El Donglitzen Rodencla (Finished)

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Character Name:
El Donglitzen Rodencla

Character True Age:
303

Character Appearance Age:
27

Character Gender:
Male

Orientation:
Serves cero espada

Personality:
A hated person his whole life has caused him to grow cold and strong at the same time. He shows no kindness to anyone. He takes away hope from anyone that challenges him. Bringing pain and suffering to someone always brings a smile to his face. Death brings a large grin, he is most defiantly messed up in the head. But he is smart, he uses his mind to manipulate others into doing his bad deeds. A shadow in the dark that is controlling the strings and comes out to play at the right time.

He actually has a funny personality though. He brings laughter to death and makes ones who are on his side smile just because they are glad they are surviving. He cares not how people are killed just as long as he gets to smile, and gets to keep the body as a test subject. Deep inside though don is a little boy trapped trying to get out to find his way in the world. His evil self witch controls his body keeps his more good side trapped away.

Personality speech:
"Death is all I require, nothing in this unholy world counts for anything. I find the way of pain and suffering the best. How can one honestly win with just hope and the will to win something that was not set. Walking along a path that has worked so far seems best. Controlling others with lie's created from a shadow. A shadow that no longer fears death but lusts for it. Some try to stop death, saying world piece is the key. That is not the key though, keep death and draw yourself back from hope. With hope gone no one will have anything to worry about. Either way we all die in the end. So how did I come to know this. Because, in history no one has ever tried this method, only trying to bring hope back. So this is the path I walk, and this path I walk has kept a smile on my face.”




History:
His whole life he was rejected as a human. He was never good at sports nor anything else for that matter. He sucked at just about everything. Everything except smarts, he could always solved the most difficult of problems. In only the middle grades of school he was all ready in a college level math. His reading and writing was that of a artist who usually had been writing for most of his or her life. When something is taken from someone, something else is given in replacement. This being Dons trade for athletics to smarts. By time he was out of high school his life in college started. Life was still bad for him though he never got respect.

His life in college went by fast for he was even smarter than most of the teachers. He attended one of the most expensive colleges in the united states. No one ever knew where he got the money for it though. His parents where dead he had no family, only a couple of friends who he rarely saw any more. Many teachers talked about it, finally though one of dons favorite teachers asked him how. He replied "Why have these kind of mind if im never going to use it. But gambling that is how, though its more of a steal from them. Their little games and cheap tricks do not work on me. Its like playing cat and mouse, instead of them usually being the cat, now im the cat they are the mouse." His teacher warned him about things that can happen with people doing them kinds of things. Dons teacher was right, cause what happened next was exactly what the man said.

A group of mafia that owned the place Don had been gambling at. Having Grown very tired of dons constant winning. His life ment nothing to them so they showed no shame in sending a group to dons dorm to kill him. It was only about 3 or 4 men but they broke in and shot don as he was sleeping. It was a bloody mess, they filled him with lead. His body was left in that room for some time, not one person had heard or saw what happened. So there was an investigation but nothing was ever found. Only a soul left wondering around in the same room over and over. The dorm room was marked as a room that was going to be destroyed and rebuilt. The reason for this is because anyone who tired to move into the dorm kept getting haunted by weird noises. That was also because of don had already been marked as a demi hollow nothing could save him except a shinigami. But by time he was found by the shinigam, it was already to late for him. He had already passed over, over into a world of beasts known as hollows.

Life starting as hollow:
A new creature was born into the world of hueco mundo. A creature with the wonder design of a butterfly. Its wings were large and its arms and legs were small and muscular. Its body was long and skinny, but its mask was nothing more than a large mouth witch when opened up, revealed its eye's.

This creature wondered hueco mundo countless years, having nothing more to do but feast on other fellow hollows. A lucky hollow he was, he never lost a fight with other hollows. He was a special hollow, one that many other hollows thought could not fight. He was not an angry hollow, this is why so many tried to attack him. They were wrong don crushed them with a mighty power force. Eating them one by one, feasting on their soul. He had now travel several years eating hollow after hollow. One final hollow came though, it really tested dons power at that time. The hollow that attacked him was also a special one, one that could have been more if he had killed don. But there souls crashed and don became victorious, finally he evolved into a gillian class hollow. The soul that he had devoured was strong enough to finally bring him to the first stage of becoming a strong hollow.

life as Gillian:
Life as a gillian was not hard like it could be for some other Gillian’s. Instead of being a mindless monster, don was left with his smart and witty mind. Falling into a group of menos grande he was able to manipulate them into doing was he wanted them to. How he planned this was to have ever menos bring the dead hollows they killed to don, so he could consume the souls. With the fast intake of so many hollows don grew fast, so fast that he was able to consume the actual menos that had helped him to get his power. Even though he was left with smarts he still had the beastly mind of a menos grande. The drive to kill and consume to become powerful. He had consumed to many hollows, so his body exploded into a new more devastating form known as adjuchas.

