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Welcome to The Platinum Hearts Scroller. Here you can find our most recent Of the Year and Of the Season winners. Happy Roleplaying! --- Member of the Year: Locke --- Character of the Year: Alastair Eisfluch --- New Characters of the Year: Mizu Morikawa and Igendai Gyakusuma --- Social Thread of the Year: A Letter for Hymn --- Combat Thread of the Year: Raise Your Spirits --- Member of the Season: Paradigm --- Characters of the Season: Byakuya Kuchiki and Klein Schwarzwotan --- Applications of the Season: Armina Willsaam and Klein Schwarzwotan --- Fight Thread of the Season: Search and Destroy --- Social Thread of the Season: Damage Assessment --- Event Thread of the Season: Midnight Assault
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Ravana
Ravana
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Joined : 2010-06-05
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Age : 32

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Tue Mar 19, 2013 4:35 pm
...Alright, well, there are a LOT of problems with this app, and for it to even be acceptable, at least 80% of it is gonna need to be redone. While I can't list all of the problems here, some of the biggest ones are the immortality, the fact that only a pure Quincy (ie. no ziamichi) can get a Vollstandig, the powers are way out there, along with the forms, the history needs some revision, and finally, though more on my own personal level, the damned ampersands (the & symbol). If you're gonna make an app and want it to be taken seriously, then please take the extra time to type out the three little letters of "and" instead of using text shorthand (just a very short personal rant). My suggestion is to cut back a lot of the excess, scale back the powers, leave out "chosen one" stuff, read the rules on Quincy and such to know what you can and cannot do, and just for me, replace the ampersands with the word "and". For the time being, however, I am gonna have to deny this app.


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+Characters+
Ravana Ichiro~Ex-Captain Vizard/Vizard Corps Co-leader~0-3+
Toshizo Hijikata~The Demon Commander~0-3+
Diablo Cortar~The Cutting Devil/Segunda Espada~0-3-
Albert Wesker~Biohazard~0-4++
Dracula Vlad Tepes~The Dark Lord~0-4
Okita Souji~Sexy and I know it~0-5+
Alfonso Gunter Reinhold~Evil Bastard~W.I.P.
Hanako Ikezawa~Malignant Tragedy~5-5*

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Ravana
Ravana
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Joined : 2010-06-05
Posts : 613
Age : 32

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Tue Mar 19, 2013 5:17 pm
Moved to old WIP


Xaldin 28cnex2
+Characters+
Ravana Ichiro~Ex-Captain Vizard/Vizard Corps Co-leader~0-3+
Toshizo Hijikata~The Demon Commander~0-3+
Diablo Cortar~The Cutting Devil/Segunda Espada~0-3-
Albert Wesker~Biohazard~0-4++
Dracula Vlad Tepes~The Dark Lord~0-4
Okita Souji~Sexy and I know it~0-5+
Alfonso Gunter Reinhold~Evil Bastard~W.I.P.
Hanako Ikezawa~Malignant Tragedy~5-5*
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Location : convict island aka Australia

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Xaldin Empty Re: Xaldin

Wed Feb 18, 2015 9:35 am
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Archiving this as apart of my clean up of Old Wip

If you wish for this to be moved back to old wip please feel free to post within this thread

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