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Okay, this check comes on behalf of staff and I'm posting it up. I've gone through and given them the resources to accurately check it after researching the history of this character's upgrades. So do note that this review is not coming from just myself. I've also gone through and condensed and stylized things to make it less of a pain for you to read through.

Tier: 0-1-/0-1 | 0-1-
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t14679-the-pale-completion-pending-further-training-required

Sorry but you were never approved to have a 0-1, as this was a pending and never received an approved statement. That also further proves my point as you never took any of the abilities, but took the 0-1.

https://www.platinumhearts.net/t12269-tsubasa-s-kessho-kemono

The 0-1 that was given you was only a form called Kessho Kemono in which you removed from your character all together. This means there should be NO reason why he has a 0-1 anymore/ form or no form.

General Skills
Durability: Advanced ???
General Speed: Grand Master Grand Master
Strength: Master Master
Weapon Skill: Master ???

Racial Skills
Hoho: Grand Master Grand Master
Kidō: Master ???
Zanjutsu: Grand Master Request to be dropped to Master due to consistency
Hakuda: Advanced ???

Will Skills
Willpower/Determination: Advanced ???
Mental Deduction: Master ???
Pain Endurance: Advanced ???
Focus: Grand Master Grand Master


Electric Control:

Everybody has limits, the only people that don’t are gods, and I do not believe Tsubasa is a god. Along with that, there are two issues. The first is that his generation of amps is enough to essentially insta-gib almost anyone without trying. Secondly, it says at the end that he’s able to heal himself. I would like to know how is this possible, secondly, the amount of drain to do any of this, and thirdly, why does it not hurt him to strike himself with lightning? Does he have natural resistance or is he able to naturally absorb strikes, and why?

Mental Control:

The first question I have is how is he able to transmute elements? Typically, when you mess with the way something is made, you’re doing a chemical change. Changing pure elements that can’t be broken down anymore, such as iron, can’t simply be done with lightning. You’re changing something that is considered pure and changing it into another pure element, since that is what most irons are. Some are combinations of others, you can mix them together, but you can’t just change one metal to another without an extraordinarily good reason. Secondly, what is the power of these railguns, and how much energy does it take out of him to fire forth from one and such.

Radar:

This ability lets him instantly sense people and already know where they’re going to end up. This doesn’t exactly seem like a radar, but rather, fortune-telling. Plus, it also says that he can do this despite how fast they’re moving, or really, despite any factor that may be added in, making this an absolute ability that can’t be contested at all. I’d prefer if there was at least some way to react against this considering he has a large radius, can instantly sense people through electrical energy, and exactly predict where they’re going to end up. This needs to be nerfed in my opinion to make it less of an absolute sensing ability.

Master Swordsman:

The one thing that personally doesn’t make sense is how he can change the weight of his sword, or at least, how it feels. Having skill doesn’t mean you can change how a sword feels, since it is still just a sharpened piece of metal that can cut through things. Along with this, it says that he is able to copy advanced techniques without listing an actual amount of time needed to learn them. I’d like for there to actually be a set amount of posts needed to learn another user’s sword techniques.

Enhanced Speed:

I will not be approving this ability as it is stated. Currently, it almost takes away the purpose of having skill tiers through allowing him to be one higher than he really is at all times. Even if he’s already a GM in speed, let’s say he got hit by a few debuffs by someone of an equal level to bump him down to advanced. Those debuffs still wouldn’t mean very much since he’s still somehow a master’s despite the skill supposedly saying he’s advanced. If you wish to change this ability to requiring a burst of power, such as a percentage of his total stores, I would be more reasonable with how this power works.

Enhanced Strength:

Same thing as stated above.

Enhanced Regeneration:

There are a few issues I have with this power. The first being that there is no listed time it takes to regenerate certain body parts or organs. It doesn’t state if he needs to use a burst of energy to regenerate things quickly, or if it’s a constant pace with a small taxation on his body to fuel the rapid regeneration of cells. Secondly, how can this ability be used on other people? This ability is a passive one for himself, so just using it on someone else to regenerate everything doesn’t exactly make sense, especially considering that there is no reason listed as to why this works on others considering a bolt of lightning will 9/10 kill someone or hurt them instead of help.

Killer Intent:

First off, this ability is difficult to understand. Secondly, the ability doesn’t exactly make very much sense. Is this purely just an aura that lets people know he’s powerful, or does it have an actual effect on people? It says that it uses a person’s power against them to see more… But how would this matter or affect them? This simply seems like an ability to seem scary, and with the explanation given, it’s hard to make sense of the rest that’s being stated.

Binding Tigers:

With how this ability is written, it seems like this tigers can appear from anywhere they please, even directly on top of a person to leave no room for escape. I believe that on creation, the tigers should be set with the amount of energy within them since it doesn’t make all too much sense on how these tigers can suddenly gain more power if they were already created. Secondly, how much of a strain is it to create these tigers, how much damage could they do, and how fast are they? I would also like a set range on where these tigers could be created so that they can’t just appear in front of a person and instantly try to bind them, and adding in the strength of the bind would be great as well.

The Tiger's Mirror:

First of all, having this mirror able to absorb up to 99 is extremely powerful for how the ability is listed, secondly, is there a limit to how much can be absorbed and reflected? Such as if someone fired a strong kido, could it absorb every shot it gave, or would it eventually give away? Third, what is the strain each time one of these mirrors takes in a kido, how much does it take out of him, and can they be broken with physical attacks?

