him moving much 'faster' than his targets.
However, fast enemies are able to make up for the slowdown and can even cause the Shikai's sphere to bend away from them if they move much faster than Ranma himself. If anticipating the Shikai, very strong or fast opponents can even break the sphere with high strength or speed exerted, making it more useful if released as a surprise. Ranma's own conditions affect just how potent the slowdown is, too - an injured Ranma performing Shikai would make the sphere weaker and easier to break compared to that of a prime Ranma. On top of that, the sphere only lasts for 1 post (unless shrunk to the Zanpakutō's own size to accomodate for Zanjutsus). After reaching its duration, it needs a cooldown of 3 posts before it can be released again.
- Hōkamaru's Zanjutsus:
- 淫雨, Inu (Prolonged Rain Which Damages Crops):
A new Zanjutsu technique that requires Shikai to be used. The blue area released from Hōkamaru's Shikai now has the size of the Zanpakutō itself - akin to an aura surrounding the blade - before Ranma slashes an enemy with it. The injury caused by this appears to manifest extremely slowly, extending the pain that the target receives and delaying any healing on the injury for up to 3 posts. Ranma can willingly cancel the technique himself prematurely to release the remaining extent of the damage he's caused with his Zanpakutō. Cooldown is the same as the duration of the effect, which maxes out at 3 posts.
米, Yone (88-Year Old Rice):
Another Zanjutsu technique that requires Shikai to be used. Ranma slashes into the air, releasing a blue wave that reaches no longer than 50 meters from him. When hitting something, the wave causes the object to be affected by the slowmotion space born from the Shikai's ability for 2 posts. The technique is primarily used to slow down a single target instead of a wide area around Ranma. The technique has a cooldown of 3 post.
刹那, Setsuna (Ksana):
A very weird Zanjutsu requiring Shikai to be used. The effects of his Shikai centers and concentrates solely around the blade during a swing, causing it to brake in its tracks during a strike for a brief moment. Because that this effect doesn't affect the handle or Ranma himself, by struggling to swing it faster, a lot of momentum and potential energy is built up in the Zanpakutō. Right after the effect ends, the blade's swung at an incredibly high speed, capable of dealing a lot more damage than before. Since this power is not normally executed by the wielder, he has to recover for 1 post before using this technique again. It's useful for surprise boosts in striking power during clashes.
劫, Kō (Kalpa):
By focusing his Shikai's ability upon a single, offensive Hadō spell - mostly Shakkahō - the wielder slashes on the slowed-down spell, causing rifts to appear from his Zanpakutō's strikes. Once the slowdown is undone, either in the same post or in the next, the spell explodes into energy slashes made from scattering the power of the original Hadō spell, which can travel faster and cover a wider area than the spell was originally capable of in exchange for a lower power in each slash. This also drains his Shikai's ability, taking 1 post afterwards before he can try it again.
I. Equipment
» Equipment: Ranma carries a wooden gourd on his hip at all times, so that he can have some refreshment during his missions.
I. Skill Sheet
General Skills
» Durability: B
» Speed: D
» Strength: D
» Soul: C
Will Skills
» Willpower: Adept
» Deduction: Beginner
» Focus: Adept
Shinigami Skills
» Hoho: Beginner
» Kidō: Advanced
» Zanjutsu: Advanced
» Hakuda: Beginner
I. Role Play Sample
» Roleplay Sample: Link to Previous RP Sample (check edited note at the bottom :3)
- RP Sample:
- Great, there were guards right outside of the temple now. Should he just try and plead his case to them? Given by the previous guards’ reactions, that’d just make him flee to another temple – he didn’t want to be a criminal in his own, damn country! There had to be some sort of impostor running around, killing in his name… or something.
“The guards mentioned Gesshoku… hey, Kyuken, you think there are other swords out there like this one?”
Kyuken had been quiet up until now, but the samurai’s ghost was filled with dread and worry as well. When one’s homeland was in turmoil, jokes could seldom be shared between long-acquainted comrades. “No… not that I’d know. I never came across Gesshoku, believe it or not – I did come across a special, blue katana. A double-edged sword, too, but its wielder broke it himself…”
“So no other swords like this one?”
