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Mu Long [Approved 3-4; Arrancar] Empty Mu Long [Approved 3-4; Arrancar]

Mon May 28, 2018 10:45 am
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Mu Long The Arrancar
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I. Basic Information


"From the birth of flames I was reborn, and with the same flames I will watch the world burn."
-ムーロン


» Name: Mu Dragon
» Age: 5, 169
» Gender:Male
» Allias:黒龍 Kokuryū{ Black Dragon}

» Association:Unaffiliated

» Appearance Written:
Mu is a muscular Arrancar with a well built body that gives off athlete tone built. He have blue irises with white sclerae and black bushy sharp eye brows. Oddly enough he have white long hair which flows to the top of his back. He is a very tall Arrancar standing 10 feet, and 9 inches tall, and weighing 550 Ibs. To addition to his odd appearance is matching gray skin tone. Which varies from either gray to dark grey color. Mu usually wearing his black hakama, and a white sash tie around his waist his hakama have seen better days as it have several cut along the end of hakama. Along his body he have six red tattoo stripes which went from his chest, above his shoulder to the back; there were 3 tattoos on his left pecs and 3 on his right that appearance when he is in battle or in rage.

Like most other Arrancar, Mu possesses remnants of his former life as a Hollow in his appearance. His Hollow hole is located at the center of his chest . The remainder of his Hollow mask lies on the bottom of the head other wise known as the chin, forming a weird goatee mustache mistaken as dragon fangs. His signature traits are the two dark, symbiotic dragons{hollows} that are attached to his back: these dragons have ebony dark scales and spikes jutting out of their backs and they have light blue eyes, and jagged sharp teeth. Each of these dragon are about 3 meter long each.



» Appearance Image:Mu Long [Approved 3-4; Arrancar] 1Dheku9
II. Personality


» Personality:
Mu: Can be a ruthless, bloodthirsty and violent Arrancar to fit his dragon like impulsive. Mu at some time portrayed as entirely self-serving, self-absorbed, and selfish; that does whatever he likes as long as it pleases him in some way. He can be very cold, callous, and dispassionate figure, and indifferent, willing to harm both his comrades and enemies should they get in his way. He usually stay to himself, and his loyal reside in his own personal beliefs whatever that may be.

Mu is a very calculative individual in nearly every situation. Always looking for ways to expand his mind, and influence Mu is a mastermind of strategy. Mu is a very cunning fellow. He knows how to wiggle his way out of unfavourable situations, especially those involving endangerment of himself or others he is fond of .

On the plus side Mu is a highly perceptive fighter, almost immediately determining an opponent's attack patterns and weaknesses. He is a crafty tactician, effectively using his abilities to confuse his opponents. He can normally discern the motives and abilities of his opponents, and effectively uses his knowledge to end the battle in his favor. He is also very fully aware of the limits of his abilities, and anything he states in comparison to an opponent is usually justified.


Mu acts in an aristocratic manner. He always seems serene and apathetic towards other people, even while actually deeply conflicted. He is some what calm, even in battle. He generally acts indifferent, bordering on arrogance, to most situations he is faced with, and rarely views his opponent as being worth his time.

Sometime Mu's pride and calm demeanor made him believe that never cared about others and constantly looking down to people who doesn't share the same status as him. But that isn't true he just don't go around making his allies as they would have prove themselves Mu otherwise he will consider them expendable.

For example he believes that if you aren't on his level then you are beneath him, and should be treat as his personal foot stool. His status as a Arrancar cause him to look down on majority of the people. He consider himself the cream of the crop, and anyone who doesn't agree is consider expendable.

"Hollows are evil? The Shingami are righteous? These terms have always changed throughout the course of history! Kids who have never seen peace and kids who have never seen war have different values! Those who stand at the top determine what's wrong and what's right! This very place is neutral ground! Justice will prevail, you say? But of course it will! Whoever wins this war becomes justice!"

