Xal's Application {WIP}

Name: Xal Verite
Age: Looks 14 when real age is 131
Gender: Male

Appearance: Black hair with red glowing eyes to see in the darkist of places.In full black all the time to keep his body colder the and the glasses he wares keeps the sun from makeing his eyes not useful.

True Form/any Differnt form: True Form

Personality:A Very Settle person when it comes to it.Calm and peaceful all the time.

History: Was born a demon from the mother of the child grew up and realized that he was different then everyone else at a young age. He soon realized that he was not from the world and became a demon from his dad side and he realized that he needed to learn it to become stronger to face his dad to become the real him.So he started to journeyed into the unknown world alone geting stronger on the way to get to his dad and complete himself and to control his real state on the way he meet people to help him until he got to his dad and he realized the people were useing him for his powers so he ran off running into his dad on the way geting to know him and finely completed himself to control his real state forever.

Powers:Able to grow his hand into a Giant claws able to slice through a diamond at its sharpest. Also able to control the shadows around him for fast reaction to the next move and also to make him unseen when a enemy stronger is near.

[b]Skill Level: Powers:
[b]Skill Level: Hand-to-Hand:
[b]Skill Level: Speed:
[b]Skill Level: Defense:

Likes:Likes being in darkness and the rainy days with no sunshine

Fears:Not being able to keep control of his true state anymore

Weakness:The Sunlight makes his body dense up and uncontrolable and returns him to his hidden form that can only use shadow with his true form gone he can easily die

Role Play Sample: The male raised his arm as it combusted apart in the center of the combustion was a giant claw formed. As the claw fully formed the male place it into the center of his body as he did that he made his arm straighten out forword the claw faceing infront of him.

The male got done raiseing his arm as the sun hiting his body made a shadow beside him as he quickly made the shadow beside him expand comeing off the ground around him makeing a black orb around him.

The male waited until it got done as he did his claws enlengthed and shoot forword out the sphree into a training dummy as the the claw hit the shadow exploded from without hurting the male comeing at the dummy. The shadow seemed to go through the dummy connecting to the dummy's shadow as it did it made the shadow flex comeing up grabing the dummy makeing the shadow become solid on impact as the dummy would flex as the shadow seeped into the dummy from the openings and expanded.

The male stood there as the shadow expanded watching the dummy expand outwords thus exploded into straws everywhere as the shadows feel to the ground back to covering me from the sun in a split second of geting hurt by the sun's rays.

I will be judging your application today. Here are the things I see wrong with it:

• Your appearance appears to be that of Haine Rammsteiner from Dogs: Bullets and Carnage. I, as well as Kuuga, have both determined that your picture is of Haine. If you would like to compare yourself, here is the picture we used to compare. If you need further comparison, here you go. Notice the furred jacket and position of the hair. And not to mention the shape of the sunglasses. Some of them have been altered by an artist's specific style but I, as well as Kuuga, agree that you are using Haine as your character. You have to change the appearance if so, as someone is using Haine as a character here.
  
  
• Personality needs to be at least two paragraphs or 10-12 sentences.
  
  
• Your history is quite confusing. You said he was born a demon, then became a demon.
  
  
• History also needs to be at least 3 paragraphs or 15-18 sentences.
  
  
• You cannot cut through diamond.
  
  
• Your second power is worded odd. Please reword it.
  
  
• I must also say that your true form looks like an early version of Nightmare from the Soul Calibur series. If it is Nightmare, then I must ask you to find a different picture as he is taken as any kind of appearance.