Electric Cage:

Okay, this ability is written as an instant snaring ability that can insta-gib people with no defense against it, making it an absolute ability. He is even able to change the size of this ability, and make it all the more powerful. Finally, how much energy does it take to make a person-sized cage?

Railgun:

What is the cost to activate this ability, along with it’s maximum amount of destruction, the range at which he can use it, and how accurate it is.

Recharge:

How much does this restore, and how often can this be used? Secondly, this says he can use the electrical power in the air, but that isn’t very much in general, so once he takes what little there typically is in battlegrounds, it’s easy to assume that he will not be able to use it again from the lack of energy. Thirdly, can he use this to just zap electronics and forcibly steal all the energy from it? Finally, what is the range on this ability?

Electric Death:

What is the drain on this ability proportional to the amps projected, and what’s the maximum power that can be used? Along with this, how far can the projectiles go, and how fast are they?

Static Clone:

First off, how much energy does it take to do something like this? Does it have a cooldown, and how would it heal friends with a clone made of essentially lightning? How big and destructive can the blast become if he poured the maximum amount of energy he could into it? And if it’s a large clump of particles, it should be able to be viewed considering they’re connected enough to make an entire clone of him.

Electric Step:

I want an energy cost to this considering it’s letting him go faster than typical users.

Nano Bots:

I personally do not like this ability due to all the different ways I can see it being abused to utterly decimate everything and anything. The first problem with it is that there’s no say in how many can be made at a time, or how many he typically has to start with, or what they can accomplish depending on how many are made. How powerful is their healing and how long does it take to restore wounds? When moving across the battlefield, how is this done and can they be seen? When they invade a person’s body, is there a time limit to them being inside, and how much damage can there be done? What is the conversion rate of energy = output?

Sealed Zanpakutō Abilities

Static Manipulation:

How is the limb disappearing and what causes physical attacks to still affect them? Are you using your ability to change the perspective of everyone else using static electricity? if so that doesn’t seem very plausible. Are you using your power to completely sever to the limb? If so then physical attacks wouldn’t affect it either. How many limbs can he make invisible at a time? Does he get exhausted afterwards, or is their a cool down for when he can use this ability again. I know this was said over and over however in a lot of your powers it’s either explained very vaguely, with a lot of grammar mistakes (much like I do, so I’m not deducting points), and their drawbacks are pretty much zero. Before when you first wrote this it would have been fine, but now our standards are pretty high we are trying to get and improve every app as soon as possible. Whenever I like to think of powers I was taught a three point system, Cost, Application, and Power. To balance out powers you have to give up some of those powers; if your application of this power is very simple then either the cost of it must be higher or the power of it must be weaker. So please explain this power in a bit more detail and keep in mind of cost, application and power.

Static Bomb:

Where is the cost associated with this? How does he gather the static electricity? There is also something to the fact that this is a sealed ability and has a great deal of power behind it with very little cost and very little description as to how he gathers the power. Is it gathered by friction? Is it gathered through taking electrical attacks to the blade? Furthermore, you can put the bomb inside of an opponent, and that is fine I suppose, but in essence it is difficult for me to say this is fine without knowing how he gathers the energy or how he can get the bomb inside of his opponent. I would recommend adding how he gathers the energy and how he possibly put the bomb inside of people (such as Touch) being the means to get this power inside of living people. Also, this is a sealed Zanpakutō power, maybe adding a cost association other than gathered static.

Shikai Abilities

Static Manifestation:

There are some minor grammatical issues with this ability the first sentence is a little incomplete, but I do understand the general sense of what you are aiming for.. Also, this ability is a shikai ability that can level six to seven city blocks, and this is seemingly done with the wave of a hand and with no cost to Tsubasa at all. Maybe lower the power a bit and add a cost to Tsubasa’s own spiritual energy because by the current description there seems to be no drain on Tsubasa at all to blow up six to seven city blocks.

Static Control:

So, he can change the magnetic AND static electricity within the air into anything his heart desires. I have a slight problem with this as there isn’t any cost to Tsubasa again. Also that cost should be a variable as the size of things he makes should cost more energy to create than smaller things. Also it should cost him more energy to make multiple things at once. I have no problem with the healing as there is an indeed a limit and it takes time to function. Just associate a cost with the ability depending on size and the amount of things made and this ability should be golden.

Electric Metal Railgun:

The 2nd half of this ability needs removed, it doesn’t pertain to it all. Anything past the words Tsubasa Considers this, needs removed. Firstly, this ability needs some type of decent cost. As a Shikai ability, being able to completely decimate others in a single blow for what seems to be minimal energy. Another issue I have is that there isn’t some type of statement showing the posts it causes to form the actual metal shots, including issues with how the ability can be shot from ANYWHERE. It needs adjusted so that he can shoot it from only his near vicinity, otherwise he needs removed entirely.

Byakko no Tsubaki:

Alright, so more or less this is just Gin’s Shikai. That’s gotta change. We need an end to the length he can reach due to the fact that an “infinite” blade being able twist and turn, back and forth along with having an extreme force and explosion including with the landing of a blow. This definitely has to change, given the fact that without a reasoning for the ability to A. Reach infinite length and B. Simply be a pure copy cat of another’s skill, it won’t be approved. Either rework the ability into something that isn’t a pure clone or weaken it.