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Mu believe in law, and order though his personality conflict with the type of justice he demonstrate . Due to being a Arrancar he believe nothing he does can be consider against the law so in other words he is above the law. The type of justice he demonstrate is called "Absolute Justice", when it comes to prosecuting those who violate the his's laws. He carried out the order like a emotionless man.



As a Arrancar Mu tend to be a bit paranoid. Not sure who could be trusted he tend to question all his subordinate loyalty or superiors. His paranoid sometimes leaves him to be on guard around unfamiliar condition.

Mu is patient individual due to his dragon characteristics . He seeks to knowledge majority of anything he find vaulable or sparks his interest. He believe everyone should be a man of there word otherwise they are just liars, and he doesn't like them.

Mu has always been, and will probably always will be open to new ideas. He takes into consideration everything that someone says, and will often try - or try to try new things. Furthermore he always attempts to view things from different points of view.


Mu is fully capable of committing truly abhorrent and inhumane actions without feeling any shred of remorse or hesitation. As he usually not the talkative one, Mu spares his words and only speaks when necessary or for those he finds worthy of them.

Mu is an extremely composed individual. One doesn't obtain a reputation like his own by being reckless and letting things outside their own mind's pester them. While his voice isn't the voice of the knight in shining armor and is dreary and monotonous, he's very well spoken. He acts when he feels the time is right and doesn't dance to the rhythm of others if he doesn't see it yielding a reward. This can make him seem like a man of sage-like patience or a selfish hasty twat.




III. History


» History:
As Human Life:
Once known as an member of the Long family, and renown firefighter of station 6 of K- Town. Hiroko Long had lived his life as young mid age man who stayed to himself. As a boy he was bullied a lot thus the reason he doesn't trust many people, and find himself in solitary environment{ hang by himself}. It was not until he reach the age of 18 did he met his first friend. Before then he had vast imaginary , and great love for dragons. As a kid he drew all different type of dragons, and his love for fire grew. After all most of his family was firefighters so he knew nearly everything there was to know about fire. He was taught by his father whom name is Aiko Long, and his mother Emily Long.

Growing up his mother Emily Long though it was weird that his her son didn't have many friends. With the addition of her son coming home with scars, and black eyes for getting beat up . So plea to her husband to help there child. After the age of 10 Aiko enroll his son in self defense classes, and taught him the important of defending himself when someone is bothering him. It didn't take long for Hiroko to learn how to defend himself with that he gain a temper. One that cause him to used his self defense techniques out of rage, and not self discipline. The love of being in fight grew to the point where at the age of 16 his father had to enroll him in anger management class to get his son to control his temper. At the age of 17 well everything start to balance out with the help of the class. He was able to control his temper, and didn't lash out on anyone he deed a threat. Which he was doing before he went to classess. At the age of 18 he met his first friend name Anfernee Young an black man whom was the age of 20. Together they became the best of friends. They met when Hiroko was at the library drawing when Anfernee walk by, and compliments his drawing. That was the start of a great friend ship.

Soon after Hiroko, and Anfernee decide to become a firefighter. While Hiroko was following his family foot steps, and Anfernee joined because Hiroko talk him into it. Together they fought many fires, and save a lot of people. 8 year into the program a great storm hit K - Town, and cause the tower in K - town erupt into flames{lightining strike}.

Station 6 mobilize to stop the fire Anfernee, and Hiroko was a part of that group. Fighting the fire as best as they could with the help of the resources they had Hiroko was successful as he was able to escape the flaming building but the same couldn't be said for Anfernee. As he was trap within the tower Hiroko decide to go back into the building, and save his only friend. But the result was him saving his friend but as he exited the building. A plank of flaming wood fall on his head which pretty much kill him on impact dying at the age of 26 years old . But not before he could toss his friend out the door. This action alone made him a hero. One that everyone remember him as. But his joureny wasn't over yet it was just the start of his journey the story of Mu Long the Black Dragon!