“Maybe it was forged recently. With the purpose of framing you, the current wielder of Gesshoku,” Kyuken tried to weave inexistent pieces together to the best of his ability, “Or we’re dealing with a foreigner. Either way… you’re wasting your time in here, Mura. Are you sure they’ll show up?”
“Tsukimi, Kyuken. The festival starts tonight, and this is Minazawa’s most revered temple. I just need to figure out how to convince those Samurai…”
And then, the bell rang. A bell the size of the moon itself, its ringing sound traveling through space, shattering the air and his perception of reality for a slight moment, a blur, a blitz, a ringing tone of impending danger arriving here in Minazawa. And he felt it before he could sense the magical presence… someone powerful. Exceptionally powerful… and it was right outside of the temple gate!
He slammed the gates open, damn if the guards would spot him! Damn if his country would continue lynching him for a crime he never committed, that presence felt familiar! Just for a moment, it felt like the presence of a filthy liar who once called herself worthy of worship, a witch disguised as human. And the view of Midijins flying in the air was triggering.
This was his people… his beloved land. His emotions took over completely, with growing vegetation spreading all over the outline of the main street running down from the temple front. Vines and branches stretched in all directions, grabbing hold of people in the air and sending them to the ground in safety. Some were badly injured by the impact of the perpetrator’s spell, and many had died instantly, but some were rescued by Mura’s action.
Should the long-haired swordswoman clad in a wide, white haori turn around, she’d spot him standing by the temple gate, glaring down with intensity as bushes began growing around the outline of the street. From these bushes, red lotus flowers pushed out from the greenery and began to slowly open themselves. But a look at her… she was not who Mura feared for a split second. Nay, this made things worse.
This world… was starting to catch a few too many monsters lately.
An orange haori over a black gi, shinobi leggings, sandals, a katana sheathed on his hip, a katana sheathed on his back, and a red stone dagger tied to the front of his midsection. His left arm was metallic, inorganic but moving. Magic power bubbling in the air around him, but something more than that hiding deep within his skin and bones.
She held a blood-red blade. She was the one. “So you’re the one who’s done all of this,” he simply spoke in a raspy, deep voice, not needing to go into detail as people like her knew what they had done, “A lot of precious people have died untimely because of you… no, who am I talking to? Surely the likes of you won’t listen.”
It was strange. Visions of the old Onmyōryō passed by his face, and blood could be tasted in his mouth. Yet, this time, things would be different. No more, simply, no more. The vines and branches who had saved people a moment before now began coiling closer and closer towards the entity with the bloodied blade.
“… But you will hear this. Bear your claws again-“ Kyuken’s voice, face and anger began merging with Mura’s, like two silhouettes overlapping each other, “-and I’ll slash every cell in your body, turn you to powder, and light you aflame- I dare you. Draw. Your. Blade.”
END OF CHARACTER APPLICATION
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Mon Aug 07, 2023 7:44 am
[adm]
While PH does encourage more free-flowing powersets that allow for in the moment creation rather than a rigid list of techniques, time control is an ability which, by its nature, requires more rigid definitions. A broadly-defined ability to utilize techniques involving time control should be refined into specific techniques given the potential extreme strength of such a powerset.Zanjutsu Expert
The mechanical effect of this slowing isn't quite established in clear enough terms for it to be approvable. The duration of the release increasing based on a smaller area of effect is conceptually interesting, but as it stands it isn't defined in a way that it could be approved. Additionally, durations on PH for powers are handled by post count, rather than by actual time, though you can still include time durations for the sake of flavor.Shikai
This release has similar issues to the shikai, as its abilities are fairly broad while not being sufficiently outlined mechanically. As it's currently written, the bankai is a functionally absolute ability if one is caught within the sphere, and absolutes are not approvable.Bankai
His Advanced Durability and Strength, and Elite Zanjutsu, are not currently sufficiently justified based on the character's history. Please bear in mind that Elite Zanjutsu, in particular, represents a level of mastery on par with canon captains such as Shunsui and Byakuya. If you would like the character to have these exceptionally high skills, I would encourage you to expand on his history in the time after he enrolled in Shino Academy and as a Shinigami, in order to better establish what he has done to develop skills of this caliber.[/adm]Skills
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Mon Aug 07, 2023 11:20 am
Zanjutsu Expert
- Brought 3 defined Zanjutsu techniques that Ranma has access to now.
