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Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:26 am
Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [-]
  • History is of appropriate length [-]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Comments/Notes: Okay! I just have a few things to ask for your changes : first, you're gonna need to remove all notes of a shikai, since shinigami's can't start with it. You're going to have to get your shikai approved when you are of a right tier.

Second, your personality it short : it needs ten sentences!

Also, History needs around 2 paragraphs : try to describe his life and how he died.

If you need help, feel free to ask me! I'll do your will sheet when you're done x3
Tier: Will be given when fixes are made!

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Mon Mar 26, 2012 9:20 pm
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I'm just gonna chime in and say that Aivee is a bit misinformed. You can keep the Shikai in there as long as it's locked and not used until your character actually learns it. As for unlocking a Shiaki? It's usually done a tier-by-tier bases. Meaning, whenever you reach 2-3 is when you can use your Shikai. SOMETIMES, it can even be 3-1+ in VARYING circumstances. The same applies to Bankai as most learn it at 1-3, but sometimes 2-1+ characters have learned it.


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Mon Mar 26, 2012 9:24 pm


And seeing as he fixed everything that was asked? I'll approve ya' with 4-3


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Sat May 19, 2012 4:59 am
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Alright, good try, but you need some small fixes, as well as just better organization in general... not gonna lie, it's kinda sloppy. However, the theories seem alright. So, here's the stuff:

The range of Redds shikai ability extends to one mile in each direction and despite distance, if one is in range of this ability it is not diluted, but once somone takes one step out of the 1 mile radius their senses return to normal.


That's a bit much for a shikai ability; remember, it's roughly 50% of your sword's total power.

, at first this can be heard but eventually all hearing fades. This shikai ability disrupts ones ability to hear, keep balance, and see. It basically dilutes most of your senses.

So does the ability stop compounding on the opponent once they stop hearing it, or just at whatever level it is able to reduce the opponent's hearing?

n addition to Redd's sensory disability each of the 6 holes that are in his zanpaktou hold a single stream of web that is coated in rieatsu, this web can reach up to a distant of one mile, the fact that this is coated in Redd's reiatsu and is almost impossible to break unless streatched to its full length of about half a mile.

Again, a mile is a bit much for 6 independant threads for a shikai. And while I can definitely see the threads being highly durable, "Almost Impossible" seems, again, a bit much for a shikai. So, just needs a small downgrade, for the most part

ONTO BANKAI~

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Redd's shikai has essentially the same abilities as his bankai but intensified. Hearing is completeley gone and sight is 30% at best [/qoute]

Need to take into account that not everyone is the same; some people may be able to use their energy, for example, to clear up negative effects like this; or simply readjusting their own sense of hearing. Either way, you should probably have a variable amount that differs based on the opponent, instead of a "Blanket prevent'

n each of Redds extra appendages, it is essentially two flat swords placed together using the same thread like ability in his secondary shikai is how they are connected,

...Um... secondary... shikai...?

oot mark (Being at the end i.e. the farthest away from him.
each of these joint ar capable of spinning at speeds of upwards of 35 mph, when this happens Redds shikai ability is activated, each of Redd's shikai legson ly has the draw back of one ( meaning each banaki leg spinning can be activated 4 times, but each effect only lasts one post) not includeing the post stateing that this ability has been activated. The sensory disability) effect is now selective allowing redd to exclude his allies from the effects of this move
Hearing is now un-avoidably utterly gone when sensory disability is activated.
sight is now reduced to 50% (depending on tier and resistance level )
and sense of balance is unaffected

Could you possibly put this into clearer terms...? And also, that means that it would last two posts if the post it lasts is afterits release. In addition; there is no such thing as "un-avoidable"; just saying, it is technically possible if the user is strong enough to guard their ears agaianst reiatsu; which you should most likely take note of for your other abilities as well. Lastly, GIVE THE SENSORY ABILITY A NAME, PLEASE XD it'll make things much easier on YOU AND me.






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Thu May 31, 2012 5:36 pm
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Bumping to 2-3 because the guy has been working hard on progressing his character, he is active and seems like he'll be on PH for awhile. Therefore, this nigga deserves the upgrade + Shikai.


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Willpowers have been updated for Redd


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