A Hollow Story:
Felt with rage,and uncontrollable desire to finish his life feeling that he died to early. As a Soul he tried to convince Anfernee, and his family he was still alive. But as a souls, he was highly limited ability to interact with the living, being intangible and invisible to any other humans. He wasn't able to cope with this become corrupted, drowning in their despair , rage, and regret; due to the impossibility of completing these goals. Due to this, he had find himself transforming into Hollows.

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But not just any hollow one that taken the appearance of a hollowfied black dragon. Hiroko body morph into all black skin, and dawn a white hollow mask. His abilities was standard hollow abilities with a unique properties of dragon who can breath fire. But not any fire but blue flames that for some reason never stop. These flames represent the fire that 6 station couldn't put out. This mindless hollow attacking any soul or human within sight. The insatiable hunger for devouring others in an attempt to try and fill this void of hunger.

Hiroko wasn't always the smartest hollow. For his first target he mindless ate the poor soul hoping to fill the void. But that didn't work the hungry continue to drive him them to that point of desperation where he continue to hunt. But after he was attack by several shingami, and badly wounded he retreat to the Hueco Mundo where he begin to gain glint of understanding of how to hunt carefully, and smart. From then on he begin to use his brain to hunt for other souls, human, and shingami.

As Hiroko ate the more he put behind his terrible life, and begin to forget of what made him human. He adopted the ways of a hollow, and begin to think like one,and act. He became the best hollow he could be. By doing this he abandon his reason, and gave into nature selection . So in simple terms the strong thrive, and the weak die. More importantly he didn't entertain many hollows in the first place consider them all not worth his time, and pawns to chess board he play. As time past he grew stronger, and smarter by each passing moment. He had return to his olds ways which he never attempt to make friends with his fellow kind.


It didn't take long for him to reach the stage of Menos otherwise known as Gillian class. After the long period being a mindless drome of Gillian class one day Mu, and several of Gillian grew hungry, and begin to eat each other. It blood bathe hundreds of gillian begin to attack each other, and eat each other, and in from this that Mu transform into Adjuchas Class hollow.

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In Adjuchas state he was he took the appearance of an massive black dragon like hollow. That had werid blue marks along his body, and the beast look vague like a real dragon from myth. As Adjuchas class hollow Mu still had to eat in order to maintain his new power not to mention to stay insane. Shorty after Mu understood he was forever be stuck in this form not wanting to live like this he decide to take his life. The method he decide to take is removing his mask. Not knowing that removing his mask only allow him to achieve great power.He became an Arrancar by mask remove method.From then on his rename Mu Long the Black Dragon as he wonder the realms of the world.

He had toss away his old name because it was no need it was now time for his start an different journey one that lead him down the path of the unknown. Now he just lives out his days by himself wondering the worlds of earth. His goal is unknown he himself doesn't even know if he have a goal. At this point he is looking for a reason to continue as an Arrancar whether he find that purpose or not is up to him.

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IV. Equipment


» Equipment:-Skip-

V. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills


» Racial Abilities:
RA:

  • Bala (虚弾 (バラ), bara; Spanish for "Bullet", Japanese for "Hollow Bullet") is an Arrancar-exclusive offensive technique. While similar in function to a Cero, a Bala is not nearly as powerful, but, thanks to its composition, its speed is 20 times faster, allowing it to be fired in quick succession. In addition, it possesses more concussive force than a typical Cero does.{Speed depend on user/ 1 post cooldown}

  • Halberd Combat: Mu wielding a large double sided spear in combat. One end resembles a harpoon, while the opposite end is shaped like an axe blade. He is extremely skilled at wielding it, demonstrating an array of fatal and highly destructive techniques. This spear is a pole weapon consisting of a shaft, special material, with a pointed head. The head may be simply the sharpened end of the shaft itself, as is the case with fire hardened spears, or it may be made of a more durable material fastened to the shaft.

