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Welcome to Bleach Platinum Hearts RP! This is a Bleach Role Playing Forum set in the year 2422, over 400 years away from the Original Bleach's timeline. It has elements of both canon and custom for a unique mixture of role playing never seen before on Bleach. To get started, please sign up and read our starter guide:

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Stefan Junk Empty Re: Stefan Junk

Wed Jul 13, 2011 12:38 pm


Alright well first things first.

You can't start off with a bankai or ressureccion.

So for now just cross those out d:
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Stefan Junk Empty Re: Stefan Junk

Wed Jul 13, 2011 4:05 pm
Insight: This ability increases his sight range by quite a bit. He can also see through fogs and mist. He percieves things better, not being blinded easily and can see straight through bright light, meaning he can cancel out abilities that focus on blinding and disorienting.

Lets get down to it, improved eyesight usually increases sensitivity to brightness so.... Yeah .__.

Sacrifice: He can heal his allies up to moderate injuries. However, the amount of damage he heals is inflicted on his own body. This can be quite useful when working with an ally that is stronger than him, because he is inflicted by the severity of the wound, not the amount of power used to make the wound. IE a moderate injury on a 4-3 tier does the same damage to Stefan as a moderate injury on a 1-3. Can be stacked, but can also kill the user.

Im imagining this is almost an instantaneous heal. Damage transfer, whatever. So lets make it a once or twice a thread thing. Cause you know .-.

Aura: When an indirect ranged attack inflicts damage on Stefan, 1/4 of the inflicted damage is inflicted on the enemy. This ability is constant unless Stefan has already taken serious damage, and cant remove limbs or inflict lethal damage upon the opponent.


^Nope. Not happening. When you take damage they take damage. Thats no-no. Nope <.<

Blood Tide: When he uses this ability, all allies around him gain a small boost to their offensive capabilities and increases their vision range by about 50 meters. This ability is not constant, takes a small amount of energy, and can only be used once per topic.

How does their offensive capabilities get upped? Speed, strength, vision, everything? And how long does this last?
Naturally buffing up your allies means weakening yourself too(Thus the drawback), so i don't know if you want this ability.

Maelstrom: This attack is indirect and ranged. By slashing the air, he can inflict these slashes upon his enemy, but this can still be blocked. Its as though hes actually fighting his opponent directly, but he can do this from far away. This can make up for his short range, but cant be used that often. Can only be used for 3 different strings of attacks in a topic, but the string of attacks can last up to 4-5 posts

^Like an energy wave? A wave of strong wind due to the force of your swing? Erm be a bit more specific on the slashing the air part cause i don't really understand it d: And what do you mean that the string of attacks last for 4-5 posts?

High-Speed Regeneration: He can now heal small and moderate wounds inflicted upon him. He cannot remake limbs, or recover from fatal wounds. It is also not immediate, as it takes a few seconds to heal a wound completely. Takes a moderate amount of energy.

Putting on a mask does not increase your regeneration, just look at the other vizards. It gives them extra durabillity to deal with the wounds they already have. But you can't simply heal them. I suggest the increase in durabillity

High-Speed Movement: He moves even faster than he did before, being able to travel as fast as lightning. He can move so fast, it appears as though he is using flash-step. This also means he fights faster with his sword, which just adds to his sword skill.

The basic speed of lightning is FAST. Even most 0 tier characters can't move that fast in they're released forms. So slow down there buddy. And increase in speed is fine, but lightning... No.



Now im sorry im so detailed on these apps (Dont hate me t.t) , and im sorry that i keep happening to check your DX
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Stefan Junk Empty Re: Stefan Junk

Wed Jul 13, 2011 4:25 pm
I like the fact that youre detailed! It helps me improve in app-making, and even makes the app youre currently grading more fair.

Anyway, I fix'd what you said. Anything else?

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Wed Jul 13, 2011 7:23 pm
Sacrifice: He can heal his allies up to moderate injuries. However, the amount of damage he heals is inflicted on his own body. This can be quite useful when working with an ally that is stronger than him, because he is inflicted by the severity of the wound, not the amount of power used to make the wound. IE a moderate injury on a 4-3 tier does the same damage to Stefan as a moderate injury on a 1-3. Can be stacked, but can also kill the user. Can only be used twice a thread. Severity doesnt matter.

Just a note here, note that 2 severe wounds can most certainly kill your character. And due to the nature of this ability, using your 2 posts to heal 2 severe wounds will end up in your characters death. In fact i think a severe and a moderate wound afterwards could kill him too.

Just pointing that out, just in case.

Aura: When an indirect ranged attack inflicts damage on Stefan, 1/4 of the inflicted damage is absorbed and powers up Stefans next ranged attacks. This lasts 4 posts, or until he is hit by a ranged attack. Can be used 3 times a thread.
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Alright, energy absorption in general is just a big no-no. Sorry dude, this one isn't gonna fly either

Blood Tide: When he uses this ability, all allies around him gain a small boost to their offensive capabilities, ie Physical Strength and Speed. Also increases their vision range by about 50 meters. This ability is not constant, takes a small amount of energy, and can only be used once per topic. Last 7 posts.

Ok, this one is my fault for not explaining it better. When powering up your allies, unless you are extremely powerful. (Like 0 tier) This is most likely going to weaken you. And being as you are 7 posts is way too long. i would say 2-3 posts at most.

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Thu Jul 14, 2011 9:34 am
Fix'd. Anything else?

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Fri Jul 15, 2011 4:43 pm
Application Checklist
  • Name [x]
  • Appropriate Age [x]
  • Gender [x]
  • Appearance Present [x]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [x]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [x]
  • 10 sentences for personality [x]
  • History is of appropriate length [x]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [x]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [x]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [x]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[x]


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Stefan Junk Empty Re: Stefan Junk

Sun Oct 16, 2011 6:41 pm
Wasnt ever bumped to 1-3+ from his upgrade, but I'll do it.

Proof:

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Mon Oct 17, 2011 12:42 am
Added tons of new stuff (about 24k's worth), added in more powers, as well as basically doubled the explanations for all of his others. Also added in a completely new form as well as "prettied up" the app. Needs Recheck (Basically everything has to be checked again).

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Stefan Junk Empty Re: Stefan Junk

Thu Oct 20, 2011 5:03 am
I've read all of this prior, just forgot to recheck.

Reapproved for 1-1+ yo'

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Tue Oct 25, 2011 12:35 am
Archived.

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