Life as adjuchas into vasto lorde:
A powerful new creature now inhabited and lived in the desert. An adjuchas who formed no bonds with any other hollows to try to get him to the next stage as a hollow, vasto lorde. Instead he still killed over and over again. This time though don had no idea what to do. He had been an adjuchas for some time now. Thousands of hollows he had consumed. None was able to give him the power he needed to become a vasto lorde. Vasto lorde was something you only heard about in tails in this age. Most Gillian’s were becoming Arrancar not vasto lorde. Donglitzen was going past the state of adjuchas. He had figured out what it is that does not allow hollows to move on to vasto lorde. He found out that you must find something in your life that does not revolve around becoming a vasto lorde. Finding his reason for living gave him that power to move forward. Finding the reason for him being alive is what he planned to find out. he was not going to let a giant step in his life that could help him so much. Placing his hand over his mask, he tore away the hollow mask with no fear. Thus allowing him to start his life as a arrancar.




Espada life:
His shear power was more than enough to gain him a spot on the espada court. Though his time as an actual espada flew by it was the best of his times. He flew down the ranks of espada, at first he had gained the rank of espada #8 Then he worked up the nerve to call out the espada #4 for a battle. Having fought the battle it actually ment nothing in the end, the espada broke up and left to another organization. Donglitzen refused to go with them, so he was left in hueco mundo, the new espada #4. The organization broke apart but donglitzen kept his mark of the #4, packing up and leaving las noches. As he was leaving the espada, he was left with a number that was now good for nothing but to put fear in to an opponents soul.

Note:
This is where his story start on the site, leaving las noches to complete his goals.

RP Sample:
(Roleplay as if you were making a thread on the site. This gives us an insight as to how you would RP)



Appearance:


Bone Appearance:
The white bone that keeps his hair up, that is his hollow fragment.

Hollow Hole:
In the center of his chest.

reiatsu Colour:
Bright white




Sealed Zanpakutô:
In appearance description.

Racial Abilities:

• Cero

• Bala

• sonido

• pesquisa

• Low grade heirro

• Low grade regeneration

Unique Abilities:
Pesquisa el grande- He has gained the ability to sense the tension in reaitsu. Almost meaning he can tell what mood and when and if an opponent will attack. If reiatsu is showing signs of being uncalm and moving constantly its showing signs of his opponent becoming angry or enraged. Noting that his pesquisa is at such a high level that he can almost give an exact number of how many alive beings in an dimension. Beings up closer to donglitzen allow don to read and see exactly how much reiatsu and power the opponent has.




Resereccion Name:
Tenshi no me (angel eye)

Resereccion Release Phrase:
"Look"

Release Actions:
He slides his zanpokuto into his hollow fragment hair clip, causing the clip to break.

Resereccion Appearance:
Head:
His hollow fragment that resides as a hairnet breaks apart, letting his hair fall down. His face covers all the way around with white bone, but his hair is left flying around. 7 eye's grow threw the bone on his head, each eye is about double the size of a regular eye. 1 on the front of his face, 1 on both sides of his face left and right, and finally 1 on the back of his head. Then one in-between each of the eye's giving a total of seven the perfect number. The eye's color are the same as dons appearance's pictures eye's. His hair then parts into two parts separating so the hair can not cover his eye's. Bone covers his hair making two whips that can be moved at his will.

Arm's:
His arms/ shoulders cover in bone all the way down to his fingers. His fingers grow large bone finger nail, each nail is about 8 inches long, and his elbows grow a plate like bone that covers over all the upper arm and shoulders. Gripping tight on his shoulders the plate pulls apart the bones in his arms and twists and turns bone to tighten the bone on the arm. Because of the the arms being messed with the length is increased and bones are made smaller but stronger. Stronger because of the bone being gripped tighter on the arms.

Torso:
Bone that is like wrappings, wraps itself around his torso. The wrappings grip tight enough to where you can start to see his rib cage. You could say the wrappings are like a butterfly having its wings closed for protection. His arrancar uniform stays the same on the bottom half of his body.