    The most common design for hunting or combat spears since ancient times has incorporated a metal spearhead shaped like a triangle, lozenge, or leaf. The heads of fishing spears usually feature barbs or serrated edges. The word spear comes from the Old English spere, from the Proto-Germanic speri, from a Proto-Indo-European root *sper- "spear, pole". Spears can be divided into two broad categories: those designed for thrusting in melee combat and those designed for throwing (usually referred to as javelins). The spear has been used throughout human history both as a hunting and fishing tool and as a weapon. Along with the axe, knife, and club it is one of the earliest and most important tools developed by early humans. As a weapon, it may be wielded with either one hand or two. It was used in virtually every conflict up until the modern era and is probably the most commonly used weapon in history

    Spears were one of the most common personal weapons used in the Stone Age, and they remained in use as important military and hunting implements until the advent of firearms. They may be seen as the ancestor of such military weapons as the lance, the pilum, the halberd, the naginata, the glaive, the bill, and the pike. One of the earliest weapons fashioned by human beings and their ancestors, the spear is still used for hunting and fishing, and its influences still may be seen in current military gear such as the rifle-mounted bayonet. Spears may be used as both a projectile and melee weapons. Spears used primarily for thrusting may be used with either one or two hands and tend to have heavier and sturdier designs than those intended exclusively for throwing. Those designed for throwing, often referred to as javelins, tend to be lighter and have a more streamlined head, and they may be thrown either by hand or with the assistance of a spear thrower such as the atlatl or woomera. From the atlatl dart, the arrow for use with bows eventually developed.

    Like many weapons, a spear may also be a symbol of power. In the Chinese martial arts community, the Chinese spear (Qiang 槍) is popularly known as the "king of weapons". The Celts would symbolically destroy a dead warrior's spear either to prevent its use by another or as a sacrificial offering. In classical Greek mythology Zeus' bolts of lightning may be interpreted as a symbolic spear. Some would carry that interpretation to the spear that frequently is associated with Athena, interpreting her spear as a symbolic connection to some of Zeus' power beyond the Aegis once he rose to replacing other deities in the pantheon. Athena was depicted with a spear prior to that change in myths, however. Chiron's wedding-gift to Peleus when he married the nymph Thetis in classical Greek mythology, was an ashen spear as the nature of ashwood with its straight grain made it an ideal choice of wood for a spear.

    To come to the conclusion; the uses of spears has a long - and relative dark - history. Over the many hundreds of years, the skill of wielding one has been perfected and mastered. This is a skill that relies on thrusting - often proving that one strike is enough to fatally wound an opponent. The user fights with a spear - showing enough velocity, acceleration can prove to beat opponents as twice as large as the user. The user primarily uses a single spear to fight - but is also welcome to use multiple spears as part of their style. The fighting style remains on stop-and-go motions in order to confuse enemies. The central focus of this style is fighting opponents that are bigger and or stronger than the user. Ancient spear thrusting techniques may be used. It's very all-round against most types of opponents.

  • Sonído (響転 (ソニード), Sonīdo; Spanish for "Sound", Japanese for "Sound Ceremony") is a high-speed movement technique of the Arrancar. It is equivalent to the Shinigami's Shunpo and the Quincy's Hirenkyaku, which are roughly equal in terms of speed.While somewhat similar to Hohō in regards to function and speed, Sonído appears to be more instinctual, seemingly requiring no previous knowledge to perform.[2] It produces a different sound; rather than the swishing or sometimes silent Shunpo of the Shinigami, Sonído makes a booming or static noise.

  • Cero Color Blue(虚閃 (セロ), Sero; Spanish for "Zero", Japanese for "Hollow Flash"; Viz "Doom Blast") is an attack used by Menos, Arrancar, and Vizard. The practitioner fires a powerful blast of concentrated spiritual energy at the target. While in most cases it is fired from the mouth, some Arrancar and Vizard can fire Cero from their hands, fingers, and other parts of their bodies.{Mu can fire from either his hand or mouth}. The power, force, speed, and blast area of the Cero is dependent on the strength, spiritual power, and sometimes skill of the user (i.e., the stronger the user, the stronger the attack), and there are some Arrancar who have come up with their own variation of Cero. The charging and firing time for Cero varies greatly, from charging relatively fast to firing it to instantaneously firing one without much charging. Despite the damage it can cause at long range distances. {Takes one turn to charge,and 1 turn cool down}

  • Doragon'aian{Dragon Hierro} Hierro (鋼皮 (イエロ), Iero; Spanish for "Iron", Japanese for "Steel Skin";Viz "Iron Skin"): Hierro is a defensive Arrancar technique. The user's Reiryoku condenses, creating a titanium-hard skin strong enough to block a Zanpakutō. This allows users to confront some of the sword-wielding Shinigami barehanded. While this technique is exhibited by all Arrancar to some degree, the strength of an individual's Hierro is entirely proportional to the potency of their Reiryoku.

