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Dexterity
Dexterity
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Joined : 2012-11-04
Posts : 1177
Age : 31

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Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5] Empty Re: Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5]

Fri Feb 27, 2015 8:35 pm
Demon Wild Sensing
I'm gonna ask here that you give a little moreinsight into the ability. What animals do you mean, and what sensual techniques are involved. A bit too vague right now.

Hell Amaterasu
Oh, this is the part where he gets Sasuke powers. Ah, well, there have always been problems with some of these abilities, and Amaterasu was one of them. If the flames act like they do in Naruto, that means you spawn them wherever you're looking, which means it's practically autohit. You have to find some way to make it so that it's dodgeable. Additionally, nothing is absolute meaning the flames need a way or ways to be put out.

Final Izanagi
This was fine until the final sentence. Blindness does not equate to temporary blurry vision. If you use this twice in a single topic, there needs to be a crippling drawback, and full blindness meets that requisite. It's good, forcing you to use those other senses of yours to fight.

[quote]Nemesis Form[quote]I find this lacking in detail, specifically with the fire attacks. Put some more effort into that. Also give a real good reason why it doesn't require much energy to create a powerful defense like this.

Devil Buster
One thing I can assure you is that your NPC won't be getting zero tier, and so you won't be having a three mile wide attack like this. Weaken this appropriately to 1 mile at most.

Hell Bomb
Speed of projectiles? Width? Just describe it some more.

Art of Demon Magic
Not a fan of the shameless copypasta. Please remove this and if applicable, replace it with actual Demon Magic techniques you can use. If you can't put the effort into that, then go without it.

Flight
...Describe how this works. No one sentence powers.

Hell Affinity
Five times to two times, and remove the bit about powering up one full tier. The reasoning is that while now a demon, he was not originally a demon, but a Shinigami. Your experiment means you don't get the full benefits of a demon, and therefore lose out on homefield advantage.

Kamekameha
Ugh. I'm not going to accept this. This is just ripping off DBZ's poster attack, and it has no effort put into making it unique or distinct. Change it or remove it.

Mad Devil State
Cross this section out and save it to be checked at a later date. I'm not confident in giving an app like this a tier that can overpower Bankai levels; it's not there. You'll need to vastly improve the quality of the app, or work towards it in character.


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Dexterity
Dexterity
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Posts : 1177
Age : 31

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Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5] Empty Re: Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5]

Tue Mar 03, 2015 4:35 pm
Hell Amaterasu
This still needs a way to be dodged. Think about it; if all you have to do is look at an opponent in order to set them on fire, how can they really respond to that in time? Put yourself on the receiving end to see. You need a signal that comes before the attack, or some kind of projectile that can be dodged. Just some way that gives the opponent the chance to react.

Nemesis Form... Shadow Nemesis is known to have many strong flame attacks and flame defenses because the dark flame magic it has embedded within.
You did not do what I asked here. I asked you to describe what flame attacks your character can perform while using the Nemesis, in detail. You can treat it as if it was a whole other power with a paragraph its own.


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Dexterity
Dexterity
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Joined : 2012-11-04
Posts : 1177
Age : 31

Member Info
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Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5] Empty Re: Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5]

Thu Mar 12, 2015 4:50 pm
Application Checklist
  • Name [O]
  • Appropriate Age [O]
  • Gender [O]
  • Appearance Present [O]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [O]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [O]
  • 10 sentences for personality [O]
  • History is of appropriate length [O]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [O]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Adept
  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Advanced


Comments/Notes: This is in an acceptable state now. You are a veteran of the site so that factors into what you're allowed, but I still have issues giving the character too high of a tier to start off with because many parts are still lackluster, so...
Tier: 2-3


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Henrex
Henrex
Tor'uk
Joined : 2016-01-20
Posts : 4433
Age : 23

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Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5] Empty Re: Christopher Seiger [APPROVED, 1-5]

Mon Jan 16, 2017 1:16 am
[mod]Moving to inactive. Post in the link provided below to have these moved back to the right section.

https://www.platinumhearts.net/t9712-the-staff-request-thread-for-moves-archives-locking-or-whatever-else-you-need-staff-for[/mod]
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