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Welcome to The Platinum Hearts Scroller. Here you can find our most recent Of the Year and Of the Season winners. Happy Roleplaying! --- Member of the Year: Locke --- Character of the Year: Alastair Eisfluch --- New Characters of the Year: Mizu Morikawa and Igendai Gyakusuma --- Social Thread of the Year: A Letter for Hymn --- Combat Thread of the Year: Raise Your Spirits --- Member of the Season: Paradigm --- Characters of the Season: Byakuya Kuchiki and Klein Schwarzwotan --- Applications of the Season: Armina Willsaam and Klein Schwarzwotan --- Fight Thread of the Season: Search and Destroy --- Social Thread of the Season: Damage Assessment --- Event Thread of the Season: Midnight Assault
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Rawk
Rawk
God of Love
Joined : 2017-05-11
Posts : 6948
Age : 27
Location : The beach :)

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Platinum Points:
Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Left_bar_bleue16000/1Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty_bar_bleue  (16000/1)
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Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty Re: Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S]

Wed Feb 23, 2022 1:06 pm
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Overall
Generally speaking, her ranges on abilities should be pared back a bit, to reflect the general reduction in powerscale and her own reduction in tier. Consider making them a more broad scale rather than specifics.

Arms of the Earth Tulpa
Does this have meaningful limits to its actual ability to do things once manifested? Also, there's a noted maximum range which cuts her duration to 1 post, but what's the standard range if she doesn't cut the duration?

Immersion Winds: Abstract Embodiment
Is there any limit to what materials she can actually make with this or is it just "whatever she feels like"?

As per her attempt to save James’s life when she thought she killed him...
Who's James?

Unique Energy Property
The entire descriptor of her energy's scope of influence should be rewritten to be more broadly attached to her tier, especially given the paring back of tiers on the whole.

Ordinance of the Outer Sky
How does she designate these? Does she just have to be broadly aware of their general presence? Does she have to hit them? This should probably have some manner of activation.

Ordinance of the Lower Sea
It mentions barriers or spells being among the things broken down rapidly depending on size, but those should probably be included in "things of greater significance" or addressed separately altogether given the variance in their purpose and potency beyond immediate size/mass.[/adm]
Sage
Sage
Lord of the Understream
Lord of the Understream
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Joined : 2013-11-04
Posts : 2340

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Platinum Points:
Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Left_bar_bleue74095/100000Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty_bar_bleue  (74095/100000)
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Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty Re: Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S]

Wed Feb 23, 2022 1:53 pm
Arms of the Earth Tulpa: Added a potency of changed gravity at maximum, and the average potency in a normal situation. Added an average duration.

If there is a total absence of mass in a given area, a complete vacuum, then the absolute maximum Yuel can conjure is a gravitational force 500 times that of the Earth's. Of course doing so would naturally have something pulled into it, so the total vacuum will only last for the briefest of moments. The average force Yuel can conjure, with a normal atmospheric pressure and some menial things in the manipulated area is 100x Earth. So for example, if Yuel used her Tulpa on a person around 230lbs, the change would act like they were suddenly 23,000 lbs.

Finally, Yuel's Tulpa as a territorial ability also has an effective range. The range of comfort for maximum duration of use is up to 300 metres. The range can be extended based on how much she concentrates to expand her zone of influence while reducing the Tulpa's duration, to a maximum of 3 kilometres for one post.

Immersion Winds: Abstract Embodiment: Defined the limits of what she can conjure with this ability.

Since the purpose of this ability was to facilitate her experiments and inventions, this ability allows her to conjure things related to it. Yuel won't be able to do something like manifesting an entire defensive wall and dome, or instantly create a godly spiritual weapon. She can however create a whole range of components to, say, build a rocket, or create materials to craft a powerful spiritual weapon.

James: That's mb, the person in her history named "Jaeden Caldwell" is supposed to be "James Caldwell". To recap, James was the leader of the vanguard's research division. I corrected all the mentions of "Jaeden" to "James".

Unique Energy Property: Since her shikai no longer really revolves around 'zone control' I've removed the descriptors of the energy's scope altogether. The 'unique property' to it remains.

Part Removed:

Ordinance of the Outer Sky: Added that she needs to be aware of the designated target through any of her senses; rather than an activation 'action' so to speak, I've added an activation 'signal'.

Yuel has to be aware of the object through the senses, whether visually, audibly, or even spiritually. Each time she uses the Outer Sky, a pulse of spiritual energy resonates out from her.

Ordinance of the Lower Sea: Changed barriers and spells to be a separate category, 2x decay speed, in between mundane objects and 'things of greater significance'.

Mundane spiritual constructs, like the buildings in Soul Society, or random mundane objects conjured by an ability can be decayed in a similar manner. Spiritual constructs of a spell-like constitution like a barrier kido or fire spell take twice as long.


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Rawk
Rawk
God of Love
Joined : 2017-05-11
Posts : 6948
Age : 27
Location : The beach :)

Member Info
Platinum Points:
Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Left_bar_bleue16000/1Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty_bar_bleue  (16000/1)
Tiers:

Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S] - Page 2 Empty Re: Yuel Duulheim [1-4; Sub-Shinigami] [Hazard Rating S]

Wed Feb 23, 2022 7:38 pm
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Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in [X]
  • RP Sample Present [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]

Hazard Ranks
  • Power: A
  • Influence: S
  • Resources: S

Tier: 1-4
Hazard Rating: S[/adm]
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