  • Blue Flames Cero ブルー炎のケロ Burū-en no Kero: Just like a basic cero but this cero is a bit different as it take the appearance of blue flames that nearly never Ending Flaming Cero{After 3 turn the flames Extinguish, and takes 1 post to charge, and 1 post cooldown}.

  • Pesquisa (探査回路 (ペスキス), Pesukisu; Spanish for "Inquiry", Japanese for "Probe Circuit") is an advanced Arrancar perception technique. The practitioner sends out a radiating pulse which reacts to sources of Reiatsu within a certain proximity, allowing the practitioner to determine the location of any sensed individuals and gauge how powerful they actually are. When the ability was performed by weak Arrancar, they tend to closed their eyes and entered into a meditative state of mind in order to attain the necessary heightened sense of awareness to located or search the area using this ability.

  • Garganta (黒腔 (ガルガンタ), Garuganta; Spanish for "Throat", Japanese for "Black Cavity") is how Arrancar and Hollows move to and from Hueco Mundo. A Garganta is a spiritual pathway connecting Hueco Mundo to other worlds. Besides the Human World and Soul Society, it can also open in the Dangai. A turbulence of Reishi blows within Garganta. To move through it, travelers must create footholds using the Reishi.

VI. Sealed Powers


» Zanpakutô Name:Doragon

» Zanpakutô Appearance:
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Doragon is Halberd which is a large double sided spear{gray in color} with the height of 13 feet long. One end resembles a harpoon, while the opposite end is shaped like an Axe Blade. This spear is entirely made up special material. To addition the spear is said to have retractable function which allow the spear to extend, and be pull back together for up to 10 meters as 10 meters worth of chain attach to the head of the Halberd.

» Unique Power:
Mu Long Powers:



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  • Mu is unique arrancar which grant unique set of power different from your standard Arrancar. Instead of when he turn to Arrancar leaving majority of his hollows traits around. He brought more of them with him. Which is why he have two 8 meter long black dragon attach hollows to his back.

  • These Hollow like dragon can regenerate upon being cut in half up to 4 times in one topic.They can also shot cero, and bala from there mouth just as the user can.{ I wanna note the regeneration is dependent on the user regeneration skill in the arrancar sheet}

  • He can generate small weapons or shields made of Aoi honō that holds the same abilities of Aoi honō but a lesser version these flames extinguished after 2 post. He can access this ability in either base form or Resurrección.

  • Enhance Hierro more stronger then the standard arrancar hierro. This is due to his dragon hard like skin making him a bit more tougher then your average lamb. He pride himself on his strong defense, and powerful burning abilities.

VII. Resurrección


» Resurrección Name:Doragon

» Resereccion Release Phrase: Roar Doragon, and burn them to the floor![/i

» Release Actions:[i] There is no specific action, but once the release phrase had been spoken his body split into flames, and new from appeared.


» Resurrección Appearance:
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In Mu Resurrección state he take upon the appearance of black dragon. This dragon is about 10 meter long, and 6 meter wide. His tail is 8 meters long, and have a spear like tail that is about 3 meters long. He weigh several tons, and have massives wings which grant him flight.