Shikai
- Not sure if satisfactory, but tried to clarify how it works and also include post counts instead of seconds.
Bankai
- Removed Bankai. I wanna unlock it later through plotz >:3
Skills
- Bumped down Skill Level in Zanjutsu to Advanced, and Strength to Adept, and fleshed out Ranma's training some more - including training under the skull-injuring Shinigami to get better at swordsmanship and Zanjutsu. Also swapped Skill Levels between Hakuda and Martial Skill (since swordsmanship likely belongs under the latter).
- Brought 3 defined Zanjutsu techniques that Ranma has access to now.
Shikai
- Not sure if satisfactory, but tried to clarify how it works and also include post counts instead of seconds.
Bankai
- Removed Bankai. I wanna unlock it later through plotz >:3
Skills
- Bumped down Skill Level in Zanjutsu to Advanced, and Strength to Adept, and fleshed out Ranma's training some more - including training under the skull-injuring Shinigami to get better at swordsmanship and Zanjutsu. Also swapped Skill Levels between Hakuda and Martial Skill (since swordsmanship likely belongs under the latter).
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Wed Aug 09, 2023 6:58 am
[mod]Hōkamaru's Zanjutsu
These should all be moved down to be under his shikai, due to being aspects of his zanapakuto's ability. Rather than a sword technique, such as the canon examples of Senmaioroshi or Nadegiri which doesn't rely on the zanpakuto's abilities. It will also make it easier since these techniques all adhere to the general rules of his shikai's ability, so if they are formatted underneath the ability then it's more clear.
淫雨, Inu (Prolonged Rain Which Damages Crops)
Scrap the anti-heal and just say that healing is delayed for the length of the effect since the wound hasn't formed until the technique is complete so the body wouldn't respond until that time. Cooldown should be as long as the wound takes to form, CD applied after conclusion of the duration, which gives you up to three posts of delaying a person's regeneration, powerful enough in its own right for some matchups.
米, Yone (88-Year Old Rice)
For the sake of simplicity, please have it extend to affect whatever it hits rather than be a set space since this could have weird interactions which would be more difficult to resolve if issues arised, to clarify extending to affect would be like "hitting a building" so it extends over the entire structure of the building but not the space or individual furniture inside which would be kind of punishing if he missed. 0.5m sphere if it didn't hit anything before 50m.
I do not know how long this effect lasts for. I recommend one to two posts since that's what the implication is that it doesn't last long by your cool-down but you also mention that his techniques last longer than his shikai's basic ability due to being smaller.
The technique should have a greater cooldown than one post.
» Shikai: Ranma gains the ability to emit a bluish sphere out from and around his Zanpakutō, not visible with the naked eye. The sphere can reach a radius of max 50 meters. Its Reiryoku is more than detectable by other Shinigami, Hollows and other enemies with the ability to sense such things.
I don't know if this blue energy being invisible to the naked eye is also invisible through his other techniques, I'm going to assume yes as derivatives of his shikai though. I'd prefer if you kept the bluish hue as an aesthetic effect but also due to the fact that this zanpakuto controls time which is already quite potent conceptually so having a few telegraphs wouldn't hurt.
Slow motion is fine to use as the metric here rather than something specific, relative to an average person though since supernatural individuals can perceive things differently especially if they have high speed themselves and you've already outlined high speed as being a means to interfere with the zanpakuto's ability.
» Durability: I'm not seeing enough here to justify why he would be able to sustain damage equal to the metric our skill sheets provide for this level. Shinigami do have innate survivability so it's likely he could sustain that damage without dying immediately but as far as enduring it I am a bit more hesitant there. [/mod]
These should all be moved down to be under his shikai, due to being aspects of his zanapakuto's ability. Rather than a sword technique, such as the canon examples of Senmaioroshi or Nadegiri which doesn't rely on the zanpakuto's abilities. It will also make it easier since these techniques all adhere to the general rules of his shikai's ability, so if they are formatted underneath the ability then it's more clear.
淫雨, Inu (Prolonged Rain Which Damages Crops)
Scrap the anti-heal and just say that healing is delayed for the length of the effect since the wound hasn't formed until the technique is complete so the body wouldn't respond until that time. Cooldown should be as long as the wound takes to form, CD applied after conclusion of the duration, which gives you up to three posts of delaying a person's regeneration, powerful enough in its own right for some matchups.