Resereccion Abilities:
1: seven eyed pesquisa- In is resurrecion he has seven different pesquisa. Each one goes with each of his eye's. Each eye's pesquisa is either on the left, right, front or back. And each eye focuses on that one area increasing the power. All in all the actually pesquisa each eye uses is weaker than a regular one. But the lowered and shared stress with the other eye's causes harmony and increases power between them all. This is the perfect pesquisa, it allows don’t to see and give an exact number of how many beings on in an actual dimension. Its power is almost to such a powerful state that he can find opponents who are hiding his or her reiatsu.

2: (all seeing)- This is a perfect quick defense technique. Note when using this attack he hold his hands the way naruto raises his chakra when focusing. His front eye locks on to ground in front of him. And a quick wave of reiatsu is sent out. Then an area of about 50 feet ahead of him of is, instead of exploding like regular techniques. It implodes, meaning everything inside of the 50 feet is sucked inside and crushed.

Note: this is not an instant hit say if my opponent if right in front of me and I use it. My opponents are perfectly able to dodge the technique just like any other attack. The attack has a cool down of 2 posts. The force of witch sucks inward is strong enough to such up a Kidō level up to the number 60. The force of witch is pulling inwards is about the equivalent to say maybe gravity being doubled and being pushed on the body inside this area. Damage from this ability is mainly pulling and tearing of skin and bone.

3: choucho ta ta ri me (butterfly cursed eye)-

form change: The wrappings on his torso unwrap and spread out to both the right and left. Creating two wings, but revealing only a torso with nothing but the skin left.

ability: The wings actually only give the ability to move as arms, hit and defend. They give don the ability to pretty much control them as other limbs. While also giving him the ability to fly. The wings are about 14 feet long and they can not grow any longer than that. They have great defensive ability.

Note: This ability is used as a defensive technique, it requires to cool down or charge.

4: choucho Ii keshigomu desu (butterfly eraser)- This technique can only be used in his new butterfly form. Don creates a formation of sparking dark scales. The scales break away from his wings. And the more he uses this attack the more his wings break apart. The limit for this attack is 10 uses. After that his wings fall apart and his torso his left open to attacks. Just like when a butterfly breaks its wings off to get away from danger they almost always die after it. The attack is worth it though its power is amazing. He fires the scales onto the ground and spends them around. The ground starts to crack then the scales break apart and expand and glow red and black. They scales vary in size but they are now made out of reiatsu. The scales are then forced out toward his opponent. The distance of the circle of scales that is made is 40 feet, and that does not expand for the scales are fired upwards into the sky. The ability is only able to be fired sideways if say he caused the scales to spin on the side of a building.

Note: Ok just noting there are times I can use this attack, then my wings are gone. This is is ultimate ability, so stating that it is pretty powerful. There is a cool down of 1 post after each attack. When he has used this ability 10 times.






(leave the skills alone until the application is approved. You can then go back and add them if you want to)

General Skills

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• Perquisa:
  
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• Cero/Bala:
  
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OKAY.

I have a few issues with this app before I can do ANYTHING For you. Now, to start, PLEASE Correct this app's grammar. This grammar in it hurts my eyes to read, no offense. STRAIN is needed to read some parts of the app, along with wrong words being used, such as Witch. (Should be Which) Now, all the abilities need to be described more, it only states the simplest use which does not help me differ the strength, cooldown, charge, or use in ANY case. Once you do this, I'll be able to fully grade the app. Also! The skills sheets need to be EMPTY until I GIVE You a tier, remove all the skills.

Very sorry for the confusion, I should have used spell check. I kind of get carried away when posting that my mind does not catch me spelling something wrong. Also I think I got what you said about the abilities though im not sure so that may be still a problem.

Also, I'm going to point out some major portions of the history that need to be changed or checked up on:

Life as adjuchas into vasto lorde:

Not just no, but NOPE. You do not have the permission to create anything related to a Vasto Lorde. Nor will you be granted it for this character. Remove all instances of mentioning of Vasto Lorde from this application.

Espada life:
His shear power was more than enough to gain him a spot on the espada court. Though his time as an actual espada flew by it was the best of his times. He flew down the ranks of espada, at first he had gained the rank of espada #8 Then he worked up the nerve to call out the espada #4 for a battle. Having fought the battle it actually ment nothing in the end, the espada broke up and left to another organization. Donglitzen refused to go with them, so he was left in hueco mundo, the new espada #4. The organization broke apart but donglitzen kept his mark of the #4, packing up and leaving las noches. As he was leaving the espada, he was left with a number that was now good for nothing but to put fear in to an opponents soul.

Have you talked to Chaoz about being a former Espada since this is recent?

I fixed everything, though I thought my app would have been looked at again

I'm moving this to WIP until it's fixed.