» Resurrección Abilities:

  • Aoi honō:Aoi honō is special blue flames produces from the release of user Resurrección or Resurrección attacks . This technique in most situations, is nearly impossible to avoid. However, if the target can move fast enough to avoid being hit by, Aoi honō then the user will miss them when it's cast. Once created, it can continue burning for 3 post. The flames cannot be extinguished with water or any other normal methods. Only the user can extinguished the blue flames but it takes considerable amount of energy to do so. The temperature of the flames is on the level of lava which is a easy 2,200 F. He can generate massive amounts from his body kinda like logia users but he is limited the more Aoi honō he release the more energy he expends. This move at twice the speed of the user.

  • Aoi honō Manipulation:Aoi honō is a technique which applies shape transformation to the blue flames of Aoi honō, allowing the user to manipulate them at will. The range of this is no more then 50 meters.



  • Enhanced Hierro: His Hierro has vastly increased in strength, to the point where it more powerful to the point that it increase the durability of his skin like armor.


  • Enhanced Spiritual Power: Though already possessing immense spiritual power, in his Resurrección, his blue flames spiritual energy permeates the area. It is intense enough to create a profound effect on others and coalesce into fire which falls in the surrounding area when he release.

  • Enhance Flight: Due to Mu Resurrección appearance he is grant the ability to fly. But not just any flight enhance flight Mu is able to fly at greater speed which is double his normal speed. This boost like for 3 post but have a cool down of 3 posts. While the cool down is in effect he can fly his normal speed.

  • Aoi honō Blast Sphere:Aoi honō leaves the Arrancar's body and fills the nearby sky in few hundred feet radius and constant rain of Balas start to fall down, causing small explosions everywhere for the next post. This can be used once per 5 posts.


    Aoi honō Beam:Mu shot out a blue flames from his mouth in cone like fashion similar to a flame thrower or shot gun blast. For up to 50 meters in lenght, and width , and it stronger then normal cero. Mu can only shoot this beam every 2-3 post depending on energy expenditure.

    Aoi honō Wave:Mu can generate a 30 meter radius sphere from his body of Aoi honō flames which force back his target from him giving him space acting as a shield, and offensives ability at the same time.



I. Skill Sheet


[SKILL SHEETS ARE NOT TO BE FILLED OUT UNTIL AFTER A TIER IS GIVEN! WILL SKILLS WILL BE GIVEN BY THE STAFF MEMBER THAT GRADES YOUR APP! FOR MORE INFORMATION, LOOK AT THIS THREAD]

Additional Note: The skill sheets, as of Saturday, February 10, 2018, have had small additions. There are new skills, and Master has been renamed to "Elite". Furthermore, Master is now the bridge in-between Elite and Grand Master. For more information, and the rest of the skill sheets, READ THIS THREAD

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6-Tier: Allowed 2 Beginner, 2 Untrained.
5-Tier: Allowed 1 Trained, 2 Beginner, 1 Untrained.
4-Tier: Allowed 1 Adept, 2 Trained. 1 Beginner
3-Tier: Allowed 1 Experienced, 2 Adept, 1 Trained
2-Tier: Allowed 1 Advanced, 2 Experienced, 1 Adept
1-Tier: Allowed 1 Expert, 2 Advanced, 1 Experienced
0-5 Tier: Allowed 1 Elite, 2 Expert, 1 Advanced.

General Skills
  • Durability:Adept
  • General Speed:Beginner
  • Strength: Beginner
  • Weapon Skill: Adept


Racial Skills
  • Perquisa: Beginner
  • Sonido: Beginner
  • Cero/Bala: Adept
  • Hierro:Adept



Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Beginner
  • Focus: Beginner


IX. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample: [Please show us how you role play by either posting a previous post from another site or creating a new one. We do this so we know your RP skill. If you already have an accepted, you need not do another RP sample]

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Wed May 30, 2018 11:32 pm
Twin Dragon Hollows: You don't have to change anything here, I just want to let you know that while regenerating up to four times in a single thread is fine, make note that the speed of their regeneration is dependent on Mu Long's "Regeneration Skill" in the Arrancar Skill Sheet. That said, the full racial skill sheet should actually include regeneration on it.