米, Yone (88-Year Old Rice)
For the sake of simplicity, please have it extend to affect whatever it hits rather than be a set space since this could have weird interactions which would be more difficult to resolve if issues arised, to clarify extending to affect would be like "hitting a building" so it extends over the entire structure of the building but not the space or individual furniture inside which would be kind of punishing if he missed. 0.5m sphere if it didn't hit anything before 50m.
I do not know how long this effect lasts for. I recommend one to two posts since that's what the implication is that it doesn't last long by your cool-down but you also mention that his techniques last longer than his shikai's basic ability due to being smaller.
The technique should have a greater cooldown than one post.
Could you clarify this? Slowing himself down would make it take longer, no? It reads like this is meant to speed him up because he's waiting for something to happen so it goes faster.» Sealed Zanpakutō Power: When not released, Ranma is able to use a bit of his Zanpakutō's power - specifically its Shikai - to slow down time... on himself. This aids in waiting for things that might take forever to commence, and it can be a good way to feign meditating.
» Shikai: Ranma gains the ability to emit a bluish sphere out from and around his Zanpakutō, not visible with the naked eye. The sphere can reach a radius of max 50 meters. Its Reiryoku is more than detectable by other Shinigami, Hollows and other enemies with the ability to sense such things.
I don't know if this blue energy being invisible to the naked eye is also invisible through his other techniques, I'm going to assume yes as derivatives of his shikai though. I'd prefer if you kept the bluish hue as an aesthetic effect but also due to the fact that this zanpakuto controls time which is already quite potent conceptually so having a few telegraphs wouldn't hurt.
Slow motion is fine to use as the metric here rather than something specific, relative to an average person though since supernatural individuals can perceive things differently especially if they have high speed themselves and you've already outlined high speed as being a means to interfere with the zanpakuto's ability.
» Durability: I'm not seeing enough here to justify why he would be able to sustain damage equal to the metric our skill sheets provide for this level. Shinigami do have innate survivability so it's likely he could sustain that damage without dying immediately but as far as enduring it I am a bit more hesitant there. [/mod]
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Wed Aug 09, 2023 8:34 am
Edits made. All Zanjutsus have a cooldown of 3 posts (including Inu's max duration output). Shikai's edited, Inu only delays wounds now, Yone is stated to just affect the object it hits (and lasts 2 posts), and Sealed Zanpakuto ability is also edited - it basically slows Ranma himself down, as in he moves in slowmotion now but without his mind being affected. Therefore, he sees everything else moving normally, but his body is much slower than his mind commands it to be... if that makes more sense. I hope I explained it well o-o
Also Durability got bonked to Adept instead.
Also Durability got bonked to Adept instead.
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Wed Aug 09, 2023 8:40 am
[mod]Approved.
» Spirit Class: 7
Hazard Ratings
» Power: C
» Influence: D
» Resources: E
» Overall: D[/mod]
» Spirit Class: 7
Hazard Ratings
» Power: C
» Influence: D
» Resources: E
» Overall: D[/mod]
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Fri Aug 02, 2024 2:59 pm
Reason for editing - Upgrade approved:
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25162-nice-sword-ya-got-there-more-an-update-than-an-upgrade
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25162-nice-sword-ya-got-there-more-an-update-than-an-upgrade
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Wed Aug 14, 2024 9:15 am
Reason for editing - Upgrade approved (new General Skills change):
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25243-ranma-s-mura-s-attribute-updates
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25243-ranma-s-mura-s-attribute-updates
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Sun Oct 06, 2024 4:12 pm
Reason for editing - Upgrade approved (Spirit Class 6 & Advanced Kidō):
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25445-ranma-s-kido-upgrade#188645
EDIT: adding the new General Skill point to Soul, bumping it up to C
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25445-ranma-s-kido-upgrade#188645
EDIT: adding the new General Skill point to Soul, bumping it up to C
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Re: [Spirit Class 6] Ranma Gekiretsu
Tue Nov 26, 2024 8:00 am
Reason for editing - collective updates on characters:
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25732-character-evaluations
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t25732-character-evaluations
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