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[b][center][u]Racial Skills[/u][/b][/center]
[list][*][b]Perquisa:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Sonido:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Cero/Bala:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Hierro:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
[*][b]Regeneration:[/b] Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

    These Hollow like dragon can regenerate upon being cut in half up to 4 times in one topic.They can also shot cero, and bala from there mouth just as the user can.

Small Arms Generation: Considering Aoi Hono is only mentioned in the Ress state, I can only assume that its accessible solely in the Ress state. That said, though it's fine to mention that Mu Long can form weapons and shields from it, I just want to clarify that as it is now this will only apply in Ress state.

Aoi Hono: For this ability, can you clarify the general speed of it? It's fine if you just reference a Bala or Cero for frame of reference, e.g "twice the speed of an average cero" or something along those lines.

    He can generate small weapons or shields made of Aoi honō that holds the same abilities of Aoi honō.

Make note that an attribute like only being able to be dispelled by the user means that it also takes considerable amounts of energy, more than another fire user displaying the same output of quantity and temperature who doesn't have the "can't be put out by anyone but the user" stipulation. Also, so that you're aware, other characters would be capable of defending from it using their own energy so that it'll just burn their energy constructs or output as opposed to their physical bodies (assuming they couldn't dodge it or something). Likewise with materials that are explicitly resistant to energy-based abilities, or have some sort of energy imbuement themselves.

    Only the user can extinguished the blue flames.

Also add in that the more Aoi Hono he generates, the more energy he expends as a result. Since just saying "generate massive amounts" doesn't offer much to understand as far as limitations or use in threads for your RP partners to understand (from an OOC perspective, at least).

    He can generate massive amounts from his body .

Enhanced Flight: Wewlad, that's a bit much. It's better to just equate his speed boosts to saying "# times faster than his normal flight speed" since ultimately his speed will depend on the General Skills in his skill sheets. By the way, Mach 4 is Master in skill sheets, and Masters can't be obtained straight off the bat, not even for 0-tiers. Also, add a 2 post cooldown after those three turns are elapsed. He can continue to fly at his normal speed during those two posts until he boosts up again.

    But not just any flight enhance flight Mu is able to fly at great speed mach 4 { for period of 3 turns}

Aoi Hono Beam: Add that he can only use this beam every two to three posts depending on energy expenditure. He can still use the usual cero in between that cooldown period.

    Mu shot out a blue flames from his mouth in cone like fashion similar to a flame thrower or shot gun blast. For up to 50 meters in lenght, and width , and it stronger then normal cero. ]


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  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]


Will Skills
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[b][u]Will Skills[/u][/b]
[list][*][b]Willpower/Determination:[/b]
[*][b]Mental Deduction:[/b]
[*][b]Pain Endurance:[/b]
[*][b]Focus:[/b]
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  • Comments/Notes: Good usage of spoilers, especially for the racial specs that were mostly copypastas with the small inserts of personalisation like Mu's Cero colour, or his personal variation of Hierro. All in all, not a bad first app, tbh. I liked his history, it was a refreshingly normal backstory and teen life, and respectable transition into adult life. It was more like the history of a person than a character.
  • Tier: TBD


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Mu Long [Approved 3-4; Arrancar] Empty Re: Mu Long [Approved 3-4; Arrancar]

Thu May 31, 2018 12:23 am
All the changes above have been made, and I put everything you ask. I did also state that in unique power that limited version of Aoi honō for base.

Thanks for your help I am ready for the next step!
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Thu May 31, 2018 12:48 am


« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Beginner
  • Focus: Beginner


Code:
[b][u]Will Skills[/u][/b]
[list][*][b]Willpower/Determination:[/b] Adept
[*][b]Mental Deduction:[/b] Advanced
[*][b]Pain Endurance:[/b] Beginner
[*][b]Focus:[/b] Beginner
[/list]


  • Comments/Notes: Looks good to me, thanks for the cooperation.
  • Tier: 3-4


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Thu Oct 03, 2019 11:11 am
[mod]Due to member inactivity, this character is being moved to the archives. If the member becomes active again in the future, they may be reinstated.